JayDee

I’m sure it’s fine to review either per chapter or a whole completed multiparter – whatever you feel like, most of us writers are just happy to get reviews and appreciate feedback in any format and wouldn’t dream of imposing a preference Sometimes it feels like you could just keep tinkering with a story and you kind of have to have a cut off point where you stop making major changes but still slide in little extra corrections if other folks notice an issue. Review for Fucking Halloween Party Thank you for this review! I appreciate the feedback and it’s really cool it caught your interest. I’m glad that the stuff that worked, worked, and as for the stuff that didn’t – I like your suggestions for a character, as you say they would have some interesting story possibilities. It would probably allow for more conflict than the current situation, but I’m probably locked in the current version now! Could definitely be inspiration for future stories! I double checked I hadn’t accidentally called Shannon Samantha anywhere – easy typo! So far as retaining her demonic powers; it’s all about an extension of her own will rather than being granted by Hell Shannon was once an angel who followed Lucifer (if the lowest possible rank, far below Kizzy in terms of power) and she still retains her will, though perverted into sexual usages by her decision to become a Succubus. That’s how I tend to write her anyway. In her other appearances she’s not actually having sex. Shannon would be pretty cool with being degraded and playing a slutty submissive tbh – in the story she corrected Steve’s degrading language for his benefit rather than her own, since he didn’t really know what he was doing. I will get around to reading some more of your stories – the The Master Program was fun and I loved that ending. Thank you again for your review and inspirational thoughts. The alternate character ideas are definitely interesting.

I might not have the skill to write this but at least I can spell triy— trye- triyd. Oh shit. Never mind. Harder than it looked.

Twinpregnation reviewed! I just realised it has hit 5k hits so folks must still be reading it. I hope we’ll be seeing a lot more of the reviewer InBrightestDay here now they’ve registered! AFF likes writers! Also, they’re working on a really really really good story. But on to the review! Thank you for reviewing this again! I’m really glad you liked it and that the long term element works. I just like the idea that it isn’t some dirty lust thing but a deep affection that’ll last a lifetime. After all the bad ends I’ve written it is nice to have something positive. As a piece of pornography the big element was writing sex people found hot so I am glad that came across well too. Funnily enough it would have been connected to something else you read, but previous reviewers persuaded me it worked better without the appearances from other characters. I do see where you’re coming from with the criticism and it feels like doing more of that would have improved it a hell of a lot. I re-wrote it from another of my stories of about half the length and added quite a bit on at the start, but I really feel now I could have done more. It’s definitely something to keep in mind if I did anything similar. I really appreciate the criticism. Thank you again for this review and welcome to AFF! Oooh! and to point out for AFF users that of the 100+ stories I have loaded on AFF there’s only 2 or maybe 3 of them that meet Literotica’s terms and conditions (I haven’t tried the third one yet). I’ll surely never have anything else I could load there! I’m not going anywhere unless, of course, the moderators finally decide they’ve had enough and place me under Damnatio memoriae.

To be honest I have problems with the English in my stories and English is supposed to be my first language (although the local dialect is a bit different to the version shown by, say, Hugh Grant in Hollywood). When I review if there’s some awesome bit I like to say it’s great, but then I don’t want to ruin it for some other reader who checks the reviews before reading the story. It’s a fine line

I’d volunteer but I am lazy and so can’t be bothered. JayDee, “Sometimes slightly too honest.”

Praetor – I will get on to read and review yours too! I’ve just been away and then busy

Miharu Sarutobi Must Resist! reviewed Thank you for your review! It was a nice suprise to come back to a review on an old story. I had fun writing it so I am glad you enjoyed it.

I was gonna leap in with “That’s got to be Books!” but apparantly they made a TV series as well so its anyone’s guess.

I’m sure it’s an awesome story because you’re a great writer, but I gotta give it a pass with the minor1 content. I hope it went down well for you with readers on that other contest! I know nothing of the site but from the name I suspect it’s the kind of content they appreciate.

We are all bitches on this blessed day. (ps Happy Solstice to the religious folks who do that one! For the rest of us it’s “Yay! Days start getting longer again from today!)

I realise I am necroposting the thread we all hated the necroposting about, but since that other user deleted all of their posts it looks like I am a) bitching out myself on page 1 and b) bitching out BW in this quote. Which clearly can’t have been the case as I yet live un-cursed and have not yet been dragged into the dark forest and never seen again.

I’m hardly writing anything, I want to, I just can’t seem to get it out. It’s not even exhuastion, I just can’t seem to get the words to flow anymore. It’s been like this on and off for me for years, so I hope the writing ability comes back again!

Ok, to change avatar you go into your own profile and there’s a little square that appears on the default avatar, bottom left corner of the default user pic square. Click this to bring up the upload option. On a previous version of the forum you needed a minimum number of posts to change the avatar, set the text below your name and so on. Don’t know if this is still the case. But, yes, load your picture there, then when loaded click on it to bring it up, right click for the link and then paste the link to the copy loaded on the forum to the archive and it should work just peachy. PS – that Ice Cream parlor theme is going to haunt my nightmares.

The forum allows a larger profile picture than the one it re-sizes next to the post, so I have the larger pic there and I can just get the link for the uploaded userpic by right clicking in my profile for link location – http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/uploads/profile/photo-6512.jpg and then paste this into the url field for the userpic over on the archive. Edit and edit 2 – edited out ‘cos I found what I was rambling about. Edit 3: Oh, I just realised it only made the avatar smaller on the default theme. On the “Ice Cream Parlor” theme my userpic looks like hammered dogshit.

My solution was to load my picture to my forum userpic and then link to the picture loaded on the forum rather than an offsite host. Obviously getting to the bottom of the situation would be ideal but it works for the moment! Edit: Wait, actually, it was someone else’s solution! I just used it. Now if only I could recall who suggested this…

I was thinking about this again, and the title for story based on it came to me: Relatively Haunted. Then I googled it and found it was a business. They probably wouldn’t want such a story interfering wth their search results.

Hey Mal! Nice to see you back on the forum.

Oh, hey, good news on your laptop!

Come to that I bet a fair few created an account and forgot about it! “Soon… soon I shall once again share my filthy imaginings with the wor- OOH! SHINY!” Well, alright, mostly just the writers who were also cats. I can’t even remember stuff I did last week, nevermind a decade ago.

I doubt AFF ever moved any stories or user accounts from FF, the two sites are not connected. A whole buncha readers moved their own. If you didn’t set up the account here someone else did.

Pen Name: JayDee Story Link: Corrupt the Midwife - Part 7 Type of Fic: FlashFic Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Television > Call the Midwife Pairing: Chummy x Trixie Warnings: ChallengeFic Complete FF Fingering.

I’ll put it on my “Might get around to it some day if I’m lucky and the readers are unlucky.” list.

https://www.theguardian.com/books/2018/nov/30/bad-sex-award-2018-the-contenders-in-quotes?CMP=twt_gu If only I was a published ‘literary’ author I could win the shit out of this.