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  1. With every series I read, I know enough not to push, or beg for updates, other's lives aren't mine, while I may have the time to sit and read, they may not have the time to write. Honestly, if you want constant updates, write yourself. It's not our responsibility to constantly update for you, our life happens, and things that are out of everyone's control happen... get over it. My life don't revolve around you, I'm sorry, but, it's a fact, learn to live with it. Begging and pleading for an update isn't going to help the situation at all, while you may think the sun rises and sets in your ass, you're really the only one that thinks that, what's most important to you, isn't the most important to someone else... your life is yours, theirs is theirs. I hope you enjoyed the camping trip Magus, and hopefully they get you all hooked up relatively soon so you can post. Eagerly, but patiently awaiting. BigMan7307
    4 points
  2. Jashley13

    She is the One

    Well, this is gonna be a long one. First of all, to answer a question from before, here is the breakdown of the Sagas: Kayla Saga: Chapters 1-8 Jessica Saga: Chapters 9-15 Tara Saga: Chapters 16-22 Twins Saga: Chapters 23-28 Summer Saga: Chapters 29-present As for the whole emotional aspect of the chapter...well... Okay, I'll be doing this in place of the normal Reality Check, since, aside from some jokes and familiar feelings, actual events in this chapter are not based entirely on real-life. That's part of what made it so difficult to write. Instead, I'll just kinda share with you the process that went into writing this chapter. At first, I had planned to have the threesome be your normal spank-story threesome: girl-on-girl, screaming orgasms, everyone laying in a sweaty, hazy post-orgasmic mess at the end. Almost as soon as I started actually writing the sex itself, everything seemed to change. My original ideas just didn't seem to fit with the characters. That's one thing I've noticed at this point in the story: I can set the scenario but the characters play it out. I've developed them enough to where I'm just chronicling stuff they have already done; they're saying their own dialogue, making their own decisions, and I'm just here to put it down like I'm writing their memoirs. As such, I found that trying to force the 'sexiness' of the threesome onto the characters just didn't make sense. That's not how they would act or behave and despite being 'young' and sex being a 'fun' act, they are people, not constructs. Sex may be 'fun' in a general sense, but so is Disney and I can name you a bunch of my friends who despise Disney. What is fun is not fun for every case. As for the idea that there may be too much in the way of 'emotional suckerpunches'...I agree. There really is. I was saying the exact same thing my sophomore year of high school, when it seemed like it was one blow after another to my self-esteem or my ego or my mentality or my relationships or...whatever. Hell, that was the year I almost committed suicide and had a certain gun not been loaded at the time, I would not be here to tell this story. Trust me, it was a closer call than I care to think about. Now, this is not to belittle opinions that maybe this is getting a little too overloaded with emotional baggage but, trust me, the Saga isn't over yet. All I ask for is patience. If, by the end of the Saga (or even the story itself, though God knows what chapter that will be), you still feel the same way, I won't begrudge you your opinion. But trust me, the way Jack thinks and acts is exactly how I did at his age. If he has a 'mental disorder' then so did I. Actually, I still would, since I still think that way a lot of the time, though I've learned to control it. One of the hardest things for me, as a writer, is realizing that how I think/speak/act/whatever now is not how a teenager does. Sometimes, I'll write an entire passage and then go back and read it and realize, "Wait a minute...this is how a twenty-something-year-old would act, not a teenager." Then I'll go back and redo it. This is not to say I think all teenagers are over-emotional, mopey, woe-is-me types; just, especially in a situation like this, it's hard not to be, though I like to think Jack isn't a woe-is-me type; when I think 'woe-is-me', I think Bella Swan, a character who deals with no actually big emotional torment but treats it as such and makes no effort to right it. That's the distinction for me: woe-is-me means you aren't doing anything to fix it. Hell, even in the context of the story, the threesome wasn't really gonna go off without a hitch; all the emotions and reasoning was transferred over from Christmas and remember how well that went? One doesn't just forget that and decide that they'll make something that was so heavily based off of emotion suddenly a fun romp under the sheets. I realize that this may not sway opinions and I'm fine with that. This is just where I'm coming from when I write. And if you really want some reassurance, the next chapter isn't going to be near as heavy and in a couple chapters, and old familiar face will return. So...there's my tease for the next couple chapters You guys are amazing and I really value your opinions. Believe me, I never take criticism personally; not unless you're calling me a 'niggr' or something like that for no particular reason. I just thought some explanation was in order, especially since there seems to be some sullen feelings coming out of this chapter. I can't promise that happy-go-lucky, relaxing filler chapters are on the horizon, but I do know that there is some sunshine on the horizon for the characters so...again, tease Thank you so much for your continued support and encouragement. I've already started writing Chapter 34 and it's looking to be a lot easier to write. See you guys soon -Joe
    1 point
  3. Guest

