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Shannon’ll be disappointed she didn’t get to do the interrogation. “So, Janet… I hear you like demon dick.” *Lifts skirt* *12 hours later* “Hi, Kiz? I’ve got all the info, but she’s still horny. This could take a while. ...Well sure, I could totally go now I’ve got the info, but at this stage it’s professional pride. Satisfaction guaranteed should mean something! ” There’s no sex in it! Probably better to spend time with the fuck fics. Fair enough It’s always good to hear alternate points of view! Yeah, I can see that – if I’d gone the full on porn route with it, then I think it probably would have been hotter for sure. Irritatingly I guess this just seemed to be the way the story wanted to go. Thanks again!

Haha Scottish accent: “Och, it wasn’t so wee...” Lupa had to finish herself off the second time, he may need another look at the walkthrough, mind. Yeah, but I wanted to include more! More than plenty! Gags every other line! And not the BDSM kind! Oh, yeah, that dude at the con was definitely a multiplayer COD fan. But not the same asshole from You! because Sarsa’s probably cut that dude up by this point. See, sometimes two wrongs do make a right! My jokes about COD have all been around the multiplayer stereotypes I think – with both Drew and that unnamed dude going in for that stuff. Gaming culture in general has a lot of assholes. Which sucks. I quoted this whole section just so the neat snake pics would show up again in the thread. Also it’s interesting to read! I’m 99% sure that top danger noodle is the type I had in mind with snake dude’s coloring! I don’t even like trying the patience of domestic animals tbh. One day the hamster snaps, kicks it’s wheel over, and suddenly there’s blood everywhere and high pitched squeaks of pure rage as the owners try to flee... Milking someone’s snake? Well, me and low hanging fruit do kinda go together. Kate’s also got that human side, and I heard ‘bout that endurance running hypothesis suggesting we’ve got some talent for that too, so I guess werewolves can go even further! Which sucks if you’re trying to get away from one.

A Gamer Girl With Bite Huh, looks like we're both writing stories about short, scrawny guys. It does provide a nice contrast with Lupa, though, given her thoughts on her own weight. Firstly, thanks for taking the time to read through and leave a review. I do appreciate you folks coming back time after time for these original short stories. The shorty thing comes from originally Mike was going to be Drew, who is really short in human form (he’s 10’ as a demon, described as nearly twice her height, but as a human he’s described as barely taller than her), but when I went for a using an all new non-rapey character I made changes like removing his glasses, giving him long hair, and a much skinnier build. His problem is that he’s exercising a lot, but not getting his diet quite right, so ending up too skinny. As for Lupa, there isn’t actually anything wrong with her weight, but thanks to various societal bullshit and some past negative comments she’s had, and the like, she’s got some body issues. Covering herself up to avoid the sun as a vampire she felt wasn’t the worst part of it, but she’s getting over them. Support and positivity from her friends is a big help, though. First time I laughed reading the story. There's something about "the Nintendo way" being invoked like the code of chivalry or something. Gotta use that Nintendo Power. Later on, he gets Nintendo Hard. Always good to get a laugh I actually did try for some more jokey jokes throughout, didn’t get as many as I’d have liked. That’s the big part of it really – he didn’t want to seem to be approving or supporting the comment, and it was kind of directed to him about Lupa. She absolutely coulda torn that guy a new asshole (I mean, verbally, but also literally if it came to it). That asshole maybe got corrupted by some Sarsa fanfic… Janet offered the dev team a more diverse perspective to their mostly straight male design process. They weren’t aware that her career highlights included unleashing a rape demon in a convent, or that she was feeling a little pissed about how her half-demon son was barely scraping through college and couldn’t get a girlfriend despite being such a nice guy with his new neckbeard and fedora… Thanks! I guess as a vampire wherever she goes there’s some spooky shit going down, but mostly it’s her happening to people. And somewhere, Kevin and Abdul nod silently. Call it foreshadowing. He does strip later :p Ah, yes, the coral snake demon. A lot of summoners get that wrong, you know; accidentally summon the way less dangerous scarlet kingsnake demon instead. Common rookie mistake. Joking aside, I really liked the creature design here. It kind of reminds me of a Yuan-ti abomination from D&D, but the more human-looking face and the coral snake color pattern helps make it distinct. Something something Shannon’s scarlet kingsnake something something… I honestly just remembered the look of the snake with those bright colors but couldn’t have named it. I’m glad the design works tho’ I’ve seen a lot of Naga looking dudes just have a basic green tail. The way I figure her speed is that she’s really fast in short jumpy bursts, and she can keep it up a while, but she doesn’t have the endurance that Kate would have. Plus, she’s still really young as a vampire, even with a couple years dead at that point, and using her strength and her speed and the rest all together is something she’s still really mastering. The extra training she’s been getting probably helps some with that. Might be interesting to write it from her perspective sometime, something to try at least! Second time the story made me laugh. It makes sense in context, but given that there's a vampire fighting a demon, the fact that she even asks about that is funny. Janet’s used to seeing demon shit going down, but non-cosplay weapons at a gamer convention? Someone goofed! That also made me laugh, in this case because I was thinking "Oh good, it's a vore demon" right before Mike said that. Shannon’s not the only demon that swallows around there. Thanks! There’s some of the regeneration on a smaller scale in You! too – Lupa bites you to heal her burns from blowing out the monitor infused with Sarsa’s demon magic story. She also feeds messier- she probably bit you in the wrong place and had a little too much blood coming out there. Heh, this one made me laugh. When it comes to porn hotness is in the eye of the beholder. If folks say it’s hot to them then that’s fine by me and I can count it a success, but it seemed like it was lacking something to me when it was written even though I found the idea really appealing (the bit I liked best was Mike’s oral on Lupa). Maybe Shannon’s own insecurity free porn loving take was what helped the other one, or it could just be that besides the brief bit in Jude’s Tale I’m out of practice at writing sex stuff – the other recent bits have really been re-writes. I figured Sarsa was a) likely to be establishing different personalities online as part of extending her control through different areas and b) exactly the kind of toxic user who creates sockpuppets to either attack others or have conversations about how great she is, or attack herself so she can get sympathy defences. Janet saw through at least some of ‘em, possibly due to the quality of Sarsa’s writing. I got the Lady part from how I’d had Janet call her my lady, and the Billi part after deciding Sarsa’s original angel name was Dyoel (she got it from Billy Joel)… And on that terrible thought, thank you again for the review. It’s really decent of you to say alla this nice stuff about my story!

