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Whohoo! Also headway sounds unaccountably dirty in connection with Mia, even though it isn’t in the slightest.

Some places kept the old stuff going all through – there’s one place been doing a creepy-as-fuck hobby horse thing for centuries – but half the time you find yourself in some tiny village where they’re talking about the ancient tradition only to follow with “...and some pissartist hippies started it again in ‘78, and we kept it going because it’s an excuse to dress up and get shitfaced.” It definitely worked. As in “Punch the air, holy fuck, that’s great!” worked.

“it’s a pleasure to have you here as the new Professor. I’m sure you aren’t taking seriously that silly hoax rumor that the ApTheo post is cursed and nobody ever lasts more than a year without quitting or getting corrupted or being brutally murdered by a demon.” “Ahh, don’t ye worry none. It’ll be grand I’m sure.” And folks, when InBrightestDay found that old forgotten 2010 post on the forum I did feel bad about it! Eh, you’d have dodged the it being a guy saving her, but that review I sent you from one of my stories when we were discussing this whole true love/post rape thing, where a reader was justifiably irritated about me using a rescue-from-threat-of-rape trope to bring the characters closer together was on an FF story so it doesn’t make a lot of difference as far as that goes. When badly written the whole concept can be a real bane of Hurt/Comfort fics, but I personally think you’ve handled it as well as you could do – but again, I’m probably biased. For anyone curious, this is what I said in the email, and I stand by it! Well, sit by it. Well, lean against the wall by it. Fuckin’ pedants.

Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) Thanks you for the review! I appreciate the heck out of it. I’m really happy to hear you liked it. Definitely a bit of restraint – if I was her, I’d have wanted to slap him back, but that would probably have detached his jaw… It’s weird, Kizzy and the others were just created as a throwaway oneshot to end up with the amusing-to-me reveal that one of them’s an angel, and then they kept coming back in story ideas… The continuity can be a bit flimsy and the characterisation varies, but I think Kizzy has mostly stayed the same. I guess one day I’ll have to do a sex scene with her. That could be a challenge. I pretty much had to change POV with part 2, but I gotta thank InBrightestDay for the inspiration to keep doing it! Someone gets manipulated like that, well, I guess it’ll come down to what his own conscience tells him… Whoohoo! Been ages since I wrote sex that wasn’t just re-writing/touching up my old sex writing as part of a re-write, so it’s cool to hear it came across ok! I’ll get the next part up next week! And I mean what could possibly go wrong with that spur of the moment “Buck up the troops!” promise? Surely the Duchess can’t lose! If he doesn’t strike Kizzy with the blade it doesn’t count, and if it does he shares her fate from which there’s no coming back! Thank you again for reviewing! You’re always very kind about my writing and I appreciate it. Haslet’s the spelling I know, too, but I guess some of these prompts use archaic spellings and definitions so I just went with it. It actually did end up working better in that chapter than what I’ve now drafted for the next part. These days the challenge for me is more working the prompts into a story I’ve semi-planned out, but I’m sure I’ll get some inspiration from them again sometime. Thanks once again!

Whoohoo! More water based shenanigans! Plus if a story actually gets written from one of those ideas I wasn’t just spamming the thread with shite. I guess my sig’ll be getting longer…

Heh, well, that makes her sound a lot more dangerous! If only someone could find a way to keep her distracted from evil schemes… It’s a fair assumption – I do it a lot! I guess my writing of the warning was so bad that it wasn’t clear. God, what an awful piece of trash writer I… etc etc I kid kid…

