JayDee

I dunno if I’ll manage anything. I only did last year by re-working a half-assed story I’d already started on, and I’ve barely done anything writing-wise since January. Good luck to all who do tho’ and I’ll check out any without the minor1 tags!

My first playthrough was the same big-axe good-guy Orc I try to create for all of them – responding to dark brotherhood recruitment attempt by twatting Astrid and so on – but i played the stealth archer build everyone was on about later for sure!

When you start praying to the Night Mother for a contract on the heavy footed fuck alerting every Falmer in Blackreach that you’re there to loot their shit.

They’d treat him worse than the Argonians up in Windhelm!

I’ve commented a few times that multi chapter stories seem to get more hits overall because they get a boost from being pushed back to the front page each time the oneshots don’t get. If you guys mean Skyrim: Plaything as the Skyrim story – that’s had 36 chapters for 12k hits which works out (average only!) 333 hits a chapter from folks clicking on the front page which is still impressive and more than most of mine ever did but possibly not as intimidating a comparison as it looks. ...I gotta do a Skyrim story sometime. I got Morrowind, I got Oblivion… including Jar Jar Binks crossover request bah.

I wish to apologise to everybody if reading my porn is what causes SkyNet to try to exterminate us all.

Flicking through Unleash the Beast comparing the above has had me thinking a second part would be cool, Hermione back to Hogwarts not long before her 17th Birthday, ends up spending the night in Hagrid’s hut and seducing the cowardly Fang, who for the purposes of the pwp would have some magic in his bloodline is still frisky at senior dog stage… eh. Got this idea of some dogs of magic infused that breed litters of puppies with witches, a secret group called the Union of the Knot, with only one or rarely two puppies out of each little also able to carry on a magical rather than non magical bloodline. There should have been a witch with Fang back in ‘89 or so, but the candidate turned out not to be able to get through his basica cowardice, perhaps scaring him due to personality conflict. Hermione’s the second effort, having been unknowingly observed with Saxon in part 1, they arrange for her to find herself alone with Fang for the night, and then the next morning one of them is making breakfast when she wakes up caked in dried sperm and strongly smelling of dog sex, and explains she’s now likely pregnant, that the pregnancy enhances her own fertility – maybe a suggestion that Fang’s grandmother was Molly, another member of the Union... Yes, this is some fucked up shit, but the first story was popular and turning it around a bit so Hermione is the seducer rather than the other way round, and adding in the pregnancy angle (some kinda magic to hide it while she’s carrying I guess) would be something new. I dunno, I feel like I probably won’t get it written but it’s nice to plan stuff and feel ideas form…

Oh, yeah, those rating bombs were not great. Only happened to one of my stories – went from like 4 stars/30 votes where it had been for months to over 100 votes overnight and 1 star. I tended not to pay a lot of attention to ratings, but it still kinda sucked. A like button would be pretty good -might need to be tied to accounts tho’ like on Twitter, to reduce fake boosting (probably not all the way but some of the way!) I feel like it’s unlikely

I just assume they don’t like my stories! But, seriously, dragon prints can be a reasonable guide, especially if they keep going up loads on new parts.

It could work, even if they eventually do come back – see their adventures on the way!

Shokan Lust has some good bits, some of the jokes in ‘You!’ aren’t terrible, and there’s also a few scenes in Ending the Fan that came out alright. I kinda have a soft spot for unleash the beast too, just because it’s probably my most plagiarised story. But enough about me now, this is your story discussion thread! We oughta talk your story! You ever think about introducing a good guy character who is too big to fit in the bunker? Kinda interracting with them outside, but having to face it all alone. A Transformer maybe, or some other big ol’ character.

Yeah, but it wasn’t my concept, it was a request fic

Oldschool mortal kombat fan probably! For the Shokan Lust story, someone had read my previous Sheeva-with-a-dick oneshot and suggested the Sonya corruption storyline for the next one. I had about a ten year period where whenever someone suggested something to me I could pretty much write it. Now I’m like “Soundas great! Awesome idea” *Gets nothing done* I am pretty sure DS only did the first Gogedheh story because someone paid him to do the concept in an actually readable and entertaining form, then the rest were paid for by folks who liked that one he wrote and didn’t know I did something with the character first. Possibly not the best recommendation of the original there

Come to that, I watched it when I was a kid so it’s gotta have been before your time originally hasn’t it? I forget this stuff! I keep forgetting too, it’s been years since I was a regular there so it’s probably changed a whole lot. I mean, two seperate comments on a story not by DS? Things have really changed! But aside from that, I expect different users now have different tastes. Funny thing, I’ve had Sheeva in three seperate stories which is probably enough to get her into my “most written about character” top five or so – (HP single fandom not included!). I liked playing her a lot back when MK3 came out I guess. Well, there’s a lot less violence/gore in my Sheeva-and-Sonya starring Shokan Lust and when it does appear it’s not the focus. Eh. Fair enough though, mosta my shit is kinda niche, and poorly written niche at that so worth skipping if ya don’t dig the themes

Has there been anything major you’ve cut out in the revision? Entire subplots, or sex scenes, or anything like that, or is it more of a re-ordering and changing from tell to show like the example here? Half-elf: “Yes I’m 400 years old, but I still like to fuck. Get yer pants off big guy.” It’s the kind of thing can bite a tyrant in the ass! I gues he doesn’t care with his power and demons. I did see the line, I didn’t realise it was that kind of drug! (brand name Floppicoxin… ahem) I think I assumed more like a fatigue one. D’oh. Ah, fair enough. I hadn’t thought about that. Makes sense!

