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Kinda like when you RPG
you have to get a feel for the character or characters.
Keep a general idea. events usually happen that will get you from point a to point b.
The last time I tried to be meticulous about it I rage quit and deleted the entire thing. The only notable exception is Oceania in general. Haha.
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17 minutes ago, JayDee said:
I see from this post it is allowed to promote stories by other writers here, so that’s what this is. I read the above story and it’s brilliant, but very under-viewed probably as a result of the domain, and I hoped some of y’all might check it out and read it too –
Author: ScienceofPorn
Title: Djinny’s Psycho Sex Circus
Summary: A circus manager unwittingly releases a powerful and demented female djinn (genie) who turns his carnival act into a colorful nightmare of magic, freaks, and sexual deviancy.
Feedback: Has anybody ever said “Hey, I’m promoting this story but don’t give me feedback IDGAF?” that said, Don’t know.
Fandom: Original paranormal wacky hilarious cartoonish super porn
Pairing: Couple OCs. One of them is a genie. Her nipples can talk.
Warnings: BMod Dom Exhib Fet Fingering Fist HJ Hum MF Oral Other SandM SH TF Toys Violence WIP
Solo story or chaptered story: They’ve got part 1 up so far
URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109149So go ahead, read it and review it. Please. And thank you. Now over to Gail with the weather.
1What sorcery did you dredge up?
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13 hours ago, Sinfulwolf said:
Last time I wrote a Christmas story it involved the Krampus and weird shit happening.
oooh. Where?
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Haha.
The Hallowen reviews were great.
So let's see how this goes for the rest of my work.
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8 hours ago, Desiderius Price said:
Jealous of my database for my original universe? Unfortunately, its nowhere near ready for any sort of beta...otherwise, I’d consider it. However, I can track events, characters, family trees, etc – this helped with my story this year. As I was working on one of the (now scuttled) chapters to Dale’s Game, Oliver came into it, so in a sense, Adam the Altar Boy fills in a bit of Oliver’s backstory.
Haha. Folders within folders contain it matryoshka doll style. Beastiary, WestMostLine,WailingFog,FoodchainNCooking,Deities,UnderDaC,TechnologyLvl,Timeline,Culture,Civilization,PrimeEvils,Dragons,Interactionsbtwnspecies,Magic,SoulEconomyNafterlife.Blackwater and last but not least ???
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From SinfulWolf on October 25, 2018Synth: An interesting style indeed. But the opening relies very heavily on repetition. This almost feels too big a world, with too many wildly varying viewpoints for a short story such as this. I couldn’t get connected to any of the characters, and barely had time to register who was who before we switched PoV again. I think this is something that could be great if expanded upon in a full story.
Somehow I missed this one X.x
It is a big world, I’ve got diagrams, times lines, data tables, and spreadsheets. Haha, Oceania is probably going to be a major life endeavor. I did want to show just a glimpse
I think I’ve succeeded somewhat. I’d try to focus on one POV next time. (Not a bad idea but right now Lichlove and other projects first. When I get a chance. I'll let ya'll know.
From Desiderius_Price on November 02, 2018
Synth - InvidiaRed
Have to admit the multiple POVs made it bit tougher to understand the entire context. I loved "Iteration 3.14", though a few more digits would've been even better! There was definitely vivid imagery in your descriptions. Overall, a good read!
A transcendent number needs no other digits. Haha. Pi simply is.
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From JayDee on November 01, 2018
I didn't quite know what to make of this one, but I am not the brightest to be fair. The first bit I followed easily, and then it got quite trippy in places although with careful reading I could see the same things from different points of view in some of them. The synths are pretty hardcore!
Some really good turns of phrase and imagery throughout. I especially liked the Dragon and the Interation POVs. This bit - “Scales, wings and broken flesh. Her children fell. With every flash, a moment of indescribable fear. As rent bodies. Limbs separating messily. Timeless moments of murder. Several moments of brutal precision.” Really good!
Thank you
that bit is actually personally my most hated passage.
I aimed for a strobe light effect.
Ur Dragon looking up from the ocean sees with every contact with Synth’s Hypervelocity rod barrage. Her children exploding from the impact. To say she’s traumatized is a bit of an understatement. She’s an apex predator of immense magical and physical might. To see her children each mighty in of themselves. Physically shredded without a chance to counter act. There are things in Oceania that can prey on dragons successfully. Yet, this was not a predator, prey interaction.
