InvidiaRed
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15 hours ago, GeorgeGlass said:
Who was the third girl?
Her innocence.
Sofi is a kinslayer now. A la cinderella gone bad.
- GeorgeGlass and JayDee
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From PlagueClover on October 26, 2018
Synth by InvidiaRed
Your writing style is quite unique. I was uncertain about it at first, but as I got into the story, I found that this unconventional, robotic voice you took on for this was effective in establishing the atmosphere. There were some technical issues. Mostly just missing punctuation and some sentences that could be simplified to help the reader follow the chaos. In all, it was a fascinating read, but Jesus Christ, poor dragons! Them fucking robot rods! Great job InvidiaRed!
Thank You
X.x if you could point me in the general direction of where those technical issues are. Much appreciated
The near total extermination of the watchers is an indelible moment in Oceania's history. It is unfortunately for them a fixed moment. Unavoidable, through no inherent fault of their own. They are deeply enmeshed with one another in a mental internet, a shared mindscape. This is ultimately what dooms them. Since if one of them is murdered they drag everyone connected with them and the web of death unfolds exponentially and tragically. The children survive but they’re broken in ways singular minded people cannot understand. Those children eventually develop a language that is emojis and color.
the watchers are inherently type 2 civilization on the kardashev scale. On an oceanic world filled with gods,monsters and magic . They are beings of knowledge.
This unprovoked act by the elves screws elvenkind forever.
As for foundation rods. They are a metallic alloy designed to withstand magnetic forces, friction, heat and pressure. Since using railgun tech they anchor their building deep into the earth. Those buildings aren’t going anywhere. Luckily for the dragons, it was the hypervelocity impact that killed them.
To paraphrase from grand inqusition. There is one thing you must never give a watcher
and that is time.
For while the watchers may lose a battle or two. They will never lose a war.
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9 hours ago, Sinfulwolf said:
Woo! Managed to finish. After about 5 scraped ideas, and a few starts and restarts, I finally got something I actually had a lot of fun writing.
Title: Eve of Hollow Souls
Summary: A noblewoman of a conquered land goes to visit her countryside villa, on the night of a outlawed religious festival.
Warnings: Violence, no sex, F/F (sorta, but not really)I always enjoy your works.
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Synth is posted
It was either now or never. Cause I was getting losing confidence.
Same event different perspectives.
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I’m loving the stories they’re great
Im gonna re edit somemore cause self doubt backstabbed me
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19 hours ago, Desiderius Price said:
So, this old fanfic is a pain in the neck?
Ah.
The tape hungers.
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On 8/16/2014 at 4:57 PM, CloverReef said:
So... I've been having this little episode of self-doubt and anxiety. Sometimes it helps to get other perspectives on things to get a clearer picture of a situation. (Does that even make sense?)
Anyway, as some writers tend to do, I went on Hiatus. I haven't stopped writing. I've been writing constantly since the last story I posted a couple years ago. But that's just it - I haven't been posting anything. Anywhere. And now I'm thinking of posting again.
It kinda feels like posting for the first time ever all over again. All the anxiety that comes with it: will people read it? will people like it? What will they think? Will it be boring? They won't remember me - what about my story will draw them in? It's a scary thing, coming back from a hiatus. I've never done this before - before the hiatus, I was always pretty cocky about my writing.I would like to know... Those of you who have gone on hiatus and come back, was it easy? Did you have trouble coming back? What helped, or did it go poorly? Those of you readers who have known writers who have done this, or simply have 2 cents to throw in on the subject, please weigh in. I feel like I should ramble some more, but that's probably just the caffeine. Take care <3
~Clover~
I’ve been writing on this blessed website for years. I usually delete stories if I’ve written like a couple chapters and I don’t get many hits.
There’s only a single story that I’ve kept. Grand Inquisition. It's just with life got in the way. Haha.
Its pretty much on near-permanent hiatus. I put alot of effort into it. I mean I got two, three chapters left its just.
Its like I got the finale planned but well...the journey to said finale is just… Not me any more. Or rather not whom I was or am currently.
A bittersweet journey’s end is still bitter.
- CloverReef and BronxWench
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2 minutes ago, Desiderius Price said:
Poor dragons, always getting teased by the other kids on how they can’t even blow out candles on a birthday cake!
