JayDee

I guess the exhaustion in Whore of Heaven could have been down to a much higher rate of forced orgasms, than the consenual ones with Kevin (I mean, rather than just being down to not-very-thought-out writing). “Servant, this makes you look like someone else who has authority to be there.” “Thank you master.” “Whatever you do, don’t go out there and introduce yourself under the name they’re looking for instead.” Later “I’m Brendan… ah crap.” I kid I kid! I’m sure you’ll do fine. If you stuck with the comms SNAFU you could always make it deliberately down to someone sympathetic to Eparlegna’s aims in the National Guard being the one to get the message and not pass it on. gotta be some there same as in the PPD.

Oh, gotcha. No, she’s still got it. It’s in nice and snug and she’s exactly the kind of person who would happily take a sex toy to paradise. Expecially when she’s got more important things to worry about, so it’s still there with her in the statue. If she had got into a situation where it was an issue then once her hands were free she would have eased it back out. Heh, if she had given it and Kate came round to Shannon’s recently used buttplug in her hand… I mean, at least as a werewolf Kate knows what all their butts smell like. To Kizurial it would very likely be seen as something that’s worth making a sacrifice for, because of what Jude might achieve in this instance, but It’s really not an issue for the Seraphim in this setting. They’ve got far-beyond-mortal regenerative capabilities of body and soul (which in their true form I suspect are a lot less dinstinguishable than for humans). Even when stabbed with a Void Blade which the Duchess believed would be guaranteed to end her, Kizzy kept the effects on herself at bay for long enough to be able to stop it entirely while in the Lake. It probably all relates to how in their true form they burn constantly for billions of years without being consumed by fire. Always worth asking! Jude might even ask her what that was all about at some point, though probably not in story.

Jude's Tale final part will hopefully be finished by next Thursday, ‘cos I’m gonna have very limited internet access Friday and Saturday and a chunk of Sunday. I’m just happy to get reviews! Thank you for ‘em, I appreciate the thoughts and comments. However you want to do ‘em is fine by me. Thank you especially for this bit! Many great parts? I love that compliment! Yeah, she left the buttplug in, she was probably still hoping to get back to Trenna quite quickly (she can be a bit of an optimist when it comes to sex). I haven’t played a Mario Kart for a while either, but that blue shell sure was annoying on some of the ones I have played I don’t always find it the easiest myself! I kind of wrote my way into it back in The Slumber Party of Evil Doom without ever expecting it to matter. It doesn’t really impact most of the stories. There’s about five stories I’ve done plus Inbrightestday’s The Woman in the Statue taking place on one Earth, and then a bunch more are taking place on the other Earth, but which ones are which doesn’t really matter Yes, the hammering was how the Void Blade’s effect on the barrier was perceived by Kizzy and Jude. I’m glad the interaction came across good! Kizzy basically gave Jude the equivalent of a layer of the skin on the tip of her little finger, tiny for her, but huge to Jude. This is down to the different power levels between a seraph and a mortal soul. Doing it allowed her to patch up the damage to his soul from the Void Blade, which had begun to be unmade, but also empowers him a little eg with the mind shield.. As a seraph, Kizzy answers only to The Creator. Besides following her creator’s commands and guidance, she’s at liberty to do anything she thinks is the right thing to do. Sometimes she gets her decisions horribly wrong. Jude enters in the middle of the Duchess shouting so with it being from his POV he doesn’t understand it either! He doesn’t know any of this, but: When the Duchess knew Shannon left with Kizzy and Jude, she sent empowered and armed ghoul types to kill their Lupa and Kate – for being friends with Kizzy and Shannon as much as anything. The Duchess can be really petty. Anyway, the ghouls made a shit job of it for various reasons and she’s upset with them. There is a reference to another story – Jeb was killed by Kate in Blood on the hay. I figured the Duchess did some research into Shannon’s friends before starting and discovered how some real nasty pieces of work like Jeb had been killed by Kate, and ended up recruiting them from their own torments, possibly because seeking revenge makes them more powerful. Or something. Thank you again for the review.