Meanwhile back in the slumber-verse InBrightestDay kindly reviews the third part of Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) Firstly, thank you for this review! You’re absolutely right it didn’t end up properly PWP, so I left the tag off in the end. I realised that I could use the chapter to explain some things that otherwise would have gone unspoken, or maybe just come out of nowhere – at least this chapter lets folks know there’s a werewolf and so on hanging around Kizzy! Still managed to fit in a chunk more sex than the previous part had though, so yay! It’s not as clear as it was in my first draft on this where I made it really explicit, but she actually is assuming Kizurial would choose to die rather than blast a giant crater into the Earth and cook all the entrails. I left it with the more subtle implication at the end of the part where she’s thinking of Jude’s specifically sharing the fate of Kizurial, oblivion, rather than him getting it alone and the Seraph surviving. I figure she thinks Kizzy would kill a few mortals to save millions, but Kizzy wouldn’t kill billions to save herself. From the Duchess’ point of view, scoring a kill against a Seraph would be great for her standing in Hell, but she also gets to make Shannon suffer by hurting her friend. That’s maybe even more important to her because Shannon left her service for Kizzy’s friendship. A lot of these arrogant demons are petty as fuck when I write ‘em And if she is wrong and she’s misread the Seraph (always a possibility!) well, whatever evolves in another 65 million years could be just as easy to tempt. That definitely paints a somewhat darker picture of Kizzy as a character. Not that she's evil or anything, mind you, but that before she came to Earth she was very detached, and made a decision that discouraged other angels from disobeying orders, but didn't have enough in the way of empathy for Luzurial's motivation and her suffering. When the order came down not to break Luzurial free there would have been a few in the old chain of command keen for others to know it wasn’t their order. I figured this degree of bad feeling would become known to some of the more well informed demons in Hell. And that’s another reason Thanks! Glad you liked it, and, yes, perhaps her dislike of Luzurial has been bubbling away for a few billion years. That could go wrong in truly hilarious fashion, like if 75 years later... Luzurial: And how did you meet your special mortal? Duchess: I was contractually obligated. Haha! Nice – now that’d be a hell of a New Year’s Eve party :p As for whether it might come back to haunt her somewhat sooner, well, I was never much good at subtle foreshadowing. Heh. I mean, it's gotten positive reviews from pretty much everyone who's read it, including me (it made me really sad, but that's hardly a criticism of it). Readers just need to know what they're getting into in order to decide. I’m grateful for all the reviews! The thing is rape, torture, snuff, gynophagia, anal fisting, and that godawful cop humor are a very niche product. I’m fairly sure most readers here just want to see Draco and Harry have babies, or Hinata fucking everyone except whatshisface (or the same for whatever fandom/original subcatagory they’re in). So, yes, some readers might like and enjoy it, whether for the porn, the horror, or Eparlegna’s natty suit at the end, but I think probabably most wouldn’t. Also, with 9 reviews out of 10334 hits on AFF (Plus one or two by email when the old grey archive was around, and when I was on hentai foundry’s writer section) I do think it’s safer to say that the vast majority of readers probably weren’t that bothered. So I put the info there like with the “See more Kizzy here!” in part 1, but unless I’m talking to someone who specifically likes those kinds of themes I don’t say “Go read this stuff!” about the violent porn. If that makes sense! If not, me rambling again. I do that. Thanks again for your third review!

Then I must write chapter three one of these days! Gotta be done.

I don’t even know what the original story’s message was… “Really shitty things happen to good people,” maybe? That certainly happens in the sequel so you keep it running!

Blood on the Hay got a review! Thank you for the review! Absolutely see where you’re coming from – with the flashfic/1000 word prompt stories sometimes it was possible to tell a proper story in the short bursts and sometimes, well, it comes across more like a fragment. I can totally see it here – similar issue with the end of part 2, in that I wrote what I had for 1000 words but there isn’t really a full finish, just the dude realising that Jeb was a piece of shit and there ain’t a lot more to say – but conflict can always add more, a bit of a driving force to things. One way to have it would be to have the trio checking out the bloody barn and getting caught by the lawfolk coming back. And when the Slumber-verse characters appear in the next story chronologically, Kate’s back part of the pack and they never seem to speak of it again. I really need to write a third concluding part to cover it all off, tie things up. One of these days, maybe. Thanks again! I appreciate your time in reading and reviewing.

No apology required! You’re all adults, you can have different opinions over things in this thread as anywhere! Forum mods would have the final say mind :p She didn’t have left or right wing by the time Eparlegna was done with her! [/tasteless joke]

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: Jude's Tale – Part 3: A Duchess of Hell Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic (...ish. I mean, each part is going to be up to 1000 words.) Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Original Pairing: Jude x The Duchess. Warnings: AFFO Bigotry ChallengeFic Fingering MF Oral, reference to Torture.

