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I see Ferb as being deeply introspective, whereas Phineas is always focused on the world outside himself. As a result, Ferb is more mature emotionally, because he understands himself better than other kids his age do. But at the same time, I think he appreciates having Phineas around to draw him out (and to do the talking). She's got real-world experience with sex, and she's not afraid to fantasize, so yeah. Exactly. I figure Linda probably indulges in romance novels at least occasionally, so the yacht setting seemed like something she might dream up (literally). Not a bad prediction. No problem at all. I'm always happy to get them, whenever they come.

From Fairy-Slayer on October 02, 2016 Tom certainly is full of himself these days. I'm hoping that his smugness and the way he put down Janna comes back to haunt him. It’s my guess that it was Star who ended their relationship, and that Tom wants her back largely because her leaving him was a blow to his ego—which suggests that his ego is pretty big. At least Boner's surprise for him was a step in the right direction. The soultini was a perfect netherworld reference, especially with the modified Bond-esque option. The way the spa passes appeared was intriguing and very fun, in the show's style. Star may actually have a point about those squirrels… My wife is half convinced that squirrels are evil. She’s resented them ever since one of them dug up a flower she’d planted and buried a nut in its place. Star and Marco's back & forth about the potential for a trap was cute. Marco's ambivalence about Jackie wanting to go ahead anyway was cute, considering that he probably wishes she'd have a bit of Safe Kid in her too (not just Marquito) but was happy she wasn't holding bad feelings about the previous attack. Then when she was willing to true the blueflower incense with him, despite the mixed experience with the glowberries, that was a very hopeful sign. This time she had a choice, and that made all the difference to her. The spa sounded like such a nice time that now I want to go, Maybe you should call Uncle Hardegarbamar. Oh, wait… and the detail about their massages was so good that even I was starting to feel quite relaxed too. Janna was great, but I didn't internalize too much of Marco's technique, which is good because for a moment I was afraid he was going to confuse his fantasy with Star's and start biting. No spoilers! Seriously though, it sounds like he did very well, plus it was cute that Jackie was comfortable topless while he worked. He’s done a lot to earn her trust in the course of their relationship thus far. Nice imagery as Marco's confidence got an Obi-wan Kenobi boost from that image of Star saying nice things, making him go for it. Jackie's reaction to his ass-grab was quite delicious, but of course he's got a strong sense of duty for his friends, so awesome cliffhanger it is. I can never resist a cliffhanger. Knowing how well Marco and Jackie were doing together now I'm really curious to see how things between Star and Oskar went. Hopefully the emergency isn't anything too terrible – unless that's the fun. Thanks for another great chapter. Thanks for another uplifting review!

But we’re all crazy in different ways, so we’re collectively sane.

