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Spoiled Meat review - and I just realised that Killer Croc is going to be in the awesome looking new Suicide Squad movie, so I wonder if that'll generate more reader interest on this comic-version of the character story. Funnily enough, the actor playing him in the movie has described him as "a cannibal with rage issues" which does rather fit the story characterisation... anyhoo... Thank you for this review! You don't owe me anything I on the other hand owe you a story! I've pretty much always gone for the cervix as "if someone's hitting it, it's going to fucking hurt" here it's emphasising Croc's monstrous nature that he physically breaks her and eventually tears into her guts. It's anatomically dodgy, but so is Killer Croc! I suppose if I write vile horrible pornography it ought at least to flow well! Thank you again for your review!

I'd never even considered that! *surreptitiously puts speculum and enema kit back in toy box and makes shooing motions at the pre-med frat boy characters* I mean, if they can't get some gaping going with... uh, digits and phalli then they aren't trying. To avoid any offence to passing readers with this being on the forum I'll try to use more technical terms too. No, no, no, I didn't mean tallymarks with cutting, this is a totally gore free story, I was thinking with marker pens, that's why I put it after bodywriting, kind of a sub-catagory - I don't think I've used it in a story myself, but as I said I've been thinking over gangbang tropes that can be used in any fresh ways. If you do find a story on AFF that doesn't have needed warnings, and don't feel like politely raising it with the author or they don't listen, then raise it with one of the moderators and they'll raise it with the author. They're good at stuff like that and I think there is an adult baby tag too. With the suggested title I wasn't meaning Baby like an adult or other baby, but in the slightly sleazy "Gimme some sugar, baby" type way a frat boy who is also a Bruce Campbell fan might say, as a take on Oz's "Dingos Ate My Baby" band name (which was likely obvious, but I don't know if they translated that differently or whatver!). Hmmm... with the rimming, maybe "Dude-bros ate my baby's asshole" might even work. If I do write in Jonathan I was thinking of giving him the largest male genitive organ, like everybody's having a laugh 'cos he's got a mouthful of Willow's anal orifice and presumably whatever seminal fluid is dripping off and then sudden someone yanks his pants down and holy shit he's like an advert for subway. With extra mayo. And the previous biggest guy at 9inches is suddenly on his knees pulling a "We're not worthy! We're not worthy!". But no ridiculous size male organs, and I probably won't be giving too many specific measurements anyway, unless it really fits an especially gratuitous bit of porn style writing. I wasn't planning on using Warren, but Jonathan was a character in S3 and could easily have been on campus to visit someone from the year above who went there to play with their D&D group or something. On his way back, Percy West sees him out the window and has the idea of blindfolding him and getting him in to orally stimulate Willow's previously penetrated posterior passage in a typical example of jock/nerd social interaction. Percy's more academically minded Uncle Herbert would not approve. How about a magic dildo, possessed by a former frat brother who sadly died pulling an epic prank? Or maybe just had a heart attack from an undiscovered congenital heart defect while committing an act of self-abuse over an erotic spell book. Too silly? I'm just throwing porn at the wall here to see what sticks, to paraphrase Cave Johnson. On the length - except for the prompt fics, I don't write stories to set lengths, but thinking on things I've done in the past that seems about what it will come to. That said, a previous 10-on-one gangbang story I wrote was around 9000 words (Over!). So when it gets going it could be longer, but probably not three times the length. On virginity - Since it's a blood free story, no hymen tearing or whatnot and she'll be aroused enough that as long as the guy eases in there won't be internal tearing. I figure the first organ might get slipped in before she realises it's going too and then, no use crying over spilt semen. Might be interesting to have her not know who the first guy is, due someone in front of her face, if you follow. Another thing I try and ask for requests which some people have an answer too and some don't - Are there any words in porn that a total mood killer for you, and any you particularly enjoy seeing? Like, if one of the frat guys is giving a bit of commentary on what he's doing, during an attempt at dialogue, would it kill your arousal if he said muff or "her flower" (Thanks Monica) That kind of thing. Or should it just be come or can guys/narration refer to jizz/spooge/spunk/Coors Light/semen/baby batter etc etc And some readers find spefic terms very hot. And feel free to toss in as many more ideas/comments as you like, I'm not pressured. It only becomes an issue when a story is nearly finished and then someone says "Can you also show X" which would be like, a massive re-write or 5000 extra words. One requester did that and actually got pissy when I said no. I will let you know when I am started on first draft - I'm PM you chunks of text rather than post on forum because of the rules around that, but you can always comment here. OK, running out of time again and it looks like I have a review to reply too, so I'll sign off again. Thanks for talking all this stuff out, it can be a pain to do a request if you don't know what someone likes - especially if it gets to posting stage and only then they're like "No, wait, that character blows. And not in a good way."

