JayDee

Where do you find inspiration? No idea. Sometimes just talking stuff through. What do you do when you lack motivation? Twitter, reddit, gaming, books… What do you do to get your muse working again (instead of taking breaks repeatedly)? I dont’ really. I just wait until I’m motivated to write. Plus, I’ve got one muse it’s better for us all if it doesn’t wake up.

The ability to atone is something I’m planning to explicitly confirm in The Fall of Chastia, the current phrasing is: “Ashael. You have my sympathy, but I am not able to forgive your crime. I only hope that you may atone. I hope all of you may atone, even Lucifer, and come again into the Creator’s light at the Time of Judgement. The Creator's will be done.” That’s just Luzurial speaking from her understanding, before sending Ashael off on that long journey that will lead to her becoming a Duchess of Hell and screwing a bassoonist in the back of a limo, but I’m assuming redemption before the Time is possible. Shannon is still under the impression that she can’t have sexual relations as an angel, or while residing in Paradise, so here and later on in Fucking Halloween Party she’s still thinking she could never go back because her inherant nature would make it a miserable time, and she would inevitably do something to fall again – by FHP she’s basically convinced herself again she doesn’t want to go back. As noted another time when she does find out the truth about angels and the permitting of sexual relations she might want a big tub of ice cream. Heh. She knows what happened to Luzurial, and I actually have a story in mind to write some time about her reactions to it and how she secretly tried to get Luzurial out without anyone knowing, but failed because she’s a demon – Eparlegna apparantly didn’t want any of his pettier fellow denizens of the pit (Hi, Duchess) ruining his work of art just to mess with him, or inspiring any mortals to do it for the same reason, so only angels or non-demonically influenced mortals can do it. She assumes that angels are already doing everything they can to try and release Luzurial, otherwise she’d have been bugging Kizzy all the time to, uh “make it so”. If she had been able to influence a mortal into it, then rather sooner than 75 years...: Shannon: “I’ll suck your dick if you vandalise that statue and pull the coating off? No? Hey, you, sweetie, got any succubus in you? Would you like some-.. Damn it! The Somebody Else’s Problem field in the park is totally making this hard!… Sir, have you been saved from virginity?” She doesn’t know about Kizurial’s involvement in the commands– word has reached some non-angels (Hi again, Duchess), but didn’t make it to Shannon yet. And, yes, awkward probably isn’t quite the word, but they’ve worked through it by FHP and You! at least. Strong friendship! Anyway, no doubt due to some kinda Narnia time-passing-relatively-faster between the two parrallels as a result of the statue merely existing in one of them making the universe itself want to end quicker to be rid of it (it’s the best theory I got so far), by the time Kizurial comes to terms with the fact she made a mistake in her interpretation of justice, and basic fuckin’ empathy, and agrees that the order not to help Luzurial should be rescinded, 75 years have passed within the WoH universe and a curious (or… dun dun DUNNN! divinely inspired? :p ) college guy has taken action and the events of The Woman in the Statue have happened, and Shannon and Kizzy arrive there to find [aftermath of chapter 8 and 9 events. You know what I mean. Glitter everywhere. Wait, no, that’s a different thing.] Kizzy: “Over there… Look! She’s already released!” Shannon: ...”and normally that would have all the parts of my attention, but would you feel the lust boiling off the cute girl hugging that even cuter guy! She makes me look asexual!”

I hoped the opening line wouldn’t upset you, it was my reaction at the end! Thank you for taking an idea I’d never have gotten anywhere with and making something of it!

She definitely had distinctly impure, indeed downright mucky, thoughts about her commander Luzurial in the old days. And most of her comrades. And herself. I’ve basically got the ending written out but need to get it together and write the things that brought her to that point and if I don’t, well, the ending was fun to write! And it’s nice of you to say so, it really is, but I even have trouble writing the damn gore these days! I mean, look at this story here, someone’s been stabbed in the stomach and nobody even tried to fuck them as they were suffering. What the hell kind of JD story is this? ...oh now I remember the Ace story. Yeah, that one was fucked up.

Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) Thank you for the review! It’s good of you to stick with the story and provide the feedback. I guess Kizzy has a plan, like the A-Team’s Hannibal she loves it when a plan comes together. That’s one of the way she thinks things through more than Shannon who just likes coming together – I think she has fantasies like that about most people, but of course the Angels are inhumanly beautiftul/handsome so... I’m glad it made you laugh – it took me years after her first apperance to decide the name Shannon originally had, and in the end that seemed the most hilariously inappropiate one. I’ve actually done the first chunk of a story called The Fall of Chastia which from BronxWench’s guidance I’d have to post in the Books section as it features some Biblical angels as active characters and Lucifer’s rebellion. I hope to get it done! She’s been bound within a statue as Luzurial was at the end of Whore of Heaven but she isn’t in any pain. As the Duchess mentioned earlier, it actually was Kizurial who gave the order that no angel should release Luzurial from Eparlegna’s statue as a further punishment for Luzurial disobeying the creator’s order to leave humanity to face Eparlegna alone. Kizurial was assigned to Earth by her Creator a relatively short time later, to deal with the kind of supernatural slumber party killer you might normally see an ordinary angel dealing with, and then needed to stay there, because she hadn’t returned Shannon to Hell, or granted her oblivion. These things may not be unconnected. The creator has plans too… The Principality (who I alone have imagined with a Welsh accent) unaware of Shannon’s friendship and service with Kizurial, sees herself as applying Kizurial’s ‘justice’ to a demon who escaped Hell, although not being a demon herself hasn’t subjected Shannon to horrible tortures first. Shannon’s fate could just get very dull, bound in the statue, watching people going about their lives in a park somewhere, if Shannon doesn’t have some kind of succubus-power infused toy in there to keep her entertained until she is released… Tolkien had a great sense of continuity, I barely keep continuity within the same scene I just can’t write so good as some of you other folks on here. You and BronxWench or George – and InBrightestDay paints much better word pictures than I do! Still, I don’t feel bad because I get to enjoy your writing (or be deeply unsettled and actually have a frickin’ nightmare after the last one… But that can be enjoyable too, s’like a free horror movie.)

Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) reviews! And let’s try the at-symbol for these… Thank you for coming back to review, I surely appreciate it. I guess the status of Shannon’s pass is now more obvious… Can’t fool the entrance! Thanks! I specifically went as vague as possible beyond it having a lot of souls there, and the necessary lake which I had an idea was one of the earliest/oldest parts of the creation of Paradise. The earlier references to perception, such as over the wall, also work as a bit of a saving throw – if another character sees/experiences things differently then it can still work! Also, I needed to fit in the word klaxon and it felt as good a way as any. I also didn’t use Heaven as a term to be a little less specific. Don’t know if it worked, but eh. I can't describe how hard I was laughing at this, partly because of Spock's Brain being used as punishment, and partly because of the shenanigans. I mean, the idea of Kizzy getting a dating profile is moderately funny (and kind of sweet), but imagining what a profile for her designed by Shannon would look like is hilarious. Thank you! This is one of those things a character says, like with Kate and her claim she was bitten by a metalhead, that might be them just messing around or might actually have happened – I could see Shannon doing it with Kizzy’s interests at heart, so there could be a story there sometime. Plus, I too just found it a little funny. I figured actually being back there might hit Shannon harder than she expected. It’s been billions of years, and she’s trying to be a decent, but still she is the enemy, the betrayer of her duty who fell at the dawn of things. Oh that is going to be so awkward when Kizzy gets out of the lake. Kizzy: You did what? Principality: It was your idea! And the ending of this part was why I decided to put the reference to Luzurial being trapped in the statue in back in part 2, otherwise it would just come out of nowhere. Since Shannon isn’t in constant agony and wasn’t horribly tortured first, she’s a lot better off than Luzurial. Besides “It was your idea!” (Also, heh ) The Principality has the argument that Shannon was cast down to Hell and made her way back in further than any demon ever managed, so restraining her in a different way was more appropriate. This also prevents her sharing how she got through the entrance before the Angels can figure it out. The whole thing ties in with the idea I had that there might have been a certain amount of bad feeling towards Kizurial, so when Shannon uses her name it encourages the Principality to mete out a harsher punishment than usual for breaking back into Paradise. That’s all stuff Kizzy needs to recognise and come to terms with, and ultimately, try to make amends for. Thanks! The likelihood is that there is one more chapter to go, but I did have some ideas for a penultimate chapter. I’ve started on it and if I think it works there’ll be two more to go. I dunno. I just hope the ending makes sense and isn’t disappointing. But, eh, I’m having fun writing it.

