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My bad. I just read Chapter 8 and they do talk about it again. Great writing by the way with all your stories.

yeah! bring in that red haired bitch.

Ah. Thanks.

Not planning a sequel to that one. This version of Jeremy would never dream of doing anything remotely sexual with his little sister. (Not like in "Dark Dreams, Forbidden Fantasies,” in which he literally did dream of it.)

It was a throwaway line. Honestly, I never even thought to come back to it.

From Maxsteele1986 on February 07, 2021 Thanks! It’s in progress, but there’s still plenty more work to be done. I’ll probably finish the next chapter of “Biological Imperative” first.

New review for In the Light of Day: A Frozen Epic from Fairy-Slayer It's simply overwhelming trying to express everything that I love about this story, and even that would be insufficient to thank you for the clearly-tremendous effort and amount of time you put into writing this. Thank you! I suppose I could consider In the Light of Day to be my “training novel.” First off, this didn't need the explicitly erotic scenes at all to be a fantastic story, though your original character (OC) Hildy adds quite a bit of charm to the story while earning it a PG-13, in the most fun way possible. It had elements of the stately with great humor – never too silly though – that turned into drama, intrigue, and superb action. It's also great how it works in subtle tidbits about various topics that are key to the story without sounding like lessons, and then it's even more fun to find the valuable clues within (or sometimes without) as the mysteries keep piling up. In writing the story, I had to keep making notes to myself like, “Drop a hint about X in chapter Y.” I also did a lot more in the way of outlining than I do for most of my stories. Another great feature is that in a story necessarily full of diverse OCs to drive the story, each one was so well developed that it was easy to keep them straight throughout the story: their actions, distinctive ways… and their entertaining peculiarities (“Did someone say snakes!?”) made them all memorable while adding a lot of charm while driving the story. It was great that you included so many cultures and races, giving an exotic richness to the cast though without it being overwhelming. Thanks! With so many of them, I had to make them as distinctive as I could. Of course, then there were the spectacular surprises that still blew me away even though I was already expecting something big by the time they happened. I felt a twinge of excitement every time I caught some little tidbit that made me realize some of the characters didn't have Arendelle's best interests at heart. The hard part was remembering to have enough red herring-type activity to keep readers guessing while also making sure there were enough hints about the real bad guys. Spoilers It was clear that Prince Rajiv held a special place with his and Elsa's hostility towards each other at first. I knew they were opposites, but exactly how much took me by complete surprise. It was a wonderful twist, especially since Rajiv himself didn't know. Yeah, I knew Rajiv and Elsa’s mutual hostility was kind of a giveaway, so I tried to at least make the reason for their hostility a surprise. Ajay provided good exposition, on top of being a pretty terrific character in his own right throughout. I love Ajay. I always imagine him with John Rhys-Davies’ voice. Others were interesting, and even touching, showing more depth than we'd first been led to believe as we discovered the down-sides of various princes throughout the first act. Now, I'd been cheering for Prince Hypatios throughout mostly because anyone who immediately would give Olaf a warm hug got an automatic win in my book (and not *cough*just*cough*) because I wanted to see some shotacon action. If you’re into that, I’ve got a dozen other stories that might interest you. (It wouldn't have been so bad if Elsa had chosen him, as she could hang out with Prince Blackadder and his nine-year-old wife, Princess Leia of Hungary, without too much judgment.) Did they have Jedi in Hungary? Of course the twist involving him not being quite what he seemed was pretty awesome, and very heartwarming… at least for fifteen seconds until the hardcore action phase began and the drama was turned up to 11! I figured that his not being the real prince would explain the fact that he acts more like a regular kid...which in turn would make him more endearing. The transition to the full-on action of first the tremendously well-planned sabotage followed immediately by the invasion was spectacularly well done. Thank you! Turns out planning an invasion is tough. As if Elsa's incapacitation and worries about her near-certain death weren't enough, everything from Anna's realizations and frantic preparations to the first sighting of the invasion fleet was riveting; the ensuing battles on sea and land were quite exciting – even more so for being cringe-inducing as Lord Otos' master plan unfolded. Otos’ having backup plans for backup plans was really an artifact of my having to make some changes to the sequence of events as the plot unfolded. My original plan was that Elsa would be back in the capitol when the first Dianisian ships arrived, and that she would freeze the harbor to keep them out--only to be foiled by their Greek fire. But it worked out that if things were going to go the way I needed them to go, Elsa wouldn’t get back until well after the ships had landed. So the Greek fire became the Dianisians’ backup plan in case Otos failed to take out Elsa. Of course, the resolutions to the various problems were quite exciting, even if tragic as several new OCs found a special place in my heart moments before you went all George R. R. Martin on them. Disney or not, I felt like I couldn’t have a war without people dying, and they had to be people that readers cared about. There were a couple of characters that I considered killing off but didn’t: Varek’s attendant, Popov, and the boy Hildy counsels at the tea shop. But in the end, neither death really seemed necessary. Ultimately though, their determination and sacrifices only showed how strongly the people of Arendelle felt for their Queen and Princess, on top of wanting to preserve their freedom. Exactamundo. In the end, most of the problems tied up rather nicely in the end, though there are a few things that felt a bit off: For one, I really wanted to know the final disposition of Lord Otos – the spy who caused the deaths of so many soldiers and citizens, plus attempted murder of the queen herself – and the equally wicked traitor (unnamed) Minister of the Treasury. Even though you did work a strong anti-violence flavor into the story, especially with her mercy towards Dianisia in the end (thanks partly, no doubt, to her feelings towards Tomas), I would have liked to know whether they'd be put to death or spend the rest of their lives decorating the wall of a dungeon. Honestly, I never fully decided what Otos’ fate would be, but I think Elsa would keep him alive for his potential intelligence value (in other words, in case I decided to write a sequel and needed him to provide some necessary background info). The other issue was that, even though I love the tweest, the revelation of Hildy's father and her grander part in the good and helpful schemes did seem a bit out of the blue. (Not quite deus ex machina though it kind'a is ;)). It was certainly humorous to a degree but perhaps felt like a lot to take in at the very end of the story. Yeah, I probably should have put a bit more of that in earlier parts of the story, rather than back-loading most of it. Hildy’s involvement in her father’s schemes was largely meant as a way to explain some of her suspicious behavior early on (like her armed encounter with Kristoff in the woods). And all of that was mainly because I wanted Hildy to have more of a role in the story than just that of Anna’s BFF. Still, those issues don't make it any less awesome of a story. It's truly fantastic work. Thank you! As a matter of fact, after tweaking some of the speech parameters and removing my standard "TIME TO DELETE THIS LEMON!" reminder at the end of each chapter, this story will have a permanent home on my MP3 player. Thanks a million for your effort and dedication to bring this story to life. I am honored to have my words immortalized on your device, and you’re welcome. P.S. Your extended author's notes (in the review-reply thread) are terrific too. I especially loved the jokes – my favorite being: "Sweet only two more elementals and then they can summon Captain Planet." ThatGuyWithTheFace is no slouch when it comes to bad fire-jokes.

Then I will tell you, truthfully, that I hope you enjoy finding out. Which you can do any time, because the rest of the story is now posted!