JayDee

How would we know? There’s a link to their story there, so why not go ask them on AO3?

Lupa didn’t come! I guess she was off somewhere doing her own thing. But yeah, downsides with both of them – text message means no wolfy foreshadowing, wolfy foreshadowing means total lack of tension. There is that. Some readers also have very specific personal thoughts on how characters will act or who they would have sex with. My experience has been that generally the fandom is actually less vocal with the meaningless PWP smutfest oneshots that make up most of my work, but get considerably more vocal with other authors’ longer plot intensive pieces I don’t tend to dabble in. Putting Harry and Hermione together at one point would really enrage a lot of Harry Potter fans, for example, and please others. In my case the only story I’ve written that appeared to piss off a significant portion of a fandom – lotta flame emails and sadly deleted reviews – was Taking The Sky From Kaylee. I think on that basis the little flashfics can tend to fly under the radar, getting the whole “you know this character already” thing out of the way, without so much of the downside reader rage. Or it might just be that so few modern AFF readers review I don’t realise how much they hate things! Some of the AU stuff is just… eh? Wha? It’s so AU it’s pretty clear that the writer just wanted to write about their high school and friends or whatever, but threw in Character names from a show or book or game to hook in readers. Something that starts “Instead of seeking the Infinity Stones, Thanos is just a hand car wash guy, and sexy beautiful student Sarsa drives her car in for a wash. They fuck!” has really nothing on the source material. Heh, if I didn’t fight one of my muses I’d still be churning out snuff every other story.

Asras' Abomination Thank you for the review! I appreciate you taking the time to leave thoughts. I went with the phonecall because I wanted to foreshadow the wolf – hence the growling in the background as Kate overhears the panic and screams and so on. I think your idea probably would have worked better, especially with more tension, so it’s definitely something to bear in mind for another time. Honestly a lot of the prompts are the same for me – they went really hard with some of them. I happened to know two of them this time and I think that’s probably why I didn’t think to stick all the definitions down the bottom as I have done for some of the recent ones, and just quoted the definition for the one I didn’t know. Something to bear in mind I guess. Absolutely get this – I just didn’t have the damn word count. This is definitely one of the areas in which doing fanfics for the prompts works better than original characters, because all I need to do is say “Captain Picard” or “Rimming Crusher on the Bridge of the Enterprise” and all the fans know immediately the characters, both personality and appearance, they know the scenery around them, and that there’s a very good reason why Picard doesn’t allow children on his bridge. With original work, well, all folks know is that these two go to a dance troupe, and so does the older woman, because I haven’t put in enough details to make people care. I guess in some ways I’d be better off doing the flashfic-chapter stories with originals, because then you can get to know the character a bit more. Some of the original flashfics worked ok without it, but mostly yeah. I might just do the next one as a ShortStory (allowed in the modified prompt rules!) rather than a flashfic and see if having an extra 200-300 words makes a difference, or just means I don’t tighten it up as much. Thanks again for your thoughts.

Got moved to their own subdomain – http://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/index.php There was just too much of that sweet, sweet, Mcgonagall futa.

I know they’re doing it. Fuck ‘em. The Last Jedi was a good film too. My neice fuckin’ loved it. My favorite of the new films was Rogue One though. That was a hell of a good film. Heh, I hope he comes back with “Please, call me George. Mr. Glass was the bad guy in Unbreakable.” I kid I kid…

I really appreciate the offer and the kind words! I pretty much always work without beta readers (the exception might be how on some of the request fics I sent chunks to the requester to see if they wanted changes making) because I’m really lazy. I suspect my increasing laziness is also a part of why I’m finding the longer stories harder to do – they take a lot of effort (I spent a few months on something like Shokan Lust, and even that’s tiny compared to stuff other folks put out) and I’m either burned out or lazy and it’s probably laziness. Thanks tho’!

Oh man, SW ep 9 trailer was epic. Lando’s back too! I don’t fucking get all these assholes hatin’ on Rey.

Heh, Abdul gets it once again!

It’s like a horror film when someone thinks it’s a monster… and it was! I used to lurk on the old Godawful Fanfiction forum, since just about every story I’d written at the time was linked there. There was a lot of stuff posted that was worse than mine, sure. I know my way around the barely readable bullshit! And I meant in terms of content and themes rather than terrible grammatical constructions :p Feel free to use it! Ya know you’re welcome to use anything you need from my stuff anyhow. I’m sure readers would love to see Kevin smashing a necromancer’s box. What’s weird is I have the ideas, it’s getting the phrasing down, constructing the sentences so they flow and hold the interest and read good. I’ve managed it before, but it’s kicking my ass trying it again.