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: Fate of a Fagottist – Part 5: A Succubus Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic (...ish. I mean, each part is going to be up to 1000 words.) Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Original Pairing: None, Shannon thinks about sex. Because it’s Shannon. Warnings: AFFO ChallengeFic, also brief reference to 3plus, Oral.

Now I kinda want to read the follow up with the unionized henchmen set in the same universe “What do we want? Better pay! What are we against? Darkness leaving us just bones! Also, Karen using the last of the milk and not getting more in.”

I reviewed your AFF Holiday oneshot too, but that got replied in the thread there ...d’oh, I’m normally good about spoiler warnings or else doing my best to keep spoiler free. I’ll go delete and edit it. Sorry about that!

Whoohoo! Beta’ing feels a bit too formal for my half-assed enthusiastic comments. Betas give concrit! They’re able to identify issues way more often than I seem to spot, but it is a great chapter and I’ll review later

I’m disagreeing with that version too! Commssioning art on this story would be awesome and I don’t see how it could be needy or arrogant! Yer being too hard on yaself.

[totally hogging InBrightestDay’s thread] Long time ago I comissioned some art of my old (non smut!) roleplay original character, I’m respectfully disagreeing with it being neediness and arrogance and just saying I thought it was cool. Still do. S’quality artwork! Oh, and I got a $30 quick sketch based on my Mortal Kombat fic although that wasn’t my characters, more of a way to promo it on hentai-foundry when I posted there. and total humblebrag, one dude did some fanart after reading one of my TF2 stories, and another commissioned something based on one of my harry potter stories. but it’’s more humble than brag as neither told me and I only saw later. Oh, and if you get down there check out SinfulWolf’s Closing Time oneshot, that one was great! [/totally hogging InBrightestDay’s thread] I am probably the last person on the internet using fake html for forum posts.

Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) Thank you for your review! Gotta love getting reviews. There’s an old joke about someone wanting to write a story about camping, but found it too in tents. I said it was old, I didn’t say it was good. Everything involving the Pack has at least a little bit of comedy! I love both the fact that the "competition" sounds almost like something serious and is then revealed to be Mario Kart and the "I hope your fleas get fleas!" which is just funny in general. Thanks! That’s what I hoped for. And for everyone know doesn’t know Mario Kart, it’s confusing as heck! Naturally Kate doesn’t actually have fleas. Since her last treatment bath. There was water everywhere. Thanks! Lupa really appreciates having friends, to the point where it once seemed a really good idea to make them vampires too. That is such a cool mind-bending idea, that the colorlessness is actually hard to look at. It really makes it feel unnatural. Thank you! It’s definitely unnatural. Making a Void Blade had obscene costs and lots of suffering – the Duchess, needless to say, delegated it all. All for one, one for all! Plus they have an understanding with Kizzy now and don’t find here anywhere near as scary. From Lupa’s point of view, Kizzy stopped her from making the mistake of trying to turn her friends into vampires like her. That’s probably something I’ll try and cover when finishing Blood on the Hay Also funny, and very Shannon. In addition, one wonders how Trenna is feeling about this, given that she may have seen Shannon sprout wings there. Picking up Kizzy and Jude at the same time is a cool showing of Shannon's demonic strength as well. Gotta feel a bit bad for Trenna here. She’s going down on Shannon, she just knows her lover’s about to boil over, when suddenly she’s gently but firmly pushed aside and Shannon jumps through a frickin’ wall as screaming starts below. I mean, the wings, the transforming outfit, and the inhuman strength are icing on that interrupted morning lay. On the other hand, If I do finish the story of how they hooked up the night before she’ll probably be well aware that Shannon isn’t actually human, by the time they go to bed– seeing wings appear would be a shock for anyone though! And I’m glad you found that funny! I really wanted to include it, but had no idea if anyone else would find it amusing. I am kinda puerile and immature sometimes. I’ve got most of Lupa’s backstory worked out in my head now. How she became a vampire, what happened to her family, why she’s a vampire alone and what it was making her think turning her closest friends into vampires would be a good idea. Also why she decided she wasn’t gonna believe in no creator or heaven and hell and the rest anymore. I don’t know if I’ll get to write the story about her becoming a vampire, but I hope do manage it. S’gonna have a golem in it! I don’t recall what I was thinking with the offer in WoH, but I’m pretty sure for the TSPoED that Kizurial was offering a total cessation of existance. From her point of view the fallen were sent to Hell as punishment, and that punishment has continued for billions of years despite some of them briefly making it to mortal worlds like Earth before being sent forcefully back. To Kizzy oblivion is a way to end that torment and be free so it feels like a better option to her, especially if she doesn’t see much hope of them ever being redeemed – and I’m sure it can be done painlessly, too. The Void Blade is not painless and doesn’t come with a “Waking up in Heaven/Hell” option. The other option Kizzy could have offered was Shannon remaining on Earth. She didn’t consider that until Shannon sided with her against Eparlegna and redemption seemed possible. Neither of the demons who were offered oblivion agreed with the offerer that it is a better deal and jumped to take it! I guess their perspective is different to the angels and probably closer to yours. I mean, sure, some of the fallen are probably pretty miserable in Hell, but others seem to like it ok – Chastia got bored down there while old Lucifer prefers to reign etc etc famous Milton quote. What happened to Eparlegna in the current non-canon-ish ending of TSPoED part 3 was basically erasure/rebirth so it’s possible that they think they’re getting nothing while part of their energy lives on. Eh, with my sloppy approach to continuity and often half-assed philosophy I’m sure there’s multiple options that all work! I hope it lives up to the plan I have in my head! You might decide it sucks, or makes no sense, or doesn’t fit with other stuff established. All of this could be true, though I hope not. If it is terrible though, please tell me! I’m happy to have negative feedback – I can sometimes learn from it, while other times it generally matches my own perspective on my writing! Thank you again, I really do appreciate the review. I hope your sorting out part 7 of 9 of The Woman in the Statue goes well. If it gives you trouble just tell it “Resistance is futile.” If you were a grievously wounded seraph, where would you ask to be taken?

Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) part 4 review! Thank you for your review! Though I feel a little bad about keeping you from your tea. Also, this is weirdly similar to Kate’s reaction. You’re… you’re not a werewolf are you? I have another story started that would explain how Shannon had hooked up with Trenna for the night, not sure I’ll get it finished, but she needed someone to have been having fun with and hasn’t met her friend Astrid yet at the time the story’s set. Not stone As if I’d write a story where an angelic character ended up in a statue… cough cough ahem. Shannon can get much stronger when she charges her succubus form up with sexual energy, but normally she’s at the fallen angel baseline which’d still be above human norm (and so able to jump through a ‘not stone’ wall!) Yay! It was an idea I had for a while I wanted to use, kind of a mood swerve but so very Shannon. I’m really glad it worked. She didn’t take the time to remove it either… Plus Kizzy’s alive at the end of You! which is set later, but other readers who know I kill off characters needlessly all the damn time might feel some suspense! Probably no surprise that Kizzy’s idea will be shown in Part 5 – A Succubus. They were definitely easier to use than some of the prompts. I mean, I use juice in a whole load of my stories anyway, and the image of a body lying like jetsam feels like it works and may well have been used before. The next set are a bit harder, but I’m sure I’ll muddle through. Thank you! Amended to landing! It was a last minute change from another phrasing and so didn’t get as much re-reading. D’oh Thank you again for reviewing, I’m very grateful and it brightened my evening! I hope your tea was good, or is good, if it’s some kind of 8 course banquet you’re still feasting on as I type this.

