Kurahieiritr

I have gotten a few flames over the year, and yet those are almost always off topic, hate mongering against white people for some bizarre reason I can not fathom, and only ever happened on FFnet. Not one of the flames I have gotten ever had anything to do with my actual stories aside from using the half Native American OC as the main scape goat for why all European descent individuals in the USA needed to be slaughtered to save the world. I also got a fair number of FFnet Private messages for a while that were nasty because of the same OC, but they are not actually worth sharing because they are all very shallow and dull complaints with no concrete logic. ROFL. I have yet to run into the same problem here on AFFnet, so nothing to share of that caliber at the moment. I do not consider fanpoodle to be reviews because they give no concrit for me to improve as a writer, although they can be adorable to read because of reader enthusiasm. I do appreciate knowing I made someone's day brighter when I get such enthusiastic feedback. My all time favorite reviews always include concrete feedback. I am very fortunate in the solid readership I have because my current fanfic following does point out specific problems for me to fix. Each review I get allows me to go back, revise and replace chapters to improve the story for future readers. I'll share a couple of my current favorite reviews, although I am a tad frustrated that I did not get every drop of concise information for all the problem words I still have to figure out. Still, I am extremely grateful to Anonym-kun for having the courage to point the flaws out to me. Each piece of concrete explanation has improved my dialog a great deal as I continue to write this series, and take breaks to revise and repost the troublesome spots. Raymy was another who made me aware I had a few awkward spots for chapter 2 that I am trying to decide how better to phrase for clarity. Once I get all of these problems fixed on the computer chapter drafts, I have every intention of abusing the edit chapter button and replacing all the chapters in A Rivalry Revealed. Discovering from this post that Japanese use multiple words for "What" and "why" was a shocker. I bought a "Learn Japanese for Beginners" book that does not cover the different context specific words I need to find. From this post I also learned that the book misspelled a lot of the actual Japanese words I was using to denote Japanese from English conversation. I am desperately seeking a Japanese savvy second language user to get my mini dictionary corrected so I can fine tooth comb, and repair every misused word in my series of stories. I am still working to get everything revised in the Japanese words category for all of my multiple completed novel tales within the Initial D series because I was lucky to get this review. However, with so many already complete novels and misc. other problems I have gotten pointed out by readers, it is a slow process. I placed the actual reviews in parenthesis. (Both Reviews for: "A Rivalry Revealed" #1) I like the story a lot. The first time I read it was long time ago, when it was still fully presented on fanfiction net, and the second part was only somewhere in the middle of progress, I think. It fascinated me from the beginning and didn't let go, so now I decided to renew my memory and reread it (thanks to the fifth anime series finally appearing, but anyway). I was still extremely pleased. But. Why did you use so many "japanese" words? Most of them are picking on my hearing (or reading in this case) and are usually unnecessary. You don't hear a Japanese saying "Kimi ha(wa) WHAT wo shite imasuka?" (君はWHATをしていますか) And I was really rolling on the floor every time someone cursed - it does sound funny when you see "naze/nani the hell". If you still insist on using words in your work (your choice, really), then you should at least use them correctly. For example: If you use "onnas" instead of "women" - then why do you still use "men", not "otoko"? You use "ryoushin" and "aniki" - but instead of "otouto" you use "Little brother". When you want to say "everyone", it's "minnasan" (みんなさん) - not "minasan" With "isha" is used not "san", but "sensei", as any politic, teacher, doctor or simply very respected person. Though in your story better use the name with the suffix. When you use "naze" - there's another word "doushite", and half of the times you use "naze" there should be "doushite" instead. Or even "douyatte". It's hard to find the examples as the story is big and I don't remember where I saw those, but here's one: "I really don't understand naze Fujiwara san's behavior is unusual when we'r doing the same thing he is right now." Naze means "what for", and here you have a different meaning of "why", better use "doushite". They have a few different "why", you know? "Arigatou" (ありがとう), not "arigato". "doumo" (どうも) - not "domo". "doumo sumimasen" is Ok, but no "gozaimasu" - it is not used in apologies. If you want to stress an extreme apology, you'd better use "moushiwake arimasen" (もうしわけありません) - something along the line of "there is no forgiveness for me". "Yoroshiku" is used only during the introductions or when a great help is given. "Gomen nasai gozaimasu" - actually wrong, too. "Gomennasai onegaishimasu" (ごめんなさいおねがいします) is what you emotionally ment. Probably. Though if apology is to the person of higher ranking, then "gomennasai" is a rude mistake at all. (P.S.: besides, "gomen" and "nasai" aren't two words. "nasai" is simply the grammatical ending, so the simplified version sounds "gomen", when the word is stripped of all ending that add politeness.) "Nani time do you get off" - well, there is a special case about it. Japanese say "Nan ji" for "what time". "iie kidding" - extremely wrong grammatically. "Kidding ja nai", if you insist. I hope it doesn't look like bullying, cause I didn't intend it to. The first time I read this I don't remember such words in the text, and now the whole effect of some angered speech is completely ruined because of "nani" every five words. And if you wonder "what the hell is she blabbering about" or "what gives her the right to say so" - I'm finishing my 3rd year in University right now, Japanese major. Good luck with your muse - I definitely like the stuff she's smoking.) Another Review that made me smile and also made me aware of a glitch in my writing that needs correcting. Takumi's acute exhaustion did not quite come out correctly for the reader. Oh well, Bck to the drawing board for massive improvements to my story line. #2) Chapter 2: When I read, "I have to help get that baka to bed", I got the impression of a double meaning which Keisuke wasn't aware of. It's fun to know what's going on with him before he does! I so enjoy the different descriptions of Takumi in Keisuke's mind: damned little punk spaced out little genius that baka or that young baka In Takumi's POV, I'm uncertain as to the cause of the blurry vision. I know that when I'm tired my eyes can go unfocused but to go blurry and stay that way even when you know it's happening, I haven't experienced. Are you implying that the lack of caffeine caused him to see blurry and blackout; his deep need for sleep finally catching up to him? ) Anyway, those are my offerings to share. I think they represent the majority of my reviews accurately. Each offers some kind of concrete criticism that allows me to refine each story which is the most important aspect of getting reviews to me at least. Every problem revealed is another nugget of gold to myself.