Asras' Abomination may be the first of a series of prompt oneshots showing the effects of dark magics and demon dealings. If so I’m tempted to change part one to an index page, move it into paranormal general, and lump them in together given the connected themes and recurring characters that’ll no doubt show up.I seem to recall that’s allowed *Checks guidelines* yep – specific exception for Table of Contents for oneshot collections! I’ve finally realised putting ‘Flashfic’ in the summary is a good way to let folks know how damn short it’ll be too, to avoid folks getting over excited by the story codes. Anyway @InBrightestDay has kindly reviewed it, due to what must be the site’s highest tolerance for my barely readable bullshit. Thank you for revieing this! I’ve always said tentacle porn is one of my weaker areas, keeping it real short may have helped me hide the deficiencies but absolutely is gonna leave it too short for anybody to really enjoy as porn. I’m actually kinda surprised there is any hot imagary, so thanks for that, but thanks also for the frank appraisal of why it’s got negatives. S’all good feedback. I almost feel like this is meta humor about people ignoring the tags or bold face Turn Back Now warnings you put on your snuff stories. The link to Sarsa only makes me think of this more. In addition, I kind of like the fact that spells here are apparently named like some of the ones in D&D ("Asras' Abomination" would fit right in with "Bigby's Crushing Hand," "Evard's Black Tentacles," etc.) and that instead of being named after Sarsa, it's named after her Mary Sue. Heh, I’ve said before I’m not great at subtlety. You’ve nailed it there with some of the folks I was thinking about- ya see an evil summary, ya know it’s wrong, don’t damn well read it! Asras is no Mary Sue! Just because her magic is the strongest anyone has ever seen and even Voldie loves her for it… Oh, wait a sec… I literally burst out laughing at this. I can't even fully explain why. In Slumberverse America, Box X you. Initially I was going to have the box require the old backwards speaking reh ckuf etc, but I felt that might actually need explaining within the story and there wasn’t the word count, so eventually I just decided the spell was dumbed down enough to only need ‘Box’ for the commands. Oooh! This one was waaay overthought. Basically, Octavia’s a shoes fan. She goes in the room, everyone is wearing in dancing shoes on that expensive wooden sprung floor, so not worthy of comment in her thoughts. Then in stomps Kizzy wearing totally unsuitable boots… and stomps right through a box onto that expensive floor. Kizzy wearing docs got a mention in another story somewhere. Quite why she favors them is a bit of a mystery, I suspect they were a present. Heh, thanks. I liked it! I figure another time I can have folks get the vampire/werewolf mixed up too “Lupa? So you must be the werewolf?” “Oh sure! Yeah, when I was born they said ‘This kid? She’s gonna be a werewolf some day!’ Fuck you, I’m a bitch but I’m not a bitch.“ They got some great stuff on that internet. Thank you again for your review! I don’t do the prompt fics really expecting reviews, but it’s nice at least to get something down and created and of course to make something of DG’s efforts in setting the prompts. I wonder now if I can get the damn re-write done or if I’ll just end up doing another prompt fic.

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: Asras' Abomination Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Original Pairing: Tentacle demon, buncha OCs, Warnings: 3Plus AFFO Anal ChallengeFic COMPLETE Contro CR DP MC MF Rape Tent

Firefox is pretty good for me with AFF, but I always try and type stuff into a doc before posting. Even reviews. The last long review I wrote I didn’t and lost it! Had to re-write it. Gotta be much worse with stories.

Alright, but how impolite and unpleasant is it to take a positive, upbeat, cheerful and indeed outright gushing thread of praise to the forum and selfishly make a negative comment about oneself? Exactly! Real unpleasant and downright rude. What kind of toxic asshole would do such a thing? But, yes, other people are just great. Much praise for the admin team, the mod team, and that unquiet spirit that keeps trying to communicate through the black diamonds. JayDee, genuinely awful person (for further evidence, see An Actor Abducted)

There’s an old forum thread where someone said I really hurt their friend’s feelings! It’s from over a decade ago but even so…

People are real polite here. Other people, I mean. I’m pretty unpleasant.

But you had to wait for season 3 for the legend that is Reg Barclay, played by none other than "Howling Mad" Murdock himself Dwight Schultz!

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Wait… Sonic isn’t real? Then who the hell keeps taking all my rings?

