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A Gamer Girl With Bite Thanks for taking the time to look at the story and comment, I appreciate it. Rumor has it Eparlegna later denied ever having known Janet. “Fuckssakes, you don’t stick your tentacles in crazy.” Maybe she meant to summon him in his normal form but she got the pages stuck together and there was a spaghetti recipe in there too. Janet’s an odd character. I didn’t really think I’d ever put her in a story again, but here she is… I’d say I’m pretty good at writing self owns, but most of ‘em are about me! Thanks again for the comment!

I believe whole heartedly that true love takes time to foster and develop. Which is why I write smutfics and not YA. I don’t got all year to write and you don’t got all day to read, so the sooner the better. However long it takes to establish setting, character, and motivation. How long that will take is highly variable but once they’re established, it’s best not to tary long.

I liked you using Janet in this way. The dialogue at the scene with Kizzy and Janet at the end seemed like a very fitting ending of the story. Someday I should read the story about Sarsa...so much stuff to read and write and so little time... It sounds like you had a bad day when you read it because I did think that it was very good. When I mentioned the title it was very much because I did not find much else to comment about. I do not agree with Lupa cooling as a problem for the scene...I think it was a great way to both remind the reader and Mike what is really happening inthe middle of the sex. Using Mike’s perspective was also a good choice from my point of view. Putting myself in the authors mode...I think that one thing in this scene that worked to your disadvantage compared to Halloween scenes is the fact that you have them doing this because they are overcome with sex magic instead of them having the hots for each other and due to this have a problem in raising the arousal level atthe final part of the sex. Lupa’s climax is great but the coldness of her body and their insecurities intrude rather quickly. Don’t get me wrong, the insecurity and the character development is part of what makes this a great story where the outcome feel earned, but maybe it are those kind things that makes you feel this was not as good as it could have been. Just some random thoughts from a fellow erotic author.