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Still be nice about it I get so little feedback that I’m not sure if my writing’s really any good or not. What @CL Mustafic did ages ago, helped, in a review, she offered to read over and provide criticisms to my stories (until she got too busy to do it) – so that’s another way you can give help if you like the story enough, but the grammar/flow/etc is getting in the way.

I’ve been waffling on going Amazon myself, though I’d view it like buying a lottery ticket, it’d have a chance, but more likely flop.

I think “biopsy” needs some tags here: [BDSM] [Torture] [Violence] [Gore] [MCD/MiCD] & [Nec] (where that second to the last one depends on the ego of the doctor) Without the internet, I likely wouldn’t be an author as I wouldn’t have discovered fanfic nor would I desired to continue a particular story, and so forth, leading to today where I’ve got (some) confidence because I’ve posted and gotten feedback. Some criticism is definitely *good*, obviously, don’t bludgeon the writer to death with it. If you find a story you otherwise like (premise, setting, etc) and something gets in the way, the author would certainly like to know why. Perhaps it’s fixable (spelling, grammar, some details/construct) or not (ie, premise), but the author can sort that out. Editing, I’ve found, is double edged, you can do a bit to improve, or overdo it and ruin the underlying story; even a rotten editor can certainly get you to butcher an otherwise good story if you’re not careful. I’ve started to relax a bit on the amount of proofreading/editing I’ll do for posting on AFF, figuring that I’d do it more seriously if I publish – the Repair Guy was an experiment there, doing one pass and trying to keep myself to one pass of reading it over, and overall, I’m happy with how the story turned out. Now Jefferey, which I started to “revise/edit” as a means to get myself back into it so I could continue the story, ended up adding 11 new episodes to the story (so far) that weren’t there in the original draft.

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Biopsy doesn’t sound fun, kinda like they biopsied the patient and left a toe in change.

I wasn’t that delusional in the beginning, still not. I know writing/english/literature weren’t my best subjects in school, typicallythe worst. It took an anonymous pen name before I had the courage to even post that first one.

There was a profound difference between fanfic #1 and fanfic #2, and I think the writing’s gotten generally better since then (even if there’s been a detour or two through terrible ideas).

There’s nuances when translating, and while Google can get close enough to make sense, it’s way better if the author’s fluent in both languages to simply provide both, since they know their intent better than anybody else (or at least, should know it better).

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I might suggest an (*) somewhere and state what the English equivalent is, or “Latin (English)”, especially where it’s not guessable.

We’ve got other forum threads on “is it rape” and when to tag. I absolutely agree that nobody shouldn’t come across it without a warning, but sensitivity does vary from reader to reader, which is why I try to provide more information with that tag, as a reader may or may not be able to handle a character merely stating “He raped me X years ago” vs a rape scene. Ditto for abortion, making the distinction between on-screen and off-screen, but still listing it. Intensity of the tag matters too, a single short scene with the tagged content, as an aside to the plot vs it being the center of the plot; both get listed, just a distinction made so the reader can decide, “do I proceed?” Most of the time, they do.

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A review, a review, I feel like dancing! Readers do have imaginations, so I don’t mind leveraging that a bit… and once the essentials of the scene are established, action and dialogue are more needed. I’ve actually been adding the thoughts and feelings to Jeff, because I didn’t have them in there on the first pass. I used to write this stuff trying to stay completely detached, but then discovered that I do like adding a bit of insight, though not too much as I still prefer to show, not state. I used the term “free range kids” which is essentially what the adults are doing here, so yeah, he gets to explore his sexuality in this context, jointly with Peggy and the others his own age. (And, as’ll be evident in my writings, I have a thing for pissing; I try not to over-do it, but it’ll be there.) Nope to that show. It was merely a good way to show Jeff moving along, a landmark along the way. I do love the way I took him out of the house, getting naked for a bath and not getting dressed again for years Verna has a bit of a backstory too, though I’m not going to explore that in detail. I’m having to try to keep the plot bunnies down because Jefferey is already backstory to backstory to the main story. Now it’s time to get to work…. wish I was wealthy enough to quit the day job, but I’m nowhere near there.

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I contribute, partially in the hopes of picking up a new reader or two.

Assuming I edit the links right, for the past three years: Halloween 2015 http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107953 Christmas 2015 http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108028 Halloween 2016 http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108385 Christmas 2016 http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108443 Halloween 2017 http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108780 Christmas 2017 http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108835

Reviews can be a love note too, even if it’s an old story, they’re definitely nice to have. Heck, on my old potter fic, a good review could stir me to actually *finish* it, it’s been on hiatus for years now (started 15 years ago). Constructive criticism, points of like/dislike are nice, but at the end, even a simple “I like this” review goes a long way to stoking the ego.

Dunno, it’d be different to read ‘em out loud on a crowded train/bus