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  1. Yeah, that would do it. The secret ingredient is an ungodly amount of poppy seeds, greens and more. Whether or nor they wake up is another matter. The hulking barbarian might be knocked out but the elder sage of venerable age and the tiny sorceress that’s probably 90lbs wet on a good day is absolutely dead.
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  2. I can now process people, and I’ve caught up as of now. Thanks for your patience.
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  3. Isn’t Glorfindel using the force to serve himself up a pan-dimensional gargle blaster at Quark’s bar, in orbit of Rylos?
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  4. I know a lot of fanfics break with their ‘verse to reference things in other ‘verses, but speaking only for myself, I think it’s lazy writing. I mean, it’s just as easy to say that a mask covered only the eyes and nose of a character, leaving their mouth uncovered as it is to say they wore a mask like Batman when Batman isn’t part of their ‘verse at all. It’s really the writer’s choice, when you come down to it. When I do write fanfic, I try to stick to my ‘verse and not drag in references that wouldn’t fit. Same thing with dialogue. I try not to use expressions or slang that doesn’t fit my ‘verse. Can you imagine a character from LotR making a reference to something out of Harry Potter? It takes the reader right out of the story. I mean, would Glorfindel order butterbeer? Of course not. He’d rather have miruvor, or a good Dorwinion wine.
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  5. I would only use the Iron Man/Optimus Prime description if you are describing the armored character from the POV of another character who would be familiar with those franchises. In that instance, the description would actually serve double duty, telling you what the armored character looks like while also telling you something about the observer (eg, that they’re from Earth in the 1980s or later, and that they’re into scifi and such).
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  6. As with just about anything, this didn’t go as smoothly as it could have and should have, given that it’s an intracompany transfer, from Nexcess to LiquidWeb, their parent company. So, instead of finishing up by, say the 3rd, we finally finished this all up by the 19th. Having said all that, I have to say I am really excited about the change, and here’s why. SSL finally works as intended moving from Interworx to cPanel has made a huge difference. We can actually tailor PHP needs to different subdomains. For example, the forum needs 8.x, and has that version. The archive is on 7.x. Manta is working on bringing all of it up to 8.x The ability to use the later versions of both PHP and my SQL are necessary to be able to implement things that we could NOT in lesser versions. The hardware is worlds away from what we used to have. More powerful, and efficient. Much better physical virus protection Much better spam protection Mind you, Manta and I both tend to work a bunch IRL, so the SNAFU on the timeline really, really, put a wrench in things. BIG BIG thank you to Manta for carrying the load during this migration, as work, as it tends to do, wouldn’t let me have time off for much of anything. Go figure.
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  7. By lucky coincidence, a genetic mutation makes them impervious to garlic-infused holy water, it’s now a health tonic. They also use silver bolts for toothpicks, after all, dental hygiene is important for those perfect pearly whites! Anyways, make sure to get *ALL* their hearts to thwart the regeneration process. Yeah, mostly harmless, like the earth.
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  8. “Twist the tropes” can be quite fun to do at times. Of course, @SirGeneralSir will need to decide if the adventurers live or die, and work from there.
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  9. This would work best in the last chapter of the story. As the party entered the chamber, Bolbo Slaggins lighted one of the torches already in to room to provide more light in the dank large cell. Hrothgar sniffed the air warily and opined, “Something’s not right here. The smell...” This was the last word or cogent thought the seven adventuring intrepid heroes had—ever. Rocks fall, everyone dies. Cheers!
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  10. Hi, “buncha-titles.” This sounds like a job for a magical potion mixed in with the candle wax or torch-head. For added “drama,” have the wizard of the party recognize the potion, but not quite in time to save the day. Thanks.
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  11. Due to the recent server migration not going as smoothly as hoped for, it’s currently impossible to approve people to join the forum. Some people may also be having issues with the archive. This is being worked on and will be rectified as soon as possible.
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  12. Update: It’s still currently impossible for me to process people to join the forum. I can only apologise, but it’s just as frustrating to me.