It starts with the salad, it ends up with waking inside a Wicker Man.

It helps if you/your relatives are tall because it probably means you’ve had the right combination of genetic and upbringing/nurtering background to get there so hopefully your kids will too. You feed ‘em the right probably high protein or something diet and make sure they get the right exercise, and hope they end up tall! Or do that horrible operation where they break and re-set the legs with a gap and people end up with weaker legs but more inches. I dunno. Maybe a lot of the time it’s like Pulp Fiction where Butch says American names don’t mean shit – folks don’t bother checking the meaning, they just like the sound of a name that originally meant Tall or something. Temira might be the original source for the name meaning tall in that story universe Thanks again for the review.

Jude's Tale comes close to a conclusion. May the creator have mercy on the readers souls. So, if the Duchess weighs the same as a duck... Monty Python jokes aside, I liked several of the ideas presented here. First, there's Jude's attitude toward his own fate. Admittedly, since he died while committing a sin (attempted murder and whatnot) he's going to Hell, but there's also the fact that he seems to think himself beyond forgiveness and thus actively refuses it when Kizzy offers. One example of someone kind of like that from the Bible is Judas Iscariot, and as it happens, "Jude" is a variant of "Judas." The name is generally used to refer to the other Judas (yes, there's more than one), but I can't help but wonder if that was intentional Thank you for continuing to review this story! As ever, I really appreciate the review. I figured that there’s been a few decades of people dying and then thinking they’re the first to quote some film at an angel and some of the angels have long since stopped finding it funny. The tall angel (who for the sake of naming in my head I’ve been thinking as Temira) is especially sick of it. I just had the idea of him being called Jude before anything else. Later as I did the first scrap I figured Jude’s parents named him after Jude the Apostle, who had centuries of less educated folk mixing him up with the less popular Judas and so less veneration than others got. That it also echoes Judas Iscariot was absolutely intentional, though not really because of his incredible sense of guilt – I kinda feel bad for Judas because he basically did what he needed to anyway, if he hadn’t someone else would have had to, probably. I bet if he’d gone and found ‘im afterwards and said sorry, Jesus woulda been “It’s cool, bro.” Only, you know, in Aramaic or something. Kizzy offered him the chance at redemption working as an Earthbound soul (“Kate, please stop using the ghost to chill vodka.”) but he thinks he can do more in Hell, after Kizzy gave him an idea for redemption. Probably doesn’t hurt that she has confirmed he has a degree of protection due to the Duchess’ promise, being at least so far as lesser demons go. On the other hand, if a certain fallen Seraph has a look in his mind and takes offence… So this is what Sarsa was talking about when she mentioned untold agonies. That was for a flame, sure, but same idea. Jude’s just thinking it is a reflection of Paradise because he saw a big lake in both places. He didn’t see enough of Paradise to really know, although the definitely oddly coincidental dialogue probably doesn’t help his perception! If Dante could write people into Hell for shit he didn’t like… Also, yeah, Sarsa established that kind of thing is serious business in this universe so some of these damned souls could literally be people who Sarsa is upset with and sent down, but before Kizzy is on to her. Heh. Unintentional interstory continuity! I think yeah, you’re probably right. It’s almost a theme I’ve been trying for at all along – Shannon seeking redemption through working with Kizzy, and in the Fall of Chastia story Luzurial actively hopes that even Lucifer might be redeemed, and even T-Dog does something decent at the end of his life, but it’s also in there when I was talking about how sucicides might go to Hell in the setting though many are undeserving of it but believing they should. Then they don’t necessarily have to stay for long. I wonder if it was Chastia’s way of treating the suicidal souls in her care that kept so many unwilling to reincarnate and take another life. Another reason Lucifer put up with her doing things her way, I suspect. Jude absolutely thinks he deserves Hell too, though. Kizzy’s forward-thinking enough to have kept the scar as much for his benefit as for what he sees as her reminder. She’s not going to forget really! Oh, yeah, despite all that? Eparlegna’s pretty much beyond redemption. You’d have to hollow him out and make him someone else to even get close. I love these suggestions of other stories going on in this universe. As soon as Shannon left with Kizzy, the Duchess set a plan in motion to further hurt her by killing her friends. Things… things went poorly for the attackers because Kate and Lupa were really up for a fight, they’ve had some training with Kizzy, and also Shannon had a few tricks and traps about the place – her knack for that kind of thing was first shown with the jewelry she created in the Slumber Party story, but also got a look-in with her understanding of Astrid’s spell in Fucking Halloween Party and her working out how to get Lupa into the warded house in You! She’s not just a pretty face and insatiable libidio! Might have to tell that story some day… “Oh for fuck’s sake, is it the fucking mormons this time?” “Bunch of ghouls. So almost. Oooh, I ate that one! And that one and… hey, it’s like leftovers that come to you!” awkward... Also, there's something kind of funny about asking a demon on a picnic. That made me smile. Looking forward to the next chapter! He took Jan out for a proper dinner, all the Duchess gets is a picnic. I guess you don’t carry so much money when dead. Well… I hope it isn’t a disappointment. The last chapter. I don’t know that this one worked as well as I wanted, ah well. Thank you again!

