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A review on “Closing Time” by @InBrightestDay I certainly had fun with it, and developing the backstory in my mind. I had actually thought about having the fight done in the Halloween short before settling on the fantasy stuff that I did. I’m glad you found it kind of funny, cause reading it again I find it a bit awkward. I really was struggling with that part to put it out without sounding overly clumsy. At least there’s some humour for it. Yep, typo. Supposed to be left leg. It feels like it fits the characters, and I just enjoy the wordplay. Heh. I did enjoy that line. I couldn’t not put it in once I thought of it. I'm assuming you meant screaming. Well since the whole story was centred around this one night stand, I couldn’t help but just have that attraction and sexual tension start as soon as Lili walked in through the door. Then I started thinking about how to not just make it sexy, but kind of relatable for something that really is bordering on the edge of fantasy (Full on fantasy to me cause I know the backstory). So a couple little moments here and there I felt would help that. And since you liked it, I think it worked. And yes. Yes I meant screaming, lol. The bit at the end I meant to hint at a lonely life Lili has been living. And the drooling well… I included that cause too often media shows sleeping women as these perfect little creatures of beauty. I thought a nice little drool bit might really bring it down to reality. Glad you enjoyed! And thank you for reading and commenting!

Let’s hope there are more reviews eventually, the story deserves it. She could play the “do this small thing for me and I will not mess with this mortal”-gambit. There is also the “you care about this character, if you don’t do this little small thing for me I will temporary release this fallen soul to cause them misery”-gambit. You must not make too easy for Jude... Give me a half year or so…WtMC has only about 6 pages done while next chapter of CENtD are mostly done but have a few scenes that refuse to play along so it will take a lot time before they go online. In the mean time...if you got time to spare I do have story posted with the name Anor Don Masin: Tales of Deception. It just like 10k words and considering what kind of story codes you put on your stories it would be interesting to hear what you think about this PWP story. I hope it will be something interesting. Not everything you do is of my liking, but those things that I do like I enjoy very much.

I agree about the odds of getting reviews from regular visitors, but I think the probabilities for getting reviews from other authors are better and these are more inclined to go investigate an authors profile than regular readers. Afterall I four months back had not visited AFF like in a decade and now I think I have checked quite a few of your fics….I did not scroll through pages from the front screen to find them. I would say that trying to reform a demon is a pretty sure way to make sure he is in for some shit. It seem plausible that that he might succeed eventually, but you have a enormous opportunity for coming up with stories when he alternate between failing and failing hard. The trouble is really that I have all these ideas for good scenes, but times fly by with me unable to get time to do proper writing. Sounds like great fun.

Re: “Darla’s Dad” From Josgonzalez189 on April 05, 2019 Thanks! And thanks for leaving a comment on this fic, which many have read but few have dared review.