JayDee

BronxWench does have a wicker man and, well, this apple harvest isn’t going to bless itself.

Repeat reviews pushed up You!’s reviews as well. They’re all valid reviews though and it’s nice to see folks coming back. We gots to appreciate what we can get!

It’s a bit peppier than For the Honour of The Slytherin having 3 reviews to 78307 hits over 11 years, that’s for sure. Frankly, I blame the anal violation. I’m happy with it and super grateful for the feedback and making folks laugh successfully.

You! has what will likely be its final ever review. But with 2141 hits and 21 reviews it’s stillgot what’s probably the highest ratios of hits to views of any of my stories, and nobody even gets anally violated. That’s not a spoiler, there’s no anal tag Thank you for the review! I’m glad you liked the ending. I didn’t get it down quite like I pictured it in my head but it’s nice it worked anyway. My absolute favorite bit to write was the gag about mistaking the demon for the angel so it’s great that someone else appreciated it. To be fair she was an angel, once, but at the dawn of things before the coming of man and she was way, way, way down the celestial hierarchy from a seraph like Kizzy. She was like janitor’s assistant level. The rumour is she only fell because she wandered into the wrong meeting when Lucifer was getting the gang together. I mean, she even cocked up being a demon by becoming friends with an angel. Thank you again for the review, I appreciate it!

Was she dead or alive in it?

The Legend of Spyro's Death was one of the few stories I wrote where I couldn’t see the appeal of the request at all. Sure, there was a celebrity with a nice voice doing the character, but beyond that… it’s a purple dragon. I mean, come on here. He’s not even… furry. I started responding to reviews on the forum after I got the first three reviews on this one so never got to say thanks for the reviews. So… thanks for the reviews. And sorry ‘bout the plot hole. To answer it… uh… Rab was still full from his earlier meal at that exact point. Maybe. Anyway, moving on to a new review – Thank you for the review! I really appreciate hearing feedback always. To be fair on the requesting person I’m pretty sure they just specified Spyro to feature. I came up with all the weirdness on my own and somehow made it into my most critically acclaimed MM story. Frankly I blame the scaley fans. There does seem to be less tentacle stuff, doesn’t there? Maybe @CloverReef will take the joking in the status bar seriously, write the consensual cannibal necro tentacle fic fic and take care of that drought! My big problem with tentacles is I start wondering where they’re all going and what they’re doing, like on limbs, around body, probing orifices and what about the ones left over? Readers start getting annoyed if you have them off at the side playing Bubble Bobble on NES or getting a game of air hockey going. “Hey, come plow this character!” “Just a minute, I’m 6-5 up against Tentacle 68!” Nice to hear I got it right though Thank you! Of course we’re often jealous of the stuff we think others do better – your atmospheric horror in The Price is genius. To me, I feel like I just have a few samples from an anatomy text book. A misremembered anatomy textbook. But if I am writing horrific gore and it gets a horror reaction it’s all good – I also get people who can barely stop laughing while reading it It’s really nice of you to say so. I greatly appreciate the compliment! I tried being a critic when I read, but I ended up hurting people’s feelings. I guess I’d better make Ball the Midwife a really gory horror fic if I ever get around to writing it. Demonic corruption and a visceral remaking into a servant of evil. And some kind hearted bike-falling clumsiness to keep in character. Sometimes you ride the bike and sometimes the bike rides you. Thank you again, s’lovely waking up to reviews

Thank you again for the clarification on the rules. I appreciate the support of the site staff in keeping the accounts seperate. And thank you for the compliment!

I PM’ed or emailed DG about it in 2011 or so to discuss and was allowed to keep my old account at the time – my reason was I no longer used the old username as it was known to real world people, and the stuff I was writing as JayDee was much harder core, but folks maybe still wanted to read the old stories. My understanding was that DG just needed records of this as well as the reason for why although with it being 7 years ago I don’t recall a lot of the details too closely or still have the messages. I can’t even prove I discussed it with DG beyond that query in 2009 in the thread above. My concern today and why I queried Melrick’s answer is that if the policy had changed then it would put me in breach of the rules as they are now. I’m basically Lawful Evil here and try to follow the rules so it’d be bye bye JayDee if there were no longer exceptions (quit that cheering at the back there). With your clarifying reply I can now just keep my fingers crossed that the reason I gave DG in 2011 remains sufficiently compelling for an exception! And If it’s not I bear no ill will ‘cos rules is rules and would just say thanks everyone for the support and reviews and interraction and that and would totally understand the deletion of JayDee as a second account. I don’t expect things that were ok years ago to always remain ok, after all Thanks for your time.

