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You mean, the part where he bangs his five-year-old twin sisters? Don’t know why you'd think that.

From Fairy-Slayer on January 21, 2017 Chapter 8 had all kinds of great action. I find that writing fight scenes and writing sex scenes aren’t really that different. They’re all about whose limbs are doing what where. I'm so glad the "emergency" turned out to be a good thing, and definitely a good reason to interrupt Marco and Jackie. Even better is how the interruption and explanation gave Jackie an opening to move things along for them as well. Safe Kids is Smart Kid. I figured that Star’s definition of “emergency” is probably broader than most people’s. And Jackie isn’t easily thrown off. The lovemaking was wonderful, both in the action and in the beautiful descriptive imagery throughout. It was very sensual and also pretty hot. Thank you! Given that it’s what much of the story has been leading up to, I tried to make it live up to readers’ expectations. Jackie's bashful comment about doing it a lot more was cute, and Marco's response about the blueflower incense was a perfect little compliment. Both comments just seemed in-character for them. Of course, Star and Oskar having raving screaming crazy monkeysex one booth over was pretty funny too. I had a hard time deciding whether to show Star and Oskar in action, too, or just stick with Marco and Jackie. Ultimately, I decided that the Star/Oskar fun was perhaps better left to the imagination. Marco and Star's banter when the ambush was revealed was funny, and I loved the PC talk among the villains before attacking. That just seemed like something that might happen in Star’s world. Great description yet good pacing on the fight scene, plus good comebacks as always. Also, it was nice to see Marco a bit more easygoing and even appreciating some friendly ribbing here, like they've been working his character towards on the show. What with the mineral pool, the massage, the incense, and the afterglow, I figured that Marco would be his most relaxed self at this point in the story. The villains may be inept (or just seem inept) but, yikes, they got the job done and Star is none the wiser. It will be interesting to see how it takes hold on her and what side-issues that will bring about; combined with Tom's other machinations it all has me quite intrigued. Good… Thanks for another terrific chapter. Thanks for another great review!

3plus is one of those tags that is meant more as a descriptor than a warning. So I suppose the question to ask yourself is, If someone started reading your story because they wanted to see some 3plus action, would they ultimately be excited or disappointed?

I wonder whether playing role-playing games early one helps one avoid the Mary Sue trap. Character creation in an RPG usually involves tradeoffs (or at least the odd bad die roll), so unless you are crazy lucky (or cheat like mad), your character can’t be perfect. As a result, you’re always thinking about characters in terms of their strengths and their weaknesses.

I didn’t know the movie was based on a book. (“Waaaarioooors, come out and play-aaaaay….”) Years ago, I read a book called The Vice Lords by an anthropologist who studied Chicago gangs. Pretty interesting stuff.

Good evening to you. Thank you! That is a high compliment. Each of them was overwhelmed by the sexual feelings that the other’s seductive alter-ego was arousing in them. When they finally gave in to their desires, it was like a dam breaking; they had to have each other, right then and there. If they had had more time together in dreamland, I think they eventually would have made love in the way that you describe. Even if I didn't read about that in chapter three... it bounced back with the bittersweet end in chapter eight. I didn’t want them to have their lives changed entirely by the experience, but I didn’t want a total “reset button” ending, either. I wanted there to be at least a little hint that Phineas and Candace’s relationship will be positively affected by the insight they gained about themselves and each other during their shared dream. I’m glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks very much for the review!

Thank you! When I started writing “Whoops,” I didn't fully understand that I was committing myself to writing what has turned out to be the longest continuous sex scene I've ever written. I was thinking that I could focus on some of the sisters’ liaisons with Lincoln and “fast forward” through others. But as I wrote, I realized that I didn't want to skimp on any of them, because part of the fun and challenge of writing this story has been figuring out how Lincoln would accommodate each sister's desires. (I'm having a good time right now finishing up his scene with Lisa, which is requiring the frequent use of both Dictionary.com and Wikipedia. ) You are most welcome! The next NSFW Loud House story I have planned, titled “The Loud House After Dark,” will feature some hardcore hanky-panky between Lincoln and Lynn.

Re: “Comfort and Joy” Thank you! Striking that balance was very important to me in writing this fic. My thought was that not only is Carl a teenage boy who has two hot girls to get it on with, but he and the others were pretty backed up from having to keep it in their pants while their parents made up their minds about whether to let the kids keep having sex. And being introduced to anal sex probably put a bit of extra lead in Carl’s pencil, too. From what I’ve read—and I’ll confess that I haven’t made a thorough study of the subject—that people can become physiologically capable of orgasm at almost any age, including toddlerhood. And given that sexual precocity runs very strongly in Carl’s family, I didn’t think it implausible that his kids could be capable of orgasm at age 4. And thank you for the review!

Thank you. The fact that I had to Google “bishie” makes me feel like less of a perv.

Minor1 and Minor2 are definitely clearer. The only unique information the shota and loli tags would add is whether the minor is male or female.

Definitions seem to vary. I’ve seen “shota” used to refer to anything involving sexual activity with young boys, which is further classified as “straight shota” or “gay shota. I’ve also seen “loli” used to distinguish drawn or otherwise fictional young girls from real ones.

I’ve never understood why the shota and loli tags are restricted to anime. Shouldn’t they apply to any underage character, not just underage anime characters?

Wait, so it’s starve a troll, feed a fever? I always get that mixed up. But yes, agree with everyone that the best response usually is no response.

Re: “Comfort and Joy” It just seemed like the right way to end the trilogy: their parents had sex when they were very young, Carl and his sibs did the same, and now their kids are doing it. I think they would, but “off screen.” Given that there was no inter-generational sex in the whole trilogy, I thought it would be weird to introduce it in the final chapter. I have a father/teen daughter series going that begins with “Wild Side,” continues with “Everything She Needs,” and will conclude with the in-progress “Make It All Better.” Also, there’s a good bit of father/daughter sex in my plot-heavy scifi-fantasy stories “Activation Day” (completed) and “Eddie Forever” (well underway). Finally, I’ve got a father/young daughter story called “Little Rose” in the works, but I’m not sure when the first chapter of that will be ready for posting. Thanks for the review!

Re: “Caitlyn’s Punishment” Glad you enjoyed it. If you like that sort of thing, keep an eye out for my upcoming story, “Curfew.”

I have Word on my laptop, but I still use Google Docs because of the ability to look at the same documents on my computer and my phone. (This is handy when inspiration strikes while I’m on the train or in line at the grocery store.) And there’s a little icon that shows whether a document has been shared with someone else.

I’m afraid I’m not going to be able to participate. I’m still trying to finish up a (non-one-shot) Christmas story that I started LAST Christmas. Looking forward to your stories, though!

Two comments: --Every source I’ve looked at says that “futanari” is the Japanese word for hermaphrodism. (I had to write a futa story for a contest winner a while back, so I looked into it.) So presumably, “futa” and “hermaphrodite” are synonyms. --Does “Warm And Fuzzy Feelings” have some sort of special meaning in the context of fic writing?

What if you’re just going from, say, chapter 4 to chapter 5? Does that count as a separate dragon print?

Re: “Daddy’s Rules” Thank you! As I always say, there’s no praise more sincere than an involuntary physiological response. If you’re looking for something longer that’s in a somewhat similar vein, you might check out “Cruel Nature,” “Unbidden,” “Wish List,” or “Darla” and “Darla’s Dad.” Thanks for the review!

Re: “Caitlyn’s Punishment” I don’t currently have plans to continue this one, but I have another one in the planning phase that is in a similar vein (working title: “Curfew”).