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Thanks! And if there’s a class like what this one is going to turn into, sign me up.

As I always say, there’s no higher praise than an involuntary physiological response. Oh, I wouldn’t worry; Melanie’s going to be rather busy... Thanks for the comment!

This is where I will post responses to any reviews of my Phineas and Ferb story “Hot Yoga.”

The word “octopussior” comes to mind.

From Fairy-Slayer on February 11, 2017 Chapter 9 had some pretty powerful and critical story advancement, to say the least. SPOILERS! Yes, this is the, "Hey, what's that brown lump speeding toward the fan?" chapter. Easing into it with everything seeming fine (or better than fine) then switching to Star's nice dream… then discovering her minor mistake were subtle enough not to raise the alarm. Only when Star's agitated thoughts leaked out and then she caught herself was it clear the ooze was starting to affect her. The bit about the sheen the next morning was a nice bit of symbolism too as it represent encasing and trapping the real start. (Or maybe I'm just reading way too much into it.) Nope, you're not. Her insensitivity and hostility the next morning hit pretty hard. The slime had had several hours to take effect by then. BTW, I'm really surprised you didn't get my reference about her dissing the nachos, but perhaps I wasn't grasping the context of the story as well as I thought. No, I got it, but I didn't think the situation was quite the same. Kirk doesn't seem to be aware that he's saying something hurtful, whereas Darkstar is being deliberately mean. As for the emergence of the shadow personality, I found it very creepy and disturbing on a few levels. The bit about her image in the mirror flashing that mocking smile once Star realized what was happening – what had just become complete – was brilliant. The thought of being locked-in is pretty horrifying on its own, but I could feel (even relate) to her suffering as "she" started hurting those she loved, coolly and even dismissively. The cut-aways to her screams packed more punch than I think you even realize, especially as each verbal or emotional blow Darkstar landed on Marco made real Star weaker, less… (That's why I had to make such a terribly lame joke in the commentary to keep myself from being too affected, but I didn't want to be so cruel as to inflict it upon you. You don't deserve that.) Yeah, it's pretty rough stuff, I guess. The point, really, is to show the depth of Tom's depravity: that he's willing to do something that terrible to Star to have the girlfriend he wants. As for the lame joke, now I'm curious. Thank goodness for Rogelio – or as I like to call him, The Absolute Mostest Bestest OC EVER! His keen observations skills, no doubt fueled by his affection for his grandson and the cheerful princess, plus is eccentric similes make him awesome. His advice really got Marco to think – and more importantly, to act without hesitation. I'm so glad you like Rogelio. That line about the pig was the seed of the idea for his character; everything else grew from that. Aggressive Marco was fantastic, especially in his conviction as he confronted Darkstar a bit violently. However the switching to spankings was pretty funny, especially with real Star cheering him on. (Darkstar's comment was weird for such a bad girl, but perhaps she really prefers to give the spankings.) Remember that Darkstar is brand new. She only knows what Star knows; she has no life experience of her own. The fact that Tom didn't mind revealing his scheme and even gloating was a bad sign. Yes, it is. (As a side note, the fact that Marco could recognize Star's scent and, maybe to a lesser degree, his chosen method of attack, "intrigues" me a bit too. ) More on that later. However, even with all that conflict, pain, and even fighting, you still managed to add just the right bits of show-style humor, even in some dire moments, all seamlessly. That made it really feel like the show and much more enjoyable. Thank you! Heck, Oskar's unintentional bad-ass comment was a total win. Thanks for such gripping chapter. Thanks for another gripping review. Although I swear I didn't grip myself too much while reading it.

My bad—I misunderstood. The up side to writing erotica about characters who are never portrayed in sexual situations is that you have a lot of latitude. Bossy characters might also be bossy in bed—or the bedroom might be the one place where they’d rather relax and let their partner take control. The dark, gloomy character might secretly be a romantic. You just have to find a rationale for the character to behave the way you think they should.

Re: “Excuses” Unlike most of my stories (which take months to write, even the single-chapter ones), this one was mostly written in the space of a single day. It just took hold of me and made me keep going until it was done. I think that’s why it came out as you describe it. Thanks so much for the comments!

