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In the end, I almost felt that the story wasn't pornographic ENOUGH--that the comedy interrupted the sex too much. But keeping the characters genuine is always my first priority. In any case, thank you!

This was the first P&F story I ever posted here, long before I was introduced to the idea of having a response thread. Because I just got a new review for it, I figure I might as well start one.

I will concede that the dialogue is not as witty as some, but that's probably because Jeremy and Stacy do most of the talking, and they aren't the characters who tend to have the funniest lines. The humor was mainly intended to come from Candace freaking out (something I never seem to tire of) and then Candace getting her "happy ending," as it were. This is indeed a one-shot. However, I recently started a separate story that delves much deeper into the idea of a Candace/Jeremy/Stacy relationship, so stay tuned.

Thank you, and thank you some more! Making the characters speak with their own "voices" is of great importance to me.

I just posted this story today, but I figured I would be proactive and start a review response thread now. Anon, to date I have written THREE stories in which Phineas/Isabella lovin' is an important component. Please enjoy them.

Pittwitch, can I borrow your brainbleach for a minute? I think it will do the trick. FairySlayer, the tricky bit about "lie" and "lay" is that "lie" is the intransitive verb (because only you can lie down; you can't lie something else down) and "lay" is the transitive verb (because you can only lay other things down) BUT "lay" is ALSO the past tense of "lie." Oh, this random word goulash we call English. And yes, PHINEAS AND FERB is still in production, and it's as good as ever! (Although I might change my mind next week, depending on how the could-go-horribly-wrong P&F/Marvel crossover ep turns out.)

He looks a little like Bengali from THUNDERCATS.

If you're saying you think the story should have ended before the sex scene with Lena, then I would have to disagree. That scene was completely necessary, or I would have been left thinking, "So is Yang leaving Lena for

I frequently start my stories with a warning along the lines of, "If you don't want to read about cartoon teens/preteens getting it on, please use your Back button now." So I wonder whether this author simply has poor communication skills and was trying to say something along the lines of, "If you don't like the CONTENT of my stories, just don't read it, instead of leaving me reviews about why you hate the 'ship I write about, how my story doesn't jibe with the Hagrid/Hermione/Fang relationship you fantasize about, or why I'm a sick bitch or son thereof." Or, he or she could just be a dillweed.

I completely agree that using the Oxford (serial) comma is a good thing, but there are actually a lot of styles out there that specifically forbid it. That includes AP style, which is probably the most widely read style in the English-speaking world. So I can't blame people for not considering it an essential component of good punctuation.

I can't resist requiting Isabella's unrequited love for Phineas. I originally planned to make Tru seem a little darker, like maybe she had some sort of hidden agenda, only to reveal at the end that her motives were anything but sinister. She's basically an extension of Phineas and Ferb themselves--she might go to extremes, but ultimately, she's generous and thoughtful and just wants everyone to have a good time. LOL. I thought it would be fun to give Adyson a hidden fetish...and Buford a forcible shower. I believe Django is named for the child of one of the producers of the show. I kind of got it into my head that the pheromones had a bit more effect on Django than the other kids, turning a nice young man into a ravening sex-beast. Can't get enough Gretchen. And yes, I was trying to imply that Ferb returns her fondness for him. (On some level, 11-year-old Ferb must know that he has no chance with 16-year-old Vanessa.) Like the writers of the show, I can't resist an opportunity to make Candace completely freak out. Chuckled at the idea of Linda medicating her neurotic daughter with hash brownies. Although Linda would probably use a pie. I figure robots need love too. But that squirrel's gonna have a rough night. THANK YOU!

I didn't really want to bring the teenagers into the action because (1) an orgy of 10 characters was as much as I could handle without losing track of what was going on, (2) I just couldn't imagine a scenario in which Candace interacts sexually with her brothers or their friends, and (3) I just LOVE making Candace completely freak out. In any case, I'm glad you basically liked the story.

