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'nother review on The Key's Shaft: Thanks for your review! Yeah, Xander was probably off his lunch for that day, "What you got there Dawn, a ohmygod!" I don't always have dickgirls torturing folks My Josie and the Pussycats story had no torture! Heh, I getcha though and I am glad you found the story fun, and thanks a ton for pointing out the typo - fixed it! That was a left over from the original line about how I was going to compare her previous flushed embarressment with new flushed arousal but I needed the words for something else and deleted/re-wrote. Horny teenager not even jerking off? Yeah, she was pent up. One night away from spooging the sheets... There's a whole buncha faith/dawn stories on there, go nuts

Uh... I spent 25 minutes tossing out tips from the top of my head for a specific question from a first time writer on another site. Much of it is probably useless, but, eh, here is a slightly edited version. Tried to take out or explain stuff. I probably should have posted this in my journally stuff thread where I could have painted it as an incompetent person's rant. It may even be moved there yet as such by one of the mods Let's see... advice for a first time writer... 1) If you aren't used to writing long stuff, set yourself either a short story or short chapter length and aim for that. 2) World of Warcraft being a very popular fandom ought to ensure you get more readers and so more feedback which can help you improve/build you confidence/allow an interesting collection of flames to build, depending on what you write. Generally writing in a popular fandom as a new writer will get you more readers on the basis of the fandom alone when nobody knows who ya are. If that's what you're wanting. 2b) WoW being a fandom you enjoy will hopefully give you more motivation to finish it, and less chance of being bogged down explaining concepts that your readers will be familiar with (a benefit of a lot of fanfiction, that.) It's a good rule of thumb anyway to either write what you know, or what you've researched. And I say that as someone who did a couple requests after five minutes of googling. 3) Cliché is right for that plot [self-insert type walks through portal into WoW world]. Bamf fics they call 'em in some places as a homage to the sound effect of Marvel's Nightcrawler popping up in places. Wasn't so long ago the Lord of the Rings movies gave us a million "Tenth Walker" fics, usually involving a young American girl who got ol' Greanleaf's sap rising. As it were. Thing is, the vast majority of storylines are cliche. Very few actual plots in fiction, really. Look't tvtropes.org to see how many ideas turn up again and again and again. It's what you do with the idea that makes the story great, mediocre or indeed "lame". As a new writer starting out, take your best shot to do something cool with it. If it doesn't pan out, try again next time. 4) " a fanfic as it centres around a character of my own design" - google "Mary sue" and "fanfiction" and maybe "for fuck's sake, not another one" (kidding on the last bit!). Read the guides. Look at the do and don't lists. Learn from them. It'll save you trouble in the long run. If it's kind of a self insert as the plot might suggest, that can be okay, again, it's all in how you use them. A wider audience isn't necessarily going to appreciate your in-jokes. 5) Spelling, grammar, correct formatting of paragraphs.... These are all pretty useful for both first and many time writers. Folks who get away with it know the rules before they break 'em for the benefit of their story. There are free checkers on line, including built into many email providers. If you don't have a beta reader (which stands to reason) I recommend waiting a day or a couple days after finishing anything and re-reading it then, can usually spot mistakes more easiliy. I would do this more often but most of my readers are masuturbating too furiously to notice the mistakes that slip past the grammar/spell checks. And that's how I like 'em (but when folks do point out my mistakes in those areas I am always appreciative. Also, didn't spellcheck this post.) 6) Read your character's speech out loud to yourself. If it sounds clunky, weird or just fucking awful consider re-writing it. Unless that's a character point. I bet the guy writing Chewie's dialogue in the Star Wars movies had a ball. 7) Don't write scriptfics. Or if you do, re-write them into non scriptfics afterwards. Scriptfics bear no comparisons to actual scripts, and they are clunky as fuck. Just occasionally there's one that can be read easily, otherwise it's hard to get into 'em. Note to any scriptficcers reading: Love ya! AFF note - It's opinion only! You can of course, write what you want here or anywhere. 8 ) [the other site] is a great place for art, art criticism and a pool of the aforementioned masturbators. By all means post stories here, talk about writing here (they make provision for it, so it's rude not too!) But it's less great for forging a career in writing. You might want to consider joining a writing centric community to get more readers and feedback, or even a fandom specific one for WoW fics. If you can get what you mean sticking here than I'm happy for you, but my stories go up on 3-4 sites (more in certain specialised topics) and the writer specific feedback is generally post valuable. 9) Titles/Summaries - Oooh, yes. Hard. Hard, hard, hard. Well, sometimes. Thing is, asides from the fandom and later, maybe, your username, these are the things selling your story. I've pretty much never bothered reading something like "Summaries suck! Just read!" or "untitled fiction!" or whatever. It doesn't bode well for the quality of the story within, y'know? There's lots of complicated advice on titles and summaries, better'n I can put it, so go google 'it. Best I can say is, again, you're promoting your story with them. If you can't think of anything else for a title, put "A stranger in Gilneas" or something equally bland but at least descriptive. It's always better than nothing. Me, I kinda like puns... Summary is easier, just limit yourself to a brief description of what happens, in your case "A teenager from England walks through a portal into Gilneas, gets trapped there and gets afflicted with the worgen curse" Will do for a start. Unless you want more mystery in which case shorten it to "The adventures of an English Teenager in Gilneas" or something. As with the title, anything beats nothing every time. I reccommend you keep at least one backup on your computer as [other user] raistlinmajere says, and frankly backing it up elsewhere is also advisable. I have a couple stories lost forever due to insufficient backups after the site they were hosted on went offline (and wasnt on the wayback machine! bah). 25 minutes writing, here, and why? Because I have to write a 1000 word story using "adduced" for a weekly story prompt on another site [edit - love ya AFF ]. So I am procrastinating... Eh, hope some of it at least is helpful to you!

