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I’m gonna go with a standard shell from a panzer 3. I’m checking specs right now.
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Right? But the character in question is a regenerative immortal type.
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So I’m at a loss at the moment. What injuries can I expect pertaining to WW2 german tank rounds?
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From JayDee on June 27, 2021 Fallen City – Bit of an action packed part here! The explosion at the start and the use of the meat shield was hella fun. Liked the portrayal of the pissed-off-at-humanity gallows god too. People forget these days that ol’ One-Eye had a temper… With prophecy broken fate is in flux but tends to go the path of least resistance. The journey to catastrophic war is picking up steam. The Jotun will not stand idle not when their only ally that treats them as people rather than monsters is suddenly attacked. The roosters that foretell the final battle might be drowned in the river that never freezes. Inertia however is ramping up. Asgard is definitely on team fuck humanity and Jotun are on Humanity’s side when they hear humanity’s cry for aid the war horns will beckon Apocalypse is on the horizon. SPOILER COMMENTS …did I get that right? Did Glykon just destroy the spear? Now that was a badass tough moment there. Glykon did destroy Gungnir, Its power wrecking the city. The oaths The Allfather forced on others are broken, his symbol of authority ruined. This object showcasing Asgard’s unassailable might ruined. It’s a loss of face, a loss of strength. his greatest act was he stole the antichrist, The Beast Of The Sea right out from under Odin’s nose and for that he needed Zahhak to cause commotion and take everyone’s focus solely on him. And he did it all *without* hands Glykon got some hidden depths! Also kinda funny the way he shows up and does his effortless convincing through the sock puppet like usual! Did she even need to use the human as a meat shield, or was it just a bit of “being an asshole for the sake of it?” The Beast Of The Sea is a unrepentant jerk, She’s also the most powerful of Lucifer’s remaining brood. Since Zahhak and likely other players have been tracking down her siblings. She isn’t afraid of throwing down, not when she can go straight into dark souls boss mode with her warform. She is not a match against a skyfather, head of a godtribe but then her true power lay not in combat (which is considerable She’s a daughter of a confirmed god killer) But in her ability to influence others especially humans. She can bring out the worst in others. It seems like being mortal has limited prospects in this chapter anyway, with the Valkyries going full massacre. No doubt a few regretting they’re not fitting in old Viking activities like the pillage, and the other thing. Humanity just got sucker punched and blows keep on coming.I would not want to live on this particular world right now. The fact that a head of a tribe of gods just openly destroyed a city is all the admission one needs to successfully infer that the Global Pantheon is not on humanity’s side.
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Nearly done with the last preview.
But here’s a writer question isn’t it a nice thing to do to put your manuscript through spellchecker/grammarly so your editor doesn’t hate you? You know catch the obvious errors first.
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“Sorcerer’s Stone” does run off the tongue a bit better than the Philosopher’s Stone, otherwise, yep, would’ve been better if the Britishisms weren’t removed.
As to my potter fanfic, not sure where the old disclaimer that I was American went to, apologizing in advance for not being perfect to British. However, I do try to insert some British where I can, particularly “todger” and “zebra crossing”.
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Only have two HP fanfictions when where harry is trying to survive in a zombie apocalypse a scenario were the wizarding world is almost guaranteed to thrive in since wands don’t run out of bullets
And a dark lord Harry who AK’d peter in the graveyard, a relatively slow corruption story hahah.
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I’ve only got one potter fanfic I’m working on, now A/U because it was a “continue the story” type of fic that was popular between book releases, and it’s interesting enough to finish. As it’s technically a sequel to my first “continue the story” fanfic, which itself was “continue the story” based on another (now abandoned) fanfic, I can’t bring the story itself to AFF w/o filing off the serial numbers which I couldn’t bring myself to do. However, it’s plenty fun to write with Harry being framed up to be a “suspected dark wizard” and it pokes fun at the Harry/Ginny shipping.
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Never have done water-sports and tentacles might be fun. As for family, that’s why you use your personal accounts and not your public one haha.
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From JayDee on June 25, 2021 “Returning light” “Harry thought of good times with his best mates and he was rewarded with a bang” Filthy! Oh OH, right, wrong bang. Carry on. This one seems to be fairly optimistic! Ol Riddle coming across as a bit of a dick in Harry’s recollection which definitely fits in canon. I liked how he got the ol’ Patronus running around and had a nice sense of comfort from the light. There’s a quote, I think Terry Pratchett? “Sometimes it’s better to light a flamethrower than curse the darkness.” Anyway, good to get back into Harry’s head here and looking forward to the next part. Even if it is detailed laundry doing. To rise on the back of giants means you don’t have start from scratch. He’s got Dumbledore and others as examples he isn’t alone. Darkness has marked him but at his core Harry shines brighter for it.