A Gamer Girl With Bite started as a flashfic and I just kept writing, extending it out. Originally it was just gonna be a non-sex slice of retro gamer themed convention… Originally I started off thinking about bringing back Drew, one of the shortest male characters I ever wrote (in human form, he’s described as barely taller than the petite demon huntress) and showing him as maybe redeemable and growing up. Then I re-read his original story and thought nope, he’s really not, he’s worse than T-Dog. The only aspects I kept from Drew when having Mike instead were being into gaming and being short. At least having Drew in mind gave me the idea to bring back Janet, so evil she’s working in marketing. Rough timeline for the other stories, this is set after Fucking Halloween Party, when things have been getting worse with Sarsa’s influence, more and more evil to fight, but also Lupa’s friend Kate is stuck in a magic trap inside a house and they haven’t been able to get her out, so Lupa’s feeling pretty down about that, too. At the end of the day she and Kate are closest in terms of experience, compared to their billions of years old housemates. Thanks for your review! I appreciate it. It’s funny, I really enjoyed writing it but then it didn’t seem all that great when reading it back – which has never before stopped me sticking stuff up on AFF. Lupa was saying stuff with sexual meaning intentionally to start with, just trying to get Mike a little flustered before the final game, but the problem with spending so much time around someone like Shannon seems to be that she couldn’t switch off seeing things as entendres after she started I get where you’re coming from, but it just didn’t seem to spark for me here. The whole concept of the scene I really liked the idea of, but when it came to writing it felt a bit too un-hot. And not just because Lupa was cooling. I think maybe also doing the whole story (except the epilogue) from Mike’s perspective hindered it some. Lupa’s thoughts and feelings, her pleasure, would probably have been hotter than Mike’s perception of them. Or maybe I just shoulda had her bite him again, that coulda done it. Ah, but then I’d probably have to cite the t-shirt makers and I don’t even know who they are I guess she does bite back against Janet when she has some blood from her, but also she’s a strong character ‘with bite’ which might well be regionally colloquial as well as with the ability to bite. I’ll probably stick with what I’ve got for now, but coming up with titles that don’t suck is always a pain in the ass for me! Thank you again for you review, It was good to get it.

Naruto the Cluck goes past 10000 hits and gets a 4th review. Holy shit that must be an active subdomain. Thanks for your comment, I appreciate you taking the time! You may be right – I honestly don’t know enough about the fandom and hard to see how it could be worse. Permenantly fowl Naruto’s downside would be that Hinata might have to explain where he was the rest of the time she wasn’t screwing around. Also, lets face it, someone might eat him. And she’d have to do whatever chores he was picking up before! I dunno though, could be something I’m missing. Thanks again for the comment.

