First, a thank you to Savvat for suggesting diarrhea for a bad date. Second, an admonishment to Google for pushing cures when I was looking for triggers, though I do suspect “how do I cause diarrhea” is a less frequent query. And, I’m glad I had the database, because as I was listing oysters as a favorite for Dale, I noticed that I had previously listed an allergy, so I knew I hit dynamite
I was nearly dying while writing the date scene, because I couldn’t discuss it in the chatbox, spoilers and all. It was fun to write, and challenging in that it couldn’t be deliberate on Dale’s part, I wanted him to be trying to do it right. Maybe I should write in more bad dates to my stories….
Hadn’t considered Mario’s orientation, I was using him as a bully (like Morton/Lane, or Kex) to help the shower scene. After all, locker rooms are specifically designed to help us get in touch with our sexuality, right?
Anyways, thank you for the reviews, they’re gold to the aspiring author!
- DP