Guest Chester57 Posted February 13, 2015 Report Share Posted February 13, 2015 Good news! There will be a Valentine's Day gift for you all Well, good on you, Joe! Gives me something to read after work tomorrow. I've been re-reading the first eight chapters (up to the Homecoming fight) and have a question-- did you ever mention Mr. Hannigan's first nane? Maybe I just missed it, but he always seems to be "Kayla's dad" or "Mr. Hannigan." Yeah, I know-- nit-picking. Thanks in advance for Ch. 25! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
YNP_Refugee Posted February 13, 2015 Report Share Posted February 13, 2015 Well, good on you, Joe! Gives me something to read after work tomorrow. I've been re-reading the first eight chapters (up to the Homecoming fight) and have a question-- did you ever mention Mr. Hannigan's first nane? Maybe I just missed it, but he always seems to be "Kayla's dad" or "Mr. Hannigan." Yeah, I know-- nit-picking. Thanks in advance for Ch. 25! Nit picking is ok, He may give us a name because you did. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 13, 2015 Report Share Posted February 13, 2015 So Joe, is there a chance that one or both of the twins will end up running away? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 If the intent was to both sympathize and hate the parents for what they did, you did good, Joe. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest my view Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 The twins may have the same fate as romeo and juliet,parents forcing them appart ,struggling to stay together and ultimately double suicide . Don't you just hate teenage feelings? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Mike Litoris Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 The twins may have the same fate as romeo and juliet,parents forcing them appart ,struggling to stay together and ultimately double suicide . Don't you just hate teenage feelings? I don't think anyone could handle the twins committing a double suicide. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Ray Peest Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 I don't think anyone could handle the twins committing a double suicide. It would make a hell of a story and possible a boss-ass movie... I wish this was a movie or a TV series instead of garbage called 50 shades of a colour that turns out to be a surname. (Don't hate please) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Lucas1 Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 Good stuff Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest AyeAyeRonald Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 So, I'm going to nit-pick as well. I've read over the first 10 chapters or so, and I don't recall a name for Mr. Hannigan, either. Also, this is going to sound petty, but what kind of car did you envision Jack driving? When I read your stories, I tend to develop a mental "movie," if you will, in my head as I'm reading, and driving "scenes" are always very difficult for me to visualize, mainly because we don't know anything, other than the fact that its a red four door. Again, I may have accidentally skipped over it when re-reading the first 10 chapters or so, and if I did I apologize. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jashley13 Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 Happy Valentine's Day everyone! <3 As promised, Chapter 25 is finally up Now, just to warn you, it's a long one. Like, a really long one. As in, this may actually be longer than Chapter 15 (the one with the fight with Brad). I'm stunned that it came out that long; it honestly didn't feel like it was that long when I was writing it and, hopefully, it doesn't feel that long when you read it I'm aware I missed the Reality Check for the last part. I will put that one in with the Reality Check for this one. I hope you all have a wonderful Valentine's Day with someone special to you Hope you enjoy this chapter and see you in Chapter 26! COJimmyV 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 So, when do you think that chapter 26 will be out? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 This, for valentine's day, is really depressing. Hopefully the next chapter fixes that mood. Or at least leads to a situation where this mess between all three children ends up fixed. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 Please, please cook up something where Amanda realizes that she really loved Alan and where Alan pulls his head out of his ass. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 If I had to guess what may happen next, I would say that Amanda would be the one who would run away. Especially since Alan seems like he'll start to be a dick towards her soon. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Apple Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 Yolo Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 So, hope the parents will be happy with getting what they wanted- the twins breaking up. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Bill Posted February 14, 2015 Report Share Posted February 14, 2015 I agree with the other person. No one would survive the twin's suicide. It would destroy just about everyone. As for running away, I could see Amanda doing just that. Jashley hinted at it in this story and that is just his style. It would be plausable if Tara's familyl had moved into the area when Amanda decides to leave. I understand why Jack told Kayla about Amanda kissing him. Open Communication. I think he goes into more detail with Kayla about Amanda's state of mental health as he explains it. Kayla will understand on those grounds and tell Jack that both he and Kayla need to try and help Amanda work through her issues. Great story. And to the person already asking for the date of the next chapter. Relax. Relax and let Jashley enjoy the feeling of accomplishment for giving us another great chapter. You'll just have to do like the rest of the devoted followers. Check back every day for updates. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest No_one Posted February 15, 2015 Report Share Posted February 15, 2015 Holy shit Amanda is getting on my nerves Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest No_one Posted February 15, 2015 Report Share Posted February 15, 2015 Holy shit Amanda is getting on my nerves Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 15, 2015 Report Share Posted February 15, 2015 Amanda is getting tiresome, but hopefully, next chapter, something gives. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Mike Litoris Posted February 15, 2015 Report Share Posted February 15, 2015 The thing I'm worried about is whether Jack is going to tell Kayla about EVERYTHING Amanda did to him in the past. I mean, if Jack does spill the beans about Amanda tying him up and blowing him, I'm fairly sure there is a 1% chance of Kayla and Amanda being friends again, with some generous rounding. It seems that Alan has already figured it out when Amanda mentioned the handcuffs, so it seems like Kayla would probably find out eventually. And then we have the whole "keeping secrets" dilemma again. Either way, everyone is going to get screwed over, to an extent. I guess it's up to Joe to decide where this shit is going. Anyway, excellent Chapter. Liked the insight into what Craig was thinking. I was feeling pretty left in the dark on that front in these last few Chapters, so I'm glad that's somewhat cleared up. Looking forward to #26. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 15, 2015 Report Share Posted February 15, 2015 It's everyone's fault that the situation has gotten to this point. The parents with their well intentions. Amanda for not knowing what she really wants and throwing away a relationship where she had someone who loved her the way she wanted to be loved. Alan, well, will probably end up doing something that will either make her either: a. run away. b. start cutting. or c. do drugs (probably prescription). Why do I say what Amanda may do what I said: well, her mental state is pretty much shot right now, and Alan is so angry that he'll end up saying or doing something that could drive her over the edge. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Broken Soul Posted February 15, 2015 Report Share Posted February 15, 2015 Well... Amandas mental state is pretty much the same as mine except from ruining a relationship thats the only difference Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Dark Posted February 15, 2015 Report Share Posted February 15, 2015 This latest chapter seems like chapter 19, I think. I hope that things will start to get better next chapter, but that will probably happen the chapter after at least. Hope Almanda (Alan and Amanda) fix the issues they have. As for the parents, well, they got what they wanted: the twins broken up. I hope that they regret what they did. As for what Amanda did to Jack, well, that had to come out at some point. Considering that the twins are based off a related couple Joe knows and how it seems that they are ok, maybe the twins will end up together and stronger for it, like Jack and Kayla after the "Tara Incident" and Walburn's shooting, all in the same day. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Chester57 Posted February 15, 2015 Report Share Posted February 15, 2015 For some reason the chapter didn't seem as long as promised, but admittedly I did skim through the sex part to get back to the story. The scene with Craig was good and hopefully Jack will get inside Becca's head as well. Chester Hannigan, huh? Inspired, Joe-- truly inspired! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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