Thundercloud

The actual concept that anybody think they can purchase an archive hosting fanfiction is rather weird. I mean...they could begin to read the sites disclaimer about not accepting fanfics written for money before they consider to waste everyone's time by posting questions about purchasing the fanfic-archive.

On the other hand you on the first page wrote Originals > Fucking Halloween Party Dragon Prints : 1267 Since Reviewed! (That you reviewer!) Current number of dragon prints is 2463...

I agree with JayDee...WIP signals a story where the author is revising the posted chapters. I suppose it could also be used by an author that is looking for input how the story should develop...but I really doubt such prompt would work. Getting feedback from users is not very simple in the first place and putting a WIP tag on the story can hardly make it more easy.

Thank you encouragement. I am planning to eventually write the next chapter, but other stories have been stealing the attention of muses.

I am just a user here, but my professional opinion is that if you are paying customer, you have good reasons to demand the site to be really secure before you enter sensitive information. For services that is offered for free on the Internet, you should not enter sensitive information at all. This lowers the impact of AFF not being secure since the consequences of failure is less. With this said is is also my recommendation that the AFF staff plan make a plan for eventually making AFF more secure since there is constant arms race between the browser developers and the bad guys. Things that work today in the browser can be turned off permanently if the security professional determine that it used by too much malware. For instance, you can look at the list https://www.chromestatus.com/features#security where they are considering 57 security issues for Chrome, many of those will break older sites that not keeping up with security development. No reason for any of the current proposals to break AFF, but new additions happen on the list constantly. It is a bit like owning a car...most of the time it just works, but eventually you need to do emergency repair if you avoid doing regular maintenance.

Since I wanted to check it out to see what you write...did not understand why you didn’t write the penname. I suppose you meant it to be fantasyking9000 and not fantsyking9000. A bummer to get the wrong spelling for the pen name.

What is your username on Hentai Foundary?

Your reaction when you recalled Avalanche’s real name was pretty much priceless. I think one of the things that worked in my favor is that the you read the other story pretty recently and there is nothing that in that story that really show that it takes place in 1999. The G.S.P. story is bound to happens before 9/11 since else that event would been a natural comparison to the challenges of New York in the G.S.P. story. This makes the 20 year time jump to this story very subtle. I suspect Anya might have reason to be a bit upset when she realize how easily professor Stevens could have helped her after the first encounter. Like professor Stevens said she has quit being a superhero. Considering how muchthe heroes sleep around it won’t be an issue...he will probably want to join when he learns about Anya. On the other hand the possible G.S.P. sequel that I consider writing might include the professor needing to find her husband that gone missing for longer than usual. Now when she has a baby sitter it might be time to design a new costume so to stay. Thanks for reviewing this and additional thanks for the proofreading effort.

I think it is kind of logical that settings with lots of mindcontrol will have the practitioners that start policing rough users that draw too much attention. Combine this with how often superheroes in the comics are mindcontroled and I think those heroes who not have mindcontrol powers have good reasons to make sure the public knows about the dangers of mindcontrol. The step to making heroes who deal with mindcontrol government funded is not very long. My G.S.P. story that is set in the same setting explores the implications of evil and good (read shady) mindcontrol to quite some detail. Yep, he deserved what he got...especially after doing so bad research before picking his intended victim. To be fair, she had crush on the professor even before she ran into this mess.

Thank you! The proper response in Swedish here would be “God fortsättning” when you want wish the Christmas and New Year mood to continue. If I had you worried I am glad...I had to do a number of rewrites before I got foreshadowing working but still subtle enough. I think that it is part of the job description when dealing with mind control in porn stories. Originally I thought it would end with Greg coming in a disturbing things when they were spooning, but when I tried to write it I could find to good reason why the professor would unleash hell on him when he disturbed them like this. The new ending also had the great benefit of allowing me to include the second sex scene to give better context on what kind of creep Greg was. I had a friend who complained that in my stories you could tell who the superheroes was because they were hung like horses...it felt a bit unfair until I checked the record. There must a super power to avoid such...as for true pain...lego pieces is nothing compared to stepping on a D4 dice. Yep she could...but unfortunately for her, it is a different setting.

Review by GeorgeGlass Thank you for the review. It seems like story worked like I had hoped it.

Hope you will manage to get story done when the muses align for you. Maybe there is plot piece missing that you need to add to make it work. The stories with the gang IMHO works best when you combine their personalities and anxieties with them doing important stuff. The detail with the magically warded windows sound like a perfect reason for Lupa to make an extra effort for it to work. Quite some time until The Woman in the Statue will happen….or are the timelines not synchronized? That is the thing with smut...you can almost always find ways to improve the scene later. I think the level you chose for this story was just about right considering their Ocarina plans. Your You! story is already on my planned reading list after halloween...but now I have even more reason to read it. Thanks for heads up about how the story connect. Sounds like a good idea for a story.

For the record the ikea-style sex thing I wrote was meant as a joke...maybe we should give InvidiaRed the forum thread back and go and do our sex scene comparison stuff somewhere else…

Is this some kind of reverse psychology when you are teasing the swede about having written ikea-style sex? I think you would be more than able to crack good jokes about vampiric gynoids and similar. I am pretty sure that we in JayDee’s catalog of stories will find much similar things than what can be found Thunderclouds. As for doing collaborations...I am generally open for such, but right at the moment I have pretty much going on so I might need to think twice if need to happen in soon-ish.

