From JayDee on April 02, 2020
Part 2 – First comes the violence, then comes the sex!
The unseen Bellatrix feels very much in character. Crazy. Violent. Hanging out in men’s restrooms and making things explode. Heck of a mental image on that poor janitor. Then again, he may have had it coming. Blowing brains everywhere does stop a zombie.
Now with the guy from the tent – I think that is an OC? I don’t remember them as a character, while going with the name Argus in this setting gives me a mental image of Filch on his knees blowing Harry. Which actually works. Don’t tell the cat. Having shaken both that, and a many eyed Greek guy out of mind I found I could envisage Mr Valentine pretty well.
Noticeably shorter wand… heh, I’ll never not see a double entendre in wand length comparisons. I’m sure many readers are the same.
The BJ was hot! Harry a little nonplussed, on a rooftop, just getting drained like that is a fun image. Surprised it hasn’t proven more popular really!
Muggletum Finivi
Is a whenever upload definitely not dead. But I find Tarnished Lion and My original stories take up the most time. Its both a double entendre and very compliant with HP’s wandlore. His personality has something lacking.
Sex scenes for me are personally the hardest to write.