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  13. It’s fine to use standard architectural terms, like column or obelisk or façade (rather than pediment). The idea is to use a common enough term that your readers will recognize, so they can see in their mind’s eye what it is you want them to see.
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  14. Definitely stick to the overall aesthetics. If its modern/urban fantasy sure it works. Scifi/futuristic could also work if only in a vintage nostalgic sense. If its more a fantastical world that may or may not ever reach the industrial revolution… Not so much. Greco-roman = Columns… They certainly had a fetish for arches and columns also open areas. Egyptian= Loved obelisks and almost always tag every significant structure with hieroglyphs. Aztec/Maya the other pyramid builders with serpent motifs… They symbol spammed their calendar all over the place. Hindu- Gods and goddesses with multiple limbs dancing. Elegant mathematical principals on full display and highly detailed.
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  15. Hm. That’s a rather awkward visual. I’m also not sure if the building is two stories high, if the crystals are two stories high, if the crystals are supporting the building off the ground, or if it’s the crystals or building creating the light. Now, Greco-Roman architecture is not all that hard to describe. In general, the buildings would have columns in front, stairs leading up to the doorway, which could be wide and open or with a stout wooden door, depending on the usage, and a peaked roof. I’d drag out all the proper terms for each component, but anyone can Google that. The point is that it’s not hard to describe a structure if you approach it logically: “After a short trek in the ankle high water, Loric found what looked to be some kind of temple ruins. Blue crystalline columns supported the structure, rising at least three meters out of the water, and their radiance illuminated the pale stone of the temple. The remnants of a broad stair, flanked by tall columns capped with intricate carvings, led up to an intimidatingly dark opening beneath the crumbling pediment.” Or something to that effect…
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  16. For me, it very much depends on what I’m writing. If it’s set in a world of my own creation, there wouldn’t be anyone who knew who Ironman or Optimus Prime were, so that sort of description would be meaningless. If I were writing something set on future-day Earth, however, then those references would be applicable, and if I was going for a touch of humor, I might even use them. It would really depend on whether or not I was going for a grim mood or something more sardonic, I suppose.
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  17. Hey, George. I’ve already mentioned this problem in our migration issues thread, so hopefully Manta will see it soon. But a temporary work around is to go to the very bottom of the page and switch the theme of the forum to “FantasyBeast” theme, and then you should see the standard three lines indicating a drop down menu at the top to the right of the Adult fan fiction banner.
    2 points
  18. Yeah I remember stories from Greek mythology that involved something in the torch oil or mixed into the candle wax that when one of the hero's and his party would light them, it slowly let out a gas that knocked them out over time. Not sure if there was a real substance used or not, if there was it would just save me time but if not eh I can farce something.
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  19. Yes, but they all have real life jobs and homes to take care of, and one of them is in the Southern Hemisphere, so on a totally different timezone than any of us. Plus, we are all volunteers. We’re not some heavily funded conglomerate. We are not on here 24/7, so give people time to at least catch up.
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  20. I saw this in the Malwarbyte’s blog, and thought I’d pass it on: https://blog.malwarebytes.com/scams/2022/07/discord-shame-channel-goes-phishing/ I know I sound like a broken record sometimes, but… never click on anything sent to you that you didn’t ask for, and never share any information based on a random post/text/Discord/tweet/Snap or any other forum. Don’t click the link, don’t scan the QR code, don’t feed the trolls, and stay safe!
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  21. I don’t think there’s any real world substances, since candles produce carbon dioxide, but at such a low level that it’s negligible, and torches don’t produce anything more noxious. But you can have a great deal of fun having someone add something to the candle wax so when it melts, it gives off the gas that will render your adventurers unconscious. Or it could be a component of the oil that the torches are soaked in. You’d have to make it up, of course, unless you want to look at the sort of herbs or essential oils that are usually associated with bedtime. Off the top of my head, without any Googling, that could be lavender, chamomile, valerian…
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  22. A fresh link is up! Sorry for the wait!
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  23. Watching the Expanse. Imagine having the actor credit of “puking diplomat” on your resume?