Seems there is lot more to the fog in your other stories than what was presented in the Holiday fic. I assumed it was something like that but could not really know. Thanks for explanation. Quite possible...I think there is a potential there for it to turn out rather funny without but you version worked good also. I can totally understand going for the no sex variant given limited time. It is not like you have been idle besides writing story. If you change your mind in the future you can always revisit the concept if you feel like it.

Lots of time left until the New Year...maybe a parody flashfic based on things/bugs happening in Cyberpunk 2077?

Great that you could remove it. I posted my own chapter as a new entry when I did not find any mechanism to reuse the one you had posted.

I have now posted my story The Danger of Dicpics.

Yay...I send you a PM

I also thought that it was not that confusing. Just some minor edits and I would been totally stand alone...but JayDee wrote in those dark times when he didn’t know you could edit contributions to collections of stories. Speaking about something else...I do have an entry in progress for this year that will finish on time. If somebody would be around for exchange of beta services it might turn into an even better. Anyone that feel up for it?

I have two scenes left to write for my entry...sounds possible to finish unless other life stuff intervene.

I am quite close to the “still standing”-state before Christmas...but I do have a idea for a story that happens on the last before Christmas that might qualify. Not sure how realistic it is to get it done on time.

I am glad you enjoyed it. Your input will make wonders for the work morale when I work with revising the chapter named The Great Council. The answer is perhaps depressing...but all Helian’s victims suffer a change of perception to make it easier to keep them spellbound. Or turned into a frog herself… Evil conquest by mindless slaves is so totally overrated….the danger of Azbezil coming from people like Radjini doing his evil deeds is much more fun. As for the monsters they will return in a later chapter that is currently not revised. I would not surprise me if the dirty bastard has done the dirty with elves too, but no he does thus not realize they are half elven but is busy thinking about fairies. Actually it is not big sword but a more obscured weapon called a War Mattock….but I realize I sometime during the way managed to kill the final character of the weapon name. Anyway it is two handed axe often used in as a dwarven weapon in many settings, like a pickaxe but with heavier weight to chop things off. Far to heavy to be used as weapon in the real world, but useful here to show off her potential...at least if the reader recognize the weapon (and I don’t misspell the name): I suspect you are right about InBrightestDay...if he reads the story I think he will finding quite a lot to like about Kapri and her future plot lines. Quite understandable why his siblings thinks he is not their favorite brother. I suspect there is quite a story there between Nanac and Harper...but I never got around to write down the details. Basically they are both speedcasting but Helian have longer lasting spells. Also showing Larion’s spell having quite a big potential is good to build up for the ending of the chapter. Quite some time...can’t say more without spoiling things. Thanks forthe input, I will look into it when I get time. I had loads of fun to writing this sequence….they should indeed have listened to Kapri. He is maybe suffering a bit of Worf-syndrome in this part of the story. One more fight when he did not get to employ his magic, but in a about two chapters he will appear in a situation when he get chance to use his magic. Remember that in a previous chapter had a certain person on the Inn boosting about having fought a number of Paladins and priests. This is parallel scene I thought about in my previous forum post. Being able to view the fate of Azbezil and keep working for him require a special kind of devotion, but as for villains in this story I suppose he is not the most evil one.

I look forward to hearing you input, so please you time and chose an occasion when you are feeling up for fantasy. The vampires in Blade use sunscrean...not sure that what I am trying to prove by that observation. Trying to avoid to make a Twilight reference maybe. I was actually thinking more about tricks like when she summons mist...but the hot shots scene is also a funny solution. I am sure that is why Azbezil went for the Hydra solution instead of putting chickens there.

Sorry to hear that, hopefully you will back on track soon. Fun thought...but no the dwarves are very rare. The common knowledge is that dwarves are extinct except very small clusters of survivors that is dwindling in numbers due to low numbers. Eventually the main group of dwarves are set to return...but that is another story than the current one. It is mostly Cymari being very cocky about her bow ability. Outperforming elven rangers can do such things to people...the Hydra was placed by Azbezil to prevent people finding out about the prophecy. Yep, there is some serious ground to cover before all parts of the prophecy had been completed. In this revised version I actually added a few details to the prophecy hat was not included in the original version of the story. Hindsight make it much more easy to fitthe prophecy with the upcoming chapters. The best kind of jump scare when you don’t expect it coming. You can imagine my grin when you made the comment on the forum... I thought it nice to have this scene so that the readers get a reference when they see Madel using his sword later in the chapter. I was looking forward to hear your thoughts about it, it is clearly a JayDee compatible scene. The king’s seer will not make a appearance until the next chapter. As for the question I can see where you are coming from with your guess about her as vampire, but she is in fact a minor demon. You know vampires being nocturnal and so on. His spells protect him, but not his gear since his magic is mentalism based. I am actually quite fond of the Helian...not her fault that ended up like the she did with far too much of the-end-justify-the-means for her own good. My favorite part is when they scream for shields instead of doing another suicide charge and she just observe they have put the whole camp within range of her longbow and she continues to slaughter them. Eventually she would have had to become creative when she ran out of arrows, but is what you have siblings for.