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: Jude's Tale – Part 7 - A Dead Man Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic (...ish. I mean, each part is going to be up to 1000 words.) Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Original Pairing: None. Warnings: AFFO, ChallengeFic.

Friendship's Gift is one of very few things I’ve written I am really happy with. I’m sure ultimately it’s flawed as fuck, but I love how it turned out. I mean, it’s also one of the few stories I loaded to fanfiction.net. Anyway I kinda mentioned it in the hopes of getting another review, and got another review. Which was nice. Thank you for taking the time to review this! I know it can be a bit of a pain reviewing something in an unfamiliar fandom. It’s really great to hear that you still enjoyed it – and yep, Ahnassi was a real questgiver character. Must...resist..."Khajiit has wares" joke. Ahnassi isn’t even asking for coin. Not that there aren't any jokes in the story, of course. Still, I did feel sorry for the characters, and I appreciated the maturity shown in Ahnassi's acceptance at the end. It’s really hard for me to write something even kinda angsty and emotional without putting in some jokes. S’like I said, more self control than I possess to leave ‘em out. And thank you! It’s really nice to hear it comes across genuinely, sometimes it can be hard to fit everything into the 1000 word limit and not have it come across as under-explained or forced. And the last thing the Orc wants to do is use force. I’m glad you appreciate the ending too – I really appriciate the review! Thank you gain for it.

Fingers crossed you go for the special then! And more specials afterwards! I was worried about re-writing my old thing to be an original story but not having enough original elements so besides bringing back Declan and the Flynn family I threw in a buncha other stuff as a subplot at the start/in the middle, but that just distracted folks from the sibling sex, so took it all out, and decided it still tied in well enough with the Mike story. It’s pretty awesome the way it turned out. Got some emotion there for sure. As I said before, you feeling that way means we got a great story in the sequel so it worked out in the end! I thought it worked really, really well. Serving Eparlegna when Luzurial is around has incredibly become an even more high risk occupation.

I’m sure someone, somewhere, has a thing for ‘on fire’ at least. Maybe she’s developed a thing for guys who’re prepared to sacrifice themselves for the greater good, and if such a guy somehow survived and strove for atonemnet and redemption, no matter how bad he was before… Plus, T-Dog has an enormous schwanzstucker, and maybe she’s into that kind of thing. As I said, an awful inappropriate thought.

