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Need beta for story Carmen Elisa Need to Die
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I hope you find a beta so part 4 is up to read soon! I’d volunteer but I am the worst beta ever. All I have is relentless positivity when people need harsh constructive criticism. Also my grammar and spelling are terrible. -
My guess? Mia gon’ fuck somebody.
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Ghost of Jane Austin somewhere wishing like heck the same rule had applied to Sanditon.
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The Slumber Party of Evil Doom InBrightestDay has kindly reposted the review linked above of what is now parts 5 and 6 of the story. My original reply can be seen here and thank you again for the review. Also a new review of the brand spanking new part 7: Thank you for the review. I really do appreciate it. This kind of thing doesn’t really have wide appeal on AFF so it’s nice to see someone likes it besides me getting the enjoyment of writing it. Thank you! Yeah, it’s definitely win-win for Shannon. I think it was just trying to make Lupa laugh, but if Lupa had actually turned out to be into it Shannon wouldn’t have backed off That made me grin, partly from the Hartman thing, but mostly just from the fact that of course Lupa would imagine harps playing in Heaven. I'm not entirely sure where the association between harps and angels came from, but it always amuses me. Relevation 5:8? Yes, doesn’t say angels but that wouldn’t stop folks making associations with the context! Lupa’s got the full “This is my harp. There are many like it, but this one is mine.” mental image for sure. I keep imagining her drawing an hourglass in the air or something. Probably closer to that then going “Honk! Honk!” while grasping the air with both hands. Okay, I got a good chuckle out of this, for two reasons. First, Shannon is apparently a fan of Saints Row. Second, it makes me wonder what Luzurial was thinking in that pause. Was that her sexual naivete, assuming that what Shannon had formed was a sap, or did she realize what Shannon had made and claimed it was a sap so as not to embarrass her in front of her fellow angels? "Yes, that's a sap. Male angels, do not correct me on this." I like the ambiguity of it. I never actually played any of the Saints Row games! GTA: San Andreas had a dildo weapon tho’ come to think of it and I played that. I don’t think young Chastia had violence in mind when she formed her ‘weapon’ though. As for what Luzurial really thought… I’ll leave you the ambiguity. Thanks again for the review! The next chapter I am hoping to get up this Sunday or so, it’s mostly done, with less changes/expanding than this got, but I think a couple changes make more sense than what I had. Then hopefully finish it with one or two more chapters to give it, and the original Blood on the Hay, a proper combined ending.
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Ok, now I’m confused.
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Pen Name: JayDee Story link: The Slumber Party of Evil Doom part 7 - Talking while Travelling Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult Fandom: Original Pairing: None Warnings: AFFO, Language, Challengefic, NoSex
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Author’s Note for expanded/merged story to be linked from story: So here’s the thing. Originally, “The Slumber Party of Evil Doom” and “Blood on the Hay” (BOTH) worked ok as seperate stories, they were a couple chapters each and there wasn’t anything else going on. Then I got to writing more parts, and other stories with the characters and now it feels that Blood on the Hay should be merged with the slumber party as a continuation, with the story as a whole covering the four friends discovering each other’s new natures, and then going after Kate after she ran away in part 2 of Slumber Party. Since the admin is probably still really busy I have decided to delete it myself and add the existing two chapters myself. This sadly means losing the hit count from BOTH (currently a whopping 2182 hits since the original posting date of 2011-03-24 / later same year for part 2, and sadly also the reviews. Though lost from the archive, they can remain on the forum! I am re-quoting the original four reviews on BOTH in this post - I have responded previously in this thread, but this allows anyone following the link to see them all in one place. Also, thank you again to those of you who reviewed previously. I really appreciate that. So I am not bumping a story to the top of originals with no new material I’ll also be posting a new chapter today with at least two more to come. (I split one long part into two to keep them both at the 1000 word flashfic limit, and also had another part I already started on.) I will also be swapping part 4 of the Slumber Party story with part 3 so there’s a natural intermission with Eparlegna’s punishment, Blood on the Hay part 1 and 2 become slumber party part 5 and 6. Per above, this post in this thread is the author’s note explaining it, which I’ll link in the story! I probably won’t get around to going back and editing forum threads or story notes that refer to them as seperate stories any time soon, but I can point anybody who says they’re confused here. Seems unlikely tbh. The original summary for BOTH “He has bad intentions for the girl sleeping rough in his barn...” may have given some readers entirely the wrong impression. Guffaw. (Edit – although, thinking about it, the fact it got a couple hundred more hits in two chapters than slumber party did for four over roughly the same period absolutely suggests pervs are more willing to take a chance on a story than non-pervs… am I right? :p. Slumber Party currently at 1955 hits!) Phew. Hope it makes sense. Anyway, those original Blood on the Hay reviews: ...not many people read these non-sex stories – even with the sex in Jude’s Tale it didn’t get a lot of readers, but I enjoy writing them so eh. I’ll never be Stephen King or Jo Rowling and that’s ok
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I’ll cross me fingers you get more inspiration for it then!
