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  1. Thank you for the plug! Though to really fit the AFF template it probably should have been the boy twin getting knocked up. And thank you kindly for the review also, I’ll reply over in my thread!
  2. Just found myself reading a graphic handjob scene with a 15 year old with zero warning or tags. This is what I get for getting a book from the literary section of the library rather than reading AFF.

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    2. Desiderius Price

      Desiderius Price

      @CloverReef  Tuna salad’s certainly among the palatable lunch choices for me, though given a choice, I’d prefer PB&J. :)    More seriously, good M/F scenes in a M/M story can be used to make a point.  I do that in Dale’s Game to show the social conventions, of how “normal people” ought to be, that the characters resort to using M/F to appear “normal” to the outside world to show the social pressure that’s there (and the effects of the gay discrimination in play)..

      Also, I think AFF’s taken that first step in AFF-world-domination, it’s a way better “social media” than other platforms.   Especially as I rarely self-censor like I do in those other places.

    3. CloverReef

      CloverReef

      @Desiderius Price I agree. M/F scenes can absolutely be useful and effective tools in M/M stories. 

    4. Desiderius Price

      Desiderius Price

      I even manage to dabble in a bit of F/F, small drop, in a heavy bucket of M/M action. 

  3. ‘K.
  4. Twinpregnation made it past 1000 hits in like 5 days, and still has maybe another two or three before it drops off the front page. I’m taking this as a sign It has either a) a good title b) a good summary, c) popular code(s) or d) a mixture of the three. I read (and reviewed!) another story with like 180 hits that was much, much better and has now dropped off the front page. I feel this is an indication of what I mean by a lotta hits not necessarily being a good indicator of a great story, since a story with 5 times less the hits posted a bit befiore is demonstrably superior to mine. Ahh well. Anyways, I’ve plowed on with another re-write. Haven’t got a title yet (Was considering An Ass for An Ass, as when I googled it to see if anybody else had used the reference, there were’t any uses I’ve heard of and none for fanfic.) but I am again making it original. I’ve been wanting to re-do this one for a while and looked at two or three different fandoms -came closest to Galaxy Quest since that features a convention – before deciding the best thing would be to make even huger changes to the main character, and turn it original. The biggest change will now be that instead of being a pure MF story, it’ll be an MM story and a Pre-Op Transwoman/M which means a more heavy re-write of one of the scenes (I might chop it out completely for another story and write it entirely new one, not sure yet), but a lot of the structure and basic story is still pretty good. An OC who was previously male I’ve turned into a Transwoman also, mostly because I was finding three sets of he/his pronouns too much of a pain to keep seperated with my more limited maleslash experience. Anyway, seems to be working so far.
  5. It looks like the AFF version has been deleted. The link on the story chapters has the old domain, but story IDs didn’t change and the updated domain with the same story ID would be http://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600000183 and there isn’t anything there. User could have taken it down theirself, or if they were underage or similar at the time had it deleted. Looking at DustFactory’s profile FF there’s a 2017 update that they are on livejournal and the livejournal profile last updated in 2017 says they are 20. Given that the DustFactory account currently on AFF was created in 2016 I’d veer towards “Was underage at the time, got deleted, but came back later.” Given they also link an archiveofourown profile and it’s not there, and describe waterlogged as mostly crappy in their FF profile, I suspect it falls under “Awkward old shame they’d rather if it wasn’t out there, thanks all the same, anyway here’s wonderwall”.
  6. Once again, good luck and I hope you get a good response for it!