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New review for In the Light of Day: A Frozen Epic from Fairy-Slayer It's simply overwhelming trying to express everything that I love about this story, and even that would be insufficient to thank you for the clearly-tremendous effort and amount of time you put into writing this. Thank you! I suppose I could consider In the Light of Day to be my “training novel.” First off, this didn't need the explicitly erotic scenes at all to be a fantastic story, though your original character (OC) Hildy adds quite a bit of charm to the story while earning it a PG-13, in the most fun way possible. It had elements of the stately with great humor – never too silly though – that turned into drama, intrigue, and superb action. It's also great how it works in subtle tidbits about various topics that are key to the story without sounding like lessons, and then it's even more fun to find the valuable clues within (or sometimes without) as the mysteries keep piling up. In writing the story, I had to keep making notes to myself like, “Drop a hint about X in chapter Y.” I also did a lot more in the way of outlining than I do for most of my stories. Another great feature is that in a story necessarily full of diverse OCs to drive the story, each one was so well developed that it was easy to keep them straight throughout the story: their actions, distinctive ways… and their entertaining peculiarities (“Did someone say snakes!?”) made them all memorable while adding a lot of charm while driving the story. It was great that you included so many cultures and races, giving an exotic richness to the cast though without it being overwhelming. Thanks! With so many of them, I had to make them as distinctive as I could. Of course, then there were the spectacular surprises that still blew me away even though I was already expecting something big by the time they happened. I felt a twinge of excitement every time I caught some little tidbit that made me realize some of the characters didn't have Arendelle's best interests at heart. The hard part was remembering to have enough red herring-type activity to keep readers guessing while also making sure there were enough hints about the real bad guys. Spoilers It was clear that Prince Rajiv held a special place with his and Elsa's hostility towards each other at first. I knew they were opposites, but exactly how much took me by complete surprise. It was a wonderful twist, especially since Rajiv himself didn't know. Yeah, I knew Rajiv and Elsa’s mutual hostility was kind of a giveaway, so I tried to at least make the reason for their hostility a surprise. Ajay provided good exposition, on top of being a pretty terrific character in his own right throughout. I love Ajay. I always imagine him with John Rhys-Davies’ voice. Others were interesting, and even touching, showing more depth than we'd first been led to believe as we discovered the down-sides of various princes throughout the first act. Now, I'd been cheering for Prince Hypatios throughout mostly because anyone who immediately would give Olaf a warm hug got an automatic win in my book (and not *cough*just*cough*) because I wanted to see some shotacon action. If you’re into that, I’ve got a dozen other stories that might interest you. (It wouldn't have been so bad if Elsa had chosen him, as she could hang out with Prince Blackadder and his nine-year-old wife, Princess Leia of Hungary, without too much judgment.) Did they have Jedi in Hungary? Of course the twist involving him not being quite what he seemed was pretty awesome, and very heartwarming… at least for fifteen seconds until the hardcore action phase began and the drama was turned up to 11! I figured that his not being the real prince would explain the fact that he acts more like a regular kid...which in turn would make him more endearing. The transition to the full-on action of first the tremendously well-planned sabotage followed immediately by the invasion was spectacularly well done. Thank you! Turns out planning an invasion is tough. As if Elsa's incapacitation and worries about her near-certain death weren't enough, everything from Anna's realizations and frantic preparations to the first sighting of the invasion fleet was riveting; the ensuing battles on sea and land were quite exciting – even more so for being cringe-inducing as Lord Otos' master plan unfolded. Otos’ having backup plans for backup plans was really an artifact of my having to make some changes to the sequence of events as the plot unfolded. My original plan was that Elsa would be back in the capitol when the first Dianisian ships arrived, and that she would freeze the harbor to keep them out--only to be foiled by their Greek fire. But it worked out that if things were going to go the way I needed them to go, Elsa wouldn’t get back until well after the ships had landed. So the Greek fire became the Dianisians’ backup plan in case Otos failed to take out Elsa. Of course, the resolutions to the various problems were quite exciting, even if tragic as several new OCs found a special place in my heart moments before you went all George R. R. Martin on them. Disney or not, I felt like I couldn’t have a war without people dying, and they had to be people that readers cared about. There were a couple of characters that I considered killing off but didn’t: Varek’s attendant, Popov, and the boy Hildy counsels at the tea shop. But in the end, neither death really seemed necessary. Ultimately though, their determination and sacrifices only showed how strongly the people of Arendelle felt for their Queen and Princess, on top of wanting to preserve their freedom. Exactamundo. In the end, most of the problems tied up rather nicely in the end, though there are a few things that felt a bit off: For one, I really wanted to know the final disposition of Lord Otos – the spy who caused the deaths of so many soldiers and citizens, plus attempted murder of the queen herself – and the equally wicked traitor (unnamed) Minister of the Treasury. Even though you did work a strong anti-violence flavor into the story, especially with her mercy towards Dianisia in the end (thanks partly, no doubt, to her feelings towards Tomas), I would have liked to know whether they'd be put to death or spend the rest of their lives decorating the wall of a dungeon. Honestly, I never fully decided what Otos’ fate would be, but I think Elsa would keep him alive for his potential intelligence value (in other words, in case I decided to write a sequel and needed him to provide some necessary background info). The other issue was that, even though I love the tweest, the revelation of Hildy's father and her grander part in the good and helpful schemes did seem a bit out of the blue. (Not quite deus ex machina though it kind'a is ;)). It was certainly humorous to a degree but perhaps felt like a lot to take in at the very end of the story. Yeah, I probably should have put a bit more of that in earlier parts of the story, rather than back-loading most of it. Hildy’s involvement in her father’s schemes was largely meant as a way to explain some of her suspicious behavior early on (like her armed encounter with Kristoff in the woods). And all of that was mainly because I wanted Hildy to have more of a role in the story than just that of Anna’s BFF. Still, those issues don't make it any less awesome of a story. It's truly fantastic work. Thank you! As a matter of fact, after tweaking some of the speech parameters and removing my standard "TIME TO DELETE THIS LEMON!" reminder at the end of each chapter, this story will have a permanent home on my MP3 player. Thanks a million for your effort and dedication to bring this story to life. I am honored to have my words immortalized on your device, and you’re welcome. P.S. Your extended author's notes (in the review-reply thread) are terrific too. I especially loved the jokes – my favorite being: "Sweet only two more elementals and then they can summon Captain Planet." ThatGuyWithTheFace is no slouch when it comes to bad fire-jokes.

