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Couldn’t sleep. But the fun thing about insomnia is everything seems 150% funnier and gooder (that’s a word now. I just decided). I just started a scene and laughed uproariously at a stupid little porny rhyme I wrote in it and I just KNOW I’m going to think it’s totally juvenile and unusable in the morning. Morning Chloe’s such a goddamn stick in the mud.

I think he’s going to go with a good amount of lubrication at the back and the front, worked in nice and deep for a while. And all over the two of them before they start. Never too much for this. Um… I seem to have made Clegane quite… well, kind of well proportioned too. *coughs, and gives Brienne an apologetic look* She’ll be all right. I do have some power here. Although I have to admit I should probably have seen this coming right at the beginning. I didn’t, because I was too busy trying to solve the will they/won’t they slash issue that came up. By the time I’d done that, Tormund had already got it as a little ambition. And by ‘little ambition’ I do of course mean life goal. They’re all going to die. He wants this first, like the last meal of the condemned or something. I’ll make him pay later. When they’re all in Tarth and he’s having to wander around half naked, and he can’t sleep at night because it’s too hot. She can laugh at him then. I really think he’ll hate it. The chances of these three being able to settle anywhere except the north are zero.

A good amount of lube is never a bad idea with going around the back, and if Tormund from the TV show is built on the scale of Tormund Giantsbane from the books it’s gonna be necessary!

Admittedly, even a critical (honest/balanced) review can leave me stinging a while. It’s kinda like getting dental work, I know it’s good for me, but it hurts to receive it. But this one wasn’t even that, so for you Clover …

Yeah, usually bad reviews leave me stinging for a good week. This one, I was upset for an evening, and even then, being overtired and having had a shitty day probably contributed to it. Especially when they sign it “none of your business”, it’s so obviously someone just trying to ruin someone’s day.

Another one too scared to finished… guess that’s a sign of a good halloween story! Thank you for reviewing what you did read, and yes, I did go in deeper than I had ever before with story tags.

Reviews like that are singularly unhelpful, and in my opinion, speak more about the reviewer than the story. When I see an inarticulate grumble like that, it makes me want to read the story, since I can be sure it contains words of more than one syllable, interesting characterizations, and some plot rather than the usual run-of-the-mill PWP wankfest.

That review seems weird and confusing….

Well, I’m about ready to start. I don’t think I’ve written this before… it hardly matters even if I have, since I’m doing it with vastly different characters. If I had, it would have involved Nimbrethil, and she was dominant, but she definitely wasn’t a Brienne. Not at all. So... I’ve done the usual oodles of research and stuff, so there’s a lot going through my mind as I attempt this, but if anyone has any tips at all on writing a good double penetration scene, here would be a good place to post them. The biggest challenge, despite the mechanics, the preparation, etc is keeping these three in character throughout. I don’t see the opportunity for all that much dialogue, which is a bit of a bind. I mean, they’ll speak, obviously, but they’re clearly not going to be talking about anything or asking each other the time of day. Dialogue is usually the easiest way to establish character, which pretty much just leaves action, which is already a really busy area, description wise. Still, it should be quite easy to get Clegane in character there, since Brienne will be looking at him through most of it. Rather more difficult for Tormund. But then I suppose he could have more dialogue, as the instigator of this. You’d think Brienne would be easy, as the pov character, but I don’t think that’s going to be the case. This is going to be overwhelming for her, and having her in character in her thoughts isn’t enough anyway. She needs to display it outwardly. Mind you, if ever there was a character likely to ask the time of day under these particular circumstances, it’d probably be her. Actually, I can hear her doing it… But, yes… I’d be really grateful for any suggestions, hints, tips, etc. you guys have.