  7. I figure it’s not general enough for writers section, so journally it is. This is my scraps folder contents. This is a link to the Imgur image host, showing a file directory. It is a non pornographic picture. There’s 31 files there, tiny for many of you I am sure, so lets have a look If I have misinterpreted the rules and this link/description doesn’t meet the non-pornographic picture link rules then basically just imagine a list of documents in a folder with names like those below. Babylon files – These files all relate to Keith Inc.'s amended technical challenge in this thread before the year is out, it’ll be 10 years since I started working on my planned project which has been through more changes than the main character’s outfits. One day I hope to finish this fucker. The basic outline is 10 1000 word parts, each using ten of the words once, following a drag artist with the stage name Babylon. This may change again. BeautyPlan – This is a story outline for a re-telling of Sleeping Beauty with Harry and Draco. I, uh, I got no excuse for that. Just wanted to get it written down really. I think. I can’t even remember the intention now. BeforeSheWasShameless – This is the plan for a big prequel for Moz, my Elder Scrolls: Oblivion fanfic, Ending the Fan. I liked the title idea as much as anything, though I see from google others have used it, and also fancied writing her as a 18 year old apprentice alchemist and devotee of Mara before she got the taste for the violence. Cat2 – is chapter 2 of the Harry/Bellatrix scat fic I didn’t get round to finishing. Was writing disgusted Dobby and laughing. Courtney4 – unfinished further chapter of that Stargirl fic, the first parts were re-writes/heavily extended from my old story, this was going to be all new and probably end with Power Girl kicking everybody’s ass. Including the readers. The Endis files – These are plans for two different stories around characters created by someone called Devil_PS. I wrote Miharu Sarutobi Must Resist! for them, and then took a shot at a story with two other of their OCs, Gwendyn and Kayla. Congirls was going to be them Bamf’d to earth at a Convention and one of them getting the other to screw congoers to generate enough magic to go home, NoGoodDeed was going to be them helping out an old wizard who turns out to be a pervert, but beating him in the end thanks to a carefully foreshadowed vial of demon spunk. It, uh, it made sense in context. Everscamped – A story outline for Oblivion with the Staff of the Everscamp attendant Scamps being a little hornier than in game. Alright, a lot hornier. Basically, Moz was gonna fuck a load of scamps. I think it was from an idea that didn’t end up being a chapter of Ending the Fan. Facehugged files – Two basically finished chapters of a Aliens fic I did. Honestly, just need a final bit doing and I can post it. It’s a bit like that Pan story, I did most of the work years ago and can’t motivate myself to polish. it really needs a little re-work and maybe another chapter for an ending rather than tacking on a paragraph, but should be ok. Fallout Stuff – Random ideas and half written scenes, Fallout 3. One was about a low intelligence high strength character having sex, the other was based on a Fallout roleplay moment I had about a really evil character finding that even they had standards and a moral line in the sand. FiveIdeas – The ideas from this post – One became The Wish by Pippychick. So throwing out ideas can work, folks! Reststop – A prompt story that didn’t work out. Lupa has a curse of silence and she isn’t happy, luckily there’s a nasty guy she can feed on. Might manage to salvage it sometime. The ReWrite files (content names redacted!) – old stories of mine that are not on AFF that I could re-write some time. It’s pretty hard to find matching fandoms for some of them, but at the same time I haven’t been able to think up different enough original characters yet. Although I’ve had no feedback on Twinpregnation I like how it turned out with original characters so mght go down that route more. (And Twinpregnation has hit 420 dragon prints in 24 hours so smoke ‘em if you got ‘em). Slimemaid – Someone requested a story about a guy falling in with maids made out of slime, which is apparantly a fetish. I took a shot but didn’t get far. Unlikely to ever re-visit this one. TDW – “The Demolished Woman” a planned Firefly Bester x Kayee fic with Serenity’s old mechanic unhappy about losing his job, and inspired purely the original mechanic’s canon name and by the title of Alfred Bester’s book “The Demolished Man.” A, uh, a pretty dark story plan. WendyOKoopa – Yeah, I was gonna do Mario x Wendy WAFF. It was gonna be lovey dovey. Fight me. Willow files –For this challenge – I made a start, and then I had the busiest time of my life with work overtime. Was just ridiculous. It’s another one I hope to get back too, but with the size of the project it’s not one I feel up to attempting right now. Could be an even better story than Shokan Lust if I ever do it though. Consensual witch gangbang with lashings of ginger pubes and spunk. I’ve had other scraps and bits over the years I’ve deleted, and some ideas I’ve put on the forum I probably should have saved and may still do. A lot of ideas I’ve had though have been as I was about to go to sleep and I’ve never felt up to getting up and writing notes so they fail. Eh. There we go.