I believe removing genuine trolls/flames/retaliation nonsense is reasonable and I never took that to issue in any way. To be honest, those kinds of reviews were not what sparked my Irish Viking temper to the ultimate of frustration levels recently. I have lost FFnet reviews since I have been slow and steady removing all of my work there also. I saved them in my writing program with the exceptions of the blathering suck up types myself. However, I think my greatest frustration has come from trying to be thoughtful and helpful which is a very different beast. A "this sux balls" review is a flame and has no place in reviewing at all in my opinion. My understanding of Reviews are that readers are supposed to point out strengths and weaknesses within the story that they notice. Those strengths and weaknesses need to be expressed so a writer can write a better story that readers can enjoy all the more. Hence, my obscene irritation, and venting about this subject matter. I almost want to beg the mods here to write a "How to give a review" article with the definition of what reviewing should look like so thick headed posers understand the difference between a fanpoodle and the real thing. Perhaps it is simply ignorance about the meaning of the term causing the troubles. All I can say for certain is that the vast majority of random fics I have read and reviewed no longer have the reviews I left for the writers. I know for a fact I was not cruel or brutal when I pointed out things like tense shifts or character pov shift mid paragraph. I always brought up the strengths whether it was descriptions, details, memorable characters, or interesting plot lines. I also always encouraged the poorer level writers to keep writing and refine their skills. So I know nothing I did could be construed as a flame/troll, or cruel.

Perhaps your blunt and understandable response will finally get some kind of reprisal for this particularly offensive, and desperate for attention little troll. Losing members may be the only way to make the admins wake up to smell the reality of lost revenue because their advertisers will withdraw. Then again, as lazy as the admin has been for some time, who knows whether it will work or not. *Shrugs*

Thanks for your reply, Ayasha. Many writers, and even published authors suffer from dyslexia, yet they give greater effort to insure they post/publish correct material. Every time I read threads, or see people using the illness as an excuse for not putting in honest thought/effort, it makes me boiling mad. In one day I saw a thread where every attempt to aide the supposed writer was met with a huge list of whines to explain why they could not attempt self improvement which triggered my "Last Straw" mentality. One thing I can not abide after fighting so hard to regain all I lost is whining "poor Me" excuses for why someone cannot attempt to improve and learn. The only way I can find some of the problems in my own writing are when people say paragraph 4 has forth instead of fourth type review input. It makes a world of difference in my ability to give people pleasant reading material instead of eye sore garbage. I am relieved to know that you are another writer who does not delete reviews. Far too many do, and I have gotten insanely infuriated because I am the type to check an see if people do keep reviews so I know whether I am wasting my time if I read and review their work. Lazy, sloppy writing was bad at FFnet, but that was the reason people can only delete anon reviews, not signed. I begin to think it would be nice if AFFnet instituted the same policy to prevent frauds from deleting things simply because they do not like the truth. As it is, people still scream trolling, so the mods would get the I got trolled/flamed complaints like normal. If it is a genuine bash/flaming troll, the consequences would remain the same for the jerk leaving the review, if not, the review would stay up as a constant reminder that the writer needs to expend a little honest effort. Thank you for making my day better this morning. I really appreciate knowing that I am not the only person who gives my reviewers respect when they use their valuable time to give me feedback.

For my personal taste, I always write the full story before I bother with giving any type of title. It is rare for me to put up an incomplete tale due to my fits and starts writing style. However, I also have readers who have followed me for a while, so expect me to do a massive upload a couple times a year. Due to my personal quirks and how involved I am in the writing of the stories from different POV character views, I use titles that always invoke an emotional/contents variety knee jerk response for readers. Evocative titles work very well for increasing your reader base many times. Always align your titles to give hints about the real content of the story, or you will risk losing readers. Long titles do tend to turn off a fair chunk of reader traffic unless you are very well established with a hard core reader following. Many readers want short and insightful titles when scrolling down the lists for the fandom they are contemplating for an evening's relaxing read. This can be doubly true of a large archive like Harry Potter or Naruto which is rife with stories to tap. Due to working with a full Series of stories in a single fandom, I try to reflect the fandom story's contents to draw in readers. This tactic works very well for most writers. These questions should help you to give your story the right title. What is the meat and potatoes of your specific story? What kind of emotional theme are you crafting for your main characters to cope with and/or overcome? Write out each dominant theme in 4 or fewer words whenever possible. See how many of your themes can be conjoined because of your micro descriptions of the stories main theme points. Contemplate how to give the kick needed based upon the themes you have devised, and smash a Word from each strong theme together if possible. Here are examples of some names I used in writing for my fandom. Driven Heart, the Prequel: obviously I am talking about cars and emotions. From the title alone, a reader knows this is going to be a choppy, emotional roller-coaster for someone who loves street racing. It was my fan base group's overwhelming request, and it is about confusion for a bisexual who is fighting tooth and nail to keep from falling in love with someone of their own gender. A Rivalry Revealed: also very descriptive of the content's theme for the first, and original story I wrote on a whim that has become a series. You know someone is causing someone else trouble because of their conflicting emotions, or there would be no need to reveal anything. Such titles tend to be very self explanatory of the content. A genuine street racing rivalry exists in the actual anime/manga, so I used it as the bottom line theme for the cannon feeling story. You know that a lot is on the line, and the reader expects to see the cannon feeling elements of this story as our Bisex lead get's his emotions revealed to his crush. Alternate Tracks is also very explanatory of the story contents. Since this is a Slash series, the content of the title tells readers they are going to read about moving into an alternate life style. Tracks conjures the notion of a bumpy, less driven road which gives the emotion clues about contents inside the tale. Readers of the fandom know there will be a bumpy ride and a lot of mixed emotions to read about within the story. All For Love: Yet again, I give the readers a strong hint about the story's overall emotional and literal content. The Title makes a reader think about how far someone would go for the person that they love. The sky is the limit by implication. They know there are going to be new problems for the now established couple. They also expect to see that couple fighting tooth and nail to stay together. As The Smoke Clears: this is a bit longer than the others, yet it also gives a distinctive impression about the story contents. Readers who have kept up with this series of angsty, darkly controversial stories know that relief is coming for the characters, although there will be rough patches because of the "Smoke" portion of the title. Smoke veils things from the eyes, so the readers know there are things that have yet to be resolved. They expect to be in for a surprise as the Smoke dissipates. Also, the implication is given that the smoke, or problem, is actively getting resolved. This title also touches upon street racing because tires smoke when cars take off from a stand still at the starting line. Burning rubber is the real term, but burned rubber leaves a cloud of smoke that does need to clear away before spectators can see the sum of the race. Secondary implication is that the metaphoric race is well underway, and the winners and losers are headed toward the finish line at full speed. From these title examples, I think you can see where this post is going. Evoke emotions with your titles. The one you have for your Naruto story does not give me any real emotional or internal story content feeling to be honest. In the Cold of Space, You Find the Heat of Suns is a very long title, plus all I can get from it is that this story takes place in outer space. Here are the knee jerk questions your title gave me so you can think about word impact and the underlying themes involved. Once you consider word impact as metaphor it should become easier to find good titles that will draw readers. I will leave you with the questions a reader is most likely to get from the title you have now. Are you metaphorically trying to say that the characters are moving from a cold and emotionless life (Cold of Space is a metaphor for being ostracized and hated) inside the Ninja village, (Naruto comes to mind) and moving toward an accepting relationship? (the suns heat implies romance metaphorically) Do you mean literal outer space adventures that specific Naruto characters are going to be participating in for some reason? What are they supposed to accomplish while in outer space? Wow, why is the name so long?