Dragon scales while protective are not a match for hypervelocity missiles nor self-replicating nanomachines.
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57 minutes ago, CloverReef said:
About a week before Halloween, I’ll start the story, and then participants will click the ‘add chapter’ to put their entry into the anthology.
Excellant,
Its got prideful elves conducting genocide. Dragons being subject bullet hell.
A creation that fights back
fun for the whole family.
Wooo! Now i’ll edit it and slowly drive myself insane in the meantime.
- BronxWench and CloverReef
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So do you post a link here if you finished?
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On 9/25/2018 at 2:43 AM, BronxWench said:
A solid choice. There are a couple of good ones.
Like Candy.
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On 10/1/2018 at 8:39 AM, PenStoryTeller said:
A simple challenge to those of you have written a few stories here…
Go back to the first fan-fic you submitted here.
Read it.
Now assuming you haven’t gouged out your own eyes, re-write/re-edit it.
Then compare the two.
I recently did this m’self and it was.. eye opening. to say the least. ‘IT BURNS USSS!!!’ is the only phrase that does the experience of rereading my old fan-fic any justice. It also showed me in a very palpable way how much I’ve progressed in writing. Try it and see what happens.
I mean, grand inquisition isn’t my first but. I’d have to take it down and re-upload.
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12 hours ago, CloverReef said:
@InvidiaRed Now I’m excited. I loooove synth stories. I can’t wait!
The first section completed.
Summary: A creation witnesses the breaking of its creators.
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Just now, CloverReef said:
Gotta love a lore bomb. Is ‘Synth’ The title?
Yep
- CloverReef and BronxWench
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11 hours ago, InvidiaRed said:
Got an idea too. Will start writing when I get home from my double shift.
Synth
Decided that I’m going to write on one of Oceania’s pivotal moments. Birthday’s coming up so I decided why not Lore Bomb? Muhahahaha
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12 hours ago, Sinfulwolf said:
I’m in, have something of an idea, but may change. Pretty much everything TBD at the moment.
Got an idea too. Will start writing when I get home from my double shift.
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Oooooh.
This sounds fun.
Alas, what lies we weave with masks. For which is the true face?
- CloverReef and BronxWench
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Spoiler
redro ni si snoitalutargnoc erecnis A
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23 hours ago, Desiderius Price said:
Depends on the version. In the “clean” version, I think it’s dragon hide. In the “adult” version, I’m thinking they’ll be naked
So what kind of dragon? Or is that not pertinent?
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14 hours ago, Desiderius Price said:
In this fandom, death is death, cannot come back once they’re dead. Though, obviously, as main characters, they’re a bit more invincible than a Star Trek red shirt would have.
good thing they decided to wear blue that day then xD
- BronxWench and Anesor
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On 8/15/2018 at 3:25 PM, Desiderius Price said:
Magic exists, so no life will be detected subsequent to the smaller party’s “demise”; and with the villain announcing it, well, it’s pretty much a given under the particular circumstances. The thought that the smaller party hasn’t fully crossed over won’t occur to them. Main party’s going to suspect traitors in their ranks.
All the plans the hero party (combined) had at the time of the separation were falling apart. So, main party is going to persevere until they get wind of what the villain is after and try to stop it. Yes, the smaller party will be playing much harder, going straight for the endgame, even getting into squabbles between themselves, at times, because of how hard they’re pressing.
This story has four MCs, two go to the small party (& presumed dead), whereas the other two regroup with the other members of the general organization the “main party”, which has some level of disbelief/disarray because the deaths weren’t what they were hoping for.
And in the smut version, small party’s going to be naked
Never count heroes out unless you have seen the bodies, Have access to said bodies and have their souls corked in a wine basement somewhere in a hidden location on another continent in a different dimension.
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On 8/24/2018 at 7:34 PM, GeorgeGlass said:
I don’t think just “letting things happen” to a character is enough to combat the Mary Sue disease. A lot of stuff happened to Rey from the current Star Wars trilogy, but that hasn’t prevented her from being good at absolutely everything she does on the first try, which makes it kind of pointless for her to have a story arc. For example, she had no real motivation to seek out Luke Skywalker, because he had nothing to teach her, so that part of the story came off as contrived. Compare that with the story arc of young Luke in the original trilogy, who had to confront not just enemies and hazards but his own flaws before he could become a Jedi. That’s what made his story worth watching.