...D’oh. To be fair, I just do promo’ing, what happens afterwards comes down to the reader! Also, neat review. And the ending might not be what you expect. Yeah, but pissing readers off is basically my brand. There’s an old flames thread where I’d copy and paste the flames I got for my godawful Firefly fanfic ‘fore they had to be deleted in line with site rules. I used to get emails urging me to die in a fire. Those were the days.

Whore of Heaven was posted to AFF in October 2007 and now has 9 reviews and 10330 hits. The first reviews were all posted before I started responding to reviews on the forum (this thread started November 2010) and so I don’t know if I emailed or anything else back. So here’s some quick replies to them as well! I think I did this with old reviews on another story before, but not WoH. Oh, and I’m totally going to write a story called Whore of Hell starring the succubus Shannon just to confuse people. Thanks for the review! It’s amazing the coincidences we sometimes have in life. I remember one time wishing I was bored to tears, and then I accidentally re-read my Ohio Vanilla story. This is the kind of story that I think works really well for the target audience for the whole defeat/violation/torture etc fetish Now the ending has been… extended since this review and it’s no longer forever, but for those 75 years every single second feels like eternity so same difference, right? Plus folks who prefer the old ending can stop reading where it finished before. Thanks for your review! Totally understandable. I think most folks would be disturbed and it does get pretty darn gory in places. Thank you for this review! Another one from the target audience I’m glad you enjoyed it! Although every time I read ‘perfect 10’ I hear the old Beautiful South song in my head. Can’t argue with a perfect 10! Now, onto the brand new review! @pippychick Thank you so much for this amazingly in depth review. I really appreciate any feedback but as much as this… Wow right back at you! Thank you again I’m very grateful. A lot of people I’d say ‘eh, this one may not be for you,’ but you’re great at writing the creeping chilling horror atmosphere yourself (and the brief imagary in your acrolith prompt drabble was surely dark and disturbing per my review there!) so this is not a trial for your imagination Thank you! Keeping someone alive while he’s reducing them to almost nothing is one of his favored cruelties – he kept his original human mother’s head alive at the end of his first apperance, too. He very much embodies the ‘Death is too quick’ philosophy when someone gains too much of his attention. InBrightestDay, and I’m paraphrasing here, pointed out the meta reason was so she could be anally raped. In universe the cruellest interpretation (and not one I subscribe too) would be to take the Calvinist Predestination theory and assume that she has that anatomy because her creator pre-ordained that she would one day need an asshole to have a corrupt demon-hybrid cop stick a fist in it. I prefer the happier interpretation that the same creator hoped/forsaw that one day the angels and archangels and the likes would one day (whether on Earth or other populated planets), pass amongst mortals sharing their food, and drink, and watching their sci fi shows, and maybe accidentally taking the last bit of bacon that a werewolf was going to… sorry I’m off topic and a world way. Nevermind. Whoa now! Don’t feel obliged to do anything because I wish it! Me mentioning it was more in line of how I occasionally drop references to how people should read The Price and now that I have both stories linked in my sig I’ll just keep finding ways to promote them to people, but if you (or anyone else!) don’t fancy it don’t bother with it (I doubt I could persuade InBrightestDay to read The Price either tbh, but it won’t stop me joking and promo’ing) – I will say it does have some wonderful nasty moments, mind (Amongst other bits, there’s this one sin creature that’s so awesomely creepy in a very body horror way it would make me take my hat off if I wore one.) I’m absolutely not taking offence – well, except for you saying I’m more intelligent. No way. you’re definitely the more intelligent person, I ain’t even in the top 10 on this forum. You can understand Lord of the Rings! I thought Elvish was just Elvis saying his name while drunk. There’s still the original ending there at least, but making someone suffer until entropy and the end of everything for refusing to leave humanity to face that sick fuck, well, I do kind of feel it didn’t fit so well. Like, a bit too harsh for what was basically one mistake. 