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Its a badge of honor. Oh you liked them doing carnal fornication?! well then that’s what they’ll do
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http://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600099588&chapter=11
Just a quick update to celebrate my achievement of finishing and then I decided to do a Preview Hahaha. The world is grand <3
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Lol I have the rest of my life to expand the verse as it were hahah.
Now off to find a decent editor!!!
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Now off to find a decent editor!!!
An indecent editor might be more appealing?
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Finally, my labor is nearing its ebb. 3k words left
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QuoteHow does it feel? I’m always torn when I make it to the end of something. I’m thrilled to be done, but never quite ready to let the little story go out into the world all alone…
You guys are making it to the end of things?
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You guys are making it to the end of things?
“End of things” … that does not compute.
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6k words let just wow. Home stretch is nearly in sight. I can’t believe it.
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One more chapter… one more chapter… words seduce, and you’ll have that million in no time!
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Maybe for my HP fanfic
Tarnished Lion =p nearly 30k dragon prints and yet three comments so I assume people enjoy it? I’m pretty sure it’s almost as many words as order of the phoenix
but I swore I’d be a full fledged writer by my birthday
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My potter fic (on AO3) stands at 927k – that’s short, right?
Not sure the best way to get people to comment/review, otherwise I’d be minting them myself.
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When’s the next one?
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Am I wrong or is my grammar checker an idiot?
InvidiaRed replied to Ghost-of-a-Chance's topic in Writers' Corner
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I mainly ado full mage build. I should probably do that whole OP sniper archer everyone seems to do. The spells can be a little lack luster buts its hilarious when you can heal yours companions faster than they can get hurt.
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12K words left and my wordsmithing is nearing its end
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Lemme proofread… “12M words left” right?
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Hahaha.
No, 8k left since I essentially had to rewrite the entire novel almost from the ground up. So find another editor
getting nervous tho. What if everybody hates it? ugh..
How do you fellow writers deal with the nerves?
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How do you fellow writers deal with the nerves?
Close my eyes before I hit the post button.
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I feel like there is a whole untapped subgenre of what happens when a zombie apocalypse gets worse.
*Werewolf howls*
or demons escaping hell or vampires going crazy as they try to find the last living humans before they go totally feral.
or even suddenly it goes disaster movie.
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@GeorgeGlass Max Brooks*’ short story The Extinction Parade and the comic miniseries adaption pretty much matches that.
*The World War Z guy.
Edit – https://www.amazon.com/Max-Brooks-Extinction-Parade-1/dp/1592912346
“As humans wage their losing fight versus the hoards of the subdead, a frightening realization sets in with the secretive vampire race: our food is dying off. This is the story of the vampire's descent into all-out war with the mindless, hungry hordes of the zombie outbreak as humanity tries to survive them all! “
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Suddenly, the thought came to my head… “The Zombie Dating GAME SHOW!” I must be very disturbed.
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I kinda want to write a zombie apoclypse that happens during a dating game show. hahaha
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Chemical burns tend to be worse because acids will continue doing damage until washed off/ neutralized.
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From JayDee on June 01, 2021 Part 2! (basically the DM comments!) In terms of fairly brutal helpless darkfic it’s pretty fucking solid. Some interesting ideas -I’ve listed a couple bits that stood out – and it seems to be pushing on your existing storyline. I always figured Lucifer’s big advantage was his cunning and brain though, bit like Loki really. Is he gonna take it lying down? Absolutely not, He’s more concerned with the fact that for all the hard work he’s done in keeping the status quo that he personally and his poker buddies have done essentially means nothing. Since the main body for the gods has quietly chosen to destroy man. So by securing the aid of pretty much the designated bastard. There’s some small glimmer that it won’t all end in tears. He may act eviler than he truly is but it’s an entirely different thing to be the sextoy and gimp of a god of evil. For the general MM content – I’ve written a lot less of this so you might be better asking someone with a lot more writing experience to look it over. MORE SPOILER LIKE COMMENTS This Zahhak snake guy is way less funny to be around than the snake with puppets dude! But, not a complaint, you’re going for darkfic, right? Anyway, seems like these bunker dwelling assholes probably had it coming. Generally good guys don’t get bunkers. So, fuck ‘em. Let the god of evil have his fun. This is very much a every dog has his day. In this case, while the world is reeling from