JayDee

I think I detect a slight bias towards your preferred choice here.

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: The Slumber Party of Evil Doom part 8 - Back into the Barn Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult Fandom: Original Pairing: None Warnings: AFFO, Language, Challengefic, NoSex

Honestly, except for all the times I’ve been rude to people on here you’d never see me being rude to people on here.

And a quick google search shows he has previous form for flames: http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/review.php?set=read&no=600106520 http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/review.php?set=read&no=600106484 http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/review.php?set=read&no=600095715&page=3 (This one is half constructive!) Dude’s been hitting the Cardassian wine a little too hard.

Congrats!

“Capacity to spread” having a very different meaning in the porn fics.

They aren’t wrong!

Heh, fair enough! That word always reminded me of a Marvel/DC crosover, where the Sub Mariner says something about being a Scion of Atlantis, and Aquaman agrees he’s done plenty of “sighin’ in Atlantis” too. Still better than the sparklepires tbh.

This one made me laugh out loud.

Just thought! Sticking to the latin theming – instead of Dominator “Dominus” was latin for master. It got used later on to mean like a Lord, same with the feminine “Domina” being used to mean lady.

My apologies to your dog. Truly learning “what’s the worst that can happen” today. Child’s a tough one. I was gonna say Youngling but it makes me think of star wars even though it’s like twelve hundred years old.

You! Thank you! Told you you were in it. And it sure is good to see you posting things that aren’t the same request. G’luck with that!

Master – Dominator Child – “Barely Evil,” n00b (gamers are pretty evil), vampire – ‘suckers, leeches, nightkind, Plasmatics alpha – Primus beta – Secundus (the idea for these two being that one side has the greek letter names alpha/beta, and the other has the latin for first and second) pack – band What do you call someone who isn't traditionally submissive, but who isn't aggressive enough to be a beta type? Neville Longbottom.

Thanks!

Puberty?

I am doing a tonne of overtime tomorrow so I may be a little slower getting back to you this time round, but I’ll look at it as soon as I can with my ususal useless relentless positivity.

I hope you find a beta so part 4 is up to read soon! I’d volunteer but I am the worst beta ever. All I have is relentless positivity when people need harsh constructive criticism. Also my grammar and spelling are terrible.

My guess? Mia gon’ fuck somebody.

Ghost of Jane Austin somewhere wishing like heck the same rule had applied to Sanditon.

The Slumber Party of Evil Doom InBrightestDay has kindly reposted the review linked above of what is now parts 5 and 6 of the story. My original reply can be seen here and thank you again for the review. Also a new review of the brand spanking new part 7: Thank you for the review. I really do appreciate it. This kind of thing doesn’t really have wide appeal on AFF so it’s nice to see someone likes it besides me getting the enjoyment of writing it. Thank you! Yeah, it’s definitely win-win for Shannon. I think it was just trying to make Lupa laugh, but if Lupa had actually turned out to be into it Shannon wouldn’t have backed off That made me grin, partly from the Hartman thing, but mostly just from the fact that of course Lupa would imagine harps playing in Heaven. I'm not entirely sure where the association between harps and angels came from, but it always amuses me. Relevation 5:8? Yes, doesn’t say angels but that wouldn’t stop folks making associations with the context! Lupa’s got the full “This is my harp. There are many like it, but this one is mine.” mental image for sure. I keep imagining her drawing an hourglass in the air or something. Probably closer to that then going “Honk! Honk!” while grasping the air with both hands. Okay, I got a good chuckle out of this, for two reasons. First, Shannon is apparently a fan of Saints Row. Second, it makes me wonder what Luzurial was thinking in that pause. Was that her sexual naivete, assuming that what Shannon had formed was a sap, or did she realize what Shannon had made and claimed it was a sap so as not to embarrass her in front of her fellow angels? "Yes, that's a sap. Male angels, do not correct me on this." I like the ambiguity of it. I never actually played any of the Saints Row games! GTA: San Andreas had a dildo weapon tho’ come to think of it and I played that. I don’t think young Chastia had violence in mind when she formed her ‘weapon’ though. As for what Luzurial really thought… I’ll leave you the ambiguity. Thanks again for the review! The next chapter I am hoping to get up this Sunday or so, it’s mostly done, with less changes/expanding than this got, but I think a couple changes make more sense than what I had. Then hopefully finish it with one or two more chapters to give it, and the original Blood on the Hay, a proper combined ending.

Ok, now I’m confused.

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: The Slumber Party of Evil Doom part 7 - Talking while Travelling Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult Fandom: Original Pairing: None Warnings: AFFO, Language, Challengefic, NoSex

Author’s Note for expanded/merged story to be linked from story: So here’s the thing. Originally, “The Slumber Party of Evil Doom” and “Blood on the Hay” (BOTH) worked ok as seperate stories, they were a couple chapters each and there wasn’t anything else going on. Then I got to writing more parts, and other stories with the characters and now it feels that Blood on the Hay should be merged with the slumber party as a continuation, with the story as a whole covering the four friends discovering each other’s new natures, and then going after Kate after she ran away in part 2 of Slumber Party. Since the admin is probably still really busy I have decided to delete it myself and add the existing two chapters myself. This sadly means losing the hit count from BOTH (currently a whopping 2182 hits since the original posting date of 2011-03-24 / later same year for part 2, and sadly also the reviews. Though lost from the archive, they can remain on the forum! I am re-quoting the original four reviews on BOTH in this post - I have responded previously in this thread, but this allows anyone following the link to see them all in one place. Also, thank you again to those of you who reviewed previously. I really appreciate that. So I am not bumping a story to the top of originals with no new material I’ll also be posting a new chapter today with at least two more to come. (I split one long part into two to keep them both at the 1000 word flashfic limit, and also had another part I already started on.) I will also be swapping part 4 of the Slumber Party story with part 3 so there’s a natural intermission with Eparlegna’s punishment, Blood on the Hay part 1 and 2 become slumber party part 5 and 6. Per above, this post in this thread is the author’s note explaining it, which I’ll link in the story! I probably won’t get around to going back and editing forum threads or story notes that refer to them as seperate stories any time soon, but I can point anybody who says they’re confused here. Seems unlikely tbh. The original summary for BOTH “He has bad intentions for the girl sleeping rough in his barn...” may have given some readers entirely the wrong impression. Guffaw. (Edit – although, thinking about it, the fact it got a couple hundred more hits in two chapters than slumber party did for four over roughly the same period absolutely suggests pervs are more willing to take a chance on a story than non-pervs… am I right? :p. Slumber Party currently at 1955 hits!) Phew. Hope it makes sense. Anyway, those original Blood on the Hay reviews: ...not many people read these non-sex stories – even with the sex in Jude’s Tale it didn’t get a lot of readers, but I enjoy writing them so eh. I’ll never be Stephen King or Jo Rowling and that’s ok

I’ll cross me fingers you get more inspiration for it then!