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  24. The reason no one has written anything like this is because Anne Rice filed cease and desist orders with every fan fiction archive, AFF included, prohibiting the hosting of any derivative work based on her copyrighted material. While we are aware that Ms Rice is now deceased, her estate has not lifted the cease and desist order, and therefore, nothing based on any of Anne Rice’s work will be hosted on AFF.
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  25. I have some adventurers exploring a dungeon and I want them to fall into a typical sleep trap. but instead of the traditional walk into a room and it fills with gas, I was thinking they are in the room, light the candles/torches and its letting out a gas from there. is there any real world substances that could work like that, or do I need to make something up?
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  26. So the plan, still working on it, is that the party ends up in the room, because of the sleep stuff they get captured by …… someone, and must deal with either escaping or being diplomatic etc. I am leaning more towards escaping and fighting their way out of the place and so on. But I thank all of you for your thoughts and ideas, gives me more ideas to work with.
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  27. The next chapter of “Smooshed” is up! Chapter 13: Show, Don’t Tell
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  28. There is not enough squee in the world for that moment when one randomly finds a copy of Diana Wynne Jones’s Howl’s Moving Castle on the Free Books table at the University library….
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  29. Alright, too much youtube, it was mentioning poisonous gas. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LnkwxKHVLeU Phosphine can be had by heating white phosphorus in aqueous solution of potash (potassium carbonate). While the pure is odorless, the technical grate can have a highly unpleasant order like rotting fish. Arsine can give off a slight garlic scent when it’s presence is above 0.5 ppm … it’ll destroy the kidneys (according to this video).
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  30. Tomb of Horrors Is the only reason to have Red-Shirt Syndrome. Ah! Memories! Hahahaaha!
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  31. The author never managed to actually make it clear what this MC’s eyes looked like, although the MC spent an inordinate amount of time staring at herself in a mirror. And changing clothes. And falling down and crawling. I swear, there is not enough brain bleach in the universe, sometimes.
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  32. I have to agree with you here. It also helps to have the “hero” examine themselves and their motivations without causing them to become “anti-Sues” instead of “Sues.” Seeing the protagonist overcome barriers is usually interesting, even if the barriers are all “in their mind” or not quite reasonable to anyone other than the protagonist themselves. “Could I persuade this annoying gorilla to quit messing with my girlfriend if I quit beating him with a circus mallet? And if he agreed to leave us alone, could I take him at his word? Or will I be forced to keep hitting him until I finally manage to kill him? And how much will I owe the zoo or circus the fucker escaped from when the oversized monkey finally snuffs it?” Thanks.
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  33. Hi, all. Back to the “original-original” question, I suppose that the ultimate reason we as readers loathe genuine “Mary-Sue” characters is the boredom they bring to a story, combined with the odd coincidence that most authors who accidentally write a true Mary Sue just aren’t that good. Apart from the infamous “Mary Sue the Author” not being worthy to be spit-roasted by William Shatner and Leonard Nimoy as some might have suggested she desired, her character, prose, and story were BORING, and yes, I deliberately added the extra emphasis to the single word describing that misguided woman’s prose. You can over-power an OC like a “M-F’er;” and get away with it, but you still have to make the story interesting, even if the conflict is “how entertaining will it be for the OC to curb-stomp the near-unbeatable antagonist the regular main character couldn’t handle easily, if at all.” Succeed in this, you’ve written another “James Bond.” Fail, and it’s yet another Mary Sue. Even with all the “problems solved,” your OC must at a minimum solve those problems in a way that rewards the readers for sticking around. Better yet, while your OC may have the “canon” problems solved, they need to solve new problems, even as they help the “canon” heroes grow to new heights. Your OC Targaryen or OC Viserys Targaryen may have dragons and total knowledge of the “canon future.” How does this help retaking the throne from Robert Baratheon? How does it help putting Jon Snow on the throne, or otherwise prepare him to defeat the “Other” and the White-Walkers? Does he rescue at least Eddard Stark and his children, even if Catelyn is allowed to crash-and-burn? How spectacular is it when he has his dragons roast The Twins and all who shelter within them? Does he sell Joffery Baratheon to the Dothraki as a pleasure-slave for their horses? Thanks.