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: Fate of a Fagottist – Part 4: A Vampire Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic (...ish. I mean, each part is going to be up to 1000 words.) Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Original Pairing: None, I mean, Trenna x Shannon were definitely screwing offscreen but it doesn’t get any detail. Warnings: AFFO ChallengeFic, FF(offscreen implied, kiss), Toys, Violence

Whohoo! Also headway sounds unaccountably dirty in connection with Mia, even though it isn’t in the slightest.

Some places kept the old stuff going all through – there’s one place been doing a creepy-as-fuck hobby horse thing for centuries – but half the time you find yourself in some tiny village where they’re talking about the ancient tradition only to follow with “...and some pissartist hippies started it again in ‘78, and we kept it going because it’s an excuse to dress up and get shitfaced.” It definitely worked. As in “Punch the air, holy fuck, that’s great!” worked.

“it’s a pleasure to have you here as the new Professor. I’m sure you aren’t taking seriously that silly hoax rumor that the ApTheo post is cursed and nobody ever lasts more than a year without quitting or getting corrupted or being brutally murdered by a demon.” “Ahh, don’t ye worry none. It’ll be grand I’m sure.” And folks, when InBrightestDay found that old forgotten 2010 post on the forum I did feel bad about it! Eh, you’d have dodged the it being a guy saving her, but that review I sent you from one of my stories when we were discussing this whole true love/post rape thing, where a reader was justifiably irritated about me using a rescue-from-threat-of-rape trope to bring the characters closer together was on an FF story so it doesn’t make a lot of difference as far as that goes. When badly written the whole concept can be a real bane of Hurt/Comfort fics, but I personally think you’ve handled it as well as you could do – but again, I’m probably biased. For anyone curious, this is what I said in the email, and I stand by it! Well, sit by it. Well, lean against the wall by it. Fuckin’ pedants.

Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) Thanks you for the review! I appreciate the heck out of it. I’m really happy to hear you liked it. Definitely a bit of restraint – if I was her, I’d have wanted to slap him back, but that would probably have detached his jaw… It’s weird, Kizzy and the others were just created as a throwaway oneshot to end up with the amusing-to-me reveal that one of them’s an angel, and then they kept coming back in story ideas… The continuity can be a bit flimsy and the characterisation varies, but I think Kizzy has mostly stayed the same. I guess one day I’ll have to do a sex scene with her. That could be a challenge. I pretty much had to change POV with part 2, but I gotta thank InBrightestDay for the inspiration to keep doing it! Someone gets manipulated like that, well, I guess it’ll come down to what his own conscience tells him… Whoohoo! Been ages since I wrote sex that wasn’t just re-writing/touching up my old sex writing as part of a re-write, so it’s cool to hear it came across ok! I’ll get the next part up next week! And I mean what could possibly go wrong with that spur of the moment “Buck up the troops!” promise? Surely the Duchess can’t lose! If he doesn’t strike Kizzy with the blade it doesn’t count, and if it does he shares her fate from which there’s no coming back! Thank you again for reviewing! You’re always very kind about my writing and I appreciate it. Haslet’s the spelling I know, too, but I guess some of these prompts use archaic spellings and definitions so I just went with it. It actually did end up working better in that chapter than what I’ve now drafted for the next part. These days the challenge for me is more working the prompts into a story I’ve semi-planned out, but I’m sure I’ll get some inspiration from them again sometime. Thanks once again!

Whoohoo! More water based shenanigans! Plus if a story actually gets written from one of those ideas I wasn’t just spamming the thread with shite. I guess my sig’ll be getting longer…

Heh, well, that makes her sound a lot more dangerous! If only someone could find a way to keep her distracted from evil schemes… It’s a fair assumption – I do it a lot! I guess my writing of the warning was so bad that it wasn’t clear. God, what an awful piece of trash writer I… etc etc I kid kid…