Now's probably a good time to mention I am a very slow writer, so unlikely to be finished by the end of the week - as an example, the last Mortal Kombat story I did took nine months, still once the plan is in place it becomes chipping away at it, and this shouldn't be that long. I think I can manage around 10000 words, probably split into a couple of parts (first part ending with Willow naked), but that is still very rough at this stage. And also, on way of speaking, my weak point is dialogue. I'll try for Buffy-speak and whedonesque phrasing, but that may be the weaker side. I can probably cover for it by having Willow's mouth full a lot. OK, pornstar levels of semen - I figure it's gonna be easy enough to use a little demonic influence in Sunnydale, but not necessarily violent/nasty demonic influence, "So you're like a good demon? bringing the come in?" to paraphrase a later episode.... A mixture of humans and demons is fine, because a lot of demons aren't especially bad - like Clem or Doyle from Angel. Might even have the human frat guys being the bad influence on them, so maybe even the reason the high school guys were sent for a girl was because their buddies in the frat had had some demon potion supposed to make 'em last longer but it was more effective than expected and they had to unload a lot fast and it was that or fill every sock on campus. That'd work, and again with the "stops abbrasions/soreness" side effect means no physical harm for Willow besides maybe loss of appetite (since she'll be well fed) and tiredness for a few days. Still gets the rape tag though, because the very second someone touches her it's over that line, and it's not gonna end up with her loving all the guys or suddenly a bimbo slut or something. On the other hand, with 25-30 guys (it might be a variable number, coming and going [/some pun intended] to keep Willow busy, they don't really need instant recharge or the guy who yelled "Shotgun asshole!" would be there all night, what with it being porn and all. Blow a load, grab a beer, play some original Playstation, come back to rub one out over her tits... actually, Willow liked computer stuff, could definitely have a scene where she's playing say Tekken 3 against someone while double penetrated. And winning Come feeding - At least one thing a frat can be relied upon to have is beer bongs. And the best thing is they can use them for new pledge hazing for years afterwards. What are you thinking on the general hygiene level of the guys - I figure to the start of the evening they, like Willow, would be pretty clean and fresh for the most part with everyone getting a little sweaty towards the end of the night. Some folks like less clean participants in the gangbang though, so I can do either. Lots of come does have a bit of a smell though. dafdes - I kind of like that point on the early character, "You did the nasty with 30 guys?" "I was being polite!" "Yeah, like a British Ambassador!" I might even find I can do an expanded versions of that specific outline on the come display you've got there too if it seems to flow well enough when I'm actually writing - with appropriate credit and your permission of course if it is a total expansion. It might be nice to finally use the expression "fucked goofy" and not have Disney on my ass. I'll have a few more things to ask, I think, to check what you prefer on different things, other tropes that tend to turn up in this kind of fic which I can try and put a different spin on. Like bodywriting, or tallymarks, or how you'd prefer the story to treat Willow's virginity or possibility or pregnancy or like any shame over all the orgasms or more "Ooh! this is neat!" kind of thing. Because I know a lot of folks have different ideas on what they like, and I figure when I do a request I need to try and get it as close as possible to what the requester likes! Which, actually, is sometimes as scary as hell and leaves me shivering and afraid. But not this time! So, yeah, prep stage, still be a while before there's more than bare bones on it though. Thanks loads for your and dafdes further thoughts.