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  34. Oh thank god that weird tonal shift was only around the last five chapters.
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  35. I think my issue in this case, is that I dont know what some of these objects are called and so I am stuck trying to figure out a term to call them while explaining what they are etc. A communication issue on my part.
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  36. Ok valid point, so then how would you describe a Roman/Greek style temple in a Original world, because what I have I do not think fits it at all. (After a short trek in the ankle high water, Loric found what looked to be some kind of old temple ruins. A tall cube like building with blue crystals that reached at least two floors high supporting the building that were creating the light.)
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  37. If you’re going for something in the food, there’s always good old poppy, aka opium. Have them eat a spicy stew laced with enough opium to fell an ox, and there you are.
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  38. This issue has been cleared up, and the Non-English subdomain of the Archive is now available for viewing again. Please let us know if you run into any other problems. Our coder is hard at work fixing the problems, but it takes time.
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  39. I must have missed that during my edits and proof-reading. I’ve fixed it up here and on the other sites I upload. Thanks very much for pointing that out! Glad you liked it.
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  40. I’m pleased to announce that my laptop is back in my hands. This was a bit of a surprise, because the website said that it was still “Under repair.” But I’d rather they make that mistake than the opposite one. I’m hoping to finish and post chapter 12 of “Smooshed” today or tomorrow. Also, I expect to send chapter 4 of “Depravity Falls” to beta by Monday. Chapter 3 of “Secret Sash” should be ready to go pretty soon after that. And “Waltney Plus” is getting close to beta-ready, too.
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  41. There is a chat app called discord. It’s completely free. You don’t even need to download anything – it can be used in your browser! This server is a place for writers of erotica original and fan fiction to help each other out. We have: An inclusive, supportive community Prompts Help Channels Voice Chat Frequent games and events We’d love to see you there! https://discord.gg/TSpn8kUtKs
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  42. The forum doesn’t have the option of saving a post as a draft, as that would cause unnecessary database loads.
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  43. There’s several ways to write it. A pressure plate that subtly starts the mechanism when wax sloughs off the candle in response to heat. wax, tallow or even the wick could all be mixed, coated or otherwise applied with somnolence inducers or even a mixture that all applies different dosages if only to have an ironclad punch together. Depends, on what flavor you’re going for? Transition? TotalPartyKnockOut? Or even A la I Have You Now My Pretty! Even a wire on the door that pulls a lever that starts the gas the moment its opened. Traps really give you a handy card the trick is working backwards from effect. Might be that weird title on the floor at the entrance. Might be a countdown mechanism. Could be all of the above?! Who knows? Only the trap builder and the architect, and the person who funded it know for sure.
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  44. We pinned it back in 2016 so members would see it and hopefully respond. To be quite honest, I’m not the Forum Admin, so I don’t routinely check to see what’s pinned or not. I’m Archive staff, which keeps me busy enough. But I’ve unpinned this thread so it won’t appear on top anymore.
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  45. The bad news: I had to send my laptop to the manufacturer for repair. God only knows when I’ll get it back. The good news: Before I sent the laptop home to momma, I managed to get all my story files onto a flash drive, which means that I am finally able to post those story chapters: Secret Sash, chapter 2: Silver-Fox Hunter Depravity Falls, chapter 3: Two Steps Forward
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  46. We love when one of our members publishes a book, and we’re happy to hear about it. However, we generally expect that such publications, if offered for sale, are original works. We all know you can’t make money from someone else’s copyrighted work because that’s illegal. So, I’ve hidden the entire post because AFF does not countenance the sale of fan fiction, and the theft of copyrighted work. If you want to take the chance that you won’t get sued by the copyright owner, that’s your call, but AFF will not risk being shut down so you can sell fan fiction for money.