I think my problem with mcstories was probably like you say a lot of repetition, but one author there I think I first saw on the grey archive was TantricLegion who did some great corruption stories. I sometimes still nip back there today to re-read one or two bits! Sometimes a particular style or theme of writing’ll just keep drawing ya in Unintentional reference, but I can totally start claiming it was intentional :p Well, if it does work it’s cool and good luck, and if it doesn’t it’s a nice mental exercise!

Compare and contrast!Ddescriptions of effects of various severities and treatments: https://www.nhs.uk/conditions/burns-and-scalds/ (one small picture) vs https://www.nhs.uk/conditions/acid-and-chemical-burns/

You! Thank you for this review also! It’s funny, when I did chapter one I just figured it would be a oneshot, deciding what direction to go later on I had to try and draw the earlier stuff together and have it make some kind of sense. Or failing that a joke or two. The year 2000? Was it on the old grey archive, or superstories or another one? There were some good old stories back in those days. I remember one I think called superheroine central? Had some free stories too from some talented authors. Could absolutely just keep you reading, though these days I bet I’d get too tried afore long. Thanks again! Kate definitely suffers some ill effects from the magic there and even more so when she gets out of the house – luckily she’s got good friends to help her through it. Shannon’s promise to herself that she’d get Kate out in that Christmas story worked “Sounds like a Yaoi overdose” was one of my favourite lines from it! If you got any ideas on it that would work absolutely feel free to go ahead and use it! I just had it as a throwaway cranky Lupa line. When you say forced into the role, is it kinda like that film Liar Liar where he had to tell the truth all the time, or one where they’d be forced to provide expositon on everything, maybe even stuff they didn’t know about like, “Yes your husband was late back last night. He’s got a goat fetish. Just been blowing them all up the field.” Or something else? Either way, thanks you again for the reviews! Has been fun revisiting this little story.

I’m glad it was a quick fix! If I could face looking through my stories there’s probably a few there too. Oh, sure, deep inside! I saw that one, but it was ages ago so I mostly just have a vague idea they got a happy ending. No problem!

That’s what Uncle Joe always used to say!

New review for Unleash the Beast Thanks for your review! I wasn’t aware of this, so, I googled and found what you’re seemingly referring to: https://www.cyoc.net/interactives/chapter_116731/branch_116731.html or this page – https://www.cyoc.net/interactives/chapter_150402/full.html Now since my story was uploaded to AFF in 2007 (last edited in 2008) and time, unlike a heavy creamy load of dog spunk blown inside a witch, doesn’t flow backwards, I’m sure what you meant was “There’s a reskin of this story in a choose your own change thread The user there didnt even change the dog's name.” Thanks for letting me know. ...edit – if you happen to be a member there, feel free to let ‘em know one of the users isn’t being entirely original with their writing!

My own Jadis flashfic had no minors...but no sex either. Just piss and petrification. Which would make a good band name. I never actually got around to reading them, although having a vampire and a werewolf show up doesn’t exactly help my case. Shockingly, it is a genuine American name! See Starla the redneck in the movie Slither. “Who wants to try anal with me? You do? Bend over, nerd!” No worries, I know how busy folks get. Like I said to Invidia, If I didn’t have my reviews for the Sparrow/InBrighestday story already written months ago from IBD previewing it to me, I’d probably not have the time to give them as much feedback each week either (it’s a damn good story tho’!) I am looking forward to yours, hopefully tomorrow as I remembered I have a day off work!

You! part 2! Thank you again for this review! Her stories are very compelling. You want to look away, but can’t, and before you know it you’re doing her evi bidding. There’s no truth to the rumour this was based on J K Rowling. He’s distracted by the game at the time with headphones and mic, and when he turns around he just thinks his Mom’s let a couple of folks in and they came through the door. With Sarsa grabbing his attention he doesn’t click that ‘you’ are a total stranger. ‘Starla’ is just the name of some girl who knows who cosplays, roughly Sarsa’s height, and he initially thinks Sarsa is her in prosthetics and make up. Sarsa’s really only pretending to be nice with him. Once she encountered him she realised she could use him to further her aims, and put her rage to one side, but once she had what he wanted he was probably going to suffer a very long, painful, and possibly pop culture ridden fate. He’d not die. Thanks again for the reviews!

You! Thank youfor the review! She’s a great actress, playing ‘you’ like a fiddle and messing with your mind. And yeah, definitely a lack of reviews for folks sometimes Jadis is the heroine! She solved Narnia’s global warming crisis and stopped all those Sons of Adam and Daughters of Eve from messing up the place. And that’s my story and I’m sticking to it because there’s a tree looking suspicously at me and some of them are on her side. Thanks again! Much appreciated the review. I’m super busy right now but will catch up on the new part of ‘From the Mirror Came’ as soon as I can