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Hi SirGeneralSir, From the part you’ve written it does strike me that the girls are all a bit… well, unresponsive to say they’re in a hyper-aroused state. Just because they’re unconscious, it doesn’t follow that they’re inert. Details count. Describe their breathing, how it sounds. Is it stuttering? Do they occasionally sigh or gasp? Perhaps make nonsense sounds? Are they shivering, or maybe trembling? Do they react to anything? Touch? Noise? Standard response to things like light in the eyes? Is there any REM to mention? Are they physically hot? Can the attendees feel it radiating off them? Are they sweating, and if so, does it have any specific scent, something redolent of arousal? There are so many ways to describe these girls, even unconscious, that will enhance the experience for the reader and make it clear what