GeorgeGlass

Re: "Backward Glance" Sorry to worry you--I had orthopedic surgery back in February, which took me out of action for a little while (mainly because of the pain meds), and between my recovery, a flood of work, a lot of professional activities, and suddenly becoming president of my neighborhood association (I was vice president, and then our president resigned unexpectedly), I've just been pretty preoccupied. But I really wanted to finish "Backward Glance" in time to enter it in the Spring Fling contest on Hentai Foundry, and I think that has gotten me at least partially back into the writing groove. I'll add add a warning to the beginning and advise readers to wear earplugs. Not in the least; not only have I never played Bioshock, I don't know I thing about the plot. Now, though, I may have to check it out. Thanks! The contest had a word limit, so there was only so much room for citrus fruit. No worries--I've definitely got some things in the pipeline (including that Suzy Johnson story), so stay tuned. And thank you for all your support.

Re: "Wish List" Yeah, I've taken to typing these things up in Notepad and then pasting them into the text box once I'm finished, just in case something goes wrong. Thanks! Thank you. I'm very big on editing. Because this story is a one-shot, I didn't want to slow it down with too much backstory or character development so close to the end. If this were the first of several chapters, I think I would have done something like what you suggest. I see what you're saying, but I actually deliberately avoided using the word "Daddy" for a couple of reasons: --Mariel is an older teen, somewhere between 17 and 19, and she's pretty mature despite her shyness. Thus, I didn't want her to sound too childlike. --I had previously written two stories, "Wild Side" and "Everything She Needs," about a father and daughter who definitely DO have a dom/sub relationship (including the daughter calling her father "Daddy"). I wanted the relationship between Mariel and her father to be at least a little bit different from that one. Thanks very much. I'm not all that big on sequels ("Everything She Needs" being a rare exception), but I will write them if I feel like I have a good enough idea for one.

>Fairy-Slayer 2014-03-24 id # 3000069220 >I finally got a chance to listen to it, and it's so good I listened again. I’m flattered! >There were a lot of good bits that made me laugh or struck me as terrific, though unfortunately there was no way to note them all. However, everyone telling Phineas that Isabella had a crush on him for the longest time was adorable; the IsaBuford site was scary funny; polymer that "TASTES like chewing gum" cracked me up; everything takes longer to fix than to build was great. I was thinking of the episode in which Baljeet’s bike got a flat tire, and it seemed to take the boys quite a while to fix it. >The only thing that could have been cute was if the girls (at least) were still shy about undressing in front of the boys when it's just for the purpose of changing clothes, like some instinctive thing. Not a deal-breaker by any stretch. Oh, that’s a clever idea. >Trojan Horse - of course of course. Neigh! J >The plot itself was very show like, from the invention, the problem, and the B story with what Isabella (rightly, IMO) told Phineas when he was being clueless to her needs again. Heck, even Phineas agreed with her, so yeah. >Actually, it was one of those higher-level episodes where there was real danger (especially for Ferb) and then Candace and the community all rallied. "A very special episode" perhaps. As soon as I got the idea of hundreds of kids wanting to pay P&F back for all great things they’ve done over the summer, I couldn’t let go of it. >I did start to get worried about Perry and Doof not showing up, but it seems that they were saved, er, Candace was thwarted just in the nick of time. Terrific. Yeah, I couldn’t introduce that part too early without having big gaps between their scenes, so I had to put it off for a bit. >That targeting-system bit was hilarious. It would explain a lot, wouldn’t it? >Poor Stacy though, but maybe the sex strap will give her ideas for later on. I can’t seem to write one of these stories without at least one of the teens losing her mind. >Too bad Candace couldn't think of a way to bust her brothers for their other activities, but she had more important things in mind. Plus people who live in Glass houses and all that. J >The brief descriptions of the group's sexual escapades blossomed nicely as the story went along, and as it sometimes was mixed in with the relationship advice it was even poignant at times. When it became most descriptive it was excellent, and then we got a really nice recap. Because this was a sequel, I really wanted the sex and relationships in this story to be at least somewhat more evolved than they were in the previous one; really, that was much of the point of writing this story. >Now I just feel bad for Irving and Eva because it's going to get very confusing. But I'm not going to lose any sleep over it. Inator effects always wear off eventually. And in the meantime, there’s got to be some entertainment value in seeing Irving try to imitate Buford. J >Thanks for a really fun story, especially on a day that was otherwise driving me nuts. Still, even when I was home and resting it was just as good the second time. Maybe a third is in order too. I’m very glad you enjoyed it. And thanks for yet another detailed, thoughtful, and uplifting review.

