JayDee

I didn't want to put too much in the way of spoilers in the review, but I wondered at the end if one of the first clues to his nature was that he couldn't remember ever not having the beard? Also, it looks like your profile picture isn't loading correctly for me? http://members.adult-fanfiction.org/profile.php?no=1296767214 Not sure if that's something you know about, a wider site issue, or just something that needs reloading sometimes?

Makes sense! I'll leave it in Fallout for now.

Category name: Fallout: New Vegas Section category to be in: Games Do you have any stories for it?: Yes.

A Song Of Forgotten Beauty didn't have a title until I was ready to post it. It doesn't feel great now, but I always go on the basis that any title is better than none. No matter how terrible it is. Even just one random word. Look! "Sausage" that could be the title for just about any M/M fic! At least I resisted, "Beautiful Plumage!" Thank you! I did try to emphasise their beautiful but still inhuman appearances, with the feathers and the movements and the birdy vocalisations. And, well, the suggestion of egg laying. Although if the myths have taught us anything, it's that what comes out of the egg might not be what you'd expect. Like a horse for a hero or something. Actually feeling like you're there is often a negative for my stories, but who wouldn't want a lovely coastal meal followed by sex with a mythical Thracian King? I mean, besides Jerry Falwell. Thank you! I actually tried to cover that with his little monologue, everything he did he did because the fates had always decided on it, and so he was able to endure his torment and look forward to what came afterwards. Yeah, they were attractive to the Greeks, but by the time the likes of Virgil was writing you'd think they nested in the Ugly tree. "The body of a majestic bird, and a face like an abandoned shit farm." The Aneid, Book III line 212* I actually kept spelling it as Aiello while writing Had to do a find/replace, hope I got 'em all. Same with spelling Phineus as Phineas. So, when I do an Urban Fantasy version of Leon/The Professional with Tony turning into a half-bird and screwing Leon over the cafe table you'd have to avoid it? "Nobody knocks off Tony! Sqaaawwwk!" *Just kidding. He actually wrote, "No worse monsters than these, no crueller plague, ever rose from the waters of Styx, at the gods’ anger. These birds have the faces of virgin girls, foulest excrement flowing from their bellies, clawed hands, and faces always thin with hunger." Which is why these days they all work in the fashion industry.

It was a pretty good film, less confusing than Southland Tales too! I really liked the soundtrack, that was a great cover of White Rabbit especially. I just didn't get why she was so keen to get lobotomised at the end, all she needed to say was "Yo, doc, my evil Stepdad paid Blue to have it done, quit it will ya?" and they'd totally have not done it. Maybe I missed something. Such as, she was actually insane.

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: A Song Of Forgotten Beauty Review replies link: Review Replies -Books Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult + Fandom: Books > Myths Pairing: Aello/Phineus/Ocypete Warnings: 3Plus, ChallengeFic, COMPLETE, Fingering, Hum, M/F, Oral

