GeorgeGlass

I get the impression that Vanessa and Monty aren't yet all that serious. Also, I sort of have it in my head that Vanessa kind of has a thing for Ferb but won't act on it (in waking life, at least) because of their age difference. Vanessa and Ferb will definitely have to confront the barriers to their having a real-world relationship. Oh, yeah, there's all kinds of ways this can--and will--go. I'm afraid you're expecting a lot more in the way of plot than I'm planning. We're pretty much about to dive right into the "adults-only" portion of this story. Plus, I REALLY don't want to imagine Heinz getting it on with...anybody. I will definitely publish that story (working title: "Danville, We Have a Problem") here. Outer-space disaster awaits!

Thank you!

I wrote this story (http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600094250) some time ago but didn't post it on AFF because I thought it seemed too...extreme. Then I saw a description of another story posted on AFF that makes this one look pretty tame by comparison, so I decided to just go for it. Anyhoo, below are my responses to reviews of this story. Thanks! I'm not that big on sequels, but I do sort of have an idea for one. I'll need to let it cook for a bit longer before I decide whether it's edible.

Re: "There's a New Seraph in Town" Thank you very, very much. Everything you said about the story is exactly what I was trying to achieve. I really appreciate the props, especially from Gabriel himself!

I have a fanfic that I had posted on other sites but that I had never posted here because I thought it was too twisted for AFF. Reading this thread made me realize that there's no such thing, so I posted the story last night. Thank you for the inspiration.

Thanks! I'm here all week.

Re: "There's a New Seraph in Town" Creating a review reply thread before the story has gotten any reviews: blind optimism or shameful arrogance? Yes. In any case, if any of you lovely folks reviews "There's a New Seraph in Town," I will joyfully reply here.

Author: George Glass Title: There’s a New Seraph in Town Summary: A first-year med student is visited by an angel who wants to take Halloween back from the Devil by throwing the ultimate Halloween party. Feedback: Feedback in general and concrit in particular very much appreciated. Fandom: Original-amundo Pairing: Wouldn't you like to know? Actually, I really hope you would. Warnings: M/F, mutual masturbation, miscellaneous fooling around. Oh, and don't mow the lawn when it's wet. Solo story or chaptered story: Chaptered. All chapters have been posted. URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600106551

Thanks! I've been a little distracted lately by a <gasp> original story that I've been inspired to write, but I will be back on the "Sweet Dreams" case soon!

Thanks for all the work, DG. This means the name of the site itself has changed, right? I notice that "Adultfanfiction.net" still appears on the title page and in the headers and such. One thing at a time, I suppose.

Definitely going to try to take maximum advantage of the dream-environment--for the purposes of both plot AND smut.

Fairy-Slayer: I actually sort of imagined this story as a stage play with a single set. Sadly, this is not actually what Future-Candace looks like (per "Phineas and Ferb's Quantum Boogaloo")--hence the whole nerdy discussion about interference from the future and an alternate timeline. A lot of that was a side effect. Candace's new body is so responsive to sexual stimulation that it doesn't much care where that stimulation is coming from. Thanks! I needed some way of not Changing Everyone's Lives Forever. I think they would handle it all with considerably more maturity and good sense. And by they, I mean Jeremy. And if Heinz had the sense God gave spearmint gum, he'd do that very thing. Thank you!

Because I posted this story long before I'd ever heard of review response threads, I responded to the first several comments on this story with a comment of my own. For the sake of completeness, I'll post that comment here first: coldfang66: Thanks VERY much for your reviews of this story and "Rated F." Being true to the characters is extremely important to me, and it's very nice to have the validation. Aysha: Hope you got my PM via the discussion board. Thanks again. Wheatherman: Thanks. I can kind of see what you mean about the "common sense" thing, but there IS precedent for Candace hearing voices (or at least one voice) in her head. More importantly, I needed a substitute for Stacy, who is Candace's de facto common sense. Anon #1: Check out the in-progress "Truth or Dare 2.0". Anon #2: Thanks! andrewmyles: Thanks very much. I don't feel like it's a real Candace story if there isn't a Valuable Lesson at the end. Even if it's cheesy. And I hope the story is adequately fappable.