Re: "Daddy's Rules" I'm very glad you liked it. As I mentioned to the previous reviewer, the story was deliberately written to be a short, one-chapter piece. Perhaps you would enjoy some of my other stories?

Re: "Daddy's Rules" Thank you. It's a pretty rough story, so I understand the "oddly" bit--I feel that way about it myself sometimes. It definitely puts a little distance between the characters and the reader (with apologies to any literate bears out there). I see where you're coming from, and I'm pleased that you'd like to see more, but the brevity of this story is deliberate. I wanted to do a short piece that wasn't bogged down by extensive plot and character development (like all the stories I had written before then) but that instead showed you a moment in the lives of this extremely dysfunctional family and let you extrapolate as much more as you cared to. In any case, I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for reviewing.

Re: "Some Days, You Get the Bear" Thanks! I honestly haven't felt too much inspiration to write since I had my hip operation last month (everything I've posted on AFF since then has been stories I've already written and posted on Hentai Foundry and/or Inkbunny), but when I saw a post about the contest and that the limit was 500 words, I figured I could surely write something decent of THAT length, at least. And it was exciting to have someone do a picture based on something I wrote; that was a first for me. I'm feeling a bit more inspired now.

Re: "Snow" Thank you--both for the comment itself and for making it spoiler-free.

Thank you!

Ah, good question. I just created a new thread here: http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/55777-george-glass-review-responses-original-fiction/

Because I have a lot of original stories, and because these stories don't tend to get as many reviews per story as my fanfics, I have decided to totally rip off BronxWench's idea and respond to all reviews of my original stories in a single thread. This should make things easier, both for me and for any of you lovely folks who have reviewed one of my original stories and would like to find and read my response to your review.

I will indeed. Of course, I'm also a big fan of non-empty flattery. I picked "Truth or Dare 2.0" to sequelize (if that's a word) mainly because it ended with the five couples getting together, and I wanted a chance to play around a bit with the different relationship dynamics of each. In contrast, I was not anxious to try to write a sequel to "Sweet Dreams" because that story was REALLY hard to write. The trouble with setting a story in a dream world where anything can happen is that it presents you with an infinite number of options, which gave me massive decision paralysis. I got bogged down in trying to figure out how to exploit the dream world to the maximum extent possible and avoid wasting the opportunities it presented. I think it would take a more creative mind than mine to work comfortably in that sort of fictional environment. Thanks! That idea came partly from a discussion I once had with a friend about the difference between love and infatuation--that love is an attraction that is based on who the other person really is, whereas infatuation is an attraction based on your own mental image of that person (which may be wildly inaccurate). The other thing that came to mind was a line in the movie HITCH when Will Smith tells Kevin James that "Fantasies are for private time. When you're in the room with her, BE IN THE ROOM." Isabella tends to leave the room and go skipping off to Phineasland when she would be much better off being in the moment. Trying to incorporate substantial adventure and suspense components may have resulted in my watering down the comedy and erotica somewhat. So many genres, so little bandwidth... I made an effort to make Phineas and Isabella's big sex scene significantly different from those in my previous stories. In those stories, it was always their first time, so their sex scenes were all about the intensity of their attraction and the joy of discovering each other. In this story, on the other hand, they had already been there and done that, so I tried to make their sex scene more about trying new things and just having fun together. My next P&F story is going to have a very different tone than my previous ones: It will center on Suzy Johnson, so it's going to be rather dark. The idea has been percolating in my head for quite some time, and the plotline is already pretty well developed, so it shouldn't seem rushed at all once I (figuratively) get it down on paper. In any case, I appreciate your candor, and your taking the time to write a thorough and thoughtful review.