When I asked about this I was told that while it was discouraged for three good reasons, there were exceptions in certain circumstances – is this no longer the case? http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/topic/12399-are-multiple-usernames-permitted-on-the-archive/?do=findComment&comment=194939

Still chipping away at the latest re-write. Still trying to think up a better title. As one of the characters is called Roman and seeks revenge for a historical crime I thought about “Roman’s Revenge” before google told me that was a song. Darn it. Yes, I’ve used song titles for stories before (with citation!) but I don’t like to anymore – too easy for them to come up on the wrong search. Hank has grown on me as a name, I guess that’s why I plumped it in the first place. Was also thinking about the story codes. As the characters are two men and one transwoman I’ll need to use both MM and MF tags because transwomen are women (contents of underwear irrelevant). And also one of the guys spends time thinking about having sex with a woman and placing his penis into a vagina and that sort of depraved cishet filth can be triggering for the hardcore yaoi fangirls who might otherwise have been drawn in by an MM tag. Meh, will be very busy next week though so if I can’t get part 1 finished by Friday it’ll be a couple weeks more at least. I am slow as shit at the actual editing side of things

That’s more successful than most, I’m sure. I bet a lot of those authors remember your support and hosting fondly. And anyway, very few sites weren’t super tacky in those days to be fair to ya (Image link to screencap of AFF in 2003 – https://imgur.com/a/kRIfgLH ) Mmmm red font on black background…

I wrote some of my early fanfic attempts in pen pre-internet including a really terrible vampire story. No porn fics in them days for me! Don’t recall precisely now the first fanfic I read. Never looked at that sort of thing at school, but I first got on the internet at home in the late 90s. So, in terms of internet fanfic from others, I would have first read it either on a geocities fansite or one of the alt.fan newsgroups for me. I seem to recall alt.fan.pratchett was specifically against fan fiction being posted there, but not all of them were like that. Though many newsgroups were basically dying by that point it didn’t take long to find newsgroups with more dedicated FF content either. I had my own geocities fansite for a while with ther standard web ring links and and hit counters. They didn’t have a lot of space and the amount of page impressions allowed in an hour was tiny, but still good times… There was a long gone site called something like trekslash.ca which I am pretty sure was where I read a lot of really good Janeway/Torres femslash. One author was amazing and I can’t even recall their name. I found the early version of the Grey Archive in about 2000 and it was on there I first heard of AFF being set up a couple years later. If I am remembering right this was after the FF.net first big mature content purge. I lurked/anonymously reviewed on AFF and didn’t join with my original account here ‘til 2004. Weird to think how much time has passed tbh.

Fuck it. Bump.

Are you a demon character from one of my stories?

fully expecting the next two reviews to be “Would work better with more background characters.” (I kid, I kid! It’s halfway down page 2, it’ll never be read again!) Thank you all once again for the feedback though, it really helps. I managed to find the motivation to do it. I’m as shocked as anyone. I could absolutely see where you were coming from though, and why what I was trying for hadn’t worked well. Or at all. Even with that stuff stripped out it’s still differentiated enough from the folks in the old version I figure. If someone came to me tomorrow about something I finished three years ago and said “This bit is terrible this is why you should change it” and I agreed with them, I’d probably still not be motivated to do it and instead just take the feedback on board for future stories. I’m kinda lazy and stupid that way. Putting stuff off is what I am best at as a writer. The one I am re-writing at the moment probably needs another four or five hours of solid work, and I’ve had a couple extra ideas that seem really hot to me to include, and I am still not getting it done. But it won’t have any needless cameos, that’s for sure. Currently calling the main character Hank Bellfield, surname is fixed but I am not too sure about Hank for a handsome actor type. On the plus side it only has two google returns and one of them seems to be dead so at least it’s not acidentally libelling someone. Edit: The plug may not achieve anything. The Price by Pippychick has only had like three reviews from my plugging and that wasn’t even when I plugged it here, it was over on another site!

Well that’s weird. There’s space at the bottom of the review and there’s an and but it sure does cut off. Only thing I can think of is maybe I accidentally highlighted/deleted part of the line without noticing. I can no longer recall what the point I had was. Possibly some sort of joke about dice, knowing me. Good story, tho’ and I enjoyed it. I managed my own word mix up too “ might be a time of bandage color” for type. Well, oops. But it wasn’t criticism it was just pointing out to help!

I thought One Direction were going to be massive instead of massively annoying and quickly forgotten.

In a sense - always catch myself starting paragraphs, including for scenes, with a character name and hate myself for it. I change ‘em up when I can think of something better.

That was actually easier to edit than I thought. I’ve cut out Kizzy, Shannon, Lupa, Amanda and Jenny, and Chad no longer has a name. I’ve kept the reference to family members in but with them established as being abroad I think there’s less “are they important” element there. Scott and Uncle Declan both get mentions at the end that I like how they work, but it really only works with them at the start. Eh, can’t be worse anyway! I think that probably it was a mistake to try to combine making it original with the advertising for the other stories, but at least I didn’t go into detail about the “ deep amber color, thick, creamy head, and rich, distinctive flavor of Anchor Steam Beer” or something. People might think I was being sponsored. To sort of expand on what I was saying earlier for me I try and take feedback into the next stories I write, but I find it quite hard to go back and make bigger changes to stuff I’ve already done beyond the spelling/grammar/missing words etc – even with the big bunch of stories I’m comitted to re-writting it’s been pretty slow going. In this case though with it being my first re-write to an original I could absolutely see the logic for where it was going wrong.