Food-sex is really not my thing, but it just seemed so appropriate for Luan that I was willing to venture outside my comfort zone to write it. Now that part I really enjoyed writing. I thought about Lincoln pretending to be a vampire, or maybe just "playing dead" (hey, maybe rigor mortis DOES give a guy a de facto hardon), but all of that seemed too predictable. Then I thought, "What if underneath it all, Lucy is a romantic?" In the words of Lisa Loud, "Whoops." I've fixed it now. And thanks for another delightful review!

Thank you! More story to come.

You and I would seem to have a very different understanding of what “make love with me” means.

Indeed. “The only way out is through.” --Robert Frost Thanks!

Re: “Mommy’s Home” Thank you! And I appreciate your taking the time to review this story. I have an idea for one, but it needs more thinking through. In the meantime, I’ve got several other stories you might like. Thanks again!

Wow! Thank you! I’ll have to give it a look some time. Oh, yes, I already have a couple more ideas for The Loud House stories. Stay tuned!

Wow; I can’t believe it’s been that long. Thank you! I never seem to be happy with eliciting just one emotion (if horniness is an emotion). Exactly. She’s figuring this stuff out as she goes. It can be fun to think of new ways for Dr. D to screw up. Thanks for the review!

Re: “Eddie Forever” From darkalley_rambler on September 03, 2016 Before I respond to your specific comments, I want to thank you very much for reading and reviewing “Eddie Forever.” I’m very proud of this story, but it hadn’t garnered any reviews before now, so I was delighted to see yours. I especially enjoy writing the perspective chapters. It’s fun to create so many different settings in which stories parallel to those of Eddie and Akranaan could take place. Thank you! Plenty of revelations to come, so I hope you’ll stay tuned!

From ANON - PhineasandFerbfan on August 30, 2016 I'm glad to see you writing more of this story (and I'm just as glad to hear you're considering reading mine as well). Like the last times, I'll start this review by responding to your review reply by saying that you're right about Phineas and Ferb being about eleven - in the episode Phineas and Ferb Quantum Boogaloo I think Linda says at some point that future PnF are thirty years old and they're twenty years into the future, and that episode takes place before Phineas' birthday, so ten or eleven is about right. Of course Act Your Age puts the date of the boys heading off for college about ten years in the future, but that's only the tip of the iceberg of things that are wrong about that particular episode. There's another episode (I forget which one) in which Baljeet says something about applying to college early decision, and Phineas responds with something like, “Baljeet, college is, like, nine years away.” But the creators of the show said that they were being deliberately vague about the characters’ ages, although I'm not sure they gave a reason. I suppose it could expand the show's viewership if more kids thought of Phineas and Ferb as being their own age. Your review replies consistently show a good grasp of characterization, and I certainly hope we'll be seeing more of Phineas' and Candace's thoughts on this later on. Thanks! And yes, the next chapter is going to be very psychological. It's very interesting to explore how characters can want things on some level they don't even know they want, and especially with a young, oblivious character like Phineas who hardly ever expresses views on romance in the show and certainly shows no interest in it, it's a challenge to write him convincingly. And of course Candace is a different story of her own. All in all, I think you're doing well with them. Thank you! Here in the world of dreams, the subconscious mind can have much more influence on the characters’ feelings and actions than it does in waking life. So I’m exploiting the hell out of that. With regards to the actual chapter, it's interesting that Ferb is both more sensual and more invested in the scientific aspects of the ordeal than Phineas. I think that captures both aspects of his character really well, how he's more introverted and analytical but at the same time he displays a greater interest in and knowledge about girls and society as a whole. Thanks! The multiple Ferb/Linda scene was strange, even though of course Ferb would take full advantage of the scenario to multiply himself if that was what Linda wanted, while I liked your emphasis that Ferb was deliberately going out of his comfort zone to talk more in order to make the fantasy work. It's an unusual (although I suppose not uncommon) fantasy and enacting it in a dream-environment with someone(s) she trusts was probably the best circumstances under which it could be realized for her. Exactly! The dream world is the perfect environment for sexual role-play. Baljeet's interim scene was surprising because I don't think we've ever seen him interact with Stacy's mother before. From what we've seen of Dr. Hirano on the show, it appears that she is either a pediatrician or a pediatric surgeon. So it seems likely that she would know a lot of the kids in Danville. Isabella's Fireside Girl scene was great in terms of humor because since Isabella isn't able to live out her fantasies about her crush in this scenario it's natural that she'd be with the Fireside Girls, considering her scouting activities are her other main interest, and thus within the context of the story an orgy almost seems logical, and then you pull the scenario back 'down to earth' as it were by acknowledging that even in dreams, earning a Lesbian Orgy Patch is a step too far into the bizarre for the Fireside Girls. Nicely done. Thank you. Having an actual Fireside Girl orgy seemed predictable, so I thought it would be funny to do something opposite to what the reader might expect. I'm interested to see what Candace's fantasy will be. It probably won't be as extreme as Linda's, although it probably would be something Phineas would never conceive of and which might make him uncomfortable under normal circumstances In a way, it's even more extreme. But the reasons behind it are very different. Stay tuned! - but given that it is a dream and how much he loves his sister, he would most likely go along with it anyway. Phineas is devoted to Candace, which is one of the reasons why I ship them so much. Yes he is. No matter how much she yells at him and tries to bust him, he still loves her unconditionally.