    She is the One

    Man I used to love with story but...the last 10 chapters have progressively driven me away from it...Just WAY to much drama every single chapter, and the ranting you have Jack go on every other paragraph is driving me insane...well that is probably because you've turned Jack into someone with some major mental issues that can't function properly whatsoever within his own family. Just reading someone questioning his every decision for an hour at a time has ruined this story... IDK, iv'e tried to force myself to continue to like this story in the previous chapters and was hoping this last two would be decent "relaxing" chapters with major drama for once...but nope, reading about a guy questioning his every decision that he makes 24/7 who is incapable of shutting up or letting people live their lives without his interference in personal matters in maddening. Well fuck i'm actually turning this into a mild flame post... But yea, haven't really even posted on this forum in the last few months but ever since the christmas sega iv'e only been able to force myself to skim the chapters rather then actually read...probably going to take a couple months away from this story and see if it changes any. If it is the same...whoa is me, drama every second...meh can't really see myself continuing to read the story. Side note: Yes, I understand how the threesome can have major consequences, yes it makes perfect sense that it could drive a hole into the threes relationships, no that didn't ruin the story for me necessarily. The chapter wasn't exactly bad, it's just we've read the same chapter essentially in the last 10 chapters, at least that is how it appears to me. Nothing really new comes up from chapter to chapter, yes key points in the story happen, but Jack just repeats the same process on handling the events with the same sequence. Shit is about to happen, Jack goes on a 2-3 page rant on the consequences, shit happens, jack gets depressed, jack tries to fix his or others problems, shit backfires on him, jack goes on another 2-3 page mantra repeat. Really you need a "filler" chapter, that doesn't involve shit hitting the fan, Jack questioning every little thing or simply put more drama. You've made this a drama/relationship fic, which is good, but by god it's 90% drama at this point. Eh now i went on my own little damn rant. But ya, taking a break from your story, felt like telling you about it and why for whatever reason...Loved this story in the beginning, now it just feels repetitive, yes the story is progressing, but it is the same book, just different colors.
    1 point
  4. jelad

    Magusfang's Corner

    Bigman7307 I agree with everthing you said, but you were a little harsh. if you thank about it, that fact that we bug authors for the next chapter is a compliment to their story. Most of us know that Magnus will be back when he can but he did just sort of stopped and dropped of the net without explanation. there is nothing worse then when an author stops a story in the middle.
    1 point
  5. Yes we were. What makes an AFF great, in my opinion, is not just the porn. Making love to the one you love is not porn. Sex is porn. As you read what a character is feeling, their emotions, fears, anxieties, happiness and love, you feel the way they feel, remembering your memories of love long lost...the happiest times of your life. A gifted author can evoke those memories and feelings. You are doing so fine a job, that everyone is patiently awaiting the next chapter, I would rather wait for a great chapter than quick, crappy ones. Well done, Edward_or_Ford. Well done.
    1 point
  6. You got it in one Lisa! And yes I am that old. I think I watched that movie a few hundred times when I was ten. Still love me some curly blonde hair.
    1 point
  7. Seriously if people want to gripe about how quickly a FREE story gets updated maybe he should make you wait longer. Talk about ungrateful. Have fun with your girls Magus you deserve a break.
    1 point
  8. magusfang

    Magusfang's Corner

    Ok first let me apologize for the silence, the cable company finally got tired of my whining and decided to lay a new line out to me, I live just outside of town, almost a mile actually, and it is taking forever to get to me. I got sick of my internet going out whenever the wind blew a little and talked with everyone who lived on my road and found out I wasn't alone. So I wrote a letter and had everyone sign it, yep I'm a pain when I wanna be So good news is they are laying fiber optic out to us bad news is it's taking a while Tried dial up but I have wireless home phone and you need an actual line evidently. So, as to my overly long silence, been camping since last Friday, with about a dozen of the girls friends, god help me , and there's no signal at the camp ground (I snuck away to use a real bathroom ) but I'll be back Monday and the good news is I have two chapters done and most of a third Well again sorry about the prolonged silence and I'll have lots for you to read when I'm finally up and running again. Oh, just so you know, the surgery aaas a complete success and I'm feeling better than I have in years - making the wifey a little nervous too; I think she's afraid I'll go back into the field gonna milk that a bit, but I think I'm truly retired....don't tell her though
    1 point
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