Jude’s Tale has another review which says what we’re probably all thinking about the original title. Thank you for your review! I agree with the lameness. Basically I came to dislike the original title (it was too damn obscure for one) and I really wanted to change it. Unfortunately at that point my mind went blank so after a couple days stewing I went back to the ancient format of X’s Tale – as you say it doesn’t really cover what to expect (the summary is a little better for that but still vague really, could do with a punch up), but I really didn’t want to leave it as “untitled story”. If I think of something more evocative or less lame then I’ll change it again and hope not to confuse too many people. I suppose I could argue him dying doesn’t stop the original fate part being appropriate since dear old Atropos would insist dying is everyone’s fate but misplaced or not, definitely lame. It was @InBrightestDay who inspired me to keep going with perspective switches for this story so credit again there! I’m glad it worked out good. There are more hints at Jude’s background, but in parts 4 and 5 he’s even more an extra in his own story. I think it’s down to me doing the flashfic 1000 word count challenge and having thinner character portraits to leave more words for the stuff I did show. Alright, tell. The flashfic format almost comes like computer game resource management trying to get the balance right. Could definitely have done with more about him than what Kizzy gets from his mind in part 1 or his self pity and resurgent prejudice in part 2. I do have his motivations for ending up like that thought out, so will try and find a good place to share ‘em. And if I fail it’ll be a weakness in the story. Whoohoo! As basically a pornographer most of the time it’s always really awesome to hear someone found a sex scene hot. Thanks again for your review, I really appreciate both the positive words and the honest appraisal of the bits that haven’t worked so well for you.

Jude’s Tale is nearing it’s end with two parts to go. Unless the next part gets split into seperate parts in which case three. That’s not the plan, but there’s already been two non-original-plan parts, with a third one now planned for the final part so… Ayyy. Thank you for your review! I love that there’s some depth and thought provoking stuff in there. Heh, I did have some more Star Trek refs in the original draft, but cut ‘em all for space with only the passing red shirt reference left. Hell, it was a bit of a repeated theme in Star Trek, besides that one around Data’s rights, they later had an actual Artificially intelligent gynoid in “The Offspring” (I mean the Data’s daughter episode, not the 90s pop-punk act), and besides TNG’s moriarty stories, hologramatic life and sentience were big in Voyager. Kizurial would definitely be aware of all that I guess it’s pretty much like Kizzy says, Kizurial and her Angel assistant did such a good job that the mask can pass properly for life. Jude certainly seems convinced. Of course, as another part of Kizurial’s plan for Jude, then having the construct act and feel that way could still be entirely artificial. But going to “I think, therefore I am.” The mask Kizzy certainly thinks she is thinking… I wonder if this, done as a reactive plan to the Void Blade could cause problems for Kizurial down the road… the re-absorbed mask persoanlity and thoughts coloring Kizurial’s own more than when she was able to just draw on them to act similar to a mortal (and she still had trouble with that in her early days on Earth). I love this one, because it implies that Jude has an idea of what being dead would feel like. He’s walking and talking so the obvious thought is “I feel alive!” but Jude went the wrong way there for sure. No doubt with some funeral mental images. Heh. Thanks! That's just a hilarious way of describing Shannon, frankly. Actually, while the borrowed memories would naturally include a sexual orientation, that has to be a somewhat confusing experience for Kizurial, since I'd imagine she didn't really have a sexual orientation before. I wonder what that's like for her. Thanks again! I figured that as a Seraph, Kizurial was probably too far removed from humanity, unlike a Luzurial or Chastia type, to see them in a sexual way any more than she would other mortal sentient species. She was probably effectively asexual even, with affection and compassion and so on, but no sexual desires in that sense. Now there’s a place where more insistant thoughts from the re-merged mask part of her could color her thoughts. She totally ignored any attracting thoughts of Jude’s appearance when she first met him, but now, if a guy with an actual decent personality (or a terrible bad guy genuinely seeking redemption and reforming) flirted with her… Oh, god, I just had an awful inappropriate thought for I! if I manage to write it… Thank you again! Yeah, he’s even felt the pain of the Void Blade’s version of unmaking already – it’s not just existentially terrifying, it really fucking hurts body and soul– but he’s reached the stage where he’ll take that over sinking any lower. It doesn’t get rid of his guilt, or make him any better of a person – and Kizzy snapping at him is me trying to make it clear that it doesn’t really make amends even if she finally accepts his apology – but it does show some good in there. If the whole chapter was Kizurial testing Jude to see how dedicated he was to being decent person, he passed… Is it pretentious that my replies to reviews seem to end up longer than the story parts? I think maybe it’s because you’re writing in the shared universe I like to expand on my thoughts around it, even in reply to other reviews, or more like I just like rambling on. Probably that.