Request here - http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/61208-willow-gangbang-btvs-challenge/?hl=willow#entry382765 I've expressed an interest in this request and am hoping to complete it, and since I already have this thread for discussion on feedback on my BTVS domain stories I think it fits in for discussion of a future story too. Anybody else who has ideas to suggest* should feel free, though if the requester said they didn't like them they won't be used I case anybody is reading this and missed that I write sick shit - reading further will encounter discussion of a proposed story about a gang bang rape of a character in the Buffy series. No lines from the story itself appear (unless I actually work in joke dialogue) but it is still possibly triggering content. *About the story, not "Kill yourself. Do it. Do it now." So I'm thinking I'll set it on the first full moon after Lover's Walk, before Amends, so Oz is still off working out his feelings about Willow and Willow is theoretically single. I like the idea of him smelling Willow covered with the come of 30 or so guys and the lingering smell of her own orgasms and arousal Working title: Dude-bros Banged My Baby. Yes, it's an anachronism, but I do porn not high art. If you want high art that looks like porn, go read Bukowski. The guys will be a mix of college guys and guys in the senior year at Sunnydale high. Not including Jonathan. Well, maybe. But he'd be blindfolded as a prank. It's set before Dopplegangerland so Vamp!Willow hadn't scared shit out of Percy yet. Other gangbangers not to include Bill, Charley, Fred George or Ron. Willow's the only redhead at the party. Sunnydale wasn't "exactly a haven for the brothers" but I'll have a token black guy. I don't know if there was a single asian in the whole show. At least Whedon made up for it with all the Chinese in Fir... nevermind. Hey, maybe Malik from Not Another Teen Movie could crossover. So, full moon. Oz asked Willow to leave him alone while he worked shit out, and was kind've harsh about her feeling shit wasn't his problem. I figure plot will be Willow in advisably tries to talk to him again prior to amends, as he's heading off for his night in the tomb. He rejects her again, really harshly, and she's hurt and maybe even a tiny part of her feels he's been too hard 'cos, dammit, all she did was kiss her old buddy Xander a little. Night falls as it continues to do (and the age of night, fuck, you'd think it would have a broken hip), and Willow's out at night which can be bad in Sunnydale. Meanwhile, some fellow seniors have been to a party at a frat house over on the college campus, and got challenged to find a high school girl to have fun with. She thinks she's just lucky they stop and say their driving over to the college to visit buddies see her and offer to take her safely home "after just picking something up" but it's Willow they've picked up. Her natural curiosity and desire not to offend gets her into the frat house, and a couple of the more eloquent college guys get her talking. No, they assure her, they don't worship snake demons or shit like that. Willow likes the seeming positive attention and apparent maturity of the guys she's talking too. Meanwhile, somebody jerks off over the back of her coat. Oh, there's a spillage, here, he'll go clean that for you. Anyway, one of the guys gets close enough for a cuddle and a kiss, and a feel, and Willow goes along with it until suddenly somebody's got their hand in her panties and there's a lot of guys around her and the language is moving from positive to degrading and Willow's intimidated and out of her comfort zone but the fingers do feel good and she doesn't say no. The intimidation/lack of asking makes it a rape scene, obviously, but without violence or pain. Avoiding drugging and alcohol and even real aggression, basically. They won't try and get Willow drunk or anything. Just rely on their being a good crowd of them around her. Which is basically even more evil. That would cover the first 2000-3000 words. Maybe a little more. I get needlessly verbose on set ups. Then, the initial fucking with Willow and guys partially clothed in the frat house den, a few cameras come out pretty quickly to cover the filming it part of the request, followed by everything in the warnings section of the request. I presume it's to be Willow doing to rimming rather than the other way round (ooh! another job for Jonathan!) I think it might be interesting to try and fit in a DVDA double-blow and hand job section because Willow seemed pretty good at multi-tasking All the guys human looking per request, but since it's a college campus on the Hellmouth a few of them are human-looking demons. No vampires - they wouldn't be welcome in a frat with demons, and they can't hold their booze. Be interesting to see about a couple of demon features though - excessive semen, maybe, bigger than average cock - or maybe using a demon-mixed lube ("Just like mother used to make. I do have 3000 brothers!" "Too much info, Jerry.") instead of KY that prevents soreness and rubbing-raw so that aspect doesn't become an issue. Have to see what the requester thinks on that side. Anyway, a whole night of it through until the sun is coming up, at which point Willow is exhausted and has come a whole lot, so she's barely awake as they drive her back to where they picked her up and, word of Oz's werewolf nature having got out, drape her across a gravestone directly outside Oz's werewolf cage-crypt, maybe tie her legs up to the sides of a cross and leave her there to dry, so when he is human again he comes out to the sight and smell. "You got pranked, bro!"

Alrighty, I've been real busy but now hoping to start some prep for this soon. As this is the request thread I'll put further thoughts comments for my attempt in my Buffy writers thread - I figure I might need some more detail on what you like. http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/18175-jaydees-review-reply-thread-buffy-subdomain/ And then, as you say, anybody else can take a shot at it too or express interest etc below this post.

