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Definitely going to try to take maximum advantage of the dream-environment--for the purposes of both plot AND smut.

Fairy-Slayer: I actually sort of imagined this story as a stage play with a single set. Sadly, this is not actually what Future-Candace looks like (per "Phineas and Ferb's Quantum Boogaloo")--hence the whole nerdy discussion about interference from the future and an alternate timeline. A lot of that was a side effect. Candace's new body is so responsive to sexual stimulation that it doesn't much care where that stimulation is coming from. Thanks! I needed some way of not Changing Everyone's Lives Forever. I think they would handle it all with considerably more maturity and good sense. And by they, I mean Jeremy. And if Heinz had the sense God gave spearmint gum, he'd do that very thing. Thank you!

Because I posted this story long before I'd ever heard of review response threads, I responded to the first several comments on this story with a comment of my own. For the sake of completeness, I'll post that comment here first: coldfang66: Thanks VERY much for your reviews of this story and "Rated F." Being true to the characters is extremely important to me, and it's very nice to have the validation. Aysha: Hope you got my PM via the discussion board. Thanks again. Wheatherman: Thanks. I can kind of see what you mean about the "common sense" thing, but there IS precedent for Candace hearing voices (or at least one voice) in her head. More importantly, I needed a substitute for Stacy, who is Candace's de facto common sense. Anon #1: Check out the in-progress "Truth or Dare 2.0". Anon #2: Thanks! andrewmyles: Thanks very much. I don't feel like it's a real Candace story if there isn't a Valuable Lesson at the end. Even if it's cheesy. And I hope the story is adequately fappable.

Thank you! The idea for this story actually came to me a couple of years ago when I thought, "What would happen if Phineas and Ferb somehow saw a porno movie and decided to make their own?" At first, it was just a joke; only later did I decide to actually write it up. It was mainly mean to be porn, but there were so many opportunities for comedy, and for making it more like a real episode of the show, that I couldn't resist them, and it eventually ended up being much more like an '80s sex comedy than straight-up erotica--hence the title. Thank you again!

Other people are indeed connected in their dreams, but the story focuses on these four pretty much exclusively. This is not really going to be an action story (although I've got an action/adventure-heavy story in the works, so keep an eye out for "Danville, We Have a Problem"!), but I'm planning for this one to have more emotional depth than its predecessors. Thanks for the comment!

Yup! And 3, and 4, and maybe 5.

Thanks very much! Being true to the characters is what I'm all about. Well, it's what I'm mostly about; I'm also somewhat about making them have sex. Glad you like it so far. I hope the coming chapters will satisfy.

I tend to agree. Telling reviewers how to write their reviews will just turn them off even more.

Despite having things to do, I couldn't resist doing a little experiment regarding reviews. I looked at the review-to-hit ratio of each of the 5 stories that I have posted both here and at Hentai Foundry, and I found that not only have my stories gotten more than twice as many hits on AFF as they have on HF, they have earned more reviews per hit here, as well. (Both ratios are low, however: The percentage of hits accompanied by a review was 0.28% on AFF and 0.16% on HF.) More subjectively speaking, the quality of the reviews on AFF has also been higher. And that's all Science Boy has to say on that subject.

Fan writers would also want to nail down the terms of the publication beforehand. When I heard about the possibility of DC Comics' properties becoming open for fan writing, I thought, "Hey, I could do that Wonder Woman TV pilot I've been thinking about as a novel instead!" (It would be ever so apropos if Amazon published a Wonder Woman novel.) Then I realized that if I wrote the thing before making some sort of contract with the publisher first, they could basically offer me any crummy terms they want, because there would be nowhere else I could publish it. Such would be the case for any writer who created something based on a property with a single owner.

Usually, if I start a story and the spelling and grammar are really bad, I just quit reading it. I just can't stand reading stories like that--the language distracts too much from the story--and anything I could say in the way of concrit isn't going to make much of a dent, anyway. So any spelling or grammar problems I point out in a review are likely to be minor. I generally spend more of the review talking about what I liked about the story, because if there weren't enough things that I liked, I wouldn't have read through to the end.

Are there any such sites that do? Hentai Foundry QCs images but not written material.