So when I write Moosecock everybody remember it was GeorgeGlass who egged me on! And also, for those of you who like pregnancy and horsecock check out George’s story Pony Dearest. So, I recently reviewed SinfulWolf’s Closing Time and heartily recommend it if you want some decent femslash – there’s only the one review so far, so get in there and give some more feedback! As is sometimes the way of these things, SinfulWolf has reviewed a couple of mine too! For Fucking Halloween Party Thank you for this review! I didn’t remember the real bands, scrolled down and, wow, yeah that One Direction poster got dated fast, the rest are probably worse, eeesh. I shoulda stuck with a fictional act like Dani Murphy. The offscreen villain spends much of her time on adult fanfiction sites like AFF sharing Mary Sue fics. She’s really evil. the AFF references were mostly because of it being for an AFF story jam, and with it having the same villain as another story I did, but stripped of that context I can see the issue there. I don’t always think about these things, thanks for the pointer! Thank you for the feedback on this also! With such strong exortations from y’all I think I might need to go back and strip out some of the extra characters (and stick in a change of view line!) my aim of getting it firmly into the new setting seems to have gone a little bit overboard. Taking out the bit in the middle would be a pretty easy snip but I’ll have to be a little more careful at the start. Shouldn’t be impossible though – generally I hate going back and changing stories* when I’ve finished them even with a really good reason, but since this is already a re-write of an old story already it’s not such a thing. Plus, most of the change suggestions I used to get were “This story would be improved if you killed yourself.” I hope your wife likes it also, thanks again for both of your kind reviews and the feedback on the characters and POV switch. *Edit: Excepting changes for spelling/grammar/capitals/homophones and other accidentally misused words, the technical minutae in other words I usually try and change quickly

Twinpregnation Thank you for the review, I really appreciate it. The character build up is all new for this re-written version to establish them as original characters so it’s nice that it gets the two main peeps across ok – I guess it partly comes back to the issue George raised – introducing the other characters for background probably reduced the amount it felt I needed to include for Conor and Caitlin, when I could have included some more ‘growing attraction’ vignettes – ‘Conor’s first time masturbating over Caitlin’ or ‘Caitlin’s first time thinking of Conor with another guy’ type stuff. It’s like Chekov said when writing slash - if you introduce a couple of bros in act 1 they need to be getting banged in act 3 – still sounds like I got it partly right! I definitely like the idea of writing more about them so it could happen. Might be enough in the budding relationship side to do a prequel, though it’d need a Minor2 tag if they got a few months younger, never mind a couple years. Thanks again for the review.

Well, Twinpregnation is at 1213 hits and the next time a story gets a new chapter or a new story is posted it gets knocked off the front page. And a review! Thank you very much for the review, I really appreciate it. With it being my first attempt at making an old fanfiction into an original rather than a different fandom I wasn’t quite sure how it would come out. The original was basically a pure PWP with nothing but fucking, very little romance and I wanted to expand it and make it it’s own story. ‘deeply sexual and very romantic’ is just a wonderful summary and I appreciate it. I can see how that is. This whole section is all new from the original version and I had a few aims with putting it in. I was super nervous about really differentiating the new version from the original version, so adding in a kind’ve populated background seemed a good way to do it. The other two reasons were shout outs for people who read my orignal stories (most of them appear in one or more other stories I’ve written eg Chad goes on to be a top salesman and Uncle Declan had a couple people killed) and I also wrote it because I wanted to try and explain why nobody but the twins were there that summer and also why Conor thought he was home alone. I definitely over convoluted it. I guess anybody who hasn’t been reading my shit for over 10 years won’t have read the original story, or get the shout outs, so it won’t matter to them and clearly can lead to the confusion for a reader who just wants to masturbate to twins fucking. It’s definitely something to look out for for more re-writes I do as originals. Thanks for the feedback on it. She’s a girl of many talents! The annoying thing is, I had it correctly capitalised in the previous sentence and then got it wrong there. Thanks for pointing it out, now corrected. Although, it is a JD fic, so a large antlered mammal wandering the halls is probably gonna fuck a student or teacher. That bit was from my original That wasn’t – the ‘character’ was brunette in the original. Same issue as before really – I was wanting to try and drive home it being unrelated to the original fandom which had a more limited reaction in the original setting, and stick in the cameos. Sounds definitely something to take on board with the next re-write as an original. At least when I tell that story I can put a note at the bottom for folks to go check out Twinpregnation for something happening at the same time. I also hope to write the ideas I have for the Twin daughters’ adventure “What the fuck was that prophecy? Two born of incest? *Gets out phone* “Yeah, Mom? Got a question here...” The original version had the impregnation and a couple of lines about it, but when I came up with the title I decided to emphasise it a little more. At least the incest isn’t going to continue for another generation and get into webbed toes and too-close eyes and voting Trump territory. Thank you again for the review. I really appreciate the feedback and will try to take it on board, and I’m happy it works as an original.

Thank you for the plug! Though to really fit the AFF template it probably should have been the boy twin getting knocked up. And thank you kindly for the review also, I’ll reply over in my thread!

‘K.