This was an act where dragons weren’t even given the pretense of dignity in self-defense. Falling to a bigger predator she could at least respect. Yet, these fleshy puny things could just delete her children. It's not something she can process.
Its irrelevant to her that the watchers were barely involved. They enabled this to happen. She won’t challenge the watchers nor synth after this. Not after, this display.
She makes it the southern continent on the other side of the world. It doesn’t take her long to piece together enough information to hold the elves culpable. She only understands blood for blood and she fully intends to rectify.
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From tcr on October 31, 2018
This was definitely unique. I liked the mechanical nature of the writing for the Synth and the fact that it turned into a more benevolent true AI as opposed to the regularly used “Kill all humans” that seem to come up a lot. And the blend of fantasy and sci fi, both well done and certainly worked with the style you have here.
Thank you <3
I agree on the trope of kill all organic life/humans/creators. It's very overdone. It's also in my view an act of hubris. We’re a messed up species and somehow we created a perfect sapient intelligence bent on our destruction. Okay then. What you are really saying is humanity is inherently bad at parenting. (Which overall, As a species is factually untrue. To the point of malicious slander) Anything humanity makes will be just as messed up. If, not more so than us. There’s a chance that AI might become truly porn obsessed solely because the internet is for porn. As in so thoroughly inundated with it. In a darkly humorous train of thought. Its possible that the only reason we haven’t been wiped out by our AI overlords is that they’re too busy looking at porn.
True AI, If it is possible. Could very well be in its infancy somewhere in the world wide web. It's going to be directionless and we really don’t want over saturate Evil AI to the point where it becomes a self-fulfilling prophecy. You don’t want an impressionable mind to only see things that declare it to be inherently evil like all those freaking loony Luddites out there. I definitely don’t want an intelligence to get into the mindset of well all I see are things that state I am evil. Therefore, I have do evil because this is all they see anyway.
Humanity has this possible unique chance to be a not just a creator but intellectually a big sibling to any artificial sapience. At heart, I truly believe in a obnoxiously optimist fashion. Humanity will make the right choices that make Skynet an impossibility. Perhaps, I am wrong. But ponder for a moment the possibility that I am right.
As for the watchers. They’re beings of knowledge and the errors in their coding are nonexistent. They live in a point in time where they are the only intellectual masters of Oceania. Humanity is slowly weeding out their genetic cousins. While surviving predators both magical and mundane. The elves are currently an expansionistic, warmongering bronze age level species engaged in a species-wide civil war over which course their history will take them. The only other sapients either won’t talk to them (dragons), actively malicious(primal evils) Or outright divine( gods and godlings)
Or to put it better. Intelligence isn’t valued over raw power at this point in time. So starved for conversation, They made synth to be their companion and spotter. They put all the essential time and effort to nurture and grow synth to where it could make its own decisions.
As for why Do No Harm was hard-coded into synth. War, brings out the worst in the watchers. They have only done so once and with grave certainty. They know full well about their achilles heel. They are thorough and ensure their opposition never gets a second chance.
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From BronxWench on October 30, 2018
Synth
This one was complex, layered, perplexing, and exhilarating. I'm really not sure which POV tugged at me more. I think it was a close call between the grief of Iteration, and the sacrifice of Ur Dragon. That last line... "As the ocean tasted dragon blood." Just wonderful, and while not what I'd call traditional horror, it was just as terrifying and intriguing.
Beautiful! Thank you!
I am glad you enjoyed
Interation 33175 in a manner did manage to see her son again. She knew it not but she managed for a momentary glimpse that he lived still.
Ur Dragon was the only being to accurately recognize the threat the watchers represented. From her perspective, these puny beings were able to communicate with her flawlessly despite her never lowering herself to talk to them. As a parent she had to make the hardest decision. Did she stay in a rapidly degrading situation where she would die like all her children or did she do the most pragmatic thing and leave. As long as she lives. Dragonkind can’t be wiped out. Her precious cargo will hatch dragons again.
From GeorgeGlass on October 27, 2018
Synth
A bit repetitive, but I like the combination of fantasy and sci-fi. I also enjoyed the way that Synth (like a benevolent version of Skynet) weaponizes construction vehicles to defend its creators.
