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Kids these days will never experience many of the rites of passage my generation valued more than gold. For instance: saving up your allowance for three weeks during the summer so you can buy one of those giant plastic Pixie Stix at the public pool’s canteen and downing the whole thing in one go to use it as a snorkel and spending the rest of the month with a burning feeling in the back of your throat that tastes like cherries, chlorine, and stale pee. …those lucky saps.

Would really like a portkey out of here. Or a timeturner?

🍀 Happy St. Patrick’s Day! (We need the luck this year.) 🍀

Simple, have a quick conversation chapter one of the sequel. “Where’s Joe?” “Six years in prison, because when they say NO PARKING, the really mean NO PARKING.” or “Got transferred to far, far, away.” or “He learned why there’s safety bars on woodchippers. Coroner estimated they recovered 60% of the remains.” And if you want the villain to be a surprise, have his whereabouts accounted/dismissed for in this conversation too.

Hey, all. I've been doing a lot of traveling lately and therefore have had little time for writing. But now I'm done with travel for a while and am back at the keyboard. The next things I expect to send to beta are the next chapters of “Band Together” and “The Business of Pleasure.” I'm hoping to send both within a week or so.

Hi, Deadman and all. A lot of great points were brought up in other answers. My answer would be a question: “Would the character speaking actually mention these people under the circumstances?” If yes, then the character mentions them. If no, then they don’t. If you mention them as the “third person narrator,” then if you mention them at all you should also suggest at least one plausible reason within the plot why the character won’t be showing up in the next story. “Teasing” characters that will be no-shows isn’t nice, and readers will be more upset the more “important” the character is within the storytelling universe as a whole. Good luck.

Beware the Ides of March! 🗡️

Happy PI Day everybody. (It’s also my character Jeff’s birthday!)

Thank you for your review of my story, “First Date.” I did work for a while on the dialog between Zuko and Jin about going all the way getting it to sound plausible – clearly in the series she was hoping for more than she got. “But Mai would kill him,” becomes a recurrent phrase when talking about Zuko boinking anybody but his goth-girlfriend.

Just checked the YT link to the Naruto-reader’s channel and got a 404 error. https://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/topic/73569-beware-this-patreon-plagiarist/#comment-449045

Know readers would likely wonder where Jane is, so yeah, a short snippet is good. Maybe you write a short-short story that covers it? (Even if you don’t publish, it’d be good to reference.) A decent example I’m thinking of, is Star Trek TNG, Gates McFadden got “fired” end of season 1, so they explained her absence as “reassignment to Starfleet Medical”, and once rehired for Season 3, “one year rotation’s over, she’s back”.

I suppose I could add another but that’s not the plan in any sense. At least within the context of the story, Jane would be involved in between the current story I’m writing and the sequel. But I appreciate the insight on how I could mention it.

Me trying to spin a one-line tale with the dialogue… I figure if it’s nagging on your mind, then it’s likely nagging on the reader’s mind. Perhaps you’re wanting to sow seeds for a follow-on story (not the direct sequel), so you could drop breadcrumbs, “She’s gone to explore jungles in Colombia haven’t heard from her in ages.” Anyways, ideas there, hope it helps.

Could be from somebody not wanting to necessarily cross into a love-triangle territory too… or verifying that the other person’s not around. Because Jane was a part of their character makeup (and still is to some degree), seems relevant to know that the main character might still have thoughts dwelling on Jane, maybe it’s regret, maybe it’s guilt for hiding the body, or maybe they’ve totally moved on with “Who’s Jane?”.

I don't think so.

Well, it’s less of a way to get rid of them. It’s for AFF, so it’s more like: “When is Jane going to join in on the fun?” But then the sequel doesn’t have Jane in it at all. Even though Jane is mentioned in the last chapter of the story. However in another chapter I do mention Mary and she does appear in the sequel. Since having the idea to mention Jane though, I have considered making her part of the sequel, but that could over complicate the story. Which has been pretty straight forward up until now.

In Original stories, I wouldn’t recommend it, but in fanfics it can be a really good way to add continuity. That’s my opinion anyway.

No worries, that’s partly why I asked ahead of time. I can tweak the title and still make it work. My first instinct is just add a “The” where the dash would be. Not exactly the same but close enough.

At the moment, if you can avoid it, leave out the dash. It’s absolutely frustrating, I know, but it’s something in the code itself, and not a setting I can tweak with my very limited access.

I’m fairly sure all punctuation is glitching in titles and summaries. I haven’t found a workaround yet myself.

Rewrite is doing better. Felt like I had to separate it. Now for some reason I have a romance story prequeling/concurrent with the dark fantasy one. … No I don’t know how that happened.

This day 6 years ago, I landed in New York, my first time in the US. Hard to believe it was that long ago. That trip was when I saw snow for the first time. That was very exciting. Although I soon realised what a pain in the arse it is.

Got to love when your role expands but there’s no appropriate compensation.