See, there were have it! Doing the math makes the original even worse. Goes from entirely undeserved to “What the fuck were the seraphim thinking?” It’s a good thing that the Creator got involved in the new continuity I guess, and Kevin ended up in the right place at the right time with the right urge to go picking at a statue. No doubt The Creator took some kind of action to ensure the damn seraphim didn’t do it again. It’s all kindsa awesome! This is the guy threw the Seraph Lucifer outa Heaven, and he’s still just as badass nearly 14 billion years later. I’m sure it’ll be a good story when you write it! You do great battle scenes based on the fights shown so far.

Lupa’s parents are both sadly deceased (Her Mom’s fate got a mention in Jude’s Tale part 4) – That’s not Lupa’s fault, but it is very related to her currently being a vampire. Lupa might well know the full background to her name, the problem is that I don’t beyond the “parents liked alliteration” thing Honestly, Kate’d be more likely to google it. Maybe your wife’s parents are covering for something with their curious forgetfulness? Some deep, dark family secret...

Haha! Azrael (to himself): “Think I got away with it… fly casual….” Yeah, in this case I’ve gone with it because it’s too much effort to establish them as majorly different before the current time! Dead Soul 1: “On my Earth I was slaughtered by an Id Construct summoned by this demon, Eparlegna.” Dead Soul 2: *Too traumatized by reading the epic “Sarsa’s Mpreg Adventures” to respond* No worries! Thanks! Does sound like a pretty good take on it, nice to see the ol D&D folks putting in some non-sinful sex. Unlike what Elfstar did to Black Leaf’s corpse in my yet to be written story “The Real Power of Necrophilia” “Angel of Passion” has a nice ring to it! Although a quick google shows it’s a 1995 porno. So Shannon would approve. Sadism’s very much a human concept. I doubt any deity thinks in such terms! But then I turn on the news and am reminded we live in the same world as the Jonas Brothers.

I’ll leave it as a nice surprise for them! It’s a few years since I did it, but I’m fairly certain it’s to do with how really simple things amuse me sometimes, like if there’s four girls, one of them’s a werewolf and it’s not the one with the name meaning she-wolf. In story when Lupa’s parents named her they had no idea she would one day be a vampire who had a werewolf friend. They just wanted an alliterative first and last name as a homage to some of the comics they read, and Lupa’s the one they chose. Possibly she had a relative of the same name, or it had some additional meaning to her parents – if I do write the story I can come up with it then

