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Thanks! I don’t have any immediate plans for a sequel, but if I’m ever struck by a great idea for one, I might use it.

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We have to settle for the good entertainment value of your writing then...the nasty thing about writing is that we are never better than your latest round of mistakes. It is not like the crowd of people that will scroll back years of posted stories of AFF to see if there was a hidden gem there. On the upside the value of what you write does not get less because for instance @InBrightestDay wrote something even more awesome using your material as basis. Then suddenly you review somebody that return the favor and become a fan and start to dig through your backlog of stories to find what is so-so, good or simply awesome. About your pile of cliches...you are also remarkable good at making use of those cliches within the flashfic format. As a writer of somewhat long pieces I would argue that the reason I write so long chapters is that it takes lots of text to cover the ground if you are nor making good use of cliches. If you go for flashfic then you need make lots of use of those cliches to get it to work. A typical case how you need to learn to stop worring and love the cliche...

I just got this imagine in my head of Shannon talking about this great sex she just had and then complaining about it all ending with her looking at socks with sandals. Of course I can look forward to it even if it does not happen...if it happen or not of course depends if the muses align properly for you. Makes sense, but I also think there might be reasons the creator sent her on this mission that she does not know herself...and you have not decided yet. Sounds like a story concept that is promising, but you will need more stuff for it to be a working story.

Glad to hear that you enjoyed the chapter. Hearing your positive words about the chapter is a great pay off for the effort to work on the story. I had most of the story planned out before I started to work on it, but the episodes at Franks place was the thing I added to when I switched from 4 to 5 planned chapters. IMO it worked great to flesh out what kind of character Lydia are and the writing process was very fluent when I got the idea for how Lydia would prevail in the end. Seemed fair to have a scene to prove how badass she is even without her normal advantage. :-) There is some world building in this part of the story. When I am done I need to look into reusing the setting for future stories. She definitely got issues about older people….in the first chapter she ran in trouble with the demon for hesitating about a 35 year old person. Good to remind the reader about this if it ever should matter to what happens in chapter 5. Thank you. I am quite proud of how this scene turned out with making use of Lydia’s abilities but not making it too over the top. By the way the scene as they try to come up with how to stage the attack quite literally match my work as I tried to decide where this part of the prophecy should come true. The blueprint of the story only included the actual outcome so I rejected quite many ideas for location before I found the one I used. I hope I will not have you waiting too long.

“How foolish these mortals be to use absolutes. When neither fate, nor time are kind and mortals are as mayflies” – Duliaht Yama Queen, goddess of the Hell of Rust and Bitter Iron