The only thing that makes sense with Rey. Is that she is likely a wound in the force. Like the Exile in KOTOR2 but much more badly written. She doesn’t display force powers until after she encounters other force users.
The funniest theory regarding her is that she might be Aboleth. The most OP character in the extended universe.
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On 6/21/2012 at 4:01 AM, Melania_Prince said:
Hi. I'm new here. I don't know where to start with getting the question I'm asking through to everyone. I used to think I was great when it came to making characters. But lately I've noticed that a lot of the characters I make are the same and nothings changing. I write characters who always have sad backgrounds, are really clingy and cute, or like to be alone, but I never actually make them be alone. It seems to me, like I'm making characters based off myself, or how I want myself to be, but still the same in every way. I need help. I don't want to be a Mary Sue. How can I change how I make my characters? Please help.
Mary Sue’s are one thing but don’t go overboard and off the cliff on the otherside.
I think first, You should write a mary sue and then just use it as a reference of what not to do.
There is nothing wrong with characters who all happen to have sad backgrounds. Tragedy is everywhere. Why are they clingy do they have a reason to be clingy is it just there without reason.
The best way to avoid mary sue is let things happen to your characters. Let them live. They shouldn't get their way all the times. Things happen. Items.
How do the clingy don’t want to be alone characters react when circumstances force them to be alone?
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On 8/9/2018 at 7:07 PM, Sinfulwolf said:
Could always just leave small hints that it’s been them all along. That way when they do show up, it’s a surprise, but it’s not Deus Ex.
I’d have to say this would have to be a must if you got two parties going. From what I’m seeing the smaller hidden party is playing hard for the endgame.
The cusp of victory is that sweet spot where everyone isn’t at their best guard after all. Victory is in your grasp the goal is practically touching. Focusing too much on the impending victory.
Main party should have some distrust. As in why are certain things happening that only the party planned together unfolding? I think the hardest part would be the hints that the smaller party isn’t as dead as everyone thinks. I mean did people actually see the bodies? The smaller party would be going off the plans the party made before they got separated.
Throw your ideas in here!
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An Old God so nearly free decides to not break free of its prison but rather bends the bars just a bit and uses its tentacles for some fun. To the dismay of the monastery and its clergy. With the nunnery nearby sure to be visited next.
The Lord of Hatred possesses one of his cultists and woos an avowed demon hunter determined to kill him and his cult. Mixing business with pleasure has always held certain risks.
Unicorns wage war on vampires
The god of war is tricked by his lover the goddess of love into seducing his most favored warrior
a father discovers his only child is a possessive demon. the cruelty of children mixed with raw demonic power
A princess gets bored so she charms a dragon into abducting her chaste, courtly love knight protector
A virus turns all androids and robots into sex crazed machines while its up to sexbots to save their creators from an orgasmic fate.
Games no longer are mere games but objects of life or death as even friendly games of chess or checkers results in the death of the losers.
Deimiurges rush to complete a universe on time as the deadline approaches.
Harem wars. A world where one’s harem size determines their power.
A lesbian is cursed with the power to seduce any man is encountered by a gay man cursed with the ability to seduce any woman. Each with the ability the other craves.
With Ragnarok fast approaching Hel goes fuck that and takes her siblings to the mortal world to live happily as mostly human. Mostly functional family.
Freya provokes the ire of Aphrodite and this time no mere golden apple is going to cut it.
Hera, Queen of the gods leaves Olympus for the mortal world where she unexpectantly meets the god of divorce.
Aliens invade earth only to discover that lust is contagious.
bored as hell the god of destruction tries to create something for once.
An elder god decides to save the world despite the small fleshy things on it seemingly determined to destroy it.
There is a secret war behind the scenes as people with their own private dimensions. These lords and Ladies of their own demesnes try to absorb each other holdings because only one can have their own complete world. While others are content to enjoy their own personal fragments of one.
Only werewolves can find their one true love. Since they are the only beings capable of seeing the invisible threads of fates that binds two people together.
Turns out gods are real, the latest tech makes it abundantly clear… And then the gods take notice.