Thank you! The idea for this story actually came to me a couple of years ago when I thought, "What would happen if Phineas and Ferb somehow saw a porno movie and decided to make their own?" At first, it was just a joke; only later did I decide to actually write it up. It was mainly mean to be porn, but there were so many opportunities for comedy, and for making it more like a real episode of the show, that I couldn't resist them, and it eventually ended up being much more like an '80s sex comedy than straight-up erotica--hence the title. Thank you again!

Other people are indeed connected in their dreams, but the story focuses on these four pretty much exclusively. This is not really going to be an action story (although I've got an action/adventure-heavy story in the works, so keep an eye out for "Danville, We Have a Problem"!), but I'm planning for this one to have more emotional depth than its predecessors. Thanks for the comment!

Yup! And 3, and 4, and maybe 5.

Thanks very much! Being true to the characters is what I'm all about. Well, it's what I'm mostly about; I'm also somewhat about making them have sex. Glad you like it so far. I hope the coming chapters will satisfy.

I tend to agree. Telling reviewers how to write their reviews will just turn them off even more.

Despite having things to do, I couldn't resist doing a little experiment regarding reviews. I looked at the review-to-hit ratio of each of the 5 stories that I have posted both here and at Hentai Foundry, and I found that not only have my stories gotten more than twice as many hits on AFF as they have on HF, they have earned more reviews per hit here, as well. (Both ratios are low, however: The percentage of hits accompanied by a review was 0.28% on AFF and 0.16% on HF.) More subjectively speaking, the quality of the reviews on AFF has also been higher. And that's all Science Boy has to say on that subject.

Fan writers would also want to nail down the terms of the publication beforehand. When I heard about the possibility of DC Comics' properties becoming open for fan writing, I thought, "Hey, I could do that Wonder Woman TV pilot I've been thinking about as a novel instead!" (It would be ever so apropos if Amazon published a Wonder Woman novel.) Then I realized that if I wrote the thing before making some sort of contract with the publisher first, they could basically offer me any crummy terms they want, because there would be nowhere else I could publish it. Such would be the case for any writer who created something based on a property with a single owner.

Usually, if I start a story and the spelling and grammar are really bad, I just quit reading it. I just can't stand reading stories like that--the language distracts too much from the story--and anything I could say in the way of concrit isn't going to make much of a dent, anyway. So any spelling or grammar problems I point out in a review are likely to be minor. I generally spend more of the review talking about what I liked about the story, because if there weren't enough things that I liked, I wouldn't have read through to the end.

Are there any such sites that do? Hentai Foundry QCs images but not written material.

And so continues the epic struggle between quality and content. Nobody cares how awesome your fanfic is if they're not interested in your fandom. That's fine, but unfortunately, the inverse (or whatever the right word is) is also true. A month or so ago I Googled "fanpoodle" because I thought maybe it was part of general fanfic lingo; I didn't know it was actually created here, by you. Maybe this site needs a glossary.

Back when I wrote non-erotic fanfic in a very popular fandom, there were several other authors (all met through FFN, where we reviewed each other's stuff) for whom I betaed and who betaed for me. Now, though, I'm writing erotic PHINEAS AND FERB stories, and other authors who do that (and do it well enough that I would WANT to beta for them or to ask them to beta for me) are extremely rare. Even my wife won't read my stuff--the very idea of P&F erotica freaks her out. That said, I'm a much more skilled writer than I was years ago, so I feel like I can make do without a beta somewhat better than I could have back then. However, I still find that I don't really have any sense of the pace of my own stories; to me, scenes that are a page or two long often seem far longer, because I've reread them or replayed them in my head time and time again in an effort to get them right. I think I've completely lost sight of whatever point I was trying to make in the post. Maybe someone could beta it for me.

Maybe it's pathetic, but getting reviews is usually a thrill for me. The mere fact that the person read the story and had something to say about it is flattering. That said, I definitely prefer some types of reviews over others: Best: "What I like about this story" and constructive criticism reviews OK: "This was fun to read" Worst: "This sux ballz," "You didn't write about what I want you to write about"