I had not seen that specific and very nice little interview excerpt. Really wish Hollywood and such would get the same clue that George RR Martin has going. The mass media is a joke in my book and is the one problem all women need to wake up and refuse to allow any more power. Mass media really is feeding girls the stereotype branding right down to the most drab of cliches. Print media isn't normally bad, so long as you find a decent author, however, after the kids foisted Pretty Little Liars down my throat recently, combined with said young women's comments . . . Is there really any hope for these young women? I am disturbed by the amount of hatred these teens through early 20's spout when it concerns other females. Some of the young Adult gals I know insist upon acting out the stereotype. It is Mass media's fault, not Print media. Yet I am seeing more of it without even trying to look for it in all the major fanfic archives I have visited. Not to mention the books these young adult gals flock to such as 50 shades, and Twilight. To be honest, I avoid television. It was to my misfortune that I visited one of the kids I helped out before retiring from the abused child saving battle field due to health issues. She lives for the Pretty Little Liars series and books. Then again she also lives for Twilight, so guess who got stuck watching it with her because she missed her second mom? It was enough to turn me rabid against the majority of Mass Media outlets!

I am glad I am not the last person on the planet who tries to create well rounded female characters. However, every time I write in a realistic female character with flaws, I seem to get accused of Mary Sue crap without fail by the majority of the readers. I was basing my statements upon the things I have read at some sites where female characters appear at all in a story. The media comments are more directed toward the television and movies i have had the misfortune of seeing of late. I watched a two hour stretch of television and wanted to puke because reality TV bit is so undertone with the sexism act like a doll class female crud I couln't stand it.

The point of stereotyping females by the mass media is about the ability to write well rounded female characters based upon personality strengths. Such writing rarely pays of late. Strong female characters must fit the bitchy PMS stereotype, or similar to get a publisher to look at the story. Otherwise, the female has to be a sex object and siren that men will pant over. She can be the strong and admirable male lead's devoted little wife, or she can be the sex interest, but she must never star based upon her own personality or actual achievement. If she is in the exec rule, she's a harpy and worse. These are some of the reasons that Slash has such a huge market in part. Girls are force fed Cosmo mags and fake be beautiful or never be acceptable garbage to the point few of them will pick up a story about a genuine well rounded woman character. IT is a sad state, and yet it is quite prevalent in most fan fiction on this site. Read with an eye toward the sexism against women in the majority of fics and you will start to pick up on the reason for the trends.

Chuckles as I read your thoughts about the topic. The majority of writers are in fact only interested in writing as a hobby, which is perfectly fine. However, a lot of the people writing fan fiction, or even original tales to share on this site ultimately do have dreams of becoming published writers who get paid for their energy and efforts. The ones who are serious about practicing genuine writing skills to hone talent may even get to the point of seeing a book proposal. However, with that getting said, the trends lean heavily toward slash tales because of the popularity of said stories. In a world mad with stereotyping females into a set molded shell that moves like robot dolls in the media world, it is hard to avoid. I can see potentials in most stories if one writes an original specific furry to potentially get a market for your writing also due to the heavy emphasis upon sex sells in the current Print media industry. E-book companies are buying ever stranger material so long as it includes sex of some kind. With an Ivy League college recently getting a lot of press coverage over hosting a seminar about tolerance for bestiality practitioners, who knows? Perhaps in a couple more years your work, outside of a known copyrighted fandom, could even become a published work if you study the structuring of language and revise it into a jewel.

