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And I’m pretty sure you have an inkling that that’s exactly where this is going. Thanks! I hope your hopes prove justified.

Thanks! I hope this story will justify your love.

We (Eh Steve and I) wanted her to be a low-rent version of Aphrodite in the way that Love God is a low-rent version of Eros. Thank you! I hope that proves to be true. One reality per girl, yes. But some realities will take two chapters to cover. And some will take less than one. Oh, yes. That's good news.

You’ll have to read on and see.

Thanks! Shhh, no spoilers…

Thank you! I’m not planning to add any more chapters to this story, but I’m sure to be writing more Loud House stories – some of which will involve girls outside the Loud family. Also, if you enjoyed “Whoops,” then you might like my other Loud House fic, “The Loud House After Dark.”

There’s something I just love about Steven and Connie’s friendship, much in the way that I love Star and Marco’s on SVTFOE -- except that Steven and Connie’s connection clearly includes a mutual romantic vibe in addition to their friendship. That wasn’t my intent, but now that you mention it, that’s probably the best interpretation of what happened (given how Garnet’s future vision works). One of my favorite themes is innocence. I love making characters who want each other figure out how to fulfill their desires. Nope. You and me both. It could still be an episode. I’m sure Rebecca Sugar could find a way to do it all in metaphor. Glad you liked it. These two characters are all about cute and sweet and innocent obliviousness. That’s why I wanted to write a story about them -- even if it did take me more than 2 years to finish it. Not going there. I put Greg in at the end to help ground the story in the broader reality of the show. I also wanted to show Connie’s reaction -- and her reaction to her reaction -- through the eyes of someone who has no idea what they really mean. We don’t get to see that much of Garnet’s thought process on the show, so I thought it would be fun to get into her head a little. I liked the idea of Steven and Connie completely rewriting the rules of the game just so that they could sit next to each other (and have an excuse to play-wrestle). Connie knows how to speak Steven. Of all the lines of dialogue in this story, I think Pearl’s bath water line is my favorite. Again, trying to ground the story in reality -- including the pedestrian details of Greg’s job. Thanks for another uplifting review!

Yes. The mom is voiced by a man. BTW, I don’t mean to say that it’s always wrong for a female character to be voiced by a man. I can’t imagine that anyone, male or female, could have done a better job than Brad Bird as the voice of Edna Mode in The Incredibles. But Bird didn’t try to make Edna sound like a man – he did her voice in a way that was a perfect fit for the character.

Thanks! As plot devices go, nothing compares to the -inators; writing in other fandoms has forced me to be more creative. I think 69 would be a little too advanced for them. Connie probably understands only the basic idea, and to Steven, it’s just the number before 70. As for getting right down to intercourse, sexual arousal was only one component of that. They were also desperate to be as close together as possible. No, you’re quite correct. Connie probably knows that she’s too young to get pregnant (which I assume she is, given that’s she’s twelve -- maybe even eleven, since this story takes place in Season 1 -- and shows no sign of having reached puberty). Also, putting a layer of rubber between them seems counter to the purpose of their having sex. Lastly, it would introduce a hard-to-resolve plot problem: If Connie asked for a condom, there would be no one to supply it. And then what would she do? Thanks! I love writing comedy, and given that SU is as much a comedy as it is an action drama, I don’t feel like an SU fanfic can be faithful to the show if it doesn’t include a good chunk of humor. I’m not planning a follow-up, but one never knows. Thank you. For many of these fandoms, I feel like I’m just rounding out the characters, because they would surely have sexual thoughts, feelings, and curiosity -- issues that can’t be explored in much depth in canon. It’s a high compliment that you’re interested in reading my stuff even when it’s in a fandom that doesn’t interest you. Thanks again.

Two episodes ought to be enough. I completely agree that the animation is terrible, and there seems to be a deliberate effort to make every major character as unattractive as possible (a la Clarence). Also, I’m sick of female characters who are obviously voiced by men. Maybe that was funny for the first four or five decades of cartoon history, but it’s definitely a trope that needs to retire.

Well, I’m pleased that you read it and liked it somewhat even though it’s not your favorite fandom. Thanks! I watched an episode (or two, depending on how you slice it), and it didn’t grab me. I might try another one or two before I pass final judgment. That said, I have found a new ‘toon that I like: Mighty Magiswords. The artwork isn’t awesome, and the pace is a bit frenetic, but the rapid-fire dialogue is often witty. I’m working on a fic for it now. I’m also incubating an idea for a Milo Murphy fic. It involves a mysterious villain from the future who, for reasons unknown, is trying to make Milo and Melissa get together.

Thank you! And thanks for leaving a review in the archive, too. Glad you liked the story. Cute and funny were definitely things I was trying for. The memory-wipe was necessary to make the story compatible with canon, given that the story is set 3 seasons ago. But I’m glad that didn’t ruin it for you.

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At least a few of those things will happen in the next chapter. No peeing, though.

Re: “Firelight” Well, Farmer Andersen is paying for her to be bred, and anal won’t get the job done, so...