75 years of every second feeling like eternity is still a pretty hefty dose of suffering. And it really raises questions like, if she was so beloved by her fellows for her wisdom and the like, why would no other angel help her? Turns out some out-of-touch Seraph stuck a flaming nose in. Seraphs, right? Swanning around all on fire and shit. Send one out to buy some ice for cocktails, they just bring a bag of steam. It’s definitely a bleak take you’ve got there. But I totally see how you arrive at it – it is pretty much how I see the real world sometimes! Alright, most of the times, I think a lot of the very anti-creator thought expressed in the story was intended to be from Eparlegna’s viewpoint, which supports everything he wants to do -rape, torture, kill, dominate, drink IPAs, flip the bird at the creator, and become ruler of his own domain, but I don’t know that the creator here actually intended for Luzurial to go through what she did. The command not to do it was there, and she disobeyed. She got to exercise free will (just as most humans exercise it to be right bastards to other humans.) Doing so made things worse for her, and for the people. Perhaps the creator here only knows what is likely? I suppose the argument in this universe would be suffer for three score’n’ten and then have eternity in paradise (I went creator rather than God I think, to have it as less Christian specific). It’s still kind of sucky, but they at least get the paradise. We get worms. Or dust. Or my personal likely fate, being undiscovered for five years until someone else walks up the high cold lonely place where I go to die. Still, you’ve got to laugh. I started getting the connected multi-verse to be a bit more hopeful with The Slumber Party of Evil Doom prompt fic two or three years later, where a demon saved a trapped angel to help her defeat a much nastier demon. I’ve tended to follow on from the brighter and more hopeful viewpoint in my angel/demon stories since. I think it depends a bit on my mental state at the time I’m writing. I was in a really dark cold place when I wrote some of that stuff. And with other stories I was pretty cheerful and just keen to see the reactions. Troll? Moi? Never! More of an Orc. Edit: Of course, getting meta again, her actual creator, that asshole JD, did create her purely for that fate. What a scumbag. Hey, Nietzche is dead too! :p Day after day, year after year, decade after decade, barely aware of the people passing due to her endless pain from wounds that are prevented from healing but won’t give her the release of Death. Her only bright spot the fact that she was spared meeting Piers Morgan. It’s a bit like how some folks end up living their lives, stuck in a personal hell with everyone else apparantly getting on and living. There’s probably a few of us know what that feels like. Thanks though! That’s a sweet compliment! I appreciate it Thank you again for the review! I hope you can get back into your slashy elf romance – in all honesty it’s not my favorite genre, but I can always appreciate folks writing what they like and having the fun of completing it, and sharing it and getting that feedback from the romantic elf slash fans. I still haven’t seen the Game of Thrones tv show (at this stage I’m definitely going to wait until it finishes and then binge the whole damn thing. Really hoping screen Tyrion holds up to book Tyrion!) but when I do I am looking forward to reading your GoT fic. I hope things continue better for you now