You! Thanks to all four of you who've so far reviewed part two! (to save me writing it four times below in the same post. I grateful, but lazy ) There were something like 185 hits for the first six reviews which is a very good ratio for something without sex and in second person. I haven't added a Minor2 tag because the troll in part 2 isn't under 18 although You think he might be in dialogue due to the troll's manchild troll/shitty gamer tendancies. He's at least 18, maybe 19. It was originally going to be a oneshot story, but I thought I could do another part with it - as long as it is still a little funny it's all good! The thing with humor is to try and stop before it is beaten into the ground and scraping the barrell. Don't demons and flames go together? It seemed appropriate, and as I said further up the thread the idea of her travelling to see a troll seemed to work! Never trust a demoness! She might be using her stories to cast evil magic into the mind of readers, or have some other cunning plan. Or she might be a genuine suethor. I think it could get confusing if I did a third party from a different "you" perspective, since the troll and the demoness are going to the con without the "you" person... even this sentence is utterly confusing to me. Maybe part three could go first person... "I am a troll. This smoking hot demon chick totally appeared in my room!"... then the title would be "You! and I!"... or just have the original You! read about the carnage on the internet... decisions, decisions... I might have to write the adventures of Princess Asras next. Probably without dismemberment to maintain the lighthearted tone. "Gosh! Isn't she fantastic? She's much better than following Aslan!" As long as it's still funny it is worth it! I think it probably does help that anybody writing here or reading here can relate to Sarsa's style of writing and the troll's trolling. Not sure if I'd actually be able to have her at the con, unless, just occured, I could have her pull the original "You" there the next day to have a nice time at the con, despite their protests. I'd kind've like to see her meet bronies. Or get into an argument with one of those futa guys who say proper futa characters should never have balls. With talented writers she's probably be like "Yeah, that's good, but if I put my characters adventures in there in second person or first person it would be better!" same as with Narnia or Tarzan Ahh, of course. I can see why you'd think that he'd be getting raped- it's implied as a threat and there's quite a lot of rapey content out there anyway, not least in my story profile, but I'd always have a RapeFic tag if I actually included anything like that. I nearly put one on just for the threat. Because if you don't use the right trigger tags the moderators flay the skin from your back. Or possibly just give you a warning to change the tag. I don't actually know for sure and don't want to take the risk. I actually had a big idea around Under Joan's Bed to take it up to about four chapters but I never got around to it. Would have been playing with perception - as the monster and demon real or was she mad? In the end she was gonna be shown not mad. Though I guess that kind of thing has been done to death. Thanks for your comments on those two stories as well! If you only want to write little chunks at a time, you could probably do a pretty good classic style CYOA - maybe each paragraph as a drabble! I got my harshest, most brutal flames from the Firefly fandom. Some of them were pretty trollish. I'd totally have kept them if they weren't taking up the database space, but I think I copy/pasted them into the writers corner flames thread! I'd written a rough draft of the first paragraph ages ago, I think in a forum thread, as a joke around the idea of a second person story talking about why second person stories are hated by some folks. It was a little clunky, but I happened to spot it again in my scraps folder and thought it would expand into a decent prompt oneshot. Then I guess I did it into a two parter. I'm keeping it short becuase the chapter length is decided by the weekly prompt format rules which specify either twitfic, drabble of up to 1000 words flashfic - I think the monthly prompts don't have a limit - but I quite like the challenge of trying to fit it to 1000 words with more detail and overblown description available than in a drabble. Plus I also find drabbles harder. I've tried to avoid giving any gender indicators for "you" - Sarsa threatened to stick it up the ass but that's an option for both genders, and anybody masturbating to internet porn with a tight belt would need to undo it as implied at the start of part 2. If there's any bit that does seem to say that "you" is definately male or female let me know and I'll try to edit it for more ambiguity! I want it to be an equal opportunities second person fic

Yeah, but the logical conclusion of Andersen's thought process is everyone needs to die so everyone can be in heaven! He's up there with Judge Death's "All crime is committed by the living so life itself is a crime!" It's values dissonance I guess

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: You! - Part 2: Desire Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult + Fandom: Original Pairing: Still isn't one. Warnings: AFFO, ChallengeFic, Exhib, F/D, Hum

That was definately Osgood's opinion!

You! Thank you for your review! I'm glad it was amusing, I tried for a bit of a humorous tone. There's probably a lot to be said for avoiding most everything else I've written except maybe "The Slumber Party of Evil Doom"'s first part, but it's good of you to try something and thanks again for the review.

It's risk and reward; you might be horribly murdered by Cybermen, or you might run into the Doctor and Clara and get a selfie!

Sounds like a plan! Share a link when it's done and I'll try and feedback just like younger, hotter, 2011 JayDee did for the last story!

"If Tom jumped off a cliff would you too?" "Yep! Already did!"

If you've ever died this topic may be triggering and so you should stop reading now. I'm serious. Get your rotting zombie/overdressed vampire/transparant ghost etc ass out of here. I think it'll be an execution for me, probably by firing squad or decapitation. Or, possibly more likely, a freak accident involving a copy of Catch 22, two marmots, a 1958 Plymouth Fury and a telephone directory with every name containing the letter "t" crossed through. How about you? Hmm?

Me!, I mean, You! Thanks for your review! I hope I got the flavor of such a title without actually using an existing title, although I wouldn't be surprised... As for using Tarzan I wanted an older character who might get fanfiction and also be well enough known to most readers, Tarzan seemed to fit! I wonder if I'd have got more views if I'd put "humorous" in the summary? or short? Thank you also! I'm glad it's had such a positive impression - like your Dragon Age story getting me to play DA:O! It's just a bit of good natured ribbing for the suethors Hey, as long as they follow the TOS/Rules Futa demoness writers got as much right to be here as any of us! Now I kind've want to do a follow up where her first review is a troll author, laughing away about his abusive review... just before discoveing that freed futa demonesses can travel through the internet and express their displeasure about trolling. Say... if the trolls name was Josh, and she turned him into a tree.... "You 2: Josh! You Are Tree!" ... I got loads of those terrible U2 puns. I could do them all night, because until she gets feedback she still hasn't found etc... Well thank you again! It's been nice to get so many reviews for this one

You! Thank you! I'm glad it made ya laugh - She's writing Second Person self insert OC fics in old fashioned fandoms. She's lucky she's not getting flames! Although obviously the typical demoness doesn't mind flames. Probably quite homely. Not getting reviews is a little saddening sometimes.