Eeep! I always thought it was physical appearance age for non-human characters. Does that mean characters like Kes from Deep Space 9 who is physically and mentally an adult but actually 2 years old or accelerated growth clones (Star Trek again - jem'hadar are ready to kick ass at 3 days) etc all need the minor1 tag?

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His heart was a bloody ruin, but his ass just ached. It could have been worse for him if it was the other way round!

Yule's Gift by BronxWench I greatly enjoyed the erotica at the start, you're pretty much the expert at M/M screwing. It had a good contrast with the later sex, where he's fucking 'cos he has too, but the love isn't there, just the hate. She's earning his ire though, what with getting all aroused with his obvious dislike. Or is it just that she has a job to do and no more control over it than him, and so makes the best of it? I liked the rest of the story, too, it's a good way to tell of the changing seasons and I could picture it well from the descriptions! I think they're lucky though, living in the temperate climate. Think about the season who has to get wet for months at a time! (No, not Scottish Summer). Reminded me of this - Dunno why. Probably just the Oak King reference. I'm pretty simple minded tbh.

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A second comment on Spoiled Meat within 2 weeks? Since it's 7 or 8 years old I wonder if it got linked somewhere? Hi, thank you for taking the time to comment! I never read those stories, the whole MLP resurgence kind of passed me by - I read a couple of Fairy Slayer's MLP stories and they were fun, but I needed help on terminology! Surely, given the description, "Teenaged Heroine The Spoiler puts herself in Killer Croc’s way and becomes both date and dinner, and the content codes, a better question would be "why did you read stuff like this?" I'm assuming it's the thematic side of it you're unhappy with, but the way I figure it is, if someone doesn't like certain themes or content they don't need to subject their eyes to them - there'll be something around the corner with Batman knocking up Nightwing or Beastboy angsting over whether to chat up the half demon girl or the all demon boy that'll be more to their tastes! Thanks again for your comment. Maybe avoid any of my other stories? Except You! You! is good.

I haven't forgotten! Still hoping to get some comments out. The Frost Effect by Kokoa_B Jackie seemed a very likeable character! It seemed more of a prologue - is there going to be a further story coming? Does southern hemisphere Summer have a different relationship with Kris? Xmas right in the middle there Good start though!

A couple of reviews from Broken_Ball who, and I may be going out on a limb here, is probably a Batman fan Thank you for both of the reviews! It's great to get feedback I see on your profile you like 'reader insert' and funny stuff, so I'd recommend trying my story "You!" which is a second person story that is mildly amusing. Killer Frost Killer I did a KF story as a challenge! I don't actually know the character all that well - I know Captain Cold way better So I probably won't do a further part, sorry! . Re - the Batman meta idea - If written properly, with full respect for his abilities, I figure it'd be over too quickly - the superhero rapist wouldn't even make it to shooting his load before Batman kicked the door in and then broke his arms, legs, and that little bone that's quite hard to do. Because he's the goddamn Batman. Also, Stargirl dies in two of the stories and is horribly violated in a third, so if they were connected together then investigation point one would be "How come Stargirl keeps coming back from the dead and suffering horribly again?" A better writer than me could do a kickass job though, so it's a fine idea but above my skill level! Stargirl: Black Bred White Bread A lot of my superhero stories have bad ends. I think I was probably exposed to Garth Ennis at too early an age, but it's less so in other things I've done! I think. Maybe. *looks at own sig* Who the fuck am I kidding? I'm a monster. Yeah, the whole pissing for degradation thing is definitely a niche audience thing. In a few stories I've taken it further and used shit, so it could have been worse The thing of it is, the more extreme stories are not aimed at casual readers so if I lose a few I'm not so bothered - as long as they stick around for my non-extreme stuff! Like You! You! is good. Stargirl couldn't afford Deathstroke! She could probably stretch to King Shark. And I think I just gave myself an entirely unconnected story idea. Hold on a minute! You'd like me to make Stargirl a villain? Would the inevitable follow up then be Stargirl "getting her due" as a villain alongside Killer Frost? I'm on to your villains in peril fetish I kid, I kid... I did do a rape revenge story with Cho Chang from Harry Potter and it wasn't that great, so I don't know if I'd do any better with Stargirl - it's a thought though! Thanks again for all of your thoughts! I'm really glad you took the time to read through and leave comments, and while obviously it wasn't entirely to your liking I'm glad you got some enjoyment from them. I don't know when I'll have time to write again, but hopefully it'll be something enjoyable next time, or just an ending to the Stargirl story - I did start on it, but then haven't had time since, so I think I might start again from scratch.

