JayDee

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  1. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis Discussion Thread

    No embedded links on the forum but you could always link the gallery! But, yeah, it is pretty quiet here so if it’s any effort it might not be worth the time.
  2. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis Discussion Thread

    If I can’t finish stories anymore at least I can still do over-labored garbage jokes! There was a lot of distracting stuff going on at the time, so it’s easy for us readers to assume any discussion about it happened ‘off camera’ while the in-room scrap was happening. Still, I suppose it could have had a call back later, like Kyle getting a hand job and then remembering the energy blasted from those hands. Hey! We had websites with images in 2003! Ain’t that long ago. Kinda slow, for the folks still on 56k or less dial up, but they were there! I think AFF just doesn’t support direct linking to avoid all the dead link issues. That is some pretty darn creepy art.
  3. I check out forum activity sometimes and saw the post out of context and, for some reason had a mental image of Charlie Brown as a really angry Joe Pesci-a-like, and thought I’d post the joke! After all, Chuck probably wouldn’t really get made as he was only Sicilian on his mother’s side.
  4. ~line from “You’re A Made Man Now, Charlie Brown.”
  5. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis

    If the bad guy’s been watching some Chris Hansen this might not go his way!
  6. Sub: Games Title: The Last Weekend Story Written: http://games.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600090713
  7. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis Discussion Thread

    Spoiler’d it ‘cos character spoilers. The old tabletop game does sound like it woulda been fun.
  8. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis Discussion Thread

    I don’t really have the reflexes these days, 12 year old me wasn’t too shabby tho’ I think she came out fine – the versions I know best are the old very two dimensional bios from the early Street Fighter IIs and also the live action movie version that was somewhat different physically, but still managed to give Bison a bit of a kicking. She’s a heroic type who fights hard, but you also have her dealing with trauma rather than it just “got brutalised, moving strraight on,” As for a lot of the others I either don’t know ‘em too well/at all, or haven’t seem stuff with them for ages. For Kyle, he seems like how he’d be, moving from one shitty fucking dystopian hellscape of hunter killers to another one, Bathory from Bloodrayne seems like a pretty unpleasant Nazi, although obviously hiding it , from the stuff we see. Ya really expanded well on what I remember of her in Bloodrayne. I’ve enjoyed both arcs so far! Edit: Without spoilers, one of the arc 2 characters seems kinda different to how he does in game, but that’s probably explainable by the game version being a computer program of a dead guy, while the one in the story is pre-death and lacking access to nukes for when someone messes with a girl he likes. On the other hand I think I managed to identify two new ones before they’d even been named when they were first shown!
  9. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis Discussion Thread

    I haven’t played the more recent Street Fighters so I don’t know if it made it into ‘em, but I bet anybody who played the old Street Fighter II and variants’d remember it and make the connection! I had a good nostalgic blast on SNES Mini when it came out – Those early voice samples were something else. Half the time I thought it was announcing “CHIP PAN!” instead of Japan.
  10. I thought I might have an anime1 thread already I could re-use on the quiet, but, no, apparantly not. I’ve never even heard of Beyblade. I thought it might be something that got whipped out during creative disagreements in Destiny’s Child. Should I ever write any more D B stories this thread would be for the review replies/discussion points on those too. “Android 18 gets Windows 10” would probably not be a big draw though. So here is a Dragon Ball thread for replying to any reviews I receive on my shortly to be uploaded story Frying Pan. I think it may even technically be a re-upload, but if I did have it on AFF for a bit in 2008 I don’t remember when/why I took it down. As the writer who ate a box of crayons and shat out Flaying Solo, Taking the Sky from Kaylee and Ohio Vanilla it can’t have been a question of content, good taste or quality. The forum it was originally written to be pasted on is long gone, and googling hasn’t found a copy loaded elsewhere so looks like it’ll be an AFFO. I set out to check for typos (Somehow 2008 JD failed to spot writing “pained” for “painted”) and have currently added over 1000 words to the original. Whether this makes it better or worse I dunno. Pan is aged 20 in it, there was fanart of her drawn as a pretty muscular adult I saw at the time but there is no way in hell I am going to try searching for adult fanart of Pan on the modern internet. Especially because without more modifiers I’d be looking at a whole lot of goat penis. Maybe even too much. Anyway, I will hopefully have the story loaded tomorrow or Tuesday after another flick through for typos. There will be a link to this very thread. Should I get no reviews this thread will be about as useful as an anatomy textbook at a soft vore convention. Edit: Just over a week later than intended due to unexpected stuff. Now loaded.
  11. You awake to find yourself in a forest clearing. Distantly, you can hear singing. It is pretty fucking tuneless. Oh fuck, it might be Bieber. To the east here’s a sign which reads “Quit looking East”, and to the West is a very suspicious tree stump. If you choose to examine the previously unmentioned mudhole Go to 35. If you choose to win self-determination for the Republic of Molossia go to 63. If you want to know about the unsightly rash spreading across your buttocks go to 28 (Charges may apply).
  12. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis

    Just here promoting Part 9 being up!
  13. I just have: “Gonna find time to write.”
  14. JayDee

    InvidiaRed's review responses

    I’d definitely rather meet the Endless Death than some of ‘em. The Discworld Death seems like a decent sort though. Cats like him, that’s good enough for me!
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    InvidiaRed's review responses

    “Death Dream” is also a pairing that can get you some angry looks from fans of The Sandman.
  16. JayDee

    InvidiaRed's review responses

    Underlit Undead Mindrape?
  17. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis

