GeorgeGlass

It all depends on which idea you think will make for the best story. But it doesn’t have to be all or nothing; you may decide that there is an element of the reviewer’s suggestion that you want to weave into the story direction that you have in mind.

Glad you didn't mind the lack of, um, payoff. Let's face it, if there's one Loud who would be voted Most Likely to Become a Supervillain, it would be...well, Lisa, but Lola would come in...okay, third after Luan, but still... I'd say it was a mix: Some were freaked out by having done it, and some were freaked out by having liked it. I see Lucy as the most introverted and, therefore, the most self-aware of the Loud kids. I loved writing that bit. My stories are probably predictable in some ways, but I like to at least keep readers guessing about whether there's going to be incestuous snuggling or projectile barfing at the end. Thanks for the beta and the comments!

Here, I’ll respond to reviews of short or obscure fanfics that may not warrant having their own response thread.

The important thing is to establish why Lilo and especially Nani consider snuggling naked together to be normal, acceptable behavior, at least from their own perspective. Maybe their parents were nudists or were otherwise comfortable being nude around the house, in front of the kids. Or maybe the frequent nudity was a habit that Nani fell into after their parents died; maybe there was a heat wave one summer, and Nani couldn't afford to keep the air conditioning running all the time (if they even have A/C at the house), so she started wearing less and less at home. Lilo, free spirit that she is, probably would think this was a dandy idea, to the point that Nani would have to remind her not to go running around outside without her clothes on. As for the snuggling, being each other's only family might draw them closer together. Nani is probably Lilo's only source of physical affection.

I’m so glad you mentioned that line. I’m not always able to come up with a last line for a story that I really like, but I was very happy with that one. Thank you! And no worries, there’s more on the way.

Re: “Snow” Thank you and thank you!

Thanks!

Just giving this another bump. DG must be extremely busy.

Pippychick, if I end up writing a story called “Terms of Service,” it’s gonna be your fault.

Maybe try writing something from a perspective you’ve never used before. I recently wrote a story in the first person plural (“We look down into the hallway and see...”), and it was a very interesting experience.

Hi, Lunarsilver! I have, in fact, thought about doing a gender-bent version of “A Beach Like No Other” – not least because I’m curious about whether it could work. But I’m still letting that idea percolate to see what bubbles up. FYI, just as the Queen of the Beach is an allusion to straight-shota artist Glassfish, whose artwork inspired “A Beach Like No Other,” the King of the Mists (who created a paradise for men and girls) is an allusion to the lolicon artist Fogbank. (He read the story and enjoyed it, including that bit.)

Not sure how you mean that. This isn’t Giffany. Giffany has pink hair that is tied with IDE cable; this character has blue hair that is tied with USB cable.

Thanks! That depends on in what you mean by “similar.” You might check out “May’s Family” or “The Playground.”

That sounds good, BW. Thanks!

I want to rework my story “Eddie Forever” and try to get it published, so I have deleted it from the archive. However, when I Google the story, it still shows up in the “playpen” (http://beta.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108116&chapter=1). Is there a way to delete the story from that area, as well?

'kay. My friend and co-creator of this story, Eh Steve, came up with Mermadeline, and he and I worked out these bits to explain her accent. Who says exposition can’t be fun? Thanks! Specifically, a yuki-onna (snow woman). I've had a bit of a thing for them ever since I watched Rosario + Vampire. Mizore the snow-girl is hot. I'm going to have to remember “ambiguously-existent.” Nice. We'll see. That's really the only reason. Thanks again! If Ursula were involved, the accent question would be moot. Thanks for the review!

Wendy is dating a burly manotaur with a red beard, and Wendy’s father is a burly man with a red beard, so Squatchie is commenting that Freud was right about girls wanting to marry their fathers.

Because I just can't imagine Stan ever using the phrase "upside your head" with a straight face. That's part of why I like writing Stan. After Dipper getting tossed into what seemed like a good situation that turned bad (in the shotaverse), I wanted Dipper to next be in a situation that seems bad but turns out to have a bright side. Hey, I don't expect everyone to like it. Although this story contains something for everyone (well, almost everyone, but we'll deal with that later), it also probably contains at least one thing that a given reader won't like. Thanks! And don't worry -- we're all done with incest. On to even weirder stuff!