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  47. I might be the odd man out here, but I actually just want to know if people have reacted to my story at all. I don’t care if they don’t love it, and I’m generally not surprised if people hate it, but I’d love a reaction. Back when I had more time, I tried to read more and I’d make a point of reviewing when I read. (Thanks to a hiccup, my account was inadvertently deleted, which left all my old reviews anonned, but hopefully that won’t matter to the authors I reviewed.) Sometimes when I was sweeping in the archive, I’d come across a new story in a fandom I might not normally have pursued for leisure reading, and I’d make a point to go back, read properly, and review. I’m fairly specific about fandoms, however, and I have my personal squicks which I will avoid diligently for leisure reading, so I might not get around to reading everything. I’m hoping I’ll be able to find more time to just read again, and when I read, I review!
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  48. I know. Makes me realize that I’m getting too freaking old. The thought of half the stuff I loved as a kid being complete unknowns to younger people these days happens to be a constant heartbreak for me too. Times are changing I suppose, and brilliance in art has shifted with the turning tides. But, it was still a lot of fun to read as Dr. Who got drug into the mix and so forth. A very fun type of comic strip that I hope will remain with all of us for a long time to come.
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  49. Agreed. I’ve seen too many of those 2 full page descriptions of every tiny detail of clothing and even the makeup process in depth and over baked on steroids. I cannot get through that kind of boring to save my life and always go back and find something else to read when I get one of those stories in front of me. It’s one thing to have 2 sentences of the active dressing stage because you know it’s a blue skirt and white top thanks to the arms motions and the like, but a detailed makeup tutorial and extremely detailed clothing is a snooze waiting to happen. At AO3 you will find people who insert fashion links to the outfits in the middle of the sentences which is yet another marker of Sue/Stu at times. They try to hide their Sue/Stu by avoiding the blatant markers in hopes of getting more readers, so you have to rely on the obscenely perfected other issues at times. I’d say in original fiction, the Sue and Stu line is ignored because there is no actual preconceived measuring stick to hold up to the writer’s work which is the biggest reason for the Sue and Stu downside. I’d have to agree that the Anakin to Vader story line can be seen as a Gary Stu to end all Stu’s since he is the paragon of virtues and light that becomes one of the darkest and hateful anti-heroes of all time. His children have to save him from his own rage and the like. Still, his place as an original character means that only those who write fanfiction will ever feel the bite of nasty comments for not staying true to Vader/Anakin instead of the man who dreamed up that particular archetype enhanced characterization. I’ve seen a few harsh comments about an OC on various sites, but the worst of the hatred seems to have died down a bit in the last 2 years for several reasons. It seems to be getting better, and is more about how poor a job the characterization is of late. Again, it comes down to the telling the readers that the character is awesome without giving any active proof and that implies that a generation of readers have begun to shift their focus from the direct hate and into trying to get writers to show things instead of give us massive paragraphs of no reason to believe it brand of how great their OC is overall I think. A stronger focus on show me the character acting out their greatness has become more of the variety of critical commentary these days. So it is being worded as a need for genuine exposition instead of cop outs, or we see the offending story being ignored and getting no reviews and comments as a whole it seems.
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  50. Because I often write for game fandoms, I am often handed plot lines that require my PC to be something of a Mary Sue/Gary Stu. The challenge for me becomes one of explaining why this one particular person is the only one who can save the world, while at the same time trying to flesh out the frequently cardboard NPCs that follow my PC around. It's a fascinating challenge to un-Sue that Sue. If you think about it, no hero ever acts alone. There's always something, and that can be the fun part of writing for these fandoms. I like to flesh out the NPCs with back stories that give you an idea of why they're tagging along, and personalities of their own instead of having them serve as mirrors for the PC's actions. I've also been known to credit some of the quest successes to NPCs rather than the PC where it makes more sense for the NPC to have done better. It makes for a richer and more realistic narrative. Having said that, the anti-Sue is as awful. The lead character who is paralyzed by indecision, or self doubt. The guilt-wracked character who can't forgive themselves for past mistakes, and judges every action by those errors. The one who turns humility into a vice rather than a virtue (which calls to mind another pet peeve completely unrelated to this thread). The self-effacing mouse who becomes somehow competent under duress. Gamers have a love/hate relationship with Sues, and when we turn writer, we get a chance to see if we can do better. That's the fun part.
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