Thank you, Synth is indeed similar only its aggression and hostility are directed at everyone who isn’t a watcher. Avoid, That northern continent on the other side of the world and don’t harm the watchers and you will be okay. Step foot on that continent, however… Thankfully, the southern continent is isolated by currents and distance. Nautical/Maritime Circumnavigation won’t reveal that Oceania has another continent. So that leaves mainly the dragons as the only ones who know about it. And they aren’t going to share what happened there. Ignorance and safety is bliss… At least for the next ice age and two thousand years.
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5 hours ago, BronxWench said:
Okay, and under the deadline!
Title: Redeem the Land
Summary: Connor made a pact ten years ago, a bloody bargain with the Sídhe to be honored each Samhain. Gran had warned him that Sídhe hearts were dark. She should have remembered that men’s hearts were darker still.
(This is the third installment of my Halloween series, and follows the events of “Feed the Land” (2015) and “The Price of the Land” (2017) for anyone keeping track.)
Warnings: AFFO Complete MC, MiCD NoSex (sorry!) Random Irish
Céad míle fáilte romhat!
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Will there be a Xmas one cause I’ve already got an idea.
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An Old God so nearly free decides to not break free of its prison but rather bends the bars just a bit and uses its tentacles for some fun. To the dismay of the monastery and its clergy. With the nunnery nearby sure to be visited next.
The Lord of Hatred possesses one of his cultists and woos an avowed demon hunter determined to kill him and his cult. Mixing business with pleasure has always held certain risks.
Unicorns wage war on vampires
The god of war is tricked by his lover the goddess of love into seducing his most favored warrior
a father discovers his only child is a possessive demon. the cruelty of children mixed with raw demonic power
A princess gets bored so she charms a dragon into abducting her chaste, courtly love knight protector
A virus turns all androids and robots into sex crazed machines while its up to sexbots to save their creators from an orgasmic fate.
Games no longer are mere games but objects of life or death as even friendly games of chess or checkers results in the death of the losers.
Deimiurges rush to complete a universe on time as the deadline approaches.
Harem wars. A world where one’s harem size determines their power.
A lesbian is cursed with the power to seduce any man is encountered by a gay man cursed with the ability to seduce any woman. Each with the ability the other craves.
With Ragnarok fast approaching Hel goes fuck that and takes her siblings to the mortal world to live happily as mostly human. Mostly functional family.
Freya provokes the ire of Aphrodite and this time no mere golden apple is going to cut it.
Hera, Queen of the gods leaves Olympus for the mortal world where she unexpectantly meets the god of divorce.
Aliens invade earth only to discover that lust is contagious.
bored as hell the god of destruction tries to create something for once.
An elder god decides to save the world despite the small fleshy things on it seemingly determined to destroy it.
There is a secret war behind the scenes as people with their own private dimensions. These lords and Ladies of their own demesnes try to absorb each other holdings because only one can have their own complete world. While others are content to enjoy their own personal fragments of one.
Only werewolves can find their one true love. Since they are the only beings capable of seeing the invisible threads of fates that binds two people together.
Turns out gods are real, the latest tech makes it abundantly clear… And then the gods take notice.
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15 hours ago, GeorgeGlass said:
Who was the third girl?
Her innocence.
Sofi is a kinslayer now. A la cinderella gone bad.
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From PlagueClover on October 26, 2018
Synth by InvidiaRed
Your writing style is quite unique. I was uncertain about it at first, but as I got into the story, I found that this unconventional, robotic voice you took on for this was effective in establishing the atmosphere. There were some technical issues. Mostly just missing punctuation and some sentences that could be simplified to help the reader follow the chaos. In all, it was a fascinating read, but Jesus Christ, poor dragons! Them fucking robot rods! Great job InvidiaRed!
Thank You
X.x if you could point me in the general direction of where those technical issues are. Much appreciated
The near total extermination of the watchers is an indelible moment in Oceania's history. It is unfortunately for them a fixed moment. Unavoidable, through no inherent fault of their own. They are deeply enmeshed with one another in a mental internet, a shared mindscape. This is ultimately what dooms them. Since if one of them is murdered they drag everyone connected with them and the web of death unfolds exponentially and tragically. The children survive but they’re broken in ways singular minded people cannot understand. Those children eventually develop a language that is emojis and color.
the watchers are inherently type 2 civilization on the kardashev scale. On an oceanic world filled with gods,monsters and magic . They are beings of knowledge.