  8. Good luck making it a legitimate novel, George! I hope it works out for you.
  9. Author: JayDee /JD Title: Twinpregnation Summary: One night in the long summer after graduating High School, Caitlin catches her twin Conor ‘enjoying’ her picture. She’s not upset. Feedback: All the feedback in the word. All of it. Fandom: Original hetero incest Pairing: Twin Brother / Twin Sister Warnings: ChallengeFic COMPLETE Contro Inc MF Oneshot Oral Preg PWP Solo WAFF Solo story or chaptered story: Solo URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109073
  10. Prose and songwriting/poetry are differing skillsets. If you’ve got both, go for it. if you haven’t got both, go for it anyway with enthusiasm because fuck it, writing’s about having fun. I’ve read a few books with chunks of original lyrics in and it’s been mostly fine – one author had comic songs at the start of every chapter, though that was a funny book.
  11. Can do! Thank you for the interest. I keep making little changes to it and then changing again. Come the end of the week I’ll just say fuck it and stick it up anyway
  12. Similar to BW, I think celebrity because it’s still, ultimately, about the celebrity – just nested a level down – I figure the robot is effectively a fan work of the celebrity within the story universe, and then the story is about this celebrity fan work. I’d say it would be the same with fiction, if you had an eccentric billionaire genius comics fan create a Life Model Decoy of Nick Fury to fondle, you’d put it on Marvel rather than originals. Robots definitely seem like a lot less hassle for the kidnapper/rapist of leisure tbh, unless they have the ability to grow and learn and go all SkyNet and then, suddenly, eccentric billionaire wakes up to find his harem has broken their programming, taken control of his security systems, and want to play 3D Monster Maze with him. Would be one outcome. You could definitely have a lot of fun with the concept I’m sure. Wind up all your readers with an april fools update with “My god! They were robots all along! And so was I!” Or maybe not Hey, Spike tried the “robot version to fuck” with Buffybot! [off topic] And from that, and it being Mal’s topic. I remembered the memory of a story I read a long time ago of a Buffy/Firefly crossover with BuffyBot being found ad reactivated in the far future by Jayne. It was short but funny and didn’t linger on how the fuck Jayne would manage it. Shit, I hope I reviewed.[/off topic]
  13. Taking a different route. I’ve re-written one of my old stories as an Original story for the first time, and stuck in a cameo from Kizzy and the team. It’s currently about twice as long as the original while still maintaining the PWP urgency. I’ve been very careful that the new characters have nothing in common with the original story except for still being brother and sister. I’ve made them twins, and changed details of age and height and build and setting and lots more. It’s hackwork, to be sure, but no worse than if someone changed a Twilight fanfic to an original one. The working title is Twinpregnation and I have finished several drafts (and before I finished it the first time, several more) and I feel I need to read it through a little more, after a break, to check for more spelling errors. This is one I’ve got a really good feeling about. There’s no violence and it might even qualify for a WAFF tag. Though that could be a step too far. I hope to post it by next weekend!
  14. “Pumpkin Pie” would fit great if it wasn’t too old a joke. Turducken Fuckin’ I dunno we’re gonna need more info I guess to make an effort away from generic food references. Although my best ever story title idea sadly never got used.
  15. Sweet Potato Alabama
  16. I’ve only read Scott Lynch’s The Lies of Locke Lamora but he built a pretty good world there. And even found a different use for barrels of horse piss. Which implied there was someone who had the job of collecting horse piss. I hope to read more of his stuff some day. I guess with the apple example it also tells us there’s an economy where a vendor can support theirself selling apples and some form of currency.
  17. JayDee