Because I regularly write adult-oriented fanfics (ie, porn) about characters that never have sex in canon (because they are characters from children's cartoons), I feel compelled to put my two cents in here. I agree with those who say that fanfics are generally easier to write than original fics, because you're using “prefab” characters and settings that you don't need to develop from scratch. But -- and I think the OP was getting at this – writing fanfic poses the unique challenge of portraying someone else's characters in a believable way. I don't agree with the OP that this should be less of a concern when you're writing erotica. On the contrary, the challenge in writing such fanfics is creating a situation in which the characters can have sex without readers thinking, “No way, these characters would never do that.” Because, IMO, there's no point in writing a fanfic if the characters aren't recognizable as the ones that the fans love. Part of the fun of writing porny fanfics is figuring out how to make the sex happen in a way that is believable and in-character for the participants. One way in which I do this in my cartoon fanfics is to use plot devices that are in keeping with the show. For example, on the cartoon series The Loud House, one of the characters is basically a mad scientist who invents all sorts of cartoonishly impossible things but doesn't always think about the consequences. So in my recent story “Whoops,” I had her develop a synthetic pheromone to get her lab rats to breed but that ends up affecting everyone in the house. Massive porniness ensues. Of course, it doesn’t have to be anything so far out. Characters may discover that their sexuality emerges under certain circumstances. In my Phineas and Ferb story “Tri-Date Area,” the three main characters decide to try dating one another (ie, having a three-way relationship), and one of them finds that these circumstances bring out her sexual desires with an intensity that being in a typical, two-way relationship did not. Okay, my two cents turned out to be more like a buck fifty.

Thank you! I hope it continues to justify your love.

Though I'm sad to see the adventures end, the final chapter was fantastic. Thank you! First off, Lisa doing self-surgery is a bit scary. I really liked how he appreciated Lisa's well-defined young body, whether it was from the injection or just nice to notice in general. It was fun as Lincoln kept having to figure out what Lisa's technical language, though it was really funny how quickly he caught onto "doggy style." After that, their "dirty talk" was terrific, especially as her pretentious vocabulary started to crack; when she told him she was losing her ability to form sentences and even words and he took it as a challenge, that was even better. In the end, I think both of them were quite pleased with the result. It was quite a challenge to write that dialogue. Wikipedia and Thesaurus.com got a lot of use. I was getting a little worried for Lincoln when he was still up for more despite his exhaustion and the sisters were ready to go again. It was quite mature of Lori to notice that, even though they would have done it any way at all, he'd gone out of his way to consider each of their personalities and likes instead of just taking advantage of them. Lori definitely has her moments on the show, so I thought it reasonable for her to have one here. The reverse-gangbang scene played out beautifully, though I had to wonder where Lola had read about blowjobs. (Highlights for Sluts?) Lola is not a slut! She’s a slut-in-training. When she told Lana to take over and the elder twin shouted, "Gross!" I knew that meant she's be all over it. (And she was.) It was kind of sweet that all nine of them were just as exhausted by the end as Lincoln. They had a long day. Then, I don't know why, but I had been absolutely convinced that Lisa had mentioned birth control when she gave out the cherry chews, but nope: this was even funnier. Of course she could take care of the problem, but like the whole thing only after her oversight had created the problem in the first place. (Sorry all preggo fans.) Lisa’s “Frankenstein syndrome” appears again: She’s a genius, but she has a chronic problem with thinking things through. Finally, the show-style ending with Lincoln's "moral" was nice, though when Lori scolded him for his mishandling of his "boy stuff" that was the perfect little shot that made it perfect for the series. The “moral” seems so standard for the show that I felt like it wouldn’t really be a Loud House story without one. And the “boy stuff” ending just seemed fitting; I’d had that in mind since I started writing the story. Thanks again for such a fantastic story, and I'm honored to have been the proofreader (so I could read it sooner!). Thanks again for your proofreading, and your marvelous comments!

Re: “Mommy’s Home” Thank you! I am actually planning to write a sequel to this one, so I hope you’ll stay tuned.

It’s a lot of work, though. I mean, just keeping up with what kind of candy little girls like is- Never mind.

You mean, the part where he bangs his five-year-old twin sisters? Don’t know why you'd think that.