I am not a politically correct person, so do not expect me to mince words in this rant. I have plenty to say about the frauds who plague this and other sites. :sarcasm: is now in session because I have already read all of the favorite nauseating, too often written, worn out excuses that have triggered this overwhelmed frustration induced rant. I do apologize in advance for this being such a tactless tirade. I really need to get this off my chest because I am so frustrated with things I continue to read every time I come here. What is the point of writing if the document is a thoughtless piece of slop without merit pounded out willy-dilly on a whim, and posted without revision? Why do some people insist upon placing such infantile things in the archives, and then get angry when someone with a basic grasp of English structure mentions a few of the problems that need addressing to create a better reading tale? Why do some individuals whine incessantly about contrit feedback, instead of considering that there might be a real problem which can be corrected with a little expended effort? If one does not understand the foundations of proper grammar and spelling, why insist upon being vile to those who seek to give actual valid aide? When did writing become a place for cop outs and egotists? Who ever said that everyone should be patted upon the head simply because they bothered to put something up at a free site like AFFnet, or FFnet? What have the lazy done to earn a touch of praise and accolades for the illiterate slop they insist upon posting? Absolutely nothing gets done when a poorly written piece is added to the archives is my response. Give feedback to such frauds, and they delete the reviews, or proclaim concrit reviews to be trolling! Such frauds are too infantile to accept that they can improve if they get off their lazy butts and do a little research! YE Gods Forbid that such individuals ever face the wrath of a genuine editor. I can see the suicide rate escalating fast if they ever had to remove the blinders from their eyes. Such people are the bane of the writing hobbiest, and professional alike. What is the point of giving reviews if the writer is unwilling to consider critical mistake portions of an honest review? Why do lazy, insecure asses bother to beg for reviews while remaining too immature to give such reviews any thought toward self improvement? How can people call themselves writers when they are so obstinately unwilling to learn how to take a fair reading story, and make it into a genuinely beautiful tale that is memorable? Why do such frauds feel so compelled to provide a plethora of meaningless excuses for their mistakes, instead of attempting to change for the better? The reason for my ranting questions: I am so sick and tired of the whining, lame excuses that the vast majority of writers like to pull out of their asses. People seem to love bellyaching, and giving excuses to avoid improving anything they slop together and post. To me, people are flat against learning the diverse aspects, and complex elements involved with writing style. I am also fed up with jerks who refuse to pull their heads out of the asses when it comes to a reasonable review meant to give genuine help. Nobody is attacking when they send a review that something was messed up when they mention grammar/spelling problems. Any idea why I might be so angry about the plethora of bull I read in forums, and in author's notes in the main archive? Reality Check: I had a massive stroke a few years ago. It took two years to get to the point I could use my right side again. Then, I had to reteach myself from the foundation up how to read and to write a second time. Everything that I know I should recall from my time as an employed editor in the 90's was locked behind a wall of damage that I struggle to break down every single day of my life. I also have Dyslexia problems complicated by fine motor skill nerve damage. Do I use these difficulties as a knee jerk excuse for instances of personal, poor writing? THE ANSWER IS HELL NO! To my way of thinking, real writers strive to overcome their disabilities, not use them as a crutch to languish within their flaws! I bought grammar based books and read them repeatedly to recover my lost knowledge. Due to a little thing called effort, I regained the vast majority of the information I once lost due to a life threatening medical crisis. Therefore, I do not give crackpot reviews whenever I take time to read over and consider the most glaring problems I see within a story's structures. I fine comb everything I write repeatedly to get rid of every flaw before I post anything. Yes, I do miss things, which I correct as I get a chance. A person who reads my work can return seven months later to find a lot of mistakes are corrected. I abuse my edit chapter button every few weeks, based upon the errors I get told about when someone reviews my stories. Whenever I give a review to someone, I always endeavor to point out the strengths, and the weaknesses of each story I have read. The reviews I give carry my hopes that the input will help complete strangers to revise their stories to add strength to plots and characters that were devised. It is a real insult to all reviewers who give thoughtful feedback when the reviews get deleted by such frauds who pretend to be writers. Very few writers I have personally reviewed have retained my concrit reviews. Those who have kept their reviews, I am grateful to you for doing so. Your strength in keeping my review prevents me from becoming completely sick and tired of the constant flow of disrespect given to those who take reviewing for others seriously. Put bluntly, I have seen the signs of a real epidemic of fraudulent whiners begging for reviews that are insincere. The ongoing blasphemy of it all has finally tweaked my last nerve. The majority of said frauds beg for reviews in every single chapter's author notes. My conclusion is that such begging for reviews is a form of blatant "stroke my ego or else" guilt tripping. "Please review because I live for reviews," is a blatant lie 9 times out of 10 in my personal experience with giving reviews. That type of bullshit line now reeks of the biggest attention seeking ploy in existence to me, as a reader. In the vast majority of cases I leave very tame comments compared to my actual reactions to such writer's stories. I refrain form taking every single line and pointing out the problems. If the writing is atrocious enough, I am reduced to perhaps you should use your spell/grammar checking features before posting in the future. Getting reduced to such a flippant response really hurts because I would not be writing a review at all if I did not see some kind of merit within the story. I would simply back click and be done with the author, and everything else they may have posted. I do keep a list of the unreadable slobs so I do not have to hurt my eyes by accidentally clicking on anything the royal stink writers have added. During the last three weeks, after seeing how often that line accompanies a deletion of my reviews, experience tells me to avoid such authors as if they have the Black Plague. To date, seven out of every ten concretely focused reviews were erased because my input was not a fanpoodle. My honor code from my previous career as a "shred the writing to get it corrected in time for the sales team to make a profit from it" variety editor experience does not condone "I love it so keep writing" variety pat upon heads. I do apologize for this being such a tactless tirade. I had to get this off my chest because I am so frustrated with "poor me syndrome" type commentaries.

"Urges such as sex, that frighten us, or we have been taught to be ashamed of, may appear as devils or demons in your dreams. You may have felt a lot of affection from a cat, and so associate it with sensual, or even sexual pleasure. It can also represent your need to care for someone or be cared for, to have close physical contact. For some people a cat is a substitute baby, it can therefore depict the strong maternal feelings and desires. Or a male cat can represent male sex drive. The term 'catty' refers to a spiteful woman. So if the cat in your dream is angry it might depict yourself if female, or feelings about a female friend. Because cats are independent and often alone, they may represent the secret part of yourself, or independence" A: First of all, the vast majority of compiled dream interpretation books have tons of bunk you need to wade through if you wish to truly unravel a nightmare that is recurring. I put the garbage part of your interpretation that your dream does not reflect in italics for a reason. Few dreams with cats in them have jack to do with sex drives to be be blunt. Find a Jungian dream interpreter if you wish to get a somewhat valid interpretation of the layers this dream contains. Jung gave multiple archetype information to insure correct ability to interpret many diverse meanings for symbolism that dreams contain.Jung drew from a lot of cultural similarities found in myths and other aspects of the common people, not a couple neurotic aristocrats. Speaking from a fair amount of experience with dream interpretation in old college course that I can still dredge up mentally, my advice is to dump the online dream analysis program you used to try to unravel this dream. The cat's reactions gives the main clues that you have a very strong subconscious desire to change. Most often this is a desire to go from the state of being used and abused, to a more balanced state of standing up for yourself. Cats actively reflect internal conflicts with one's internal stubbornness most often, not repressed sexuality. I think you read a dream archetype book from a Freudian psychologist because it reads like the bunk Freud used to spout after watching over 5 deeply depressed aristocratic ladies who were prisoners in gilded cages their aristocrat husbands provided. Freud did little interacting with regular society to come up with his everything is sexual sin foundations for modern psychology. Although pursuit and fleeing an unseen evil does on occasion have validity as avoidance issues, or seeking of an unattainable feeling desire, it can also be internal subconscious pressures completely unrelated to such concepts. Running from evil can be about suppressed anger that you refuse to unleash on the deserving party who has caused said dark emotions. However, a number of other interpretations seem to apply to your specific images. Evil does not always mean "live." Evil can actively mean that you feel a sense of lost personal control over your own body. Evil is also a reflection of feeling stepped upon by others when one does not know how to set appropriate boundaries with others. Hence, in this aspect, evil is the self destructive tendency that you are afraid to release because of social pressure to be a good area rug for more abusive individuals. Evil in this sense is society's rules, not living your life as per the bunk you were reading, SereneLies. Furthermore, one aspect this interpretation forgot to factor is the aspect of getting ostracized by society when one refuses to go along with socially expected norms. In this instance, the terror felt as you sit upon your bed, equals a fear of becoming unacceptable by standing up for yourself. The bed is a foundation of guilt in this instance because the image clearly reflects a sense of guilt within the foundation of your personal experience. Again, Freud morons always associate a bed as being sexual, while Jung described it as a foundational belief gained from specific society expectations imbued since our earliest memories were formed as children. Anyway, I think this dream is a reflection of your desire to change your lifestyle, yet having a powerful anxiety that in changing your responses, you will become an outcast.