    An old Tomb Raider Fic

    Deathstalker removed all his remaining stories from AFF shortly after six were removed by moderators for linking his Patreon following This thread I cannot recall if the Tomb Raider story referred above was one of the six.
  18. Thank you! I appreciate it.
  19. Story codes now amended on all my 100+ uploads so I no longer incorrectly appear to be the archive’s most prolific author of MC fiction. Also had to delete a lot of the old “language” tag from summaries and also a code “D/A” I have no idea what it was for, isn’t on the list now!

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    2. JayDee

      JayDee

      I think D/A must have been a trigger tag of some sort, which has since been renamed, as looking through google it’s on a lot of rougher stories. Can’t recall what it meant though. Other amusing things was the way the code moved “Tent” out of “Tenth” to leave my summary on a LOTR fic referring to a “h walker” – there’s a few others still with that in the domain and no tentacle content! – and also how it moved “Rape” out of “Raped” on just one story leaving it describing a character as “d and violated” which kinda still makes sense with modern internet slang around “Giving the D”. Overall though, still by far the better/only option than trying to do the stories manually.

    3. Desiderius Price

      Desiderius Price

      Scripts can be… interesting in their side-effects.

    4. JayDee

      JayDee

      JayDee: Still better than scriptfics!

      Scriptfic author: Ayyyy! Why you gotta bust my balls?

      JayDee: There was a CBT request.

      JayDee stops typing way before the 10 lines of story on forum limit just to be on the safe side.

  20. So, when I first uploaded “The Taking of Felicia Hardy” there was only a comics domain, DC and Marvel went in together (can be seen on wayback machine!), and the only comics fandom with a seperate section were X-Men. During the big clean up/re-organisation years ago marvel stories under the old comics domain got placed in a subcat called misplaced stories presumably to eventually go to the repurposed Xmen-now-marvel domain but for obvious reasons very far down the list of priorities with limited admin/tech time. I’m currently going through my stories in dribs and drabs cleaning up the code isses from the big “story codes moved from summary to their own box” thing, updating MC to MCD, removing Herm from Hermione stories where she doesn’t have a penis (a shocking break from canon, I admit) and didn’t notice until I’d saved “The Taking of Felicia Hardy” that as users are not allowed to put anything in the misplaced folders the story manager had moved this story from misplaced to “little Orphan Annie” which is the top of the list of story catagories in the domain. There is no option to move back. I confirm I hadn’t changed the catagory at all, just deleted remains of tags from the summary box. I’ve dumped it in comics Misc instead since I don’t want to enrage the Annie fans who tend to be a small but heavily armed fandom. At this stage would it be best if I just deleted it with the sad loss of 36K hits and 12 reviews, and re-load it to Marvel domain and risk pissing off fans there with a repost, or if there is any option for one of the archive mods to shunt it back into misplaced for me since I have no access? If it’s something only one of the admins can do I’ll take the hit and delete/re-upload, as I know how busy they are, but let me know please!
  21. This is part of why I am not a great beta. If I enjoy something too much I don’t think too closely about anatomy!
  22. You! So I was reading a chapter of a first person story recently (GeorgeGlass’s Mia: Confessions of a Dickgirl, which I need to also put a review on the site for now it’s loaded!) and it worked really well. Thinking more than ever about taking the I! sequel idea mentioned above, and actually going for it. I think the biggest weakness I have with it would be trying to make all five characters sound unique in languague rather than just interests for the narration for their parts. And also whether I’d be able to get enough humor out of Kate chewing on her own ass to deal with an itch in first person because I’d probably have more of that kind of thing than “noble wolf hunting through the forest” Thank you for your comment! I realise this was a little on the nose for Mary Sue fanfiction titles, but I’ve seen some that were pretty fucking close to it! Although Sarsa was lying to and manipulating You! she is a genuine Suethor who really lucked out by getting released by someone with knowlege of the modern fanfic world as opposed to the much more restricted old school “Writing for yourself/fanzines” world. I’ll have to finalise a real name for Sarsa at somepoint, with “Sarsa” or “Sarsa Parilla” just being her pen name. As well as those demon style titles “The earliest records describe this demon as “The One Who Writes.” They say she was shipping Odysseus with her OCs before the fall of Troy! They say she burnt the place after a bad review…” And thank You! again for your comment :)
  23. A Song Of Forgotten Beauty… I really should have plumped for that "Beautiful Plumage!" title. I mean, it’s not even a song. “A Flashfic of Forgotten Beauty” would have been more intellectually honest. Thank you for your review! I always appreciate the feedback. With the ‘Dribs, Drabs and Doggy tales’ prompts I always felt a big part of the challenge/appeal was fitting a complete story or chapter into 1000 words for the flashfic option. I thought the change to the rules to remove a word limit kind’ve killed the spirit of it for me, but by that point I wasn’t doing them regularly and everyone else seemed happy with it so s’just me! Absolutlely there are some prompt stories where it worked better than others, because some of them could have been much improved with more in depth description and characterisation rather than just a flashed captured scene. With at least one story that had flashfic prompt chapters I also did some longer chapters to put more detail in and do things it was hard to do well in 1000 words. In this case, yep, a long detailed threesome as well could have been genuinely hot! Ahhh well. At least there’s no golden showers, and while there are wings they aren’t attached to randy god-swans. You’re probably right about the hyphen. I think I’d have put it in if I was concerned about the clarity of the line but it seemed to flow ok. I’ll make a mental note to go back and update it when I’ve finished my big ol’ code cleansing program (changing all the MC’s to MCD again!). Thanks once again!
  24. Have just noticed that when the program was run (or however it worked!) to move tags from the old place in summary box to the new place in their own box, it moved all my “MCD” tags as “MC” and left the D behind. This isn’t the first time I’ve unexpectedly had the D in the wrong place. I’ll get ‘em updated in a few days as very busy today, and apologies to any searching MC fans who hate character death.