From Fairy-Slayer on January 21, 2017 Chapter 8 had all kinds of great action. I find that writing fight scenes and writing sex scenes aren’t really that different. They’re all about whose limbs are doing what where. I'm so glad the "emergency" turned out to be a good thing, and definitely a good reason to interrupt Marco and Jackie. Even better is how the interruption and explanation gave Jackie an opening to move things along for them as well. Safe Kids is Smart Kid. I figured that Star’s definition of “emergency” is probably broader than most people’s. And Jackie isn’t easily thrown off. The lovemaking was wonderful, both in the action and in the beautiful descriptive imagery throughout. It was very sensual and also pretty hot. Thank you! Given that it’s what much of the story has been leading up to, I tried to make it live up to readers’ expectations. Jackie's bashful comment about doing it a lot more was cute, and Marco's response about the blueflower incense was a perfect little compliment. Both comments just seemed in-character for them. Of course, Star and Oskar having raving screaming crazy monkeysex one booth over was pretty funny too. I had a hard time deciding whether to show Star and Oskar in action, too, or just stick with Marco and Jackie. Ultimately, I decided that the Star/Oskar fun was perhaps better left to the imagination. Marco and Star's banter when the ambush was revealed was funny, and I loved the PC talk among the villains before attacking. That just seemed like something that might happen in Star’s world. Great description yet good pacing on the fight scene, plus good comebacks as always. Also, it was nice to see Marco a bit more easygoing and even appreciating some friendly ribbing here, like they've been working his character towards on the show. What with the mineral pool, the massage, the incense, and the afterglow, I figured that Marco would be his most relaxed self at this point in the story. The villains may be inept (or just seem inept) but, yikes, they got the job done and Star is none the wiser. It will be interesting to see how it takes hold on her and what side-issues that will bring about; combined with Tom's other machinations it all has me quite intrigued. Good… Thanks for another terrific chapter. Thanks for another great review!

3plus is one of those tags that is meant more as a descriptor than a warning. So I suppose the question to ask yourself is, If someone started reading your story because they wanted to see some 3plus action, would they ultimately be excited or disappointed?

I wonder whether playing role-playing games early one helps one avoid the Mary Sue trap. Character creation in an RPG usually involves tradeoffs (or at least the odd bad die roll), so unless you are crazy lucky (or cheat like mad), your character can’t be perfect. As a result, you’re always thinking about characters in terms of their strengths and their weaknesses.

I didn’t know the movie was based on a book. (“Waaaarioooors, come out and play-aaaaay….”) Years ago, I read a book called The Vice Lords by an anthropologist who studied Chicago gangs. Pretty interesting stuff.

Good evening to you. Thank you! That is a high compliment. Each of them was overwhelmed by the sexual feelings that the other’s seductive alter-ego was arousing in them. When they finally gave in to their desires, it was like a dam breaking; they had to have each other, right then and there. If they had had more time together in dreamland, I think they eventually would have made love in the way that you describe. Even if I didn't read about that in chapter three... it bounced back with the bittersweet end in chapter eight. I didn’t want them to have their lives changed entirely by the experience, but I didn’t want a total “reset button” ending, either. I wanted there to be at least a little hint that Phineas and Candace’s relationship will be positively affected by the insight they gained about themselves and each other during their shared dream. I’m glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks very much for the review!

Thank you! When I started writing “Whoops,” I didn't fully understand that I was committing myself to writing what has turned out to be the longest continuous sex scene I've ever written. I was thinking that I could focus on some of the sisters’ liaisons with Lincoln and “fast forward” through others. But as I wrote, I realized that I didn't want to skimp on any of them, because part of the fun and challenge of writing this story has been figuring out how Lincoln would accommodate each sister's desires. (I'm having a good time right now finishing up his scene with Lisa, which is requiring the frequent use of both Dictionary.com and Wikipedia. ) You are most welcome! The next NSFW Loud House story I have planned, titled “The Loud House After Dark,” will feature some hardcore hanky-panky between Lincoln and Lynn.

Re: “Comfort and Joy” Thank you! Striking that balance was very important to me in writing this fic. My thought was that not only is Carl a teenage boy who has two hot girls to get it on with, but he and the others were pretty backed up from having to keep it in their pants while their parents made up their minds about whether to let the kids keep having sex. And being introduced to anal sex probably put a bit of extra lead in Carl’s pencil, too. From what I’ve read—and I’ll confess that I haven’t made a thorough study of the subject—that people can become physiologically capable of orgasm at almost any age, including toddlerhood. And given that sexual precocity runs very strongly in Carl’s family, I didn’t think it implausible that his kids could be capable of orgasm at age 4. And thank you for the review!

Thank you. The fact that I had to Google “bishie” makes me feel like less of a perv.

Minor1 and Minor2 are definitely clearer. The only unique information the shota and loli tags would add is whether the minor is male or female.

Definitions seem to vary. I’ve seen “shota” used to refer to anything involving sexual activity with young boys, which is further classified as “straight shota” or “gay shota. I’ve also seen “loli” used to distinguish drawn or otherwise fictional young girls from real ones.

I’ve never understood why the shota and loli tags are restricted to anime. Shouldn’t they apply to any underage character, not just underage anime characters?