Never too soon! JayDee, filthy pornographer.

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: A Gamer Girl With Bite Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: ShortStory Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Original Pairing: Vampire OC x Non Vampire OC. Warnings: Angst ChallengeFic COMPLETE Fingering MF MiCD Oneshot Oral Solo Racist Violence

I’ve never seen Phineas and Ferb but I saw that clip at some point

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How would we know? There’s a link to their story there, so why not go ask them on AO3?

Lupa didn’t come! I guess she was off somewhere doing her own thing. But yeah, downsides with both of them – text message means no wolfy foreshadowing, wolfy foreshadowing means total lack of tension. There is that. Some readers also have very specific personal thoughts on how characters will act or who they would have sex with. My experience has been that generally the fandom is actually less vocal with the meaningless PWP smutfest oneshots that make up most of my work, but get considerably more vocal with other authors’ longer plot intensive pieces I don’t tend to dabble in. Putting Harry and Hermione together at one point would really enrage a lot of Harry Potter fans, for example, and please others. In my case the only story I’ve written that appeared to piss off a significant portion of a fandom – lotta flame emails and sadly deleted reviews – was Taking The Sky From Kaylee. I think on that basis the little flashfics can tend to fly under the radar, getting the whole “you know this character already” thing out of the way, without so much of the downside reader rage. Or it might just be that so few modern AFF readers review I don’t realise how much they hate things! Some of the AU stuff is just… eh? Wha? It’s so AU it’s pretty clear that the writer just wanted to write about their high school and friends or whatever, but threw in Character names from a show or book or game to hook in readers. Something that starts “Instead of seeking the Infinity Stones, Thanos is just a hand car wash guy, and sexy beautiful student Sarsa drives her car in for a wash. They fuck!” has really nothing on the source material. Heh, if I didn’t fight one of my muses I’d still be churning out snuff every other story.

Asras' Abomination Thank you for the review! I appreciate you taking the time to leave thoughts. I went with the phonecall because I wanted to foreshadow the wolf – hence the growling in the background as Kate overhears the panic and screams and so on. I think your idea probably would have worked better, especially with more tension, so it’s definitely something to bear in mind for another time. Honestly a lot of the prompts are the same for me – they went really hard with some of them. I happened to know two of them this time and I think that’s probably why I didn’t think to stick all the definitions down the bottom as I have done for some of the recent ones, and just quoted the definition for the one I didn’t know. Something to bear in mind I guess. Absolutely get this – I just didn’t have the damn word count. This is definitely one of the areas in which doing fanfics for the prompts works better than original characters, because all I need to do is say “Captain Picard” or “Rimming Crusher on the Bridge of the Enterprise” and all the fans know immediately the characters, both personality and appearance, they know the scenery around them, and that there’s a very good reason why Picard doesn’t allow children on his bridge. With original work, well, all folks know is that these two go to a dance troupe, and so does the older woman, because I haven’t put in enough details to make people care. I guess in some ways I’d be better off doing the flashfic-chapter stories with originals, because then you can get to know the character a bit more. Some of the original flashfics worked ok without it, but mostly yeah. I might just do the next one as a ShortStory (allowed in the modified prompt rules!) rather than a flashfic and see if having an extra 200-300 words makes a difference, or just means I don’t tighten it up as much. Thanks again for your thoughts.

Got moved to their own subdomain – http://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/index.php There was just too much of that sweet, sweet, Mcgonagall futa.

I know they’re doing it. Fuck ‘em. The Last Jedi was a good film too. My neice fuckin’ loved it. My favorite of the new films was Rogue One though. That was a hell of a good film. Heh, I hope he comes back with “Please, call me George. Mr. Glass was the bad guy in Unbreakable.” I kid I kid…

I really appreciate the offer and the kind words! I pretty much always work without beta readers (the exception might be how on some of the request fics I sent chunks to the requester to see if they wanted changes making) because I’m really lazy. I suspect my increasing laziness is also a part of why I’m finding the longer stories harder to do – they take a lot of effort (I spent a few months on something like Shokan Lust, and even that’s tiny compared to stuff other folks put out) and I’m either burned out or lazy and it’s probably laziness. Thanks tho’!

Oh man, SW ep 9 trailer was epic. Lando’s back too! I don’t fucking get all these assholes hatin’ on Rey.

Heh, Abdul gets it once again!