That old woman feels like the kind of filthy reprobate you could spin worlds from. The elf and the pseudo-Orc were interesting too!

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: Jude's Tale – Part 6: A Mask Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic (...ish. I mean, each part is going to be up to 1000 words.) Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Original Pairing: None really. Warnings: AFFO ChallengeFic, Viol aftermath, MCD(I realised probably required after remembering @BronxWench’s reply in this thread so also added to main summary)

A Big Girl's Bad End is a crime against all that is good and right in this world. It’s offensive to all right thinking people and quite a few degenerate scum. Thank you for your review. I appreciate all reviews! I am sorry however that you subjected yourself to this trash. I mean I’m sorry for you because even re-reading what I wrote 10-11 years ago was hard going so how it went for yourslf… eessh. Two more scrolls down and you’d ave reached the WAFFiest story I’ve done in the last year which was Twinpregnation, also a re-write, but which which has one of the happiest endings I ever wrote. It even has representation for that often bashed group, the ginger male. No tentacles though. Sadly I do know exactly how morbid curioisity works. I figured the ‘scroll by’ warning might even cause some, but sort of hoped the bold message inside would help dissuade it, but anyone who doesn’t gets to see the very rich treating the less well off horrifically, which could almost be satire. But is really just crap. The Van Dijk family first appeared in one of my old, almost as bad, stories in the form of Michael who got a reference there. For the other names I wanted something that felt realistic but also wasn’t likely to come up on someone else searching their name. So Gertie and Abe are kinda old fashioned anyway, and Stott is a fairly rare surname and together they don’t bring up a load of living folks. I’m glad you found some good lines in there to lessen the horror. That ‘Cadence’s vocabulary’ line was one that occured to me while I was doing the re-write and I just thought screw it and threw it in. I could see the horrible badly educated rapists thinking “what the hell does corpulent mean?” No BBW rubbed me the wrong way. Literally none of the nasty shit I’ve written has been because I hate folks or think they deserve to suffer or whatever. Part of it was just dealing with the shit ideas my lamia muse hissed at me by writing them down, part of it was wanting some validation by writing the nasty requests and hoping for feedback, and probably other motivations, but nothing to do with hating characters – a lot of the nastiest request shit I wrote I didn’t have a clue who the characters were, but the writing motivation was there so I went on and did it and I guess hoped for some kind of validation in their reviews. For this one – ‘bout 10/11 years ago the author Deathstalker had his own little forum and there was a prompt/challenge thing where a couple writers could set each other a character to write something horrible about. For this one I suggested the witch/sea goddess from the Pirates of the Carribean because I thought it could be a tough challenge (it never got written in the end), and in return Soemele gave the suggestion of some plus size actress I’d never heard of or seen in anything. The original version I wrote therefore had her name and appearence but not a lot else to connect to her, and I changed a bunch of the details to create Gertie. I think it was the last proper RPF story I wrote before deciding I wouldn’t do anymore, which is why it never got posted anywhere except briefly at DS’s forum. There’s a credit at the start for Soemele suggesting a plus size character which is literally all I got from ‘em for it. I seem to recall they didn’t like how it turned out anyway, but I may be misremembering and would happily take a correction from anyone there who remembered better. Oh, and for incest being practiced easily Twingpregnation :p Thank you! Anger and disgust seem like legitimate responses! I don’t even respect myself though… The ending was only implied in my first version but going back over it for the re-write I thought it would be very slightly more balanced to let him have a moment in the sun. It’s not really Cadence going for equal opportunity cruelty because it’s a lot faster than Gertie got, but it’s a step that way. I’d disagree on one point… it’s graphic, shameful, snuff I’d much rather be the kind of author who only ever put out happy fun time stories like Fucking Halloween Party or You! but I have this kind of horror show bullshit that comes out sometimes. I suck, I think! But you’re awesome for leaving a review (and in general!) and I’d like to thank you again. When toplessrobot’s old fanfiction friday reviewed my old Star Wars story “You Can Take the Boy Out of the Moisture Farm…” in 2008 one of the tags used at the bottom of the review was (and is!) "Things That Make Me Drink". It seems to be a shared and understandable reaction. Thanks again, and I really am sorry you put yourself through it.