I’d probably start with denial. The character would try desperately to think of alternative explanations of what happened.

Just making sure this request doesn’t fall through the cracks. I haven’t seen DG post anything lately, so she’s probably just been busy with RL.

Thanks!

You’ll have to check back next week and see.

Have you considered starting a review reply thread in the AFF forums? I do that for all my stories, mainly so people who review them won't feel like they're shouting into the void. I had no idea. Thanks! Did you review it anonymously? I don't remember getting any reviews from you before. That was really what I was aiming for: to immerse readers in the story and make them part of it. It was pretty experimental; I'd never even considered writing a story in the first person plural before. Thanks! Good to know. I was really trying to do the opposite -- to make the story partly a conversation between Lucy and the reader. But maybe that's just not doable (at least, not in the way I tried to do it). It was definitely fun (although the most fun parts to write were Lucy's comments and insights). It was also the hardest part, in some respects, because it's meant to imply that the order in which these five scenarios begin is also the order in which these different activities got started over successive Friday nights. (“Ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny,” as the biologists like to say once they've got a few drinks in them.) So Lynn started it all with her sleepwalking-that-fools-no-one routine, which prompted Leni and Luna to start doing their silent lap dance thing, which emboldened the twins to unleash their pent-up desires on Luan, which inspired Lisa to start having regular rendezvous with her extradimensional fuck buddy, which put the idea into Lori's head to “borrow” Lily while that's going on. Thank you! It helps that all of the action in that scene takes place in one location -- the hallway -- so there's no need to switch from one peephole to another like we do throughout the rest of the story. Thanks! I completely agree that Luan is hardest to write. In canon, she almost never stops joking, and it's hard to keep that up over multiple lines of dialogue. But for better or worse, my dad had a similarly dorky sense of humor, and having been exposed to it for decades, I can drum up bad puns when necessary. There are some twins whom developmental psychologists describe as “over-identified"; each twin's identity is so bound up in the other’s that they don't know who they are as individuals. This vignette is based on the premise that Lola and Lana are scared of that happening to them, so they make a conscious effort to be different from each other -- but they still have the same underlying tendencies and urges. Thanks again. I wrote that before Luna's bisexuality was revealed on the show. I just figured that it seemed plausible. And Leni has a sort of naive open-mindedness that I thought would make this a believable scenario for her, too. Absolutely. It's a completely balanced relationship (which is why Luna will be dancing for Leni the next Friday night). I wanted it to be unclear until the end what was really going on with each of them. Despite having been at this the longest, they are also the ones most in denial. In fact, they may not even know what their sisters are getting up to during their liaisons -- let alone that they inspired it all. Thanks. I didn't want to sideline Lily the way I did in “Whoops,” and I have a mother-child incest fetish, so I thought this was the thing to do. I also love writing dirty talk, sometimes more than writing the action. Yes, I do. And I think there is a wide range of crazy that is plausible for Lori. We've seen her be the responsible elder sister, and we've seen her come completely unglued. For this story, I wanted to go somewhere in between, but I do see your point. Of the two big secrets that Lucy mentions at the end, the first (which she explains) is that the Loud kids inherited their horniness from their parents. But the second secret, which Lucy only hints at, is that all the Loud kids have a great capacity for love. We see that capacity manifest itself in a variety of ways in the final scenes. I see your point. It’s on a completely different level of plausibility from the rest of the story. I should note that I didn't quite manage to flesh out the idea behind Lovecraft -- not just that Lisa can control him, but also that she feels safer expressing her affection for him than for the human beings in her life. I wanted her to be an Alfred Hitchcock-type host. Which is why her first words to us are “Good evening.” I wrote that before I even knew that the show is set in Michigan. I just thought there was something Midwestern about Royal Woods. Thanks! Thanks again! Yes, I've gathered that. Or any cute girl for that matter (but especially his sisters, obviously: incest is the best!). Again, you know me. That's all besides the point though. Great work, man. Sounds like fun to me. You too! And if you’d like to send me an email some time, I’m at gglass999@hotmail.com.