See? SEE? I fucking stand by that. Part 6 is great! First comes the hurt, then comes the comfort. It really fuckin’ works. And it’s a great damn image you have here. Taking a kind a half-assed Whore of Heaven concept and really making it work! I probably still have had more in to set the scene. I mean, I dunno her most badass moment is probably taking so many lashes before she starts screaming. Here and in the last part, she comes across as a proper badass. I don’t really remember, but it’s a story about an X-Wing pilot being tortured and killed by a haunted spaceship. There’s wires getting into eyesockets. It’s just grimdark edginess really, but I was doing my best to write something Deathstalker would enjoy… I may even have succeeded. Was a long time ago. Unfortunately the review in question asking if I felt gross was back before I responded to ‘em on the forums so I can’t look back at what I thought at the time. He’s a nice dude! Oh, yeah. I sometimes forget some of the tropes. There’s a trope for that too, I expect. Cheerfully corrected! I’m glad it stayed in, I think it worked! This kind of “What a total bastardry” at least will make it even more satisfying when they do beat his ass. He put himself between Eparlegna and her. He’s special alright :p I kid! I kid! I’ve said it’s a great ending already and I stick by it. Fucking awesome!

Awesome to hear things are better! Sorry about the dog worrying – I’m sure he’ll rest easy once the vet’s had a look. I can hear you little fellow now “Sorry, I know there’s no dignity when the temperature’s being taken but at least you can get a dog treat afterwards. Why don’t you look so happy with that?” I love seeing your talent too! Your The Price story remains one of the best things I’ve ever read, and that’s against some stiff competition from other writers on here (another one has joined it in my sig… now I need to try and persuade each of you to read each other’s stories! ). Also that Mercy story, lines from that come back to me at random times.

See if you can get some soft drink/soda pop sponsorship, so next monday you just need to post: “7 Up!”

A Big Girl's Bad End is some fucked up repugnant shit. And to think folks thought Michael was the worst member of the extended Van Dijk family. Anyway, somehow managed 600+ hits possibly due to either search engine bots or a sort of morbid curiousity. I promised in my author’s note that I would be shocked if anybody bothered to review it so here it is: I am shocked. Shocked I Say. And also surprised. Thanks for your review! I really appreciate you taking the time. You’re part of the select group of not-easily-bored people who can actually finish my more extreme stories! Honestly a lie down and ‘what the fuck’ seems like a pretty fair, entirely human reaction. Can’t blame you for it. As a sick fuck, I appreciate the recognition! Thanks again.

I was wrong! More reviews for Corrupt the Midwife! Yay! Thank you for these reviews! I really appreciate getting them, it’s always great to get feedback. I’m really glad you enjoyed it, too, because it means there’s gotta be some good in there! ...or just Fantasy!Trixie getting drunk and horny :p She did have fun with Trixie, but surely a little sympathy that she didn’t get off at the end? On the other hand, there’s worse ways to be tormented! I don’t always see the new Call the Midwife episodes right off myself – I really liked Chummy’s character way back, and it feels ages since she left. Still, got some good characters there still. Thank you for the reading, and for reviewing! I’d answer questions but you’ve already read the next one and got the answers – no physical harm meant, just making a play for her soul… and Chummy gives a bit of a forceful lesson of her views in the nature of pleasure and sin herself! Heh, full advantage Chummy, “Gosh, you’re flexible. Can you put your ankles behind your head do you know?” It’s been really great of you to read and review this at anytime! I hope that things are going ok/better for you at least. Hasn’t been the same around the forum without you! So what would have happened… Chummy would have become a succubus hybrid, and sent to try and tempt others into perverted sin. She may have been successful and eventually died and gone to Shannon’s corner of Hell, which is actually less unpleasant than some of them. Alternatively, one or more of the Nuns might have twigged and found a way to redeem her, and save her soul despite the deal she’d have made. It’s the same Shannon who appears at the end of You! when she’d gone blonde, and is seeking her own redemption. Monica Joan’s radical younger years probably had more than a few shocking events for the time… “...so then I found he wanted me to sound him with my knitting needle. Well, what could I do?” I’m glad you liked the ending! A chunk more sex there with real Trixie instead of fantasy!Trixie to round it off, I can see how it does come across as a bit of an add on after the previous part, but at least Chummy got to come… Have to wonder what some of the Nuns get up to in their rooms as well. Heh. Thank you again! I hope it bears up to re-reading. Sounds like you got a bit more out of it being a fan of the series. I think given the brief nature of the prompts it probably helps to fill in the stuff there wasn’t room to explain to non-fans. Maybe.

Everything I’ve read up until the end of part 8 in draft form is AWESOME. So I think he pulls the next parts off, but I guess I’m biased

As long as the people living there now haven’t found a haunted mirror… I can absolutely see why it takes a long time with 12000 word chapters, that stuff represents hours and hours of your work – with all your planning and editing and research taking up more on top! Still, it’s great fun writing.