I hear you, Pitt. In fact I can rant as loudly as you in this instance, only with a very diversified portfolio of complaints concerning grammar and modern educational laziness. For those who take writing seriously, it is an unavoidable fact that most do not care that they are writing cannibalism. Use of proper commas annoys the stubbornly blind and willfully ignorant. Sorry for ranting at everyone who reads this post. However, I am so righteously frustrated with each instance I come across that contains excuses for not trying to improve a story that I can't help but do a bit of spewing of my own. I tried to teach my son proper grammar outside of school when I realized he knew nothing of genuine comma use, nor other grammar rules. You will be disturbed to learn that I got called into the school office more than once by by the principle for messing with my child's learning curriculum. I was told my interference would damage his future. The school bully Principle threatened me with getting my son removed on abuse charges. I was helping him with English because I was an employed Editor at the time. I knew grammar better than the stupid nitwits teaching English. I suppose that must have been threatening to said egotistic English Teachers. How's that sad fact grab you? I have been of the opinion that the modern education system has been set up to insure indoctrinated children, not fully capable adults who can function as successes since that series of power play episodes. My son is incapable of writing well due to the school's interference with my attempts to teach correct writing skills before my stroke. You are correct when you say teachers were reduced to babysitting duties by the government's funding dole. I am also saddened that you were forced into such a hard spot by people you tried to help as a beta. I understand your decision to quit. I would do the same in your position since stubbornly ignorant do it for me types have become the majority in recent years. Reading over the beta offers here makes me cringe 95 percent of the time. The grammar is often a joke, and the spelling errors are worse than my sadly disturbing shout box typo terrorism mistakes. My misspelled words embarrass me greatly, but, I have pride which is always stinging due to my mistakes. All too often, I think I am hitting the backspace button and hit the enter button instead. That is the visual aspect of the mess my brain has been trapped within for several years because of my stroke. However, I do not believe that excuses my horrible typos. I know the reason for the problem, yet have not found the way to overcome said embarrassing problem at this time. I am still searching for that answer and have all my determination involved with finding a working solution. I know the Dyslexia illness quite well, and I hate it when I cannot see mixed up letter orders that glare at others. Still, I refuse to accept it as a limitation, or use it as a convenient cop out to get out of revisions. Dyslexia is my personal battle to overcome no matter how long it takes to erase it from my own personality. Some days when I awaken, I am ashamed to know that I am less than I once was as a writer/editor. So why do so many use excuses for their lack of knowledge? Knowledge is only powerful if it gets used correctly. I do not understand the mind set of so many writers who post fan fiction and similar on free sites like AFFnet. I get livid with each excuse or deleted review that should have helped the writer to make a truly powerful and engrossing read. Messed up as my recall has been since the stroke, I still retained far more grammar rules than most of the younger generation has ever tried to absorb. When I look at a sentence, I know it is off kilter. The knowledge that I should know the answer intimately makes for an unbearable sadness over how much damage my brain suffered when I had that stupid stroke. The words and rules are in there, but I cannot access them without a horrific battle. Some of the wrongs, I still cannot pinpoint with accuracy, so I look up rules and try to figure out why that sentence bugs me so deeply, and with good reason. Some grammar rules have been changed in recent decades to reflect the dumb it down mentality of the modern American education system. The new rules only get applied because I do wish to get back to the point where I can become a paid editor/author again. For now, I have to accept that I have a long road to continue walking if I want to get back to my former know how and English command's full glory. Still, seeing so many excuses about bad grammar and spelling tend to really anger me because I am busting my ass to get back everything that I know I have lost. It hurts to have to admit that I am dyslexic and it affects my vision. I do not always see mistakes in spelling due to the letters looking correct in their order to my stupidly screwed up brain. However, I always correct things in my own stories once someone helps me find which word is the wrong word. So long as the paragraph number is provided and the sentence pinpointed, I do fix the mistake as a matter of personal pride. I correct grammar stage after stage as I relearn rules that were erased by the illness I suffered. Isn't that how every real writer should be? Therefore, I can not understand the "poor, pitiful me" type author who has a knee jerk excuse for why they can't do something, or how they tried it once and it did not work out perfectly for them so why bother continuing to use the technique? The fact is, I quickly begin to doubt that such individuals ever actually tried to do anything toward correcting their writing problems. To my thinking, such writers are looking for pity pats on the head, not solutions that bring real growth as a writer. My dyslexia, and stroke recovery do not qualify me to be lazy about repairing my drafts with each rule I personally seek to relearn. I set aside time, and I do work to improve every chapter in manageable chunks while focusing upon a specific relearned rule. To my way of thinking, that is how all writers should act. My personal stroke recovery has included studying grammar books that I buy to relearn the trade I adore with every fiber of my being. I spend time every week going over specific sections of the rules to relearn everything I lost. The Rules I can't quite recall how to use from explanations, I ship a detailed this is what the book says email to one of the friends that I know whom uses the rule correctly. I construct a couple example sentences and ask if I am on the right track. Once my friends get back to me, they explain where my damaged brain sector gets things backwards and offer corrections. Once I can get the actual rule structuring right in my brain, I do catch more of the mistakes in my own writing. I still have plenty of spots I am ashamed of within my own writing, but I take every concrit review I receive to revise, edit, and reload each chapter in slow but steady steps. I do not erase stories to revise them. Edit button works well for revising chapters as I get the chapters repaired. Only WIP stories, and the third novel in the series that I have posted here at AFFnet have yet to get overhauled. Trying to satisfy fans who constantly contact me seeking updates does slow my progress with the hard revisions I am determined to complete in stages. Yet, I do not believe I have the right to consider the grammatically messed up items acceptable. Correcting them is always on my mind. Finally, I am sorry for getting on such a snarling soap box such as I have in this post. My frustration with so many people who use Dyslexia as an excuse for failure and laziness has me insanely angry right now. A dozen such threads filled with excuses about the topic of why people think they are incapable of overcoming their flaws in writing has me seeing bright, neon, glowing embers of red today. Society does not seem inclined to self improvement of late. Society loves to wallow in poor, pitiful, victimized me syndrome which is one thing my blunt personality can never embrace.