waking up a year later and a pandemic the evil gods have all the chaos they need to put their plans into motion. “Lucifer's knee erupted in a shower of divine ichor.” – Nothing wrong here, this is a great line! Fuckin’ kneecappin’ the devil. Then knocking another couple limbs off, pretty brutal! Also really cool of having Lucifer undo that zipper with his teeth and get a cock in the face. That’s…. that’s something I’ve not seen before I don’t think. I’ve seen coming all manner of noxious substances, and oviposition, but I don’t think I’ve ever seen anybody coming fire ants, or other bugs. That’s a hell of good idea! Thanks Cumming swarms of vermin paints a vivid picture. Doesn’t it? Haha I kinda want to see you use it since I unironically love your writing. Its also something Ahriman really would do. Since canonically, He’s a god that chooses to be a bastard. ‘ It is not that I cannot create anything good, but that I will not. ‘ He’s very much the woke up and choose violence kinda guy. And nothing sounds as petty as losing your crops to a horde of locusts just because some random asshole wanted to rub one out. Lucifer having an Olympian buttplug in was also cool and this here: "You whore." Ahriman said, pleased that he didn't have to break in that unconquered hole. "You've been fucking an Olympian! Did they all have a turn? Of course, Zeus had a taste of you. You're going to catch something from that manwhore." That’s pretty funny. Solid bit of levity as he’s talking to his victim there. Of course, Zeus would fuck anything. I find it funny that Ahriman accuses of Zeus of having STI’s but here he’s literally giving luci vermin and likely exposing him to all the sexual infections. Ahriman is a god that sees the destruction or desecration of beautiful things as a beautiful thing. He finds beauty in ugliness and ugliness is beauty. He’s complimenting Lamashtu here because really does find her grotesque appearance wonderful. Growing the snake out to wrap it around Lucifier’s dick is another idea I really don’t think I’ve seen the like before. Really inventive! At this stage I’m not sure if it’s like a chastity-bondage device, or a living fleshlight. (Both, you say? Well played!) It was a multifold way to , prevent him from using his manhood and keep him randier than a bitch in heat and remind Luci than Ahriman’s pleasure is more important than his own. Lucifer is his gimp. His bitch. And since he’s filled to bursting with vermin he’s going nowhere for the moment. Pleasure venom swelling the balls is another cool image. It’s not like he’ll be using them and he has to feed that snakehead something haha. just the Antichrist chap and then the epilogue
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Updating Tags for Offering Sorrow
inhindsight being a dark POV should of done that first
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Writer question
Pen names are confusing af like you have to copyright it?
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IANAL, however, I think trademark applies to pen names.
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I never copyrighted my pen name, actually, but no one else has had the urge to use it as far as I know.
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Google search later, pen names may be trademark-protected, but aren’t copyright-protected. Though, more practically, I think other writers (& lawyers) may gang up on somebody poaching another’s name.
A scorched-earth option, make your writing sufficiently notorious so nobody dares to be associated with it.
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From JayDee on May 17, 2021 Well that's dark! Dismembered and still defiant there for that prisoner was kinda cool - solid description on the heart pulling there. With the mention of the drowned roosters I was making smutty jokes in my head - "It's an AFF story and cocks get wet" etc but I'm guessing that's completely unintended with the dark tones. Well, fuck them gods right? Down with ragnarok! Those wolves are fun too. Just a badass pack doing wolf stuff for mama. Mama does not fuck around when it comes to family she plays to win. Everyone else at best falls into the category of acceptable losses if they’re even considered at all even Duncan himself isn’t safe. She will deprive Asgard of that fated glorious last stand even if it means she has to kickstart another apocalypse. If her children live it will have all been worth it. The next chapter however, Ahriman is providing a challenge, I’ve never written an utter bastard before so I might PM you to at least look it over. @JayDee you portray evil characters so well.
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A grouping of humans is called a tribe
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And a grouping of crows is murder.
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A grouping of raven is an unkindness- I love how the naming are so amazing.
Bears- Sleuthe
Tigers- Streak
Hippos- Pod
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Heads up Offering Sorrow
is a dark antagonist’s POVs.
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Aw, a more clear-cut evil for the sake of evil? Most of my original fiction “antagonists” could be written as protagonists if you switched POVs – ie, they think they’re protecting society from the evils my typical main characters “represent”.
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Sometimes you don’t need a complex motivation other than
I’m going to destroy everything!- Angra Mainyu
Angrboda’s primary motivation is family. She genuinely loves her children Fenrir, Hel and Jormungander and wants them safe on earth is understandable. Wanting to avenge her own murder is too, Conspiring to get humanity to nuke Asgard less so.
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True, sometimes it simply takes a divorce to bring out the worst in people. Have fun writing whatever the heck you want to write!