Kurahieiritr

Exactly! AU often turns into an OC becoming a God that overshadows the genuine Cannon characters, if the cannons show up in more than 5 paragraphs in most AU stories I have read. I find that there are very few good Au stories in the Animes I like to read such as Initial D, and a plethora of the OC Mary Sue/Gray Stu God Figure OC characters that are overwhelmingly nauseating to read. I am so sick of the OC love interests of Cannon Initial D racers who beat the Project D team easily crap. The bulk are Americans in big block classic muscle cars. Snorts in disgust. I just got into Bleach reading, so I have to see whether the AU's there will be half as disgusting and puke worthy as they are in Initial D, YuYu Hakusho, Gundam Wing, or DBZ. The best AU I ever read was a Yu Yu Hakusho fic that kept the cannon characters as the story focus. Sadly, as I said, they are few and far between. I have also read a few good AU stories with the OOC acting Cannon variety mockery angle. those are truly very funny, and I enjoy them well enough. My favorite came from DBZ. Vegeta developed a very strong phobia in it and nobody could break him of it. He was terrified of heights in that crack fic. Bulma made a big swimming pool of jello which then added to Vegeta's fear because he could not swim to the surface after Goku tossed him off the building into the goo. hahahah.

I did the redirect as a temporary measure because of adult followers who like my writing at FFnet. The redirection is a generic variety. I have every intention of taking the redirect info down soon. I figure a couple months is enough time for most of my adult followers to find the stories on this site. My intention was short term redirection, not a permanent go to AFFnet tag.

I have 3 complete, 1st revisions done, and posted with 2 partially written and semi revised Initial D - Keisuke x Takumi novels for which I am seeking a second opinion. I would like to receive help specifically for imperfect bilingual dialogue. It has been brought to my attention that there are multiple forms of words like "What" and "Why" in Japanese that change with sentence context. The "Learn Japanese" book I have relied upon to create Bilingual dialogue is sorely lacking, as I have been instructed within several reviews at this site and FF net. Seeking a beta with a sharp eye for minor spelling glitches such as "Form" versus "From" because I have mild dyslexia problems beyond bilingual dialogue corrections. I have an unusual Character P.O.V. heavy writing style, so wish to work with someone flexible to retain the syntax of each chapter. As a retired editor I can do the majority of my revisions, although, I do have my moments of hit and miss. I desire to work with someone who is not afraid to say something is wrong with a specific portion of a chapter, and will give me suggestions for correcting any accidentally missed problem spots. I am open to returning the favor of returned editing services in exchange for any help received. I am a dedicated writer, so tend to post 2 novels per year. I write angst with romance/homoerotic themes. I am dealing in controversial topics such as stalkers, slavery compounds, and rape which are the result of having become somewhat famous. My stories include graphic M/M sex, violence, and other elements that some have difficulty reading. Rape scenes are in flashbacks. I have a 5th novel in the planning stages, so hope to find a committed individual with staying power. I have listed the stories I am seeking input for below in chronological order. http://anime.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600053941 http://anime.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600054038 http://anime.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600054123 http://anime.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600053940

I wonder if this is the same FF.Net idiot I blocked over a year ago for sending reviews to my Initial D stories starting with Alternate Tracks. The reviews were flames about how all White people should die because of how they treated Native Americans. It was Spanish and English combination, however I can't recall the original screen name, but this series of flames looks somewhat familiar in the bitch/punta repetitions. I blocked the person, then yanked all my stories at FF.net, and started searching for a new haven which I have found here. Sadly, I've never seen FF.net doing anything about this type of problem. Therefore, I only post 1 chapter to each story with heavy warnings/tags and redirection to my spot here on AFF.net to avoid this kind of messiness.

I have completed All For Love story's uploading as of today. I added a new chapter 50 because of fanfiction reviews that complained about Bunta not weighing on on the subject of Takumi's abduction. It is shorter than most of the chapters I write, yet I hope it satisfies that ongoing grumble somewhat. I still need to revise the full story based upon prior review input, but do not have the energy or the mindset to do so correctly yet. I will work upon adding new chapters to the two incomplete stories in the Rivalry series for a couple of weeks before I begin fine tooth combing, and replacing chapters. Sorry for the hold up on the Smoke and Driven stories that some have been forced to put up with while I got the other novels loaded.