I tend to agree with your feeling that the direct address comma is fast becoming a lost art. My younger son barely got any education about grammar at his public school to be blunt. He has recently turned twenty-one and can barely put together a simple letter. I think that contributes a lot to the problem you have in the archive. English is not about teaching the mechanics of writing if my son's education is any worthy measure of the modern "No Child Left Behind" laws governing our public schools. I know I tend to forget the direct address comma in shout box which is bad form since I went to college to learn how to be an editor. However, for all my dastardly spelling, and grammar mistakes in shout box, I do endeavor to be more professional with my stories. Plainly speaking, I would love to have a reliable beta whom was capable of working with my writing schedule. Unfortunately, nobody knowledgeable enough, and capable of giving a decent beta response has the time to give consistent grammatical feedback to me. Therefore, I have developed a jaded view of fan fiction betas who offer their services. Fan fiction is less important to those who have the actual grammar knowledge. They do not mind putting aside a fan fiction piece in favor of other, often important pursuits. I do get a few reviews that help me to go back and find mistakes which I correct in batches. Still, I have learned the hard way that my Initial D stories are not important enough to betas for them to catch my jaded eyes missed mistakes on a timely schedule. Therefore, in the fan fiction writing sector, I tend to relegate a beta as more of a sounding board when I am not certain I am evoking the emotions I intend. My personal experiences support this evolving ideology that fan fiction is not taken seriously by the vast majority. The same jaded view has evolved toward giving other writers concrit reviews. I tone my reviews down drastically so as to be less offensive, however, the majority of reviews I have given are deleted because I point out the very worst of the grammar problems, while ignoring many other minor glitches. Honestly, if everything I say which might help the writer is going to get deleted, why should I continue? Lately, I am confining my reviews to writers who ask me directly for a read and review service. Without such an invitation, I assume that the review will be deleted post haste. The direct Address comma, and many other grammatical punctuations, are lost to the modern world. Use of correct grammar often gets me yelled at by ignorant reviewers. They scream about my correct use of commas more than any other grammar rule. I stopped connecting dialog with extra sentence structure as one means of silencing the grammatically dim. I end every scrap of dialog now with a period. If I am going to designate a speaker, I do so in a separate sentence to keep morons from complaining. The sad reality is that those who know are becoming a very rare minority. The last 5 books my son read contained such atrocities of language that I know full well reading books is no guarantee of teaching the modern hobbyist author anything remotely literary correct. Garbage is now the standard for success. Reality is a sorrowful dive into the cesspool of stupidity and laziness. I came to that conclusion with my younger son's English teacher as the foundation of how lazy society has become in the last 21 years.

Chuckles as I read this thread. Raymy. You are putting way too much pressure on yourself to review every single chapter you have read for others. I don't know about other writers, but to me, a couple reviews spaced out after a few read chapters is quite sufficient for me to know I am on the right track. Hell, A review at the very end of the story that tells me the good, bad, and ugly is also great. To be blunt, emotional impact is one of the foundations of memorable characters and is vital to a decent review. The fact you analyze and express the emotional tones happens to be one of the most overlooked aspects of concrit reviews that are given by the majority. Most concrit reviews focus on writing mechanics instead of the emotional quality and tone of a story. You've sent me a couple great PM's about messed up words my dyslexia misses because spell checker says the spelling is correct. How many times have you told me about how form should be from? You are appreciated very much as a reviewer and as a quasi sounding board when I am disgusted with my raw drafts because you understand character emotions contained within my writing style. :0 ) Much as people complain about the cruelties I have heaped upon Takumi through 4 stories so far, they keep reading because of people like yourself tell me that the emotions are consistent with the expected actions after each crisis. It helps immensely to stay in character when you do that for me. However, I also think that you backlog yourself with giving reviews to avoid completing your own writing by piling something in front of it until it gets buried with to do lists. You put too much pressure on yourself to review other writer's efforts as a subconscious self sabotage to refrain from giving me more nutty professor chapters that I am squirming to read damitol! You have a great grasp of actual characters in the fan fiction you write, so yes, I am going to send a big raspberry your way on this one. Review a couple select chapters in full novel length stories. A single review for every 8 to 10 chapters in a book sized tale is plenty to let the writer know the good, bad, and ugly of their work. Take a few notes while you read, and before you log off, shoot the review to the writer. That way you avoid getting backlogged so badly, and I can safely harass you for more nutty professor chapters in the future, cause you write him so very well. Okay I think that's enough of a lecture and sly plea for an update on your Bleach story.

Very true that you do have to write what sells to break even eventually. I have learned to have the same theory since I stopped editing for the micro publishing industry. I may ignore some of the rules when writing my fan fiction, but I do know that my editor training comes out hard core when I work on an original story I started because slash is all that is selling. Whether "Wanted" ever gets to see the light of day as a fic here is debatable for the moment. Guess we shall see once I get to the point I am content with my own personal driven evisceration before sending it through email to a pal or two for feedback. Still, such is some time in the future because the tale is nowhere near complete at the moment.

Violence is everywhere in the real world, so trying to avoid it is futile. In reality it is one of several silent epidemics that people try to ignore, alongside child molestation, rape and other torments that are not pleasant to look upon for the majority of polite society. I recall a professor telling me that "if it bleeds, or it pleads, then it leads" was the main motto of the News industry in the 80's. Human psychology in a nutshell is conveyed beautifully with that one phrase. Case in point, how many movies are promoted each weak that feature things blowing up, or blood, guts, and gore spraying everywhere? Media has driven violence a great deal because it sells. Hence, violence can be written out to give cues about survival at all cost stakes, or to depict a character's out of control anger. Violence can be written to give people cathartic easing of their own painful pasts by putting a made up person in the same situations, or to shock and dismay those who have led sheltered lives. Some write violence to blow steam so they will not enact such cruelty in real life where it is forbidden. Others write violence because it sells so well in the media industry that lives to feed the human beast's basest nature. Psychological triggers are known to exist in human instincts that are capable of unleashing dangerous levels of violence in the name of self preservation. Humanity has only marginally left violence behind in the last 100 years. Still, if you turn on the news at night, or read the newspaper, murders and other violent crimes are committed every single day. We like to believe that we have evolved away from being literal alpha predator animals over the centuries, yet evolution does not eradicate instincts completely. Deny it all we want, we shall never completely remove that element from our existence. People who ignore violence are often attempting to delude themselves that the world can become a peace loving place. Go out in nature for a week and live off the land, it will shock and dismay the average person with how violent this world is to the core of everything's existence. For myself, violence is often an exercise in the cathartic realm. Since my childhood/teenaged years were so traumatic, I can not write happy or fluffy stories. I can not relate well to the happy or fluffy types of stories. They are too unrealistic when weighed against the vast majority of my personal life experiences. I also tackle the very same nightmare cruelties that I myself survived through learning how to become an expert in surviving violence. Nobody ever saved me from any of the grim nightmare I experienced as a teenager in the foster case system when the Black Market Baby Farming Scandals and child porn rings were overrunning foster homes in my state. Therefore I write about things that polite society loves to look away from because they can't handle the truth still happening to the weakest people in every society on this planet. All of my stories contain darkness and forbidden controversial topics that polite society tries to pretend have been eradicated despite there being people like myself who have survived such atrocities. Knowing that horrific crimes are swept under the rug because too much money gets made from human suffering, I will always write what I know best, the disgusting underbelly of human nature. Educating people is one of my agendas in my writing, even if I have to twist and distort anime stories to raise awareness. People like to pretend that slavery no longer exists, but it actually does right here in the good Old USA, especially on the Mexican/American border. Teenagers go missing all the time in my area, with red head white girls being the number one targets. I still come across other survivors of the same sick and twisted people who took over the old guard I helped destroy through massive determination when I finally escaped the System. Even with the Feds now overseeing all the state's child protection divisions because of my core group, and groups who filed charges and got hard evidence from states like New York over 30 years, a few sick fucks still manage to set up short term sex/slavery rackets that use helpless children. Then again, "Human trafficking" is the nicer politically correct term for the ancient evil called "Slavery" that is still happening world wide. Those who do not know violence and who were raised in proverbial bubble wrap worlds can fantasize about violence, but they are way too phony reading on the occasions I read other people's stories. I can tell within a few sentences who has ever had the unholy shit, bone busting beatings delivered to their own bodies, or have ever done any real hitting, and those who are full of bull. Different people may write violence for various reasons, yet violence remains a literal part of life that the squeamish, and the hardened alike must look upon at some point within their own lives. Better that it be contained in written words instead of faced in literal crisis situations within one's actual life is my motto. I've been there, done that, and am covered in the scars that prove it is not something a person undergoes without emotional and physical damage that can only be mitigated, yet never completely removed.

