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It’s still backstory if it’s “for context.” Maybe better done as separate oneshots, or an episodic serial? Out-of-order is going to confuse the reader IMO, (and in my case, myself too.) This is especially true if there’s something where a character dies, and now you’re talking if they’re alive. Another slight exception here is when I’m doing multiple POVs, so I want to cover character “A” in a dedicated chapter, and “B” in the next (but, the events should be sufficiently disassociated/separate for that to make sense). To me, the strong “out-of-order” means there’s a structural issue to the story, maybe you’re starting in the wrong spot/incident? Hope I’m making sense here.

If you’re a time-traveling story… SURE! Outside of that, you’ll probably confuse the readers if it’s extensive. (Aside from short flashbacks, or a brief start near the climax along with “two years earlier...”) This confusion is the main reason I broke up my first story I posted here, I was trying to cram in backstory into chapters as well, and came to realize I basically had multiple stories instead. (Which, while I’ve yet to really write that first story, I’ve been busy on the others.)

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“Episodic serial” not sure if it’s exactly the right word. For example, my Jeff story, which started off as backstory to explain the swimming instructor to the main protagonist, has generally become a series of “episodes”. So aside from episode one, which is the “inciting incident” to put Jeff into his general living situation, the rest chronicle his development over time with a series of snapshots. An episode shows the danger that’s generally pressing inward. Another shows some danger he can bring to himself (hypothermia). On occasion, two or more parters with a mini-ark when it gets a bit more involved. There *is* an example on AO3 that I’m aware of, called “The Breeding Ground”, which (according to the summary) is an anthology of Harry Potter sleeping around, with each of the 2,000 chapters featuring a different woman/lady (there’s crossovers to a myriad of other fandoms). (It’s a tad over 3M words...) So, if you’re aiming for the smut circle … you could scatter a common theme at the start of each chapter (a group conversation, part of an orgy) with the BOLD words of “A year earlier...” I mean, once the audience is used to the format, it might work.

I’d do both.

Well, I think within the context for the story, this isn’t the first time it would’ve happened. So they probably planned for it to be reinforced enough. Initially when I was thinking of it this was more in the sense of a dance rather than a sex act. Though the difference might not be all that much.

Hi, Deadman and all. How big and how strong is the table. If the table is big enough and strong enough to support two adult women performing a sex act without breaking, or if you want the table’s failure to be a feature of your story, then they use the table. Otherwise, they use the floor in front of the booth. While some furniture in some strip clubs is heavily reinforced, most of it is the exact same furniture you would buy to furnish a Denny’s or a Waffle House. So, the girls will likely be using the floor unless you mention in passing that the table was up to it, or that the ladies started on the table and ended up on the floor. Cheers!

Well it does get muddier. More than Mindcontrol Notbrainwashed.

Right now, my main focus is on writing the next chapter of “The Business of Pleasure.” It's probably going to be the longest chapter in the story because so much happens in it. There's a fair amount left to write, but I think the writing will go relatively fast because I have a fairly clear vision of what will happen in the chapter.

Chapter 6 of “The Business of Pleasure” is posted! Chapter 6: Household Affairs In other news, chapter 4 of “Band Together” has gone off to beta, and I hope to send off chapter 5 of “Rewire” by next weekend.

Hey, all. I've been doing a lot of traveling lately and therefore have had little time for writing. But now I'm done with travel for a while and am back at the keyboard. The next things I expect to send to beta are the next chapters of “Band Together” and “The Business of Pleasure.” I'm hoping to send both within a week or so.

Thank you for your review of my story, “First Date.” I did work for a while on the dialog between Zuko and Jin about going all the way getting it to sound plausible – clearly in the series she was hoping for more than she got. “But Mai would kill him,” becomes a recurrent phrase when talking about Zuko boinking anybody but his goth-girlfriend.

It doesn't sound like a problem to me. In my experience, people care about the consistency of characters, more than anything else. As long as you retain the consistency of your characters, there should be few, if any, objections about the path they follow and it's outcome. Of course, people would have a problem with a path or ending, that seems out of line with what is considered reasonable for the world in which your story takes place. But that really goes without saying, usually. So, if the ending is one that you believe your characters would naturally arrive at, then that ending should be fine.