Yes, the disinhibition field was a little bit of a cheat (although it doesn't strike me as any more implausible than most of what happens on P&F). I used it partly as a way of showing how out of control Tru was getting in her manipulation of the kids, and partly to set up the very last scene with Norm.

I knew I was taking a chance trying to ramp the story up gradually. My main reasons for doing it were (1) I wanted the game to escalate at a somewhat realistic pace at the beginning and (2) I wanted to see how much intensity I could squeeze out of really simple things: a hug, a kiss, a first trip to second base. Maybe it wasn't as much as I'd hoped.

Inspired by the example of other authors on AFF, I thought I would create a review response thread for my PHINEAS AND FERB fic, "Truth or Dare 2.0."

Another factor might be that people don't come to a site called "Adultfanfiction" looking for something other than fan fiction. I imagine that some people take one glance at the Originals category and think, "That makes no sense."

Probably the same people who accuse the Girl Scouts of promoting contraception and abortion. Ironically, if they were more successful with the lesbianism thing, they wouldn't have to worry about the other stuff. Cool! I'm planning to ready your YIN YANG YO! fic next. I used to love that show. Regarding the player: Do you have some sort of visual impairment, or just a long commute?

Forgive my unsophisticated use of quotes, etc in this post. I haven't gotten the hang of this board's tools yet. Whoa, there are 28 Initial D fics? The Phineas and Ferb archive has only 1 more than that, and that makes it the 4th largest in the "Cartoons M through R" category (behind Metalocalypse, Power Puff Girls, and--you guessed it--My Little Pony). I will admit to being in that group. I don't really want to see guys getting romantic or getting it on, and I'm also not big on non-canonical relationships in general (which I'm sure would have half the people on AFF asking, "Then why are you even here? That's what fanfic is!") Nonetheless, maybe I'll be brave and check out one of your other fics at some point.

My wife's been trying to get me into a kilt for years. Hasn't happened yet, though, because it's still above freezing in Hell.

If you don't get a lot of reviews, I'm sure it has a lot more to do with the size of your chosen fandom than with the quality of your writing. Even people I know who are into anime (not that I know terribly many) tend to say, "INITIAL D? Is that the one about cars?" And the fact that your stories are mostly M/M probably cuts pretty deeply into even that group. My PHINEAS AND FERB stories seem to get a decent number of reviews, although a substantial minority fall into the categories of "Why didn't you [make the story go the way I wanted it to go]?" or "When are you going write more about [the pairing I like]?" I've also noticed that, as far as I can tell, women never review my stories, but I suspect that's a content issue--there are probably only so many women who want to read stories in which teen or preteen cartoon characters have explicit sex, even if there's romance involved.

I was thinking about this thread recently when I was watching AMERICA'S GOT TALENT. The act was two male acrobats, one wearing a dress, who were performing impressive feats of strength and balance interspersed with some clearly homoerotic sight gags. My first thought was, "Man, I bet a lot of the women on AFF would LOVE this."

The picture of "George Glass" (actually a CPR dummy being lugged around by Jan Brady) that I use as my avatar on other sites did not have the right dimensions to use on AFF. So I found a sort of "invisible man" pic that at least conveys the sense of a wholly imaginary person.

I agree about not deleting reviews. People who take the time to comment on a story in any detail (ie, more than just "This sux ballz") deserve that much consideration. The only reviews I've ever deleted have been ones that have pointed out some technical problem that I subsequently fixed, like when someone alerted me that my story had come out as one solid block of text. (And I thanked the reviewer for letting me know.)

I've found that the title is often the hardest part of a story to write. Rarely have I been able to come up with just a few words that adequately reflect the content or spirit of the story.

Actually, part of why I enjoy writing PHINEAS AND FERB fics is that the main female characters on the show give me a lot to work with. Isabella is a girly-girl with a massive crush on Phineas, but she's also an adventure-seeker and leader who can do just about anything she puts her mind to. Candace is utterly neurotic, but her craziness is often as much a strength as a weakness.