I loaded through chapter 49 of All For Love today. I am going to take a break and see if I can finish that story off and add the Complete tag by evening here. Will revise as I get the chance. HAve a B-day for roomy today. But, there is plenty of original story for people to read in the meantime.

Have finished putting all chapters through 30 up in the All For Love Story. It is the old version at the moment so will have incongruities due to my having returned a couple of chapters to Alternate Tracks that I removed before posting at Fanfiction net. I will get those revised as I get the chance. I hope to have a complete tag on All For love by middle of next week. It will depend on whether or not I have any more family emergencies.

I like long and short chapters both as a reader and as a writer. IF the chapter is well written I can read 20 pages without a problem. . . . IF . . . it is poorly written, I can't stomach more than 1 page before I have to leave and look for something else. So long as the plot is advancing and the details support the development, I will stick with any number of pages. My problem with most really short chapters is the lack of details for my imagination to work correctly in the max enjoyment category. Leaving characters in a blank space is one thing I have seen many fan fiction writers do over the last few years. I would rather read an extra page that places them in a grounded area than founder as I do with those types of chapters.

I have begun posting All For Love in the original Raw form. Trying to multitask a dozen directions at the moment. Will add more chapters soon to that one, and will finish revising Alternate Tracks 38 and get it replaced in a day or two also.

So I wasn't doing something dumb when I got it from the Whew, I thought I must have done something dumb when I was adding the next chapters while in the story. Was worried for a moment. Thanks for the clarification.

Cool that there is the other ways to add to the text box. I had a lot of problems so I took another author's advice and it worked out fairly well for me. Hope I am not causing problems by trying to be helpful. Hm, I always got the captcha deal when I tried to load from the story itself. Must have had something strange going with the settings I used when I tried to load additional chapters from the actual story add chapter portion in the main story itself. Could that be because of how I set up each story I have been posting? I'm not ruling out my own possible klutziness in setting up the stories in a strange manner that causes the captcha to show up when I post outside of the author panel specifically.

my whip cracking finds known as plot bunnies have turned a stable relationship into a threesome recently so I can relate to the too much free reign problem. As a rule I try to do the what if to get the bunnies jabbering, then do a 1 page overview as an outline process to plan for some of the plotting element to stay on track. Beyond that, it depends on how well I understand the character motives and can determine which characters will coerce actions and tick off the cannons in my fan fiction writing. Staying within a cannon universe can be very tough, and few fan fiction writers bother I have found. However, I stay very cannon in universe, and try to make the characters remain true to the spirit of the original creator whenever possible. Writing fan fiction therefore is a hard core discipline for me so I enjoy the coerced exercise of being behind the cannon scenes at any given point in my fan fiction hobby. Originals get a full snowflake treatment to give me enough fact to keep characters in mind. I design the main aspects of the world building part so I can maintain consistency. Otherwise, I let the characters do the talking instead of myself as a rule. I noted a comment about not reading because of feeling depressed about not being as great a writer. Here's a way to turn that around. IF you admire a published writer's style, study it and learn how to improve your writing. Like Bronx and others are saying in this thread, learn from them and add those elements that are so amazing to your own writing. IF you don't study the genre you write, then you ignore a lot of important techniques that can be learned through practice. Granted, many fan fictions are totally written garbage, but even in fan fiction you will find a few genuine gems to learn new ways of spicing up your own writing. The way the great writers turn phrases is a genuine worthwhile technique to learn. It removes cliche from one's own writing also. So instead of comparing your writing against theirs, ask yourself what you can learn by reading a great story. Turn your depression on its head by refusing to put your stories against the published works of others. Focus on the benefits you can nab from the great writers and run with it until it becomes your own natural strength. Then you can go back and judge by the ones who taught you how to write that way.