I was an actual editor for several years so I think I'll weigh in on this topic. I am not going to sugar coat the facts as I know them to be in the publishing industry because that would be a waste of everyone's time. I'm sorry if this seems harsh, however, these are genuine facts that need to be considered before dumping the day job. Many published writers still have real jobs because of these facts. Steven King class authors are exceptions to the rules. Celeb status is a different beast that only the delusional think is normal for authors to achieve. Writers have to have very thick skin to survive in this business. If you think I am harsh, quit trying while you still can because I'm being much nicer than I ever considered being when I was an active duty editor. As Bronx said, you get eviscerated by editors to turn the weak spots into a tight action and quality read, or you get out. Whining is not allowed because the bottom line is the money shelled out and the profits that have to come in to keep the company alive. If you want to pay your bills as a writer, fair warning up front, you can forget it. the average author must publish 3 novels per year to pay their basic bills. Standard purchase contracts are around10 grand for a moderately well known author to get per book contract! Royalties are not big pay outs unless you have a mega hit novel and the sales far exceed expectation. Do not quit your day job because very few authors ever make the kind of money Steven King and the other rare yet huge success story celeb authors can command!!! The average writer makes approximately 17 grand off of their books and royalties per year if they publish one book per year and have at least 6 selling books to their resume list. Some make more, but again, they also tend to have higher sales percentages over a stable period of a couple years to their credit also. Good writing is actually a fairly simple matter. Give your main character(s) a root problem with high grade stakes to overcome. I can assure you that every single person I know working in the Publishing industry will throw the work out before they finish reading a full page if they do not see a stakes situation evolving fast for the main character. The same applies to settings and back story. Back story is a flavoring for the main course, not the meat, nor potatoes. If you waste time writing the back story before the first crisis is getting set up, you have a complete waste of paper on your hands because none of the still working editors I know will read past 3 paragraphs before dumping the story in the closest trashcan. This is the publishing industry Laws within the USA Not one employed editor will care how much action, or perfected the grammar/spelling, nor how neat and pretty a tale's descriptions are if the story fails to deliver a memorable character. Flaws in the other areas can be fixed with editing and revision. Yet, if your character isn't getting emotionally pushed around from page one, you have zero chance of getting published unless you are a known celebrity like Steven King. You can bitch, scream, whine, and cry all you like about this as currently unpublished authors, but this is one fact you will never get around while the publishing industry is still teetering so precariously on the edge of collapse. The recession recovery remains slow, and E-publishing by vanity presses continue cutting into the Publishing industry's wallets. If the story is very well written, you might find an agent willing to market the completed novel, but that is one of the very few ways to get published without shelling out hard cash right now. The buddy system is a known fact of life in the dog eat dog world of publishing. If an unknown writer wants even a slim chance of getting published, keep certain things in mind; Plot and Character are always intertwined. Character can be compared to a car. Plot is the highway the car drives upon to get anywhere. You can not ignore either item and hope to win an agent, or get a book signing without having a blood relative if you screw up either aspect. In vanity publishing, expect to pay through the nose to get your story sold. By the end of the plot trip, the car (character) should evolve and change right alongside the landscape that the character overcomes after screwing up a few times. Plot always has to challenge the very roots of the character's past and their honor/values as a human being, or it is not a plot and the story is a failure. I'll give you an extremely important example of what high level stakes mean in the publishing industry. Someone I respected since the 80's actually came up with this example, but it is a profound one to use so I am going to borrow a paraphrased version. We'll use a big 20 car pile up. The character drives up to the wreck and there are cars on fire and people screaming. In this example being nice won't make this example book sell even if the character saves every single person involved in that wreck single handed. Here's the catch to make this a working story an editor might consider; Without some type of root dilemma that creates a lot of high stake emotional pressure for the character to overcome through their own internal strength, no amount of action or description will keep the reader's attention! Without a genuine conflict for the characters, this example is a non selling idea. You want to sell this book? Raise the stakes until the main character feels a huge amount of emotional pain and has to decide to take the easy road or the high road. While they are pulling people out of those cars, have them contemplating how they just got out of prison and are now getting stalled in their planned revenge against the real criminal who framed them a few years before. Have his/her law breaking, cheating con artist boss who implicated the innocent main character of fraud involved somehow. The new released con who did time in prison while the boss got away with the million dollars embezzled type of stakes works well because it means this character has flaws, and has a back story that you reveal with each person the main heroic action newly released convict saves. How about an even bigger stake to confound our angry ex convict who was innocent? The ex con stumbles onto the ex boss's family in one of those cars. Make the character's hatred of their ex boss war with their original innocent belief in justice and goodness within humanity, or give up now. That is the industry expectation for making a book sell 90% of the time. The character has to decide that in spite of the crooked boss, the family deserves to be saved and do so while still hating the fact that they belong to an unsavory and crooked man. The main character needs to struggle with the idea of how nice it would be to let the crooked ex boss feel the hell of losing the people he should logically love the most. How should the main character respond? What does this angry, wrongfully ruined individual think and feel as he recognizes the trapped wife of the hated evil enemy? Will he/she save the family, or let them die being the real plot in this story that is filled with actions and has all four proverbial burners cooking on high. Either way, whether the convict saves or damns the family, you have a real plot that is driven by the main character. By the time the rescues are all made, and the ambulances have all left the scene with the highway cleared, what changes did said main character make within themselves? That is the question most important to keep a reader hooked on your story. Fail to deliver, and the story is garbage material to use as kindling in the publishing industry standards.