Sorry to hear ‘bout the block. Nothing worse than tentacles that go soft and just won’t perform. “Get up that character’s ass!” “No.” “Fuckin’ tentacle critters.”

I only ever reference the works of C S Lewis when it comes to horsecock. Also my not yet written story “The Lying Witch and the Voredrobe.” Child eating eldrich abomination vs Irishman with a broken bottle. My money’s on the priest. I got it, it was clear - I was just being crude.

It says the word ‘death’ = happiness rank 10217 of 10222 I wonder if words 10218 – 10222 are all related to spending time in the same room as Piers Morgan.

This is fucking great. Genuine laugh out loud funny. See, this is the difference between a cheap smutty inuendo and straight up quality parody. I’m probably going to be chuckling about this all day! ...that sounds far beyond the limited self control I possess when it comes to writing. How limited? I wrote and uploaded a Spyro snuff story for a request. It totally makes sense and I see where you’re coming from. I don’t know when my writing motiviation is going to give out again (this chapter I am doing at the moment I am having a hard time getting right… and it’s only 1000 words, talk about yer atrophied writing muscles), but if I manage a final part with Shannon being released then I can definitely see how to include some non-forced references to Luzurial into the wordcount – I mean, being in a statue herself it wouldn’t make sense for Shannon not to think about her. It doesn’t feel like pushing at all! I’d rather have it spoiled for me if it meant you could could get it written. Then I’d still enjoy it and other folks could enjoy it too! I have had some ideas about what was coming in The Woman in the Statue for, at the most basic level, like 10 years and more recently some things you said in the emails (The final part where they resolve everything with a Battle of the Bands challenge is gonna be so epic!) and that hasn’t spoiled my enjoyment at all anyway.

One downside here is that sexualized stories with explicit depictions of both rape and violent, gory death don’t always get a whole lot of feedback on AFF. Oh folks’ll read ‘em right enough, just a lot won’t say anything.

Thank you! It’s always annoying when a housemate drinks something you were going to enjoy yourself, am I right? That was the very first draft. I can totally see me thinking up jokes when I go back through and deciding to ruin the mood with them. There is that. I always prefer reading other folks stuff to be sure. I have thought of a way to get her out as part of Jude’s story, but it’ll need an extra chapter. An Epilogue part maybe! I’ll see how it goes Damn thing keeps expanding. Still wouldn’t fit in having things out with Kizzy though. As you say, the 1000 word chapter type probably wouldn’t do it justice. You have nothing to apologise for! Never know what kind of suggestion might spark someone into something. It doesn’t feel remotely like pushing – apologies though if anything I’ve said felt like pushing with yours, I mean except for stoner and sloth monster, I totally pushed for that.– and sorry ‘bout the whole feels again thing. I wasn’t really joking about the Sad Shannon Oneshot, if you needed to write something around that or any of the other bits go ahead! So here’s where it might be helpful to come to the conclusion that Kingmaker711 won’t be coming back to you. Maybe he’s quit erotic writing for mainstream writing, or decided he was living in sin and joined a church or even woke up one night to see Gabriel putting pool balls into a sock with a “So, I heard what you wrote about my girlfriend” expression. That being the case you come up with a way to change the plan to have nothing to do with Kingmaker711’s story, and you’re good to go. If you needed help on it you could even start a thread on the writer’s forum!

