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“A” in AFF stands for “adult”, which free-speech means you’re free to write a wanker aid, if that wanks your noggin, which is fine. We’re here to help with improving the writing, and stereotypes are something we’re all susceptible to writing in without realizing it, perhaps we’re writing faster than we’re thinking. (Felt we needed the reminder.) My take, of course, is that you could turn your info-dump into some wonderful scenes. Now, I think you’re going to write this from Janina’s POV, at which point, she’s not going to describe herself in that level of detail – how many women will envy another woman’s breasts? Now, if you change the POV to be from a male’s (or lesbian’s) perspective, then having him/her lust over her breasts gives you an opportunity to describe them in more detail and be relevant to the story. If this is an investigator’s POV, investigating the blood stain on the wall post-insult, then measurements of Janina’s breasts might be relevant to the rap-sheet. From Janina’s POV, you can still hint, having her complain about back-pain from the stress, she doesn’t know the magic, can’t afford the potion, etc, and is saving up for a reduction procedure? As to clothes from Janina’s POV, could have her deciding what to wear in the morning, perhaps in front of a mirror, give a chance to describe all of her trousers as being green, or whatever. Using makeup to hide a mole, etc. Or even grumble when red wine is spilled and staining her clothes. And the hair, well, the band could slip so she has to redo it. All ideas…

That’s how you could introduce Janina, from the MC’s POV (male, right)? He could remember his *last* time there, an insult that pissed her off, and how he doesn’t want to repeat his mistake again. In doing so, add in details to her cleavage/clothes every other paragraph or so.

@Desiderius Price linked to the list of tags. Unfortunately, once you’ve added the story, additional tags have to be added manually. If you go to your Control Panel, and open the story manager for the desired subdomain, you’ll see a box link marked Edit Story Info. Click that, and you’ll be back on the [page where you had input your story’s info. You can then type in the additional tags in the proper field. Just remember to scroll to the bottom and click the Edit button to save the changes.

I bookmarked it ages ago, refer to it from time to time, cause it’s handy!

Thank you for that, Desi. I was looking for that post.

At long last, “The Cartooniverse Mother-Daughter Crossover Sextacular” is complete! Chapter 4: The Surprise Event

Author notes (SPOILERS) The idea for this story came to me after someone on Lolicit asked everyone what their favorite incest pairing was: father/daughter, brother/sister, etc. I didn't actually know which one I liked best, so I decided to make a list of all the incest stories I've ever written to see which pairing came up most often. In doing so, I discovered that although I had written plenty of father/daughter and brother/sister stories, and even a couple of brother/brother and father/son stories, I had written almost no mother/daughter stories. That discovery, combined with an item in my list of story ideas that simply read "Some kind of cartoon crossover," led me to start writing this fic. Seventy-five different fandoms (ie, cartoons and cartoon franchises) are referenced in this story. They are all listed in the disclaimer at the start of chapter 1. This is the first story for which I've ever had two betas (not counting one or two stories where the original beta had to bow out and I recruited a second one). I did this because the story covers so many fandoms -- including a few that I am not especially familiar with (eg, Fairly OddParents, My Little Pony) -- that I felt like I needed all the help I could get to make sure all the characters’ speech and behavior seemed authentic. In fact, Jomahawk and Fairy Slayer served as both alpha and beta readers, because I bounced ideas and a preliminary draft of chapter 1 off of them before I began writing in earnest, and during the writing, I contacted them a few more times to solicit ideas. All of the US states from which the characters hail are canon except for Metroville (home of the Incredibles) being in Kansas, because Metroville has no canonical location. I wanted to give it one, though, so as not to ruin the running joke from The Simpsons about no one ever saying what state Springfield is in. Given that Metroville is based in part on Metropolis, Kansas seemed like a reasonable choice of state. If this story were an actual cartoon, voice actress Grey Griffin would have a fair amount to do, as she is the voice of both Riley Daring and Lola Loud on their respective series. “Mammelli,” the endearment that Vivian Garcia-Shapiro uses with Isabella in chapter 2, is a made-up portmanteau of the Yiddish mammelle and the Spanish mami. (Interestingly, both words are diminutive terms for “mother” but are used with daughters and other loved ones, too.) Likewise, yingelija, which Vivian uses in chapter 4, is a mashup of yingel (Yiddish for "cute little one") and hija (Spanish for "daughter"), and dybbuquito is a portmanteau of dybbuk (Hebrew for “devil”) and the Spanish suffix “-ito” for “little.” I included a cameo for Jessica Rabbit for two reasons. First, she was a favorite of fan artists for a long time -- long before the phrase "Rule 34" was coined. Second, how could I write a big cartoon-crossover story without referencing Who Framed Roger Rabbit -- the biggest cartoon-crossover movie ever made? The dog-fucking event is a reference to the enormous number of male canine cartoon characters out there. The bit in chapter 4 about the 1980s version of Glimmer, “whose body seemed to have been poured from the same mold as She-Ra’s,” is a reference to the fact that the toy versions of both She-Ra and Glimmer (and most of the other female characters from the '80s She-Ra cartoon) were made with the same mold to reduce manufacturing costs. In the dog-fucking competition, the contestants are given twenty minutes to get it on with the dogs. Fairy Slayer noted that when he had his text-to-speech program read him the chapter, the time that elapses between Johnny Bravo saying, “On your marks, get set, fuck!” and “Ladies and, uh, dogs, your time is up!” is twenty minutes and one second.

Grr… I hate getting flame/troll reviews (on FF.net, not here)…