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    2. Desiderius Price

      Desiderius Price

      Didn’t realize you did that.  Though I supposed a spurious [nosex] tag mixed into the lot would raise some suspicion.   More practically, a wall of tags can be intimidating to potential readers, so there’s no real incentive to overtag (this was part of the impetus for me to adopt my current approach, helping the reader figure out which tags are the very important ones to pay attention to, ie, my stories tend to feature a lot of [exhib] and minor1/2).  

      * My autocorrect wanted to make that “1/2” into ½.  I don’t know if I want to know the meaning to [minor½]

    3. GeorgeGlass

      GeorgeGlass

      If Minor½ were a tag, I’d probably have used it by now. (I’m sure at least some readers would agree that in utero sex deserves its own trigger tag.)

    4. Desiderius Price

      Desiderius Price

      Could be twins in the womb… I mean, do we really know what twins are up to in there?   Especially the evil one?

  25. Me? With fear, loathing and the occasional chuckle at a forgotten joke that came out quite well when I look at it again. Also trying to work out what the hell kind of obscure reference a name was likely referring to or punning on. Sometimes I think “hey this wasn’t so bad” and sometimes I think “Eh, s’ok.” With my re-writes of some of my old stories there are bits I’ve felt should have been expanded on more than in the original, so expanded ‘em, and also bits I’ve felt were needlessly mean spirited (in rape/snuff fics! It took some doing!) almost as if I 2007/2008 me was trying to provoke non-perverts who probably were not even reading rather than entertain peverts who were. Long time ago now. If you do go back you can certainly make something worthwhile out of the half-finished, or take scraps and turn them into something new. Good luck if you do! I really don’t remember everything I wrote at all. Sometimes someone says something to me about something I wrote or an old story and I’m like “Really? Ok!” When I had a review on an old original oneshot recently I had literally forgotten everything about it except that I had thought it was terrible at the time, and why I wrote it, and I finally re-read it after the review. Sympathy for the reviewer there. Another thing, reminded by your home-brew experience, a few weeks back I was looking at an old file full of bios and scenery descriptions I wrote for a non-erotic play by email type RPG game in like 2000-2001. Some of those characters were pretty engaging! At least one is like a proto-Kizurial with an alcohol problem.
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