The Slumber Party of Evil Doom review Thanks for your review! Honestly, I wasn’t ever expecting to write more, but I had that tough prompts I could make work, plus a desire for a bit more character stuff to clear up along with the re-write job on part 3. It does more feel more finished, and while I figure Kizzy’s change of mind towards the end looks a bit sudden, it’s kind of from Lupa’s POV without seeing the Seraph thought processes going on. There’s a lot of questions unanswered from part 1! What were the snacks besides the popcorn? (“Why did you laugh when you said this was soul food, Shannon?”) What had Shannon done in Hell that was a whole lot worse than Kate stuffing her face into a bowl of buttery popcorn and chewing? (Almost certainly a sex thing, possibly still involving the term ‘buttery’.) Why does Kizzy reach to her shoulder to draw a sword from the air, when she’s forming it from her will? (Probably thought it looked cool) Who is humanity’s next champion in the Slumberverse that Jack was going to slaughter if he hadn’t been stopped? (At least on the other Earth the champions are known to make a difference! One bound Eparlegna! Another couple in the next generation have an amazing adventure while their redheaded parents avoid questions about their real father! Then, a few more decades later, more mortals kicking ass, taking names!) Okay, assuming that's not a coincidence, then this universe's Shondra unknown-last-name, nee Jackson, is unknowingly caring for an angel, the very same angel that gave the order for the angel that the other Shondra...man, this is weird. Actually, there's an extra layer of humor here, because Trekkie Kizurial is basically living with a Mirror Universe version of Shondra, and in classic Trek fashion, Mirror Shondra seems like she was some kind of super cop in LA before finding religion. Either that, or she was on the path to being more like Shondra Prime before she found religion. Oh, that question! Yup, Kizzy had foster parents. Their surname is probably Dieudonné since Kizzy was pretending they were her real parents, though Shondra’s pre-marriage name was indeed Jackson. And, yes, the fact that Kizzy was set up with a foster parent who would constantly remind her of what had happened may well have been intentional. I’ve kind of got an idea it was the ol’ Angel of Death himself she had help her construct her human identity. The two universes have a lot of the same people, and some only on one or the other and roughly similar overall histories – both have Americas with Los Angles etc. The other universe had the brutal impossible to ignore public assault of Eparlegna, this one gets the creeping horror of Sarsa. There’s a Kate on both Earths, but Lupa’s parents never met on the Whore of Heaven Earth, and yet history tends to find ways to happen much the same anyway in the long run. Shondra Jackson in the Slumber-verse was going cowboy cop, and probably would have ended up as bad a mess in a different way, but one day, she saved Jackie’s ass, and a few years later, she’s up in the North near Canada fostering. Possibly working for the local Police Department! At least neither of them have a goatee. Requirement of the prompts pretty much! There was probably a more imaginative way to do it, but it failed my imagination. My first story idea for the prompts strongly considered some kind of lizardperson sex fic. Stooge is cool, though. I might have to work references to it into other works. That may be the only joke in this chapter, but I laughed really hard. Yay! Gotta love a laugh. It’s one of those lines you don’t expect to need to say at a slumber party. Lupa’s “It’s a mystery” in reply to Shannon’s musing about her nature was also meant to be a little funny (along with Shannon possibly purposely missing the point). Swing and a miss I guess There’s the Lupa she puts out – hardass, sarcastic, aggressive, cussing and gratuitous Spanish, basically fronting like she’s some kind of gangbanger – and there’s the real Lupa, who looked up to her hard-but-fair ex-military Teacher Mom and her soppy-stern programmer Dad and grew up as a gamer girl in a nice neighbourhood, went to chuch with her Mom, and then one awful night it all went to shit, along with her faith, and if it hadn’t been for the Golem in her boyfriend’s basement things would have gone even worse for her… I have got to tell that story someday, if the muses let me. While this stuff might keep her from the brink, she’s probably going to take a while to get off that self-destructive path – luckily she’s got friends to support her! On the one hand, this did kind of make me laugh a little (Lailah, the Angel of Conception, and Chastia, the Angel of What Comes Before Conception), but it is also kind of a somber moment, with Shannon wondering about the life she could have had. At least part of the joke landed! Heh. I can’t help but feel that for a certain kind of demon, those thoughts are not uncommon. Eparlegna is fucking happy he missed out on working in heaven (He’s got a “Better to reign on Earth” attitude …) , but Shannon has some regrets. I feel it also helps suggest that there was a proper reason for Shannon’s drives and inclinations rather than The Creator just messing with her. Perhaps Lucifer and the other Seraphim already had an idea of the various roles the Angels had been created to fulful in the long run, and it helped him when he got her to join his cause. If I ever get the darn Fall of Chastia story finished I’m sure I’ll find out Thank you! First draft I was thinking of using a lot more of the sort of smutty sexual stuff that Shannon comes out with a lot, but it just didn’t work with Kizzy. Instead, Shannon sits there, quietly, tries to get Lupa to leave for safety, thinks about how Kizzy obviously really doesn’t want to send her back to Hell (or she’d have done it already) so rather than manipulation she’s talking to try and get through as you say. Shannon’s a people person! It’s a mixture of that, and Lupa questioning why it was necessary for Kizzy to be on Earth, and the fact that she knows her creator is not sadistic (it’s a fictional universe, can’t apply it to this real world I kid! I kid! Well, kinda...) that all contributes to her inhuman thought process and… bam! group hug! Time to go find a scruff! Thank you again! I’m glad this part worked and I hope it hasn’t too badly contradicted the original spirit of the story or introduced too many new continuity errors.

The Slumber Party of Evil Doom – I made some changes to part 3 to fit in with The Woman in the Statue’s new future, and then I was all set to finally finish off Blood on the Hay when I realised that there were still some issues based on the characters as they’ve developed – Kate still works fine though, gotta love that pack mentality... So I did part 4 to try and deal with that as much as anything, oh, and also because the prompts were pretty hard to fit in but I had a realistic way to use that damn slipper. Don’t know if I can finally finish Kate’s story now or not, but I’m closer to it... Thanks for your review! Absolutely some retconning going on. Part 3 was actually re-written to fit in, while part 4 is more in the way of adding new information to change the meaning of part 1 and make Lupa a little more sympathetic. I hadn’t worked out Lupa’s backstory when I wrote part 1! I’m glad it makes more sense now! I’d argue there are some movies that tell the different characters paths in the same film – Pulp Fiction for one – but, yes, Part 3 does go firmly away from Slumber Party territory so I totally see what you mean. Shannon would happily have got it on, but it’s just not been that kind of story. Thank you though, I am glad it’s a good read! Made me smile, too! Heck, it made Kizzy smile. Thanks again, I appreciate this review and your time in leaving it.