Meanwhile back in the slumber-verse InBrightestDay kindly reviews the third part of Jude's Tale (original title Fate of a Fagottist) Firstly, thank you for this review! You’re absolutely right it didn’t end up properly PWP, so I left the tag off in the end. I realised that I could use the chapter to explain some things that otherwise would have gone unspoken, or maybe just come out of nowhere – at least this chapter lets folks know there’s a werewolf and so on hanging around Kizzy! Still managed to fit in a chunk more sex than the previous part had though, so yay! It’s not as clear as it was in my first draft on this where I made it really explicit, but she actually is assuming Kizurial would choose to die rather than blast a giant crater into the Earth and cook all the entrails. I left it with the more subtle implication at the end of the part where she’s thinking of Jude’s specifically sharing the fate of Kizurial, oblivion, rather than him getting it alone and the Seraph surviving. I figure she thinks Kizzy would kill a few mortals to save millions, but Kizzy wouldn’t kill billions to save herself. From the Duchess’ point of view, scoring a kill against a Seraph would be great for her standing in Hell, but she also gets to make Shannon suffer by hurting her friend. That’s maybe even more important to her because Shannon left her service for Kizzy’s friendship. A lot of these arrogant demons are petty as fuck when I write ‘em And if she is wrong and she’s misread the Seraph (always a possibility!) well, whatever evolves in another 65 million years could be just as easy to tempt. That definitely paints a somewhat darker picture of Kizzy as a character. Not that she's evil or anything, mind you, but that before she came to Earth she was very detached, and made a decision that discouraged other angels from disobeying orders, but didn't have enough in the way of empathy for Luzurial's motivation and her suffering. When the order came down not to break Luzurial free there would have been a few in the old chain of command keen for others to know it wasn’t their order. I figured this degree of bad feeling would become known to some of the more well informed demons in Hell. And that’s another reason Thanks! Glad you liked it, and, yes, perhaps her dislike of Luzurial has been bubbling away for a few billion years. That could go wrong in truly hilarious fashion, like if 75 years later... Luzurial: And how did you meet your special mortal? Duchess: I was contractually obligated. Haha! Nice – now that’d be a hell of a New Year’s Eve party :p As for whether it might come back to haunt her somewhat sooner, well, I was never much good at subtle foreshadowing. Heh. I mean, it's gotten positive reviews from pretty much everyone who's read it, including me (it made me really sad, but that's hardly a criticism of it). Readers just need to know what they're getting into in order to decide. I’m grateful for all the reviews! The thing is rape, torture, snuff, gynophagia, anal fisting, and that godawful cop humor are a very niche product. I’m fairly sure most readers here just want to see Draco and Harry have babies, or Hinata fucking everyone except whatshisface (or the same for whatever fandom/original subcatagory they’re in). So, yes, some readers might like and enjoy it, whether for the porn, the horror, or Eparlegna’s natty suit at the end, but I think probabably most wouldn’t. Also, with 9 reviews out of 10334 hits on AFF (Plus one or two by email when the old grey archive was around, and when I was on hentai foundry’s writer section) I do think it’s safer to say that the vast majority of readers probably weren’t that bothered. So I put the info there like with the “See more Kizzy here!” in part 1, but unless I’m talking to someone who specifically likes those kinds of themes I don’t say “Go read this stuff!” about the violent porn. If that makes sense! If not, me rambling again. I do that. Thanks again for your third review!

Then I must write chapter three one of these days! Gotta be done.

I don’t even know what the original story’s message was… “Really shitty things happen to good people,” maybe? That certainly happens in the sequel so you keep it running!

Blood on the Hay got a review! Thank you for the review! Absolutely see where you’re coming from – with the flashfic/1000 word prompt stories sometimes it was possible to tell a proper story in the short bursts and sometimes, well, it comes across more like a fragment. I can totally see it here – similar issue with the end of part 2, in that I wrote what I had for 1000 words but there isn’t really a full finish, just the dude realising that Jeb was a piece of shit and there ain’t a lot more to say – but conflict can always add more, a bit of a driving force to things. One way to have it would be to have the trio checking out the bloody barn and getting caught by the lawfolk coming back. And when the Slumber-verse characters appear in the next story chronologically, Kate’s back part of the pack and they never seem to speak of it again. I really need to write a third concluding part to cover it all off, tie things up. One of these days, maybe. Thanks again! I appreciate your time in reading and reviewing.