Thank you! I do have fun with the old stories, and the legends which always seem to me to have a basis in truth. It’s funny, but I think, with all our modern sensibilities, when we come face to face with the other side, we all turn a bit craven. We’re no longer accustomed to dealing with it. It doesn’t mean it’s not there, though. And having heard the family Bain Sidhe once in my life, I think it would be a fitting punishment for Connor were she to visit him on behalf of those he’s led to their doom, one way or another, because no one ever returns from the barrows…

If it seems like I’ve been really quiet lately, it’s because I’m doing NaNoWriMo. Because reasons, I wasn’t able to write much of anything during the first 5 days of November, and I’m still trying to catch up. Luckily, my wife has all our cats to keep her company. :\

As I understand it, the new tools make it more painless. That same tooth, busted it a few years earlier too, so it’s got a “temporary” dental cap on it… and that “temporary” cap has turned thirty, older than a number of my coworkers, makes me feel ancient.

I don’t mind the handholding readers through the worst of it. (Tags tend to be blunt instruments, no distinction between a few snow flakes and a blizzard, but that’s a digression for another day.) Also, I tend to write minor2’s as young adults. And I love to mess up my characters [as an example from Dale’s Game, Dorcia’s family tree has some ingrowth to it.] In this universe, priests do tend to be pedophiles, so I’ll let you work that out with the Reverend, but he also does believe at least some of what he’s saying, or at least in what he’s trying to achieve in the long run, ignoring his fetish for Altar boys. I do have plans to explore some of this in Dolbourne Chronicles, which I’ll get back to after I finish “the repair guy” … it’s a convoluted journey, and I enjoy writing these oneshots to focus on a narrow bit of plot/character development. Thanks for the feedback, and I’ll let you have fun with the mortuary attendants..

Well, I went back, and it seems I wasn’t that far off the end, after all. And you were right, I ducked out at the worst bit, just as it was about to be over, lol. So all in all, good. I can’t decide whether the actual adults in this world (I know this is Minor2, and really your characters are old enough for me to think of them as young adults, but for the sake of argument, I’m on about the old people) are just as fucked up and believe all this stuff, or if they’re kind of sinister. I’m going with sinister. Oh, and I still think that campsite had a lot to do with it. Take one mentally unstable young man, add a dash of terror (because that kind of place does bring terror, whether you’d be up for admitting to it or not), and this could easily be the result. No one likes to hang around dead people except for slightly creepy mortuary attendants…

I still remember the drill tingling on my nerve, the dentist doing the filing, for the root canal, twenty five years ago, and that was before the drugs wore off; which really made me a miserable teenager.

The scat part’s pretty short, once you’re past that, it gets… well, not spoiling it for others. (I didn’t really feel like marking up with signs “scat start here!” and “scat ends here!”.) I do intend to bring that particular character back in the future, so this story was character development, to a degree.

LOL I was gonna say the same thing earlier about good critical reviews. But I was scared that would discourge people from reviewing kuz they didn’t wanna hurt me lol. But you put it well. I know they’re good for me and I want them, even if they sting. Seriously though, fuck dental work.

Ahhh… unfortunately not… and I think you’d be taking your life into your hands if you turned up in their universe and interrupted them right now, lol. The only reason I get away with it is because they have no idea whatsoever that I’m there… *g*

*nods* Yes, I’m envisaging it that way around. Mostly because that way Clegane gets to have those favourite things of his well within reach. He’d like it best there. Edge of the bed might be best, so Tormund can have a foot on the floor, perhaps. It gives him more control if he’s going to be directing a lot of this. I haven’t been specific, but Clegane hasn’t done this before to my mind, so hopefully we can get to see him experiencing feeling Tormund moving alongside him, through Brienne’s eyes. As for the movement, I think they’d really have to alternate at first anyway, just to ease her in or it’d be a bad experience for her. So it’ll be quite slow to start. Tormund’s got some lengthy kind of prep planned, but even with that, it’s going to be a lot for her to take. There’s a lot of pressure involved on entry, that’s the danger point, making sure she stays nice and relaxed for the beginning, because that’s where it can really hurt if you’re not careful. After that, it should become a lot easier. Luckily, I think she’s at ease enough with them both now, and Tormund is quite good at getting her to accept things. Plus he seems to undersand pacing quite well. He’ll also make sure she’s communicating at all times. Well, until she gets to the point of being completely non-verbal, lol. I don’t think she’s got any idea at all how much she’s going to like this. They keep having surprises lined up for her, don’t they? Bronx, this is so helpful, everything you’ve said – thank you!