    Yeah, mentioned being absolutely crushed by work two or three weeks back, probably still busy for the January stuff!
  18. JayDee

    InvidiaRed's review responses

    Not with that attitude!
  19. JayDee

    InvidiaRed's review responses

    Heh, look, you can’t blame me for sticking the wrong name in there, I mean original canon had a Jotun in the role :p Spring shall spring! I mean… that might well be a sensible reaction to zombie apocalypse for most folks. The psychologic pressure can’t be fun.
  20. JayDee

    AFF Holiday Party 2020 -- Review Responses

    My writing does have that effect on people! :p No, I kid, I kid, I expect you’ve been tired as heck with the work ing lately. Invidia might be a bit slower replying – recent status updated suggested away for a bit! Thank you for the review! I just saw it after dropping the review on the latest Mortuus Orbis part! Hugely appreciated getting it, gotta love reviews Thanks! Some of the flavors may also have been salty. Lupa didn’t comment. All the other demons looking for “666 Goat Road” or something, but Shannon’s got other interests. I figure it’s a bit of a call back to Kizzy reassuring Lupa that being a vampire doesn’t automatically make her evil – her living mortal life ended when the vampires came, but then her new unlife started… and that ends with a true death. And, yeah, she does get both superpowers and superweaknesses out of it, like sunlight or the need to drink blood. I freaking love it. Probably it’s only Shannon bringing back other mortals that they need to keep the place properly heated anyway, with Kate imprisoned! Although wouldn’t want it to get all damp, I guess. Mike’s used to it by now anyway, probably sees it as Lupa’s messed up way of showing affection. Shannon would definitely enjoy George’s stories! Shannon’s jewelry is quality stuff! None of your QVC crap. That bracelet she made for Kizzy way back when all this story universe started allowed her to bind an angel with her own power, and that wasn’t even the intended use! Yeah, Lupa probably sees herself as “Shannon’s dumpy friend”, but there’s nothing wrong with her! Especially worrying maybe how much better at the social life her housemates can be – even Kizzy is a really good active listener. There’s definitely something a little supernatural about her temperature, and how it changes so quickly when she gets blood, but doesn’t freeze solid when out in subzero temperatures. I figure most of the time she’s probably noticably cooler than the room she’s in, but probably only by a degree or so, like she hasn’t quite warmed up fully, but then her temperature just doesn’t change at extremes of heat or cold ‘cos of the supernatural side not obeying yer laws of thermodynamics properly. Or something. Man, we're damn lucky I wasn't drinking anything when I read that, because I would have spat it out laughing. The fact that Lupa can now get stronger from blowjobs is extremely Shannon and both funny and sweet. You spit, Lupa swallows… :p It’s probably not just blowjobs, although I didn’t get around to writing a petrative sex scene :p It’s kinda a retread of the oral scene in the gamer girl story, except with them now having a much deeper relationship, and Mike being better at it. Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks again! Yeah, another little callback to the line from Lupa in You! that Shannon figured out the way to get her in to get Kate out, but for anyone who hasn’t read that it really just continues the mentions of Kate being imprisoned earlier on – me trying to keep it self contained as much as possible, so I’m glad that it really worked there with the standalone element!
  21. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis

    They got Part 8 up. Just doing the promo with InBrightestDay being busy an’ all :p Plus because it’s a great story that oughta be promoted.
  22. JayDee

    InvidiaRed's review responses

    I have none whatsoever. Except maybe for writing the Spyro story. This is a great way of putting it! If you’re writing a fight scene and somebody ends up elbow-deep in the other guy’s fudge factory, it’s what you’d call a really dirty fight.
  23. JayDee

    Mortuus Orbis

    Part 7 looks to be up Will re-read and review tomorrow
  24. JayDee

    AFF Holiday Party 2020 -- Review Responses

    Oh, cool! That’s super positive. “That one’s definitely a superhero!” “That’s… that’s just a background police horse.” “Oh.”
  25. JayDee

    AFF Holiday Party 2020 -- Review Responses

    Could be! I’m always happier to finish stuff than leave unfinished stuff sitting in me hard drive. She came for the friendship, she stayed for the magic protections woven into the fabric of the building… When she moves into her own place later, with her husband, Shannon’d put the effort in to add the same wards. (“It’s ok. I’m not running out of anime fan clubs anytime soon!) They’re taking place in two different universes and time moved faster in one for a while, but it’s only really confirmed in single lines here and there across different stories – way back in the second part of my slumber party story that introduced Kizzy and them it confirmed Eparlegna had done some really nasty shit on another Earth (referencing the whore story). I think we agreed that time moved relatively faster on the Statue universe for the period that Eparlegna was sealed up there, and so there was a line in the last part of Jude’s Tale that Luzurial had been bound for close to 75 years “relative time”. Then time starts running at the same relative speed after Eparlegna got out. The idea was pretty much entirely so if there was ever a crossover written featuring the mortal characters it would be less of a pain in the ass to mesh together, and also so that there could be some resolution between Kizzy and Shannon and Luzurial without having to wait 75 years in storytime. Incidentally, I wrote a first draft entirely of that resolution storyline that is complete but needs an absolute fuckton of work doing to not be the absolute unreadable boring unsexy garbage it currently is, and also to fit better with InBrightestDay’s better rounded version of Luzurial. “It’s really short!” is definitely the most positive reason I got! Even at under 5000 words I was running on empty with jokes by the end. That’s what I hoped! Bah. Maybe I’ll retool it to be not at Christmas.