InvidiaRed
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The goodnews 90% done with the revamp. Tying the loose threads into a serviceable plot. Trying so hard everything will be ready soon!
The Badnews, Having to deal with the fact my 90 year old grandma is a hoarder.
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I can laugh at it now.
The bruises are gone but I don’t think I’m going to step into that house for a long time nomatter how much I love my grandparent.
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Oh, good, you survived. Did you need search & rescue to pull you out?
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Well between getting conked in the head by 1970’s ads in boxes , three outdated encyclopedias and essentially covered in every single issue of 1981’s readers digest surprisingly not.
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https://www.biospace.com/article/researchers-answer-how-and-why-infants-die-from-sids/
They found the cause of SIDs!
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Here’s a language funny.
If Tomb and Womb have the same sound
then shouldn’t bomb be pronounced Boom?
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Not to mention cough, rough, dough, and bough.
Also, I’m glad they called it a vowel shift and not a vowel movement.
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“Bomb” typically pronounces itself “boom,” so there is that.
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75% done. Haha!
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Dunno what you’re up to, but good work!?
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Fun fact and a bit of trivia
The first mention of orange as a color was in 1502 and was a description of clothing for Margaret Tudor
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and to add to that
the fruit was originally called a norange, but some scribe messed up and changed it to an orange, and it stuck…
same thing a nadder changed to an adder and a nickname used to be an ickname
::*whispers* tell me you watch too much QI without telling me you watch too much QI::
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Who is the POV/Main Character?
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60% done with the revamp. Had to rewrite and shove things into book 2 and three lol
So there’s that.
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Like rolling dough thinner and thinner, every time I “rewrite”, things inevitably get longer.
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Its true though. Absolutely is that age old question brought to life.
Why are things happening? Because people are flawed drama llamas living in a world where gods and monsters are active make no pretense of being human or having human values and the horrors of the dark age just barely passed.
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Characters w/o flaws? Tends to make for rather short & boring stories.
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It can work, With the major players no longer on the board so to speak and only lesser factions. Its the perfect time for a changing of the guard and new powers to rise But… Here’s the devil in the details. What kind of setting is it? What happens if the hero is wrong? It’s these intrinsic questions you have to answer to be faithful and consistent to the lore and setting. If it’s a dark fantasy/grim dark vs. more light hearted fantasy. Does she make the most of the admittedly embarrassing situation or does she automatically accuse him of sexual assault? Does he do his best about the situation? Or does he fall apart from the lapse of control and skewed judgement. It’s going to be a big decision for the both of them. He’s going to have to deal with the fact he just potentially undermined his own beliefs and values with this indiscretion one way or another as did she. Not every character has to be romantic some people really do just antiromantically do it/ make the most of the situation and jointly decide they’re a thing now. Even if the beginning situation is embarrassing for both of them. They both have agency and on some level they connected enough to do it even if they don’t remember much of it. The Rubicon has been crossed and the genie is out of the bottle.
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A seal would work. short sweet and likely something expensive for them to replace. Where its guaranteed they’ll be ridiculed at best for being careless.
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That’s for door to door solicitors And porch snatchers get the blood eagle
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Personally, I’m more of a roman opinion on them. Crucified on the side of the road as a warning to others.
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From GeorgeGlass on January 03, 2022 Slither, by InvidiaRed There were some bits of language in here that I really liked (eg, the description of bacon as "the forbidden meat candy"). But I found the story hard to follow, mainly for the same reason that I found it hard to follow in "Vampire Gynoids From the Future": the confusing use of punctuation and sentence fragments. Take this paragraph: "As the serpent coiled like a lamb. A danger not just to the sheep but the shepherd as well." The first sentence is an introductory phrase that doesn't introduce anything, leaving the reader not knowing what was happening as the serpent coiled. The second sentence presumably describes the serpent but has no subject or verb to make that clear. Being an editor makes me hypersensitive to these things, so maybe others are better to interpret this story than I am. Feedback is always welcome! Part of that makes sense to my brain, and part of that is due to the mad character trying to describe something but not quite finding all the words. Or would it be ‘As the serpent coiled like the shape of a lamb. A danger not just the to the sheep but the shepherd as well.” that sounds better.