How very true, Bronx. All of my friends in the publishing industry told me to start focusing on writing Yaoi or Slash stories since they are the ones that do sell. I have been training to completely change genres to survive as a small fry writer at all. With the current purchase trends and demand being so strong for gay erotica, the only way to survive at all within the industry is to write and sell gay or lesbian stories. Men buy girl on girl, and the female readership, which is the much larger purchasing base, for slash erotica is through the roof with no end in sight. The Hetero scene is almost non existent at the moment within the modern publishing world. Sorry , Aysha, but the reality is that gay or lesbian based fiction are all that sell for the moment, or I would not be writing it to learn the best techniques of the trade.

I have no idea whether or not my vote rating is being dropped or not. Then again, I have yet to figure out the whole voting system so tend to ignore it personally. I don't really think about such items when I post my stories. Personally I have never seen a rating system that was fool poof, or completely reliable either. Fanpoodlers tend to overrate their pal's work to please the whiners, and the best writers can get ignored outright with such rating systems. I like Bronx's idea about the referral style listing because if someone reads my work, I know they will tend to also tell their friends about my story. Word of mouth has always improved my following, so I like the idea of being able to get such a promotion by my readers. I know a couple dozen people who have sent their friends to my stories because I get told in PM's at FFnet that they refer my work to their pals. Then again, some people won't be as quick to put up a personal referral for really controversial material. Too bad there isn't an anonymous setting where the referral for a story can be under ones pen name, or under an anonymous tag at the start of a category so to say. Then, if a story gets a lot of referrals, a check mark of some sort could be added beside the title to indicate that the story is liked a lot. If it is a very dark and controversial topic, people will not feel exposed in giving it a referral in such cases.

To be honest, I have to say that FFNet has devolved into the internet's largest porn shop of all. AFFnet is not as raunchy if you count the flat out masses of homo/lesbian/heterosexual/bestiality stories housed in the FFnet's archives. Very few stories on FFnet lack for groping, pawing, and sloppy sex material that I have read. Now on to a couple of post responses. All of these thoughts contain very good points. It is a legal issue, however, the problem remains that FFNet has put up homoerotic and lesbian cannon stories categories for people to write about without paying attention to the actual known content of the shows they added to their acceptable categories listings. Bellyaching, threatening retaliation lazy parents also need to monitor their teenagers in case they are ignoring the laws and putting up sexual content stories. http://www.forbes.com/sites/carolpinchefsky/2013/05/22/fan-fiction-is-finally-legitimized-with-kindle-worlds/%C2'>Taken from the previous linked article. Some writers starting out in their careers will see this as an opportunity. After all, when you publish in someone else’s universe, a lot of the “heavy lifting” of writing (establishing the characters and the world itself) has been done for you. Also, fans of these shows have already written the stories and posted them to fanfiction.net (where you can find 4,000 Pretty Little Liars stories, 10,000 Gossip Girl stories, and 25,000 Vampire Diaries stories), so publishing on Kindle Worlds is no extra work but 35% of royalties in their pockets. Others see this as cause for concern. Unlike the “real” world of fanfiction, where imaginations are completely unfettered, Kindle Worlds has limits, such as no cross-overs…and no pornography. And yes, quite a few fan fiction stories are pornographic. Having this article written about the Amazon site's eBooks decision to produce fan fiction for sale led to some very telling statements aboutthe many pornographic tales littering the FFnet archives which because of the lack in Adult Only status is against the law. Such articles led to a huge uproar legally so the Mods are now doing the job they were always supposed to do for their paychecks. They probably do not wish to pay fines, or see their employer go to prison, so they are doing their jobs until all the hoopla caused by Amazon's new eBooks division for publishing and paying for fan fiction dies down considerably. Because it is listed as a site that allows membership for children, Shonen Ai and Yaoi based animes like Gravitation, KiriPapa, Gakuen Heaven, and Mirage of Blaze should not be listed anywhere on FFnet. In this argument you are correct that FFnet is at fault for putting up such adult themed categories without giving express and maintained guidelines for the content that can be placed upon their site. FFNet was wrong to list animes and television shows which showcase sex, violence and the rest of the Mature rated themes. Having put up such categories as acceptable does imply that FFnet moderators and administration are either very careless, or contemptuous of their own rating system. Something both posters have ignored is the biggest problem with FFnet's policies. There is an overwhelming number of teenagers or UNDERAGE individuals posting tons of the Pornographic/Gory stories housed at FFnet. I recently pulled almost everything from my list of published stories at FFnet. I only left a single sample chapter of each story up, and have added redirection information to this site for anyone who happens to be old enough to find me again. I was purged the very first time FFnet did this when everything was html manual additions to post anything, so was cautious about returning. I was purged for writing fight scenes and having realistic dialog that included words like bastard. When I returned to FFnet, I was actually shocked when I started reading fanfiction after a 10 year hiatus. I noticed immediately that tons of the pornography was obviously written by teenagers and even younger sounding children. There are obvious clues when you read an immature person's sexual stories where context and lack of understanding comes across very clearly. Parents do need to be responsible for monitoring their children since their children are posting the most brutal, and smuttiest sexuality I've ever read. Far too many children are raised by televisions more than by human beings. I know this is a fact because I have been raising other people's children for 20 some odd years as the only mom around that bothers to deal with the teenagers who look for guidance. I think in part their writing is a reflection of their curiosity about adult behaviors, or a sad sign of their premature hard gained knowledge of such topics. However, I can agree that FFnet only upholds legal rules when they are forced to do so. Signing petitions will not change the legal issues caused by being a site which has members in the 13 age and up range. Deviant Art has several fan fiction groups putting out petitions left and right, yet the laws will not change, so FFnet has to finally clean up it's collective act or get closed permanently by the laws of the world, not just of USA. They are in trouble at this time for allowing their teenaged members to post mature or graphic content stories. Too many people ignore terms of Service rules. It is a socially condoned flaw that crosses all age ranges/races and both genders. Contempt for law is a real problem across the board and in every nation. FFnet got their fingers burned thanks in part to to the above article so are now having to cover their collective butts. The kids who never should have been writing smut to begin with are losing their easy access for a short time. It will simply mean that they will find other places to put up their infantile rebellious attempts at literature. However, I foresee some of those sites also getting in trouble and having to revise their rules at some point to stay out of trouble with the old laws already on the books in many countries.

Very true, DG. Some writers spend time with additional elements outside of dialog and basic actions so require more room for their writing to flow well. I tend toward longer chapters, and yet I have a strong group of followers because of my descriptions and emotional keys. Without such keys, the stories I write would be very lame reading. Style and syntax play an important role in any story chapter written. The best styles for one writer do not transfer well to another writer's style. With that being said, a short story writer does well with a few words to bring out the most of those few words actions and impacts. Longer novel writers need more room to create complex woven descriptions and very realistic characters. It really does come down tot he flow and harmonics of a story and the requirements to pull off the most powerful and enjoyable form.