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Desiderius Price

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  1. Review for “The Repair Guy”, chapter 4. Think of it more like a deer in headlights, Konnor’s a bit dazed, and wants out of the situation ASAP. From his perspective, he goes to do a repair job, only to get a girl dangling by his balls and she’s holding on tight. Church… I was picturing it along the lines of a bigger megachurch, it can’t be too big because its in the middle of Atlanta, near a college with an obvious transient population. So, on this particular Sunday, it’d be closer to empty because of the college year being done. I didn’t invest too much time, just a mental picture, no maps/charts/etc, because I don’t plan to revisit that particular building.
  2. Chapter 4 is now posted.
  3. Having him show up in his underwear helps too, but yeah, the dripping added a nice touch.
  4. I’ve taken to starting stories with a sound. For example, using “Drip...Drip...Drip” for The Repair Guy. Dunno a good reason, it just gets things across to the reader, engaging another part of the mind as you keep reading the story.
  5. Purred? These are cat people, Khajit or similar? I’d tend to write it more like dialogue, treating the action/sound as any other spoken line. So…. for example...
  6. I do write software for a living….
  7. Upload to the forum and use that image URL for the archive?
  8. Is my avatar showing to you, the eclipse? Because I had uploaded it from my computer. p.s. I haven’t set it for the archive, just the forum
  9. Chapter 3 is up. (Essentially, I plan to post as fast as I write these, with a one chapter “buffer”).
  10. I tend to forget some of those senses as I write. Taste, smell, and touch are less written about, than vision (primary) or sound (secondary). So, yeah, write in sounds, that does help stories, IMO. And, don’t forget to smell, taste, and touch … depends on what you’re writing, I suppose. If you’ve got a pile of crap, skip the description, we all know what it’s like.
  11. Sound words, I kinda use like a spice, here and there, peppered about. I’ll typically do them on their own line, like dialogue, because it is, in a way, dialogue. For instance, flushing a toilet, I might just put in “FLUSH!” Because, well, that’d invoke the proper image, without having to have a character announce they’re flushing, or write “The toilet was flushed”…. or the like. I mean, if a character’s in the bathroom, and a “FLUSH” occurs, you can generally guess who flushed it.
  12. IIRC. I think I encountered this before, and it seemed to be a timeout on the captcha. Assuming you’re copy-pasting from another program and fixing formatting; do the new story fast, copy-paste (don’t bother with fixing), hit submit, and then go into your story manager, edit the chapter, and fix the formatting.
  13. Chapter 2 is up.
  14. Uh-oh, I’ve already broken into the halloween candy...

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    2. Desiderius Price

      Desiderius Price

      “Think of the children!”  Of course, especially for the witches who find them a delicious snack.

    3. marley_station

      marley_station

      Someone at my office brought it in  – in plastic tubs.  I have to walk past the @#$%^&*! mini-packs of peanut M&Ms as soon as I open the office door.

    4. CloverReef

      CloverReef

      Oh my god, Marley! I both pity you and want to be you. 

  15. Welcome to AFF
  16. Super Gardener, able to hear plants in distress.

    1. pippychick

      pippychick

      I think there was a Tales of the Unexpected that had that as the plot once. This guy could hear his neighbours rose bushes screaming as they were pruned. Eventually, he took an axe to a massive old oak tree and deafened himself or something, after trying to convince people that he could hear plants were in pain. He was trying to record it, I think.

      My mother reckons it’s some old drama/ tv play for today series we have on DVD. Forgot what it’s called.

  17. Shit? Sounds like a scat fan.
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