I’d suggest using an introductory phrase, rather than trying to do it solely with punctuation and/or onomatopoeia. Maybe like this: “Punctuating every word with another stinging slap to her ass, he shouted, ‘You! Will! Behave!’”

From Fairy-Slayer on July 02, 2017 This was wonderfully sexy, and I thoroughly enjoyed this tale, and on a few levels: First, the narrative style was a pleasure, just imagining Lucy Loud quietly showing us around the hidden places where we could see all of the hidden secrets. You used her voice very well, and it worked well against the rest of the narration, which was a comfortable tone for action and "camera movement." It was like a sexy Twilight Zone thing going on, plus one or two cute little quirks. This story was a really fun experiment. Using the first-person-plural perspective was something I’d never even thought of trying before this, and your feedback really helped me refine it. And having Lucy narrate worked out well because she can say some fairly non-age-appropriate things without their seeming out of character. Those brief openers were pretty much all we needed to get fully up to speed on each rendezvous as they began and slowly unfolded. Each segment was a good dose of story on its own yet still helped build up to the final climax of each tryst. Plus they were all sweet to downright cute (especially Lynn's bad acting, the conscientious tentacle monster, the Luanisms, and the twins being different by minutes and different by inches). Even better, it was in-character the whole way. It didn't feel like we were getting pulled away every time it started to get good – we got to savor every tasty bite from the smorgasbord of underage incestuous lust. I’m very glad to hear that, because I was a little concerned about readers feeling like they might be missing some of the good parts (which wasn’t my intent at all). (Come to think of it, that would be the best Old Country Buffet EVER!) I don’t think we have Old Country Buffet where I live. Underage incestuous lust, on the other hand… The "happiest moments" were all terrifically satisfying, especially with an extra boost from Lucy's breathy whispers to go along with each. Yet even after all the sexy action and learning each character's secret (even about how it's basically in their genes), having Lucy make sure we see the pure love and affection they share was the icing on the cake. You know I love a happy ending. After the, uh, other happy ending. The only other thing I'll throw out there is that Lisa seemed to have a second secret, though perhaps it really just ties into that one best overall secret. Maybe that's foreshadowing… or maybe I'm just reading way too much into it (I'll hold back on saying what it is to see if it's really just me, but I will say that I absolutely loved every second of it.) Are you talking about her affection for Lovecraft? As I wrote her part of the story, I had a half-baked idea that Lisa expresses her fondness for him in their private sessions because she’s not yet ready to express affection to actual human beings in that way. Anyway, thanks for another fantastic and wonderfully erotic tale. And thank you for the beta, and another gratifying review.

Thank you!

Thanks!

It is amazing how uptight many of us are when it comes to anything related to sex. There are plenty of scientists who use the word “gender” in their papers where “sex” would be more accurate, because they simply don’t want to use the word “sex” at all. On a related note, I read that on the Pirates of the Caribbean rides at Disney’s them parks, they are getting rid of the tableau that shows several tied-up women under a sign that reads "Auction -- Take a Wench for a Bride." This I’m okay with, because, you know, forced marriage and sex slavery kind of aren’t cool anymore.

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Working Title: Twist My Arm Fandom: The Loud House Plot: After their successful double date at Jean Juan’s French-Mex Buffet, Bobby proposes to Lori that they go on more double dates with Lincoln and Ronnie Anne. Lori, glad to do anything that involves spending more time with Bobby, readily agrees, but on their first date (at a retro drive-in movie theater), she finds that having the younger kids along is cramping her style because Bobby won’t make out with her when they’re around. Lori gets Lincoln alone and pressures him to make out with Ronnie Anne, reasoning that Bobby won’t worry about him and Lori making the kids uncomfortable if the kids themselves are making out. This strategy works, so, on subsequent dates, Lori pressures Lincoln to go farther and farther with Ronnie Anne, until things get completely out of hand. Fatal Flaws: (Warning: Spoilers for “Relative Chaos” ahead): Now that Bobby and Ronnie Anne have moved away, this story would be AU, and I don’t like starting a story under those circumstances. Keeping or Abandoning? Abandoning. Luckily, I’ve got another Loud House story in the works (titled “The Loud House After Dark”) that I’m really excited about.

No offense taken; I completely agree. I’m just making the point that shock is not the sole reason why some writers might include a gratuitous rape scene in a story; they might also do it because they know it will be a turn-on for some readers. If it develops the world of the story, then I wouldn’t describe it as gratuitous. It only becomes gratuitous if you linger on that scene for longer than is necessary to paint the picture and are doing it purely as a cheap thrill for the reader.

Because rape is one of my fetishes, I’ve written several purely pornographic rape stories, and by and large, they attract a lot more readers than most of my consensual-sex stories. (The ultimate reader-magnet seems to be father-daughter rape, given that the stories of mine that have the most dragon prints are titled “Daddy’s Rules” and “Darla’s Dad.”) So I think “shock value” only tells part of the story; some authors write rape scenes because they know that such scenes appeal to a decent chunk of their readership—whether the readers will admit it or not. But in non-porn stories, I agree with Tcr that rape is not “lazy writing” if it advances the plot or character development in some important way. (The same goes for murder.)