The Horsecock of a Different Color Thank you for your review! I don't think I'll add more to this one, but I think there's a good chance I'll do Dorothy with other characters at some point! I would really like to do a story with her and the Witch, and maybe also the flying monkeys.

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Well, can't fight destiny. *evil laughter* I guess that Chapeltown connection explains why the Spirit of Dark and Lonely Water was so mardy.

pippychick's been reading JayDee fics, a dicey prospect at best... Thank you for both of your reviews and for taking the time to read my stories! There is a great deal of terrible stuff on my profile, but I guess Fuck Tradition! is one of the more normal and vanilla stories, even if it is a threesome. I liked the series it is based on, but I've been a big fan of a lot of stuff I've seen Rowan Atkinson in. Carry Ace This was for one of that set of pain in the ass prompts, this being Embrangle*. As with 9 or 10 of the others I'd never heard it before and had look it up. For some reason this was the story that resulted. It's not actually the end, she's still alive! Get her in some alien healing device she'll be as good as new. Physically. Plus maybe one of those mind wipes. Yup, nothing like a bit of shit in the mouth to make folks sick. The other thing that works quite well is "and then they made her eat Wendys chicken nuggets." McCoy was a brilliant Doctor, shame it was such a short period at the role. Fuck Tradition! I don't tend to go back to the old oneshots, and if I did I don't know that I could make him protest convincingly. He seemed like one sniff of a fireman's hose and he'd forget all about Maggie. "Wait a minute... this is what man on man is? I prefer this! Don't tell mum. Ooh, my curly wurly's melted down my leg... going to lick it clean?" Although... Kevin undercover as a woman... that might be fun. As well as appallingly offensive from an SJW point of view. Thank you again! *I've forgotten what it means again.

The Slave of Bones now 25226 hits and 4 reviews! Thanks for your query; to answer your question, she wouldn't. Nor, I suspect, would she rape Harry. This here is one of those request fics where the actual porn thing the person wants to see is so unlikely and out of character or continuity that the only way for a tired porn hack like me to write it is out of character. Thus, for anybody who wants to see the idea "Amelia rapes Harry and then he becomes an auror sex slave" they'll overlook the unlikely characterisation, the impossible behaviour, the clunky descriptive text and spoken lines like, “For tonight, I will leave you like this. If you learn to behave with respect and service me sufficiently well, I will permit you further degrees of movement, slave. Do you understand? Remember that your life is in my hands and say, yes Goddess.” hence the smattering of positive reviews, while everybody else has your reaction! The follow up question then is, "Well, why post it on the internet?" to which I reply, "because of the people who do want to touch themselves over it." Next: An AU in which Amelia's cable stops working, and Harry is the guy sent to fix it.

Spoiled Meat is an old story. It is... not WAFF. Thank you for your review! And not just because the third and fourth sentences sound like something I'd write as porn. Have you read anything from Soemele or Deathstalker yet? or try my Firefly fic. It's my post holiday season diet plan - read a JayDee fic and then lose 12 pounds in hurling as well as toning up the stomach muscles with all the heaving. It's always nice when someone takes the time to leave their thoughts on one of my little eldritch abominations, and while I'm sorry that you were left somewhat the worse for wear by it, I suspect from the tone that you'll be over things pretty fast! I think the warnings and summary do make the content clear so at possibly the surprise will have been slightly negated slightly. Thanks again!

You really do nail atmosphere well - s'the same with that Harry Potter story I reviewed before, that had an amazing sense of desolation in the ruins.

Still won't let me like posts, but that's so cool! Thanks so much for taking the idea. I will read it tonight and review! I'm gonna have Donald Pleasence's voice echoing in my head all day Edit: Holy fuck! It's awesome! Review left

Harry Potter and Naruto get together to complain how their girlfriends/wives are sluttily cheating on them seems to be the way to go based on the request forums. That or Paranormal Teenage Sodomy (which is also the top hot indie band in Seattle)

Stargirl: Black Bred White Bread Thank you for your review! Yup, definitely a lot less gory than some of my other stuff. I did start on the last chapter and then I got really busy and haven't had time to write for a few weeks. From the feedback I've had, a lot of folks are keen to see the PG idea. I might have to do a separate story sometime, "Power Girl Rips Off Every Rapist's Balls" It'd be totally nuts.

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'kay! Glad it's probably easy to identify