It’s like a horror film when someone thinks it’s a monster… and it was! I used to lurk on the old Godawful Fanfiction forum, since just about every story I’d written at the time was linked there. There was a lot of stuff posted that was worse than mine, sure. I know my way around the barely readable bullshit! And I meant in terms of content and themes rather than terrible grammatical constructions :p Feel free to use it! Ya know you’re welcome to use anything you need from my stuff anyhow. I’m sure readers would love to see Kevin smashing a necromancer’s box. What’s weird is I have the ideas, it’s getting the phrasing down, constructing the sentences so they flow and hold the interest and read good. I’ve managed it before, but it’s kicking my ass trying it again.

Asras' Abomination may be the first of a series of prompt oneshots showing the effects of dark magics and demon dealings. If so I’m tempted to change part one to an index page, move it into paranormal general, and lump them in together given the connected themes and recurring characters that’ll no doubt show up.I seem to recall that’s allowed *Checks guidelines* yep – specific exception for Table of Contents for oneshot collections! I’ve finally realised putting ‘Flashfic’ in the summary is a good way to let folks know how damn short it’ll be too, to avoid folks getting over excited by the story codes. Anyway @InBrightestDay has kindly reviewed it, due to what must be the site’s highest tolerance for my barely readable bullshit. Thank you for revieing this! I’ve always said tentacle porn is one of my weaker areas, keeping it real short may have helped me hide the deficiencies but absolutely is gonna leave it too short for anybody to really enjoy as porn. I’m actually kinda surprised there is any hot imagary, so thanks for that, but thanks also for the frank appraisal of why it’s got negatives. S’all good feedback. I almost feel like this is meta humor about people ignoring the tags or bold face Turn Back Now warnings you put on your snuff stories. The link to Sarsa only makes me think of this more. In addition, I kind of like the fact that spells here are apparently named like some of the ones in D&D ("Asras' Abomination" would fit right in with "Bigby's Crushing Hand," "Evard's Black Tentacles," etc.) and that instead of being named after Sarsa, it's named after her Mary Sue. Heh, I’ve said before I’m not great at subtlety. You’ve nailed it there with some of the folks I was thinking about- ya see an evil summary, ya know it’s wrong, don’t damn well read it! Asras is no Mary Sue! Just because her magic is the strongest anyone has ever seen and even Voldie loves her for it… Oh, wait a sec… I literally burst out laughing at this. I can't even fully explain why. In Slumberverse America, Box X you. Initially I was going to have the box require the old backwards speaking reh ckuf etc, but I felt that might actually need explaining within the story and there wasn’t the word count, so eventually I just decided the spell was dumbed down enough to only need ‘Box’ for the commands. Oooh! This one was waaay overthought. Basically, Octavia’s a shoes fan. She goes in the room, everyone is wearing in dancing shoes on that expensive wooden sprung floor, so not worthy of comment in her thoughts. Then in stomps Kizzy wearing totally unsuitable boots… and stomps right through a box onto that expensive floor. Kizzy wearing docs got a mention in another story somewhere. Quite why she favors them is a bit of a mystery, I suspect they were a present. Heh, thanks. I liked it! I figure another time I can have folks get the vampire/werewolf mixed up too “Lupa? So you must be the werewolf?” “Oh sure! Yeah, when I was born they said ‘This kid? She’s gonna be a werewolf some day!’ Fuck you, I’m a bitch but I’m not a bitch.“ They got some great stuff on that internet. Thank you again for your review! I don’t do the prompt fics really expecting reviews, but it’s nice at least to get something down and created and of course to make something of DG’s efforts in setting the prompts. I wonder now if I can get the damn re-write done or if I’ll just end up doing another prompt fic.

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: Asras' Abomination Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Original Pairing: Tentacle demon, buncha OCs, Warnings: 3Plus AFFO Anal ChallengeFic COMPLETE Contro CR DP MC MF Rape Tent

Firefox is pretty good for me with AFF, but I always try and type stuff into a doc before posting. Even reviews. The last long review I wrote I didn’t and lost it! Had to re-write it. Gotta be much worse with stories.

Alright, but how impolite and unpleasant is it to take a positive, upbeat, cheerful and indeed outright gushing thread of praise to the forum and selfishly make a negative comment about oneself? Exactly! Real unpleasant and downright rude. What kind of toxic asshole would do such a thing? But, yes, other people are just great. Much praise for the admin team, the mod team, and that unquiet spirit that keeps trying to communicate through the black diamonds. JayDee, genuinely awful person (for further evidence, see An Actor Abducted)

There’s an old forum thread where someone said I really hurt their friend’s feelings! It’s from over a decade ago but even so…