Thank you! In-character dialogue and behavior are a high priority for me. I think you’ll be satisfied with the outcome. The Loud girls certainly will be. Thanks for the comments!

From Fairy-Slayer on August 28, 2016 Chapter five was an interesting bit of roughhousing. To me it didn’t quite reach the level of “rape play” but it’s definitely safer to have the warning when something smells like non-con. Exactly. I’d rather err on the side of caution when it comes to that sort of thing. It was a neat bit of development for Linda to have the truck-stop fantasy in the first place, and so much sweeter that she could play it out with someone as safe and loving as Ferb (and Ferb and Ferb…). Yeah. And I can’t quite see Lawrence quite pulling it off. Good thing it seems to have been as satisfying for her to experience as it was for me to read. Awesome! Dream-space, like story-space, is the perfect place for fantasies—they can play out the way you imagine them, without reality getting in the way. The goopiness and her “bath” aren’t quite my thing but I do understand it; Not quite my thing, either, but it seemed appropriate. plus it was a great opportunity for the loving touch of Ferb gently washing her afterwards – another kind of role-reversal I was happy to see play out. That was Jomahawk’s idea, and I thought it made a good counterpoint to everything that happens before. The cutaways were good: I’m glad Baljeet landed himself a horny doctor in the dream lottery, plus it’s always nice to see him being assertive. Yeah. And shotadom is fun. Isabella’s proclamation was funny and the follow-up by the other girls then herself definitely dissipated any WTFness due to canon. My thought was that even in the dream world, you are still limited by what you and your fellow dreamers actually WANT to dream about. So I thought I’d try to get a little comedy out of that. (Wish I could say the same for one of my more-complex PaF stories…) In your defense, sometimes it’s more fun just to suspend disbelief. I really like the idea of Irving getting some well-earned loving, though I’m a bit sorry we didn’t get to see it. Guess I’ll just have to imagine it for myself… Honestly, I've never really wanted to see Irving get busy with anybody. This is largely because he seems to have only two modes with girls: overconfident schmuck and nervous wreck. (This is why I had P & F decline to invite him to their game in “Truth or Dare 2.0” and invite Django instead.) Thanks. As always, thanks for the review!

I could see that, but I already had plans for Vivian Garcia-Shapiro, so I had to do something else with Isabella. Hey, they call it “getting lucky” for a reason. Thanks for the comments!

Thank you. And thank you for being the first AFF reader to review this story in the 2 years since it was posted! I don't have plans to continue this particular story, but I may write another one in a similar vein one of these days.

Thanks! Nope, definitely not done yet. Candace-fantasy coming soon! (Right after Linda's, that is.)

Thanks! She's conflicted at the very least. We shall see. No spoilers. I'm glad. Thanks for the comment!