Desiderius Price

Maybe Janina is a people person, likes the conversations that one can only get from being a barkeeper. Maybe she likes the free beer. It’d be a good spot to know who’s coming through town. Or, there’s a recession so serial killing doesn’t pay like it used to and she simply needs the money? I took the bait and speculated, I love to brainstorm

My original point here was about the info-dumping going on, and to spread the details around in the action scene; show rather than tell, is a mantra I try to live by (though there are times telling is fine.) That was an instance where I had added in the douche-bag so she could draw parallels to the earlier scene (which could be a backstory/epilogue).

I figured a full multi-chapter rewrite wouldn’t be great in a forum post, so didn’t portray the douche-bag’s blood reduction process before his perpetual eternal BBQ. Otherwise, I agree it’s best to not perpetuate the stereotypes (though, while writing fiction, I don’t mind plastering offender’s brains on the ceilings….)

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Sorry for personally offending you there. Meant it more of an exercise of showing how the character responds to insults—another stain on the wall perhaps? Showing instead of simply telling can make the reading more interesting, IMO.

Lemme turn this snippet into a full, multi-chaptered, backstory! TBH, that’s not quite my style, I’d write something more like: Obviously, I didn’t capture all the details, but you get the hint. I try to lure in the reader with a bit of action intermingled with the description, leveraging the flashback you’re alluding to. This lets you spread your info-dumping over multiple paragraphs/actions, and adding in a random patron.

More of the mythical fleet of coders everybody else seems to think we have…

Have to admit having the statistics at the granular level of FF.net’s would be nice, or the ability to sort the search results on AO3 as such. Don’t see what’d be gained by manipulation, but rationality has never stopped trolls. The database does have the data, it’d be a matter of adding the options for searching/viewing using that mythical developer’s time

Oh, I’m below average, so I’ve cursed some characters with micropenis Another with one so bent the guy can’t take a piss without getting it on himself. A third one with chewed foreskin (girlfriend issues). As a whole, I prefer keeping the average, well, average. With my potter fanfic, there are exceptions...involving magic.

As somebody who prefers to write my characters as being naked…. I will frequently add a bit of description to the state of the breasts/dick; might be sag, swaying with the gait, so cold the balls are non-existent, maybe its pubic hair, etc. I do this because it’s a reminder that the character is naked w/o having to repeatedly write “naked”. Also, I typically avoid absolute measurements, because I don’t really need to know it’s “K-cup”, and TBH, that’s less informative IMO than simply stating “big” vs “small”. If two are standing side-by-side, that’s where the relative comparisons might come in, especially if it’s from the POV male who’ll check. It’s fairly limited when I’ll write an absolute (a bio, a ruler, a dispute to clothes sizing, etc) and needed for the story. Now, the original question was in regards to introductions, I suppose a bit more is okay, if it’s relevant, to help introduce, but the reader typically doesn’t need a full bio there either. “Helga was a big, busty, blonde woman who staffed the kitchen.” And you can get more details later in the scene as she’s complaining about her constant back pain, or twenty fifth pregnancy.

I know some authors seem to like to dwell like the reader is bringing a ruler to every person the see? “Excuse me ma’am, Federal Boobie Inspector, please step this way for measurements.” ZZ-Cup? But unless the breasts are unusual, I typically don’t go out of my way to describe them, let the reader’s imagination (likely as perverted as yours) go to work with whatever they fancy. Generally, I prefer to stick to “larger” or “smaller” plus quality. Not everybody is “large”, should have modest/small ones around too (unless there’s a universal law requiring everybody to get breast-augmentation surgery or something). Also, large breasts need good support & can give back pain (as far as I know, not that gender). And, there’s more than size to consider, there’s firmness, sag, etc, again, if significant or another character is playing with them. For male characters, similar thing – circumcision or not is the first thing I’ll establish. Size, if unusual/important, might be mentioned. However, comparisons might happen more often, so you have two characters together and the difference is noticeable, then you might establish that one character’s todger is longer/thinner than the other. My $0.02 worth.

Could be worse. Them: Can you write a Harry Potter/Game of Thrones crossover? Me: No. Them: Can you write a Harry Potter/Game of Thrones crossover? Me: No Them: Can you write a Harry Potter/Game of Thrones crossover? It’s like, can’t they read the first response?

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And your parents/family/friends who stumble across your story will also know that you liked them doing carnal fornication, with watersports and tentacles.