Desiderius Price

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And with as complex as the human mind, we can make our psychopath as deranged as we want!

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Move along, nun-thing to see here ….

Went ahead and posted episode #14, “First Contact”, simply because I’m starting to get way ahead on episodes. (That extended weekend helped.)

Yep, sometimes it’s a clean electrocution, other times, we’re tossing the nun into the woodchipper.

Yep, I’ve plenty of stories about instant BBQd squirrel bits. So high voltage can most definitely do interesting things. In my story case, I simply needed a murder, and the killer knew what he was doing, so it was relatively clean, so to speak.

In the case of the electrocution, it was premeditated while also trying to have it be masked as “natural”, so big wounds would be a give-away that it wasn’t natural.

Googled it up, there’s no DSM for psychopath, instead, the psychiatrists would label an individual as having “Antisocial personality disorder”, rather vague, though a psychopath, “A "psychopath" is someone whose hurtful actions toward others tend to reflect calculation, manipulation and cunning; they also tend not to feel emotion and mimic (rather than experience) empathy for others.” An example, a psychopath CEO has no issues with doing layoffs, as they can’t empathize with the employees being laid off, however, what they’re doing, reducing overhead, is in the better interest of the shareholders. So, I’m guessing there’s a degree to the psychopath. Some are more goal orientation, don’t care about busting rules/hurting to make the goals. And some went further, enjoyed the busting/hurt, and therefore enjoy the means as well as the goals. Not absolutely certain without becoming a psychopath myself.

The grisliest in my stories has to be the woodchipper. (If you google right, you can get the coroner’s report to a real one.) Though I’ve used trains, chainsaws, and, of course, bullets. Electrocutions, unfortunately, leave no mess (which was good at the time, I didn’t want to get blood into the furniture beneath the victim, gotta save that!)

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There are certainly psychopaths out there who have no real conscience, who believe the ends justify the means. Some become serial killers, others become CEOs/Bankers/Lawyers/Politicians. My current universe, though, are people who feel they are doing the right thing, who agree with what is happening even if it gets a bit “messy”.

Like tags, for every rule I make, I break. Messy can be fine for the story, or not, depends on the impact even though I do tend to keep the means simple (ie, not tying victim to a draw bridge and waiting for the next tall boat to come through, causing the nearby cyanide-gas filled chandelier to break in response to an elephant rampage). i do measure the desired impact on my characters. I did have one scene where I was going to have my main character witness a thousand being massacred, but had to change it so he’d only see a couple, because I figured a thousand would really screw him up, even a couple will haunt him.

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“I’ll take deranged psychopathic schizophrenic serial killers for a thousand, Alex.” As always, it depends on the story being told. Also, with how I write my stories, death is a part of life, as I was reminded of earlier this year. I also generally opt for simple means, gunshot, electrocution, etc, not overly complicated in the method.

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Still be nice about it I get so little feedback that I’m not sure if my writing’s really any good or not. What @CL Mustafic did ages ago, helped, in a review, she offered to read over and provide criticisms to my stories (until she got too busy to do it) – so that’s another way you can give help if you like the story enough, but the grammar/flow/etc is getting in the way.

I’ve been waffling on going Amazon myself, though I’d view it like buying a lottery ticket, it’d have a chance, but more likely flop.

I think “biopsy” needs some tags here: [BDSM] [Torture] [Violence] [Gore] [MCD/MiCD] & [Nec] (where that second to the last one depends on the ego of the doctor) Without the internet, I likely wouldn’t be an author as I wouldn’t have discovered fanfic nor would I desired to continue a particular story, and so forth, leading to today where I’ve got (some) confidence because I’ve posted and gotten feedback. Some criticism is definitely *good*, obviously, don’t bludgeon the writer to death with it. If you find a story you otherwise like (premise, setting, etc) and something gets in the way, the author would certainly like to know why. Perhaps it’s fixable (spelling, grammar, some details/construct) or not (ie, premise), but the author can sort that out. Editing, I’ve found, is double edged, you can do a bit to improve, or overdo it and ruin the underlying story; even a rotten editor can certainly get you to butcher an otherwise good story if you’re not careful. I’ve started to relax a bit on the amount of proofreading/editing I’ll do for posting on AFF, figuring that I’d do it more seriously if I publish – the Repair Guy was an experiment there, doing one pass and trying to keep myself to one pass of reading it over, and overall, I’m happy with how the story turned out. Now Jefferey, which I started to “revise/edit” as a means to get myself back into it so I could continue the story, ended up adding 11 new episodes to the story (so far) that weren’t there in the original draft.

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