And so continues the epic struggle between quality and content. Nobody cares how awesome your fanfic is if they're not interested in your fandom. That's fine, but unfortunately, the inverse (or whatever the right word is) is also true. A month or so ago I Googled "fanpoodle" because I thought maybe it was part of general fanfic lingo; I didn't know it was actually created here, by you. Maybe this site needs a glossary.

Back when I wrote non-erotic fanfic in a very popular fandom, there were several other authors (all met through FFN, where we reviewed each other's stuff) for whom I betaed and who betaed for me. Now, though, I'm writing erotic PHINEAS AND FERB stories, and other authors who do that (and do it well enough that I would WANT to beta for them or to ask them to beta for me) are extremely rare. Even my wife won't read my stuff--the very idea of P&F erotica freaks her out. That said, I'm a much more skilled writer than I was years ago, so I feel like I can make do without a beta somewhat better than I could have back then. However, I still find that I don't really have any sense of the pace of my own stories; to me, scenes that are a page or two long often seem far longer, because I've reread them or replayed them in my head time and time again in an effort to get them right. I think I've completely lost sight of whatever point I was trying to make in the post. Maybe someone could beta it for me.

Maybe it's pathetic, but getting reviews is usually a thrill for me. The mere fact that the person read the story and had something to say about it is flattering. That said, I definitely prefer some types of reviews over others: Best: "What I like about this story" and constructive criticism reviews OK: "This was fun to read" Worst: "This sux ballz," "You didn't write about what I want you to write about"

I write PHINEAS AND FERB stories, and the focus is either on the kids (who are around 11) or the teens (who are around 15). My feeling is that because these characters are precocious in virtually every way, it makes sense that they would be sexually precocious, too.

Thank you, thank you, and thank you! IMO, writing stories that are true to the characters but that take them in new directions is what fanfiction (especially "adult" fanfiction) is all about. Vanessa and Ferb, eh? Let me toss that idea in the hopper and see if anything comes out. Vanessa IS the hottest character on the show, so it would be a shame to underuse her.

I already replied to FairySlayer's review via PM, but for the sake of completeness, I thought I'd post the reply here--plus a few extra comments. Thanks for the detailed review! I just loved the idea of the kids pursuing the idea of making a porno movie with the same innocent enthusiasm they apply to everything else they do. Thank you! I didn't intend to have nearly so much Buford in the story, but I just kept finding more things for him to do. I feel like Isabella has more than paid her dues on the show; she deserves some serious Phineas-love. She has the twin disadvantages of being lovesick and of Phineas being about as socially perceptive as a pack of gum. Ever since seeing his reaction to Isabella's kiss in ACROSS THE 2ND DIMENSION, though, I've liked to think that Phineas IS attracted to Isabella, just not on a conscious level. Yeah, I didn't want to drag the story out too much; I felt like it was already pretty long. I also just love making Candace freak out. Thanks again!

Thank you!

In the end, I almost felt that the story wasn't pornographic ENOUGH--that the comedy interrupted the sex too much. But keeping the characters genuine is always my first priority. In any case, thank you!

This was the first P&F story I ever posted here, long before I was introduced to the idea of having a response thread. Because I just got a new review for it, I figure I might as well start one.

I will concede that the dialogue is not as witty as some, but that's probably because Jeremy and Stacy do most of the talking, and they aren't the characters who tend to have the funniest lines. The humor was mainly intended to come from Candace freaking out (something I never seem to tire of) and then Candace getting her "happy ending," as it were. This is indeed a one-shot. However, I recently started a separate story that delves much deeper into the idea of a Candace/Jeremy/Stacy relationship, so stay tuned.

Thank you, and thank you some more! Making the characters speak with their own "voices" is of great importance to me.

I just posted this story today, but I figured I would be proactive and start a review response thread now. Anon, to date I have written THREE stories in which Phineas/Isabella lovin' is an important component. Please enjoy them.

Pittwitch, can I borrow your brainbleach for a minute? I think it will do the trick. FairySlayer, the tricky bit about "lie" and "lay" is that "lie" is the intransitive verb (because only you can lie down; you can't lie something else down) and "lay" is the transitive verb (because you can only lay other things down) BUT "lay" is ALSO the past tense of "lie." Oh, this random word goulash we call English. And yes, PHINEAS AND FERB is still in production, and it's as good as ever! (Although I might change my mind next week, depending on how the could-go-horribly-wrong P&F/Marvel crossover ep turns out.)