BronxWench

If they're relevant, and done well, and advance the reader's understanding of the character and plot, I'd think it's fine.

Kim Possible: The Impossibilities Series

A better place would be here. That is where people can share links to outside sites freely. This thread is for questions directed to the staff, and hopefully, I've answered your question!

Your story was posted in the Anime subdomain, when it belongs in the Gundam, Beyblade, DBZ, FMA subdomain, You can use the jump menus on the author's panel to navigate to the correct subdomain. Stories posted to the wrong subdomain are deleted with no warnings.

I should be glad there was no *sweatdrop*, hmm?

I must whimper and share... The Manga School of Fan Fiction Writing needs to be razed to the ground.

No reviews for either posting, but do we want to merge hits and ratings?

The author was under 18 at the time "Bacca di Sangue" was published on AFF, and it was removed along with all additional content published while the author was still a minor. The author is free to repost it now, however, since she is now over 18.

After checking into this, the deleted stories were published before your 18th birthday. All your pre 18 content was deleted, and that would include reviews associated with those stories.

I like pairings like "thick cock" or "generous cock" rather than having someone actually give me measurements. I'm happier using my imagination as a reader.

One thing you don't say, and it really makes a difference, is whether or not the story is being told in the first person or not. If it's being told in the first person, you do need to make the transition clear, and the asterisks or other subtle marker (please do NOT announce the POV change) is needed. If you're telling the story in third person, consider what we called the "third person omniscient" back in the Jurassic age. It allows the author to reveal the thoughts of all the characters. A good description is this article. A little more in-depth discussion is here. Don't let yourself get discouraged. Point of view is a tricky thing to get right, and the fact that you care enough to worry about getting it right is the hallmark of a writer.

I'll second DrunkenScotsman here. Snogging is a full-body experience for me, both personally and as an author. Jaw-nibbling, ear-nipping, fingers tangling in hair, and so on... It's the opening gambit of foreplay, and really does set the tone for the way the encounter will go.

This is your disclaimer as it currently appears: There are two key elements missing, and I'll fix the disclaimer for you so you can see what they are: Disclaimer: I do not own Peter Pan or any of its characters, and I make no profit from this story. You need to disclaim ownership of the fandom by name. Mentioning JM Barrie is not enough. You also need to state that you make no money or profit from the story. That was missing entirely. You can copy and paste what I have written for you, and we will be able to make the story visible again. Thanks!

This is a fairly handy little guide to outlining a story... Fiction Factor Having linked that, I do outline and then watch my characters ignore my outline and do what they want. That's not necessarily a bad thing, if you can herd them into some semblance of the events you've mapped out. An outline is a guide, not the assembly instructions. For the old story, edit. Harshly. Go through and mark only those sentences that really shine, and scrap everything else. (Back up the story first, of course, in case you have editor's remorse.) Look at what you have left, and build around those gems. Craft a setting for them. It takes patience and a great deal of focus to properly edit. Roughing out a story is easy. Polishing it is hard work, and that's where most people give up. Don't quit.

Honestly, I've come to the conclusion that they are not readers. They cannot possibly be readers, unless one counts graphic novels as a literary achievement. Let me say that I've enjoyed a graphic novel or two in my time, lest I be thought elitist, but one should be able to read something meatier before one decides that one is a writer. The endless author's notes, the announced flashbacks, the incessant shouting out of a point of view change... these read like bad screenplays for an episode of a television show that should never, ever leave the editing booth. Mauling should be mandatory.

A lot of the time, I'll write past the scene and then go back. Once I've written the post-boring scene bit, sometimes something happens that I can use to go back and liven up my boring bit. Then again, like Ayato says, sometimes you need the bit of narrative that feels boring to advance the plot.

From last night's mad sprint to make 30k words: "...sell you dawn the river..." I HATE the ones that slide past spellcheck...

Apparently! I promised I wouldn't let my inner editor loose until I was done with the draft, but I HAD to go back for that one...

From my NaNo: "She marrowed her eyes..."

Oh, I'll have to save a few of my NaNo doozies for here. I've been trying to at least fix the really bad stuff as I go, but yeah... nothing like sprint writing to make for great typos! And by the way, you are rocking NaNo!!! Way to go!!!

You would navigate to the subdomain from the main page before beginning the search. Once in the search window, there is no option to navigate to a different subdomain. As to emailing an author, unless they have made their email public, you are best leaving a review. Many authors elect to receive email notification of reviews, allowing them to see reviews promptly. Even if this is not the case, the author will hopefully encounter the review and still enjoy knowing that their story is appreciated even after some time has passed since they published it.

Government in exile. Drinks are on me.

Now that brings up an interesting little thing I've noticed. I do NOT get bombarded with offers to enhance my breasts, firm my rather callipygian buttocks, smooth my skin, or erase my wrinkles. I'm not at all sure if I should be relieved or insulted. Maybe I just need another drink.