You! reviewed again! Thank you! I don't read as many stories as I used to myself, down to time as much as anything, but I try and review myself when I do. A lot of people seem to hate second person, and quite a proportion are not keen on first person, though it's easier to do well. I used to enjoy the old Choose Your Own Adventure stories when I was a kid but otherwise... eh. In a similar (but not second person) style of writing are "The Slumber Party of Evil Doom" and "Under Joan's Bed" and in books "Jenny From The Pond". A lot of the other stuff, well, I'd advise checking the codes closely. Very closely. And then avoiding to be on the safe side. If you do come by and see this I'd be interested to know what you were expecting to happen?

You! is in no way related to Them! although afterwards I was looking at the exclamation mark and thought, well, darn it. I was on the fence about whether it needed a rape tag since some of the phrases could possiblybe triggering, but there's no actual rape. In the end I decided against it, but if it's thought I should add one by anybody else at all I'll do so. I've had a review, but if you're going to read the fic do it first 'cos spoiler! Thank you for the review! I see you actually left the last review for me under original too, so it's good to see this one appealed to you as well and on a general note thanks for giving original fics get some feedback! Another story which is of a similar style would be The Slumber Party of Evil Doom, which also has no sex. This one here, well, I cheated a little. The first paragraph was based on a few jokey lines I scrawled ages ago, and I thought with the prompts that I could make them into a story. It took an hour or so, but I'm glad it hangs together well! I'm alright with mean reviews myself, both because I've developed the skin for it and because sometimes people need to be nasty to get a point across (and, well, some of nasty!fic deserves meanness) but I think with first time authors or folks who haven't done a story that might deserve it it is pretty bad. Mean reviews can put people right off writing when all they need is some constructive feedback. I try and point out errors and things when I review because I know how easy it can be to miss little things but I also like to say what I liked, or thought worked, or got aroused by if I can. Sometimes I only got the time to say "Awesome!" though Anyway, thanks again!

I keep meaning to watch Sucker Punch. I got a DVD here (what us grumpy folks used to watch before netflix but after VHS.... ) I'm a wait until I've seen it and then I'll check out your drabble

Pen Name: JayDee Story link: You! Review replies link: Review Replies -Original Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult + Fandom: Original Pairing: Isn't one. Only haven't used the NoSex tag because of the sexualised nudity. Warnings: AFFO, ChallengeFic, Exhib, F/D, Hum

She's barking up the wrong tree there! He'll never grow up. Or if he does, it's as Robin Williams. No, it's Hook she ought to get in with. The man! The legend! Captain James Hook! ...I'll go now.

No, no! Not like scolding at all - what I was getting at was, well, if it's not your cup of tea it's better to have some coffee rather than choke it down You wanted the best joke, you ended up with number 2!

1475 hits on The Boy Who Ate Shit And..., but a distinct lack of comments. I might actually ask for some on part 2 on the basis that if they part one and came back for more they obviously have some thoughts! See, in this case, with the scat tag, that'd be a great time for you to react as I did with Minor1 and flee. Thank you for the review! like I said to BW and PW if it's something you folks would want to read y'all shouldn't read it! Good of you to press down the distaste and give us a few words though, so to cover the points - New Idea - I decided to do the story recently when I was totally out of food and had to eat at McDonalds, but I think there's other HP scatfics out there! The Eyes - Well, entirely needless cruelty is something of a trademark for me. When I had a title like Flaying Solo, Solo was gonna get skinned... but here it's about sensory deprivation - sure, a blindfold would work but Bellatrix isn't very nice - and also toilets don't have eyes. I had more written to explain it, but dropped it for more sexual detail to make sure it deserved a PWP tag! The Footjob - Apart from just being pretty humiliating to Harry to be sexually assaulted and have his body respond to it, It's about warping his sexual reactions to be aroused at shit eating. If he comes every time he tastes shit it becomes association. This being a PWP, and Bellatrix being a witch, it's happened quickly. In time for the next part's not especially shocking twist, If I get round to writing it. Also because I thought the partially rough, forced, foot manipulation was hot, I guess. I don't even have a foot fetish. Well... maybe for Shokan feet. Coffee and Bran muffins - After dropping the kids off she went and had some hot spicy Indian food and played some Johnny Cash. Tonks - Wrong! At the end of that Harry was dead and Bellatrix was in Tonks' body. It's another world. I hope I didn't just spoil the surprise for anybody who hasn't read that four part corpse fucking spectacular. Thanks again for your comments, but if you give part 2 a miss when it's out I wouldn't blame you!

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