That would save me quite a bit of work if you could do it. Here are the URLs of the threads I'd like to consolidate. (Let me know if 7 is too many.) http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/52585-review-replies-theres-a-new-seraph-in-town/ http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/55543-review-responses-for-cruel-nature/ http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/55492-review-responses-for-the-interview/ http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/55433-review-responses-for-the-last-toy/ http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/55380-review-responses-for-leilayas-evening/ http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/55131-review-responses-for-wild-side-and-everything-she-needs/ http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/54839-review-response-for-firelight/

No luck--it came out double-spaced no matter which of the three Paste buttons I used. However, with all 3 Paste buttons, I got a pop-up text box with the message below. Maybe if I somehow changed my browser settings so that I could paste directly into the box, it would keep my text single-spaced. That said, the double-spacing really doesn't look as bad as I expected, so it's not that big a deal.

Then I'll give it a try and let you know what happens.

Because I don't get nearly as many reviews for my original stories as I do for my fanfics, I'm considering creating a single thread for my review replies to all of my original stories (like BronxWench has). So what I'd like is to delete the individual-story review reply threads I've started to date and move all of those responses into the new thread. Therefore, I'm wondering: Is there a way for users to delete threads that they started? Or do we have to ask a mod to do it?

Sorry I've been so slow to respond. I use Word 2010 for Windows. This issue is even more important to me now because I have a poem that I would like to post, and double-spacing will make it hard to tell where one verse stops and the next begins.

Re: "Cruel Nature" Thank you! I'm not planning to continue this story, but I'm sure I'll be writing other stories in a similar vein.

Probably anybody whose lovemaking session is interrupted by a giant chicken busting into their bedroom.

Being a guy, I suppose mine would be something along the lines of "Schlongulus Elongulus!"

I just copy and paste into a text box, like I do here. (I've tried using "Paste from Word" here, too, but it doesn't seem to affect the result.)

Re: "Cruel Nature" Thank you! I envisioned Yori and Zeryn as being a little like Frankenstein's monster--they ARE monsters, but they were also brought by force into a world in which they have no place. So there's nothing strange about simultaneously hating and pitying them. Being somewhat literal-minded, I never used to post my original stories on AFF--just fanfiction. Now I'm realizing that AFF offers a larger audience than the other places I post (Hentai Foundry and Inkbunny), and a lot of the readers here like original stories just fine, so I'm in the process of posting a bunch of my already-written stories here. Plenty more to come! You're most welcome. Thank you for reading and especially for commenting!

So what you seem to be saying is that there is no way to turn off the automatic spacing. I asked because the other sites where I post don't have this feature, so any story that I want to post there AND here has to be reformatted for AFF.

When I'm writing, I typically separate my paragraphs with a vertical space (ie, a paragraph mark). AFF seems to insert such spaces automatically when I post a story, so I have to go back and delete my extra spaces. Also, sometimes I don't WANT a space between 2 lines (eg, if they are part of a list or a schedule), but I can't seem to make the spacing go away. Is there a way to deal with this?

Re: "Cruel Nature" I suppose Xyla didn't consider that there might be a good reason why the termination of Feral-induced pregnancies is mandatory.

I go by the policy that we use where I work--I only make changes that I can justify to myself. That is, if I can't come up with a concrete reason for why I should make a particular change (eg, "Adding this bit of dialogue will help develop the character without slowing down the action," "I should add a comma here because this is a compound sentence"), then I don't make it. Using that approach seems to make it fairly clear when I should stop editing.