Epar and Legna are both words in latin or Italian, and Spanish has roots in latin so it works for Spanish too. Definite romance language feel… A good in character reason for explanations is better than “By the way… I can do this!” style exposition. Ya did good with it. “That one up there? That’s not a star. I hope it does not come this way.” I just really liked the way the whole section read tbh. The light’s light whichever of ‘em is being seen “Should we recall Father Donal?” “No, just message him to start drinking on the flight.” “After what happened to those hybrid eejits interrupted him drinking in Derry?” “That’d be why.” “God forgive us.” It’s different to what it was before, but I’d say you made the right choices. Still got emotion in there for sure. There is that hard limit – fair enough I didn’t work count it. You can still explain on the forum, mind Another thing that works with it, is that Kevin’s a college kid and a lot of the modern colleges (so presumably still doing it come 75 years) are encouraging folks to re-confirm consent so it comes across as Kevin also recalling sexual conduct induction! Well, I thought so. Blessing makes sense! I mean, angel, right? Molly may have inadvertantly kissed her while working downstairs, but I doubt it would have been possibe to differentiate from the other stuff she was doing, especially with a fist in back. And the kissing being something she can enjoy really is sweet how it’s used here. One of the bits I really liked! Bravo, anyway! It’s just a pretty hot moment.

I renamed the story to Jude’s Tale since as much as I like the alliteration his musical ability has very little to do with the story. This might turn out to be mistake, but I am sure it’s one I can live with.

Since I decided Luzurial was Shannon’s old boss, way back while writing a chunk of text in reply to your initial setting up a crackfic threesome dialogue (“I’m not sure about this woman” you had I think ), it’s been pretty much guaranteed that Shannon cared about what happened to her! Whether I write it or no… but the ideas the are there. Sad Shannon Oneshot? :p You would honestly probably do a better job of writing it than me. My drama is often undercut by attempts at comedy, like, I dunno Lupa: Whoa, didn’t know Shannon got angry. Kate: What about that you fed on that guy while she was making coffee, then he didn’t have enough blood to get it up for her, and passed out before using his fingers? Lupa: She wasn’t angry, just disappointed. It won’t be covered in this story anyway, this is about Jude’s fate, not Jan’s or Kate or Lupa’s or Shannon’s… It might come up in another one. Probably not titled “The Slut in the Statue” “My name is Shannon. My hobby is whore. More of a vocation, really.” I think Shannon wouldn’t bear a grudge so long as Luzurial was out again. That’s another reason to have the whole time skip thing with the other universe. Shannon has spent billions of years in Hell so getting on with people who’ve done stupid shit or made terrible mistakes is basically a life skill and, ultimately, she still has a forgiving nature. She’d still be sad about what happened to Luzurial, but what happened to her was far more Eparlegna’s doing than Kizzy’s. Kizzy, on the other hand, once she finally understood she had something to feel guilty for, might have a long time of feeling terrible about it. I think there’s also potential for a scene where Kizurial apologised to Luzurial. That line is so old they say Solomon tried a version on Bilqīs! That was my other thought, very Narnia! But the big advantage of it being directly tied to the existence of Eparlegna’s work of art (or even Eparlegna himself bound within it) would be that they then move at the same speed afterwards, which would deal with other problems I could see from them being out of sync. I dunno, probably won’t come up in a story unless there’s some kind of crossover. No way. The Woman in the Statue is too brilliant not to be canon and both the events in it and talking about it with you has inspired me towards thinking about relationships between the OCs so much more. I just gotta get around to re-doing chapter 3 of Slumber Party until then part 3 remains un-cannon (it was so jokey it was barely canon in the first place). It’s your choice too, but I am honored to have it as the canon sequel to Whore of Heaven I don’t have self-confidence for anything, never mind writing! Also, cool to see the update, I’ll get part 7 reviewed later today Edit: And, hey, happy to support your writing! Your writing is awesome, you should totally have confidence in it.