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The 5th and final chapter of Delta Delta Delta is posted! It's the final night of Pledge Week, and the nine remaining pledges are faced with one last big, sexy challenge. And how will Lindsey handle it when Pledge Mistress Gina makes good on her promise to put her and Nikki together for an intimate video? I can't tell you how happy I am to have finally brought this story to its conclusion. As I may have mentioned before, I posted the first chapter of Delta Delta Delta on Hentai Foundry back in 2013, and I actually started writing it well before then. In fact, when I started it, it was purely for my own entertainment, before it ever occurred to me to post it where other people could read it. In other news, the draft of chapter 1 of Keene's College Weekend is nearly complete and will probably head off to beta tomorrow. After that, I'm going to try to focus on finishing chapter 5 of Wishful.

I think the reason the The Woman in the Statue is so good is very much since @InBrightestDay is always looking for deeper reasons for everything that happens in a story. From another point view it seems to me like your writing builds a lot on style...cool events will make a story even if you have not bothered to deeply analyze the reasons why the cool event would happen in the first place. Thing to remember are that there loads of authors out there who don’t manage to do neither cool scenes or deeper plot despite them trying.

@InBrightestDay is doing a good job of retroactively polishing my story.

Lucky you that actually get review notifications. Myself I have seen forum notifications to my gmail account but never any review notification at all. It was a very good conversation in the stairwell...but still not quite the same as soul searching talk with the main characters in the previous chapters. No worries there…I was kind of assuming they were driving a military vehicle and not just some random SUV, A future version of a gatling gun when they wanted to step out of the vehicle would also have been quite effective. Maybe those kind of weapons are banned in the future. If you google gatling gun one of first hits if it legal own such weapon...insane if you ask me. I am too lazy to do the numbers...but if we assume the height of the LTV is limited compared to how close they parked the LTV to hostiles shooting at them the base of the triangle should be huge since they hit the upper body on a shot that was mostly horizontal. Of course nothing wrong with them using the LTV to park very close...but then Gibbs shot become less impressive if it was just a point blank shot. The shot hitting the lower part of the wall behind the shooter would be cool and keep Gibbs shot as more fantastical. I saw your talk with JD about it and my comment is that by now it is starting to become habit that you explain what JD should have meant with his scenes. The more sinister author would have had Luzurial sacrificing the captured since she has learned she sometimes must make hard choices….but that is not kind of story you are telling. Reminds me of a LARP scenario when a friend was “this plot will make the players have to make a choice between killing an innocent elf and making progress in the fighting the big bad”...the veteran players was like “oh...we have already done this mistakes and it cost us a quarter ofthe world’s elven population…off with her head”. Took the friend that had written the plot very by surprise. Glad I could help. I loved that movie when I was kid.