Holy fuck, I forgot I already had a Buffy review replies thread... Was just about to make a new one! As soon as I saw Dawn as the prompt I wanted to write about Dawn Summers, but initially I was trying to do something with her as a Giant from the Season 8 comic series. Couldn't make it work so I had a think of themes I haven't yet re-used from earlier prompts, and what with Hobgoblin's futa heavy profile/status wotsits I recalled I haven't used "girl with a cock" since the yule prompt. Then it was "shall I do DG/M(probably Spike) or DG/F"? I went with Faith, because I haven't done a consensual DG/F story in, uh... since my old pen name actually. Wow, long time. Funilly, that was a BtVS story too. I also thought of going for a title along the lines of "Dawnie's got a gun" and a summary like "using it for fun shooting", but the citations for the referenced puns seemed like too much work (an Aerosmith song and a wossname saying respectively. See??) Oh, and the child abuse subject of the song probably wasn't entirely appropriate for the pun. Um. I probably talk too much about the un-used ideas in these review reply threads, anyway, two reviews: Thanks for your review! I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! Faith's not the sharing type, might lead to trouble if they did that Thanks for your review, but curse you! I wish I'd thought to use a shafted gag in the story. It would have worked very well, dangmabbit As for knocking Faith up, well, unprotected sex with one of those very healthy Slayer metabolisms... sounds likely doesn't it?

Pen Name: JD/JayDee Story link: The Key's Shaft Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult++ Fandom: Buffy the Vampire Slayer Pairing: Faith X Dawn Warnings: ChallengeFic, COMPLETE, F/F, F/D, HJ, Minor2, Oneshot, PWP

Ahh, Hay, the prompt so unexpected I ended up first writing a story about a widdle ponsy elf screwing a big tough orc in a surprise-butt-sex situation as a continuation of a previous prompt, then, feeling a request wasn't a good thing for me to enter on a prompt (no comment on anyone else who wants too!) I wrote Blood on the Hay as another continuation of a prompt. I nearly did another TF2 story set up in the 2Fort hay loft, with Engie and Demo somewhat bored on defence and entertaining themselves there but, eh, that's an idea for another time... I half wanted to call the story "What Kate Did Next" as a reference to the old kids book title, but felt it wasn't suitably overblown. Got a review: Thanks for your review! It is not bad at all, the miserable asshole pretty had it coming. I probably could have made him only less likable by having him kick his dogs. Sensible dogs, them, can almost imagine a conversation like "Is that shouting... gunshot... chewing?" I applaud you getting through reading as many prompt entries as you do! I try my best but I cannot match you

Chuck Palahniuk (who??) - You ever hear of the movie Fight Club? He wrote the original book. It's pretty readable unlike some of his other stuff.