This has come up a few times before, I think. Supposedly she’s on AO3. A quick google and… https://archiveofourown.org/users/JennaMarie/works

So does “Duchess”! [/angry class warfare reaction.] Wait, yeah, that’s basically what I thought about it, and she’s no interest in the Earth version of plain “Your Grace” and sees letting Jude talk to her like an equal, given his own sense of superiority, works in her favor. Whoohooo! For once, no sloppy writing! I think the Duchess found that leaving a couple more things virtually hanging out also worked at holding Jude’s attention. I bet Shannon’s been keeping an eye on her ‘study’ of the mystery too. No doubt gifting a back massager because “You seemed tense.” When they supply an actual definition for an obscure prompt word I try and use that meaning in the story. If there’s multiple defintions I’ll sometimes try and work more of them in – like when the prompt was Frittle, I ended up using about three defintions. Think that was the one where I had a talking badger fuck a talking horse. Bit furry really. I have thought up a way around using the entrails definition though, so it’s all good I gotta say this has been a really helpful suggestion because it’s got me thinking that the next part ought to be as near as possible entirely from the Duchess’ point of view as part 1 was from Kizzy (excepting sloppy writing, others’ direct thoughts were being either read through phsyical contact or assumed) and part 2 from Jude.

Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) if I keep bashing out parts might actually make an undeserved 100 views! But I’m having fun writing it, so what the heck. Thanks for your review! He’s drunk, in an enclosed space with the Duchess who is helping him think with his dick, and had something technically true told to him that allows him to believe he hadn’t broken that huge “don’t hit a woman” rule. He’s got to have been prepared to make the effort to change... Even so, I think in another part his self-reflection may return. I hope she didn’t offer you a ride too? Oh, you mean in the Shannon’s report scrap! I guess technically you’ve seen her twice, only she was a lot younger and still an Archangel in the Fall of Chastia scrap. No freaking kidding. It's hard for me to even type. Apparantly the easiest demon name to type is Asmodeus’s nephew Asdfghjkl. I might even change her name again from that scrap! It could get sillier yet! She’s got quite the sense of superirority that woman. I’m think Duchess works better than the dark grace title too –It didn’t fit the persona she’s putting on for Jude of a concerned inhuman-hunter of wealth and status. I think she knew exactly what to say to Jude – She’s got the advantage of being able to read Jude’s mind from a distance, same as old Eparlegna. Never mind the defeated and self-pitying way he walked, she got a look in there and decided he was her patsy, even before he met Kizzy, and then it was just finding a way to get them to interract. Unless my sloppy writing has kicked in and messed it up then her only lies to Jude are lies of omission otherwise everything she says is true – she’s targeting something inhuman with great strength, Kizzy is a dangerous foe to her, and has influence over Shannon, and would spot the Duchess or another demon/damned soul servant approaching her a mile off, and Shannon was in her employ (hers as she sees it!) and as far as she knows Kizzy hasn’t had any interest in any man (There may have been some distinctly less pure thoughts while watching Star Trek, no doubt down to the borrowed flesh, but the Duchess doesn’t know about that.) It’s a nasty one, too. Hopefully by the end of the story, though, if you choose to read it all through and I manage to write it out as I have it all planned in my head you won’t be left needing to write a SAO to feel better. But if you do need to, well, that’s cool from my perspective because they come out great. Thank you! kind of hot is good enough for me. He doesn’t even have enough experience to note that the tongue was a little unnatural. I’m actually feeling like it might be cool to just do another 1000 word part of them having some more sex, total PWP fuckfest, with the Duchess having to remember not to eat his soul as she needs him alive, unharmed and un-soulless for her scheme, then the part after that can continue with where it was going to be before. The only issue is the next batch of prompt words including haslot (which I swear ought be spelled haslet) and fitting in a reference to cooked animal entrails to a non-snuff scene. Ahh well, I seem to not have the interest to write good sex these days anyway so if it doesn’t work and I miss having a sex chapter, then those prompts would have a use when the weapon is deployed. Yeah, that one made me smile too But, can’t say Kizzy didn’t warn him that intolerance’d end up with him in Hell. Thanks again for your review! I think I would not be surprised if nobody else who reads it bothers, but it’s nice to get feedback from someone.