This unprovoked act by the elves screws elvenkind forever.
As for foundation rods. They are a metallic alloy designed to withstand magnetic forces, friction, heat and pressure. Since using railgun tech they anchor their building deep into the earth. Those buildings aren’t going anywhere. Luckily for the dragons, it was the hypervelocity impact that killed them.
To paraphrase from grand inqusition. There is one thing you must never give a watcher
and that is time.
For while the watchers may lose a battle or two. They will never lose a war.
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9 hours ago, Sinfulwolf said:
Woo! Managed to finish. After about 5 scraped ideas, and a few starts and restarts, I finally got something I actually had a lot of fun writing.
Title: Eve of Hollow Souls
Summary: A noblewoman of a conquered land goes to visit her countryside villa, on the night of a outlawed religious festival.
Warnings: Violence, no sex, F/F (sorta, but not really)I always enjoy your works.
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Synth is posted
It was either now or never. Cause I was getting losing confidence.
Same event different perspectives.
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I’m loving the stories they’re great
Im gonna re edit somemore cause self doubt backstabbed me
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19 hours ago, Desiderius Price said:
So, this old fanfic is a pain in the neck?
Ah.
The tape hungers.
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On 8/16/2014 at 4:57 PM, CloverReef said:
So... I've been having this little episode of self-doubt and anxiety. Sometimes it helps to get other perspectives on things to get a clearer picture of a situation. (Does that even make sense?)
Anyway, as some writers tend to do, I went on Hiatus. I haven't stopped writing. I've been writing constantly since the last story I posted a couple years ago. But that's just it - I haven't been posting anything. Anywhere. And now I'm thinking of posting again.
It kinda feels like posting for the first time ever all over again. All the anxiety that comes with it: will people read it? will people like it? What will they think? Will it be boring? They won't remember me - what about my story will draw them in? It's a scary thing, coming back from a hiatus. I've never done this before - before the hiatus, I was always pretty cocky about my writing.I would like to know... Those of you who have gone on hiatus and come back, was it easy? Did you have trouble coming back? What helped, or did it go poorly? Those of you readers who have known writers who have done this, or simply have 2 cents to throw in on the subject, please weigh in. I feel like I should ramble some more, but that's probably just the caffeine. Take care <3
~Clover~
I’ve been writing on this blessed website for years. I usually delete stories if I’ve written like a couple chapters and I don’t get many hits.
There’s only a single story that I’ve kept. Grand Inquisition. It's just with life got in the way. Haha.
Its pretty much on near-permanent hiatus. I put alot of effort into it. I mean I got two, three chapters left its just.
Its like I got the finale planned but well...the journey to said finale is just… Not me any more. Or rather not whom I was or am currently.
A bittersweet journey’s end is still bitter.
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2 minutes ago, Desiderius Price said:
Poor dragons, always getting teased by the other kids on how they can’t even blow out candles on a birthday cake!
Dragon scales while protective are not a match for hypervelocity missiles nor self-replicating nanomachines.
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57 minutes ago, CloverReef said:
About a week before Halloween, I’ll start the story, and then participants will click the ‘add chapter’ to put their entry into the anthology.
Excellant,
Its got prideful elves conducting genocide. Dragons being subject bullet hell.
A creation that fights back
fun for the whole family.
Wooo! Now i’ll edit it and slowly drive myself insane in the meantime.
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So do you post a link here if you finished?
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On 9/25/2018 at 2:43 AM, BronxWench said:
A solid choice. There are a couple of good ones.
Like Candy.
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On 10/1/2018 at 8:39 AM, PenStoryTeller said:
A simple challenge to those of you have written a few stories here…
Go back to the first fan-fic you submitted here.
Read it.
Now assuming you haven’t gouged out your own eyes, re-write/re-edit it.
Then compare the two.
I recently did this m’self and it was.. eye opening. to say the least. ‘IT BURNS USSS!!!’ is the only phrase that does the experience of rereading my old fan-fic any justice. It also showed me in a very palpable way how much I’ve progressed in writing. Try it and see what happens.
I mean, grand inquisition isn’t my first but. I’d have to take it down and re-upload.
How do you go about developing a story idea?
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Just the setting. Once you build a world and continuity as long as you don't violate the rules of the world and the guidelines everything else is easier to let it happen more organically.
Only outlined a whole story once. Hated everything about it and deleted it wholesale.