Title: Ending the Fan Author: JD/JayDee Rating: Adult+ Summary: Screwing the Adoring Fan seemed a good way to end his Arena obsession, but the Orc Grand Champion soon found herself in a struggle for sexual dominance with the Bosmer. Will she win, or does she secretly want to lose? Feedback: Please read and review! Fandom: The Elder Scrolls IV: Oblivion URL: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600086178 AFF - Full Codes: 3plus, Anal, BDSM ChallengeFic, Complete, Exhib, Fingering, F/D, F/F, HJ, M/F, MCD, Oral, RapeFic, PWP, Solo, TF, WIP, Xeno, Violence, Voy, WS BDSM/MCD/WS Note - These apply to final chapter only. The first part was written and submitted in an AFF prompt, the second part was written from an email request and used the Hay prompt, but was not entered in the prompt thread so I am promoting it here instead. There is another part of around the same length intended, also, and that will likely be promptless Thank you for taking the time to read this promotion, if you like the sound of the summary (and few will) please consider reading the story! Edit - As the story has reached 5 parts, I have amended the Summary as above.

Pen Name: JD/JayDee Story link: Blood on the Hay Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Paranormal/Supernatural > General Pairing: NONE Warnings: AFFO, ChallengeFic, COMPLETE, MCD, NoSex, OC, Oneshot, TF, Violence

Another review for The Slumber Party of Evil Doom Thanks for your review! I'd answer your question but I am not 100% sure what it applies too (I suspect the other reviews, in which case I wouldn't be in a position to answer anyway )- I appreciate your compliment on the line, he's obviously the latest to discover the true nature of the Axe Effect...

Lara Croft's Sheep God Trials - has another review, If I was Welsh I'd probably reply with "Mae dy fam yn llyfu cociau mul" but, not being Welsh, Thank you for your review! (And all of those past reviews on other stories. ) These Flashfics are pretty good for compressing info with the 1000 word limit. As for using Australia, I went for the best known country. Very few people can accurately point to Wales on a map. Apparantly it even gives the English some trouble. A Welshman once said to me that the proof the Scots were bigger sheep shaggers was that they wear the kilts, because apparantly "Sheep can hear a zipper coming down from a mile away." How much research he did into that, well, I didn't ask. New Zealand has a bigger ratio of sheep to people than Oz 10 sheep per person says the government website - Polyamorists paradise! The other reason for setting it in Oz was that the last Lara story I did was in the British isles, so, variety!

The Nightmare prompt... I came up with a tremendously self-inulgent plot for this, with the characters I've written particular nasty stories for getting together every time I slept and torturing me... Thank god I just scraped through with a re-tread of a previous prompt story from another perspective. It can be hard to tell dreams and nightmares apart sometimes... Thanks for your review! Well, what more could you ask...? I could have done it as M/M with Shasta manly helping the horse that basically saved him from drudgery. Shasta Hands has kinda a ring to it... Thanks for your review! He's certainly feeling sad and hard done by - and deservedly so with that dirty masturbatin' - , but unloved? Never! Just because they don't want to sleep with him doesn't mean they don't love him as a friend Plus, he's now free to get seduced by the sophisticated elder woman, Queen Susan (She's reckoned the most beautiful around and she's single, so he can step in there ).

A writer meant to use "soul of a slut" but it came out as "should of a slut", leading to me privately wondering how you'd identify particularly slutty shoulders and him promising to find a way to include "shoulders of a slut" in a future story. It made me laugh anyhow

Lara Croft's Sheep God Trials (which now has nine times the hits of the surely better written Scout's Dream! Lara fans apparantly enjoy summaries promising character death) has another review: Thank you for your review! I totally love your prompt responses too! A game I have never played and characters I have never controlled seem very much alive to me under your writing. So it's probably a good thing you didn't use Tetris as the basis. And, yes, it's probably a good idea to leave sheep gods - asleep or no - well alone. That's my motto anyway.

Pen Name: JD/JayDee Story link: The Horse and His Cock - Chapter 3: A Nightmare of Horse Cock Rating: Adult++ Fandom: Books > Chronicles of Narnia Pairing: Shasta(Solo), Aravis X Bree Warnings: AU/AR, Beast, ChallengeFic, COMPLETE, M/F, Oral, PWP, Solo, Voy, Humil

Re: sending fire - I had a mental image more akin to a Ghost Buster's proton pack than scrolls and smoke, that's one of those things where readers familiar with the series would know exactly what you mean though so extra description probably isn't needed for the non fans These days fans are more keen on seeing Robin riding the Batpole... We were tough in the 80s! We could take it! We didn't need anime styled Thundercats! etc

Eh, it did get covered about 10 threads below this one but only for about ten posts so unless one of the moderators has a inclination/time* to merge threads I doubt anyone will mind overmuch about a second one... My answer's there FWIW. (*or eagerness to use the merge function. I've seen some moderators elsewhere who just about get orgasmic over it. You kind of imagine the moderator control panel just got a gushing every time you duplicated some old topic.)