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Oh yeah, I’ve had the messages from him too. I pointed out he was in my story You! at least. He’s actually posted a buncha times on the forum under several different names in the past, but it is obviously the same user – eg this thread Not sure if troll or some kinda special needs issue tbh.
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http://cherylzwrites.com/2019/08/13/learn-to-submit-the-wrong-way/ This made me laugh so thought I’d share it! Sample: I swear someone on AFF has already written that :p
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https://archiveofourown.org/works/9287447/chapters/21047156
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Well well done to them then!
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That’s useful to know! Wish I hadn’t deleted it now or I’d have reported it too. My rule of thumb is I’ll sometimes read spammy emails but I never click the links or open attachments/”view pictures”
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I got one of those! I googled a chunk of the wording, and it seemed someone just obtained the data from the previous hack and used it to spam every email address from the database with the the same text, but the related password pasted in. I just ignored it - I mean, I don’t even have a webcam. Mirrored surfaces like lenses crack around me.
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And if it doesn’t work for that story, you can use it for a biography of Gene Simmons!
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How can they possibly still be misunderstanding that you don’t take other peoples stories and post them? Good on anon for spotting it and thanks to BW for deleting it.
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I really like @CloverReef “Hug it out” idea. It sounds like something the parent would actually say but totally fits the nature of the story idea.
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It’s not perfect but it can be effective. Sometimes. Well, once. Maybe.
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In the meantime, just abuse google search like this!
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The latest firefox update has added “firefox monitor” that gives a notification message about adultfanfiction and a data breach in 2018. Hopefully won’t deter too many users!
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QuoteMaybe the reason I’m convinced there’s no nasty people on the forum is that I am the nasty person.
No you’re not. I’ve given you a lot of opportunities to make jokes at my expense or insult me, and you haven’t done so. As for accidental awkwardness, I do that all the time.
Speaking of which…
QuoteI’ll also say that the majority by far of the “Oh, gods, delete my account now, man!” emails I got were from readers only, not writers.
I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to annoy you, BronxWench. I was just trying to make a guess based on my own personal experience. As it happens, I’m honestly not even sure why you’d need an account just for reading (unless you’re really dedicated to reviewing stories that don’t allow anonymous reviews). Again, sorry if I bothered you.
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You can tell if you’ve really upset BronxWench around the time a Banshee begins shrieking on your roof.
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QuoteI’m sorry. I didn’t mean to annoy you, BronxWench. I was just trying to make a guess based on my own personal experience. As it happens, I’m honestly not even sure why you’d need an account just for reading (unless you’re really dedicated to reviewing stories that don’t allow anonymous reviews). Again, sorry if I bothered you.
I’m not upset at you at all! Sorry if it seemed that way, but it was one of those things last year that was endlessly frustrating. In the scheme of things, it wasn’t a big deal although we had a few people who wanted to make it more than it was. Quite frankly, I was a LOT more worried about the big players—Equifax, banks, phone companies—because those guys DO have data on me. AFF is not in possession of any information that will lead back to me without some effort, and even then, I’m not all that worried about people knowing where I play and read. I’m too damned old to care what they think about me.
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Am back in a “can’t finish anything” phase. Which may be for the best after finishing Pregnant in Alabama.
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Thank you for the offer! I won’t risk the wrath of SWP1 by delaying you from your own work though :p
I’m sure I’ll get back into it at some point. I have done in the past!
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Considering the news about the woman charged with murder after getting shot in the belly it is clear your Pregnant in Alabama was not scary enough compared to reality…
Actually I think you should worry less about lack of progress now and instead feel proud about the remarkable many good stories you have finished so far this year. You have delivered lots of quality stuff and it is given that you cannot keep that pace forever. Keep looking for inspiration and things will start to fit together again.
I would love chatting about story ideas if it helps your story muse going again, but it will probably need to be a bit later. Currently the family is packing for the two week trip and I will have limited internet and less private space than normal for a while.-
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Oh, man, that poor woman. She has all the horror of losing her baby and getting over that, and then they arrest her. Some real animals walking around calling themselves lawmakers out there.
I have the ideas, I know what I want to do, I just can’t seem to get it written down. But thanks, I guess I did do some good stuff this year, maybe it’s not so bad having another break!
I hope that trip goes well for the family there – I’m off on a bit of one myself for a few days the week after next and will be short of internet connection too!
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They said the same thing to Ophelia, look how that turned out!
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North Dakota?
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If it’s a snuff fic, then Deathstalker’s Hard to Breathe? DS took his remaining stories down from AFF a while ago.