As every single possible Harry Potter crossover story has been written on the internet (as of last week when Harry was written into that Oskar Schindler slashfic), This thread's story search had me curious as to whether someone can link me to a story where Harry inherits or otherwise teams up with that other famous travelling trunk, The Luggage? Thanks to any who can point me in the right direction.

Waiting by Spiral Breeze (I think you might need a few posts to be able to post links as an anti-spam measure) Thank you again for taking this request! I have read and reviewed and enjoyed the way you took it. Now at 337 hits with the entirely non-misleading subject and title and still growing!

I'm surprised, amused, grateful and also happy if it gets you writing again!

Sheep... the prompt of doom. 11 stories after the violent unpleasantness of the Yule story, I found myself with overpowering urges to write a story using a "sheep god" and the phrase "sheepchaser" Lara Croft's Sheep God Trials was the result, Lara being in the kind of fandom that allows the finding of weird shit as well as guaranteeing a core of readers who will look at anything with Lara in. Shallow, moi? I don't know how well it's known, but Sheep Dog Trials are pretty popular in a lot of places, and if that wiki entry is right they originated in New Zealand. Go NZ! The trials of the sheep god are somewhat less pleasant, involving transformation to provide food... internal logic there at least! Edit: funny thing, how different fandoms and styles appeal... A fortnight ago's story was a cons M/M dream for Team Fortress 2, and in around two weeks received 86 hits. This story was posted 2 days ago, has a bunch of less pleasant codes, and currently stands at 520 hits! Funny how these things turn out sometimes. Thanks for your review - Heh, personally I think it would be great if all my stories had 1 star. The reason being is that then people would judge them from summary/title/codes/fandom and whatnot. I don't much care for the stars system, but I'd happily votespam all mine down to 1 if it wasn't likely to annoy the moderators for fixing the scores. I can say I have never had a star rating affect my choice to read any stories! The flashfic format keeps 'em short, otherwise I really have a tendancy to get too detailed. That's good for people who like the stuff I'm detailing - or so they tell me - and fricking tedious for those who don't (and they also tell me ) It was certainly meant to be cheesily funny and I am glad you found it amusing! Thanks for your review! You only see my writing about Lara, what you don't see is the many hours I once spent carefully guiding her through bear, wolf and T-Rex infested carverns, past crushing, stabbing and shocking death tracks, and a prick on a skateboard (who was apparantly even more of a prick in the remake...) with barely any death or turning to gold (bloody hand of bloody midas or whatever it was bloody called). I was *good* at Tomb Raider! I went adventuring! Storywise? Uh... I did a cons lesbian story under my old pen name that was well received. That was quite short too. Never stop the jokes! I had more I couldn't fit in. At one point I was thinking of cutting the first few paragraphs, just to see if I could ram (snicker) more in there. Including about getting rammed, men beeing baaastards, pulling wool over eyes etc etc etc. I could a punned to death. Don't be sheepish about it.

My favorite recipe: Pick up phone Order vindaloo, rice, naan bread, poppadoms, pickles, other sundries etc Wait for food to be delivered Pay for food Eat food Shit molten lava

Pen Name: JD/JayDee Story link: Lara Croft's Sheep God Trials Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult++ Fandom: Games > Lara Croft/Tomb Raider Pairing: Lara(post TF code) x Sheep Chasing Guy Warnings: Beast, ChallengeFic, COMPLETE, Contro, Humil, M/F, MCD, OC, Oneshot, PWP, RapeFic, Scat, TF, Violence

Thank you kindly for your review on on my Doctor Who story Kill-O-Gram. Dogs can be even more curious than cats when out walking I'm glad you enjoyed it. Heh, and ceiling River will watch you Thanks also for your comment on my Firefly Fanfiction Taking the Sky from Kaylee Weirdly enough I just recently saw an odd and amusing conversation about that story (link here - its right down the bottom) while vanity searching on google. Some folks talk about the strangest things

Millicent Moons Luna review: Thank you! Yes, Luna in the story is characterised towards enjoying Millicant's body, she did want to kiss dat ass... I don't know that I'll ever do a sequel, but I'm sure there must be other Luna/Millicent stuff out there playing off similar themes. I base that on every possible Harry Potter theme having been written

Eh, there's the problem. The hilarity! I can't match that style. I think I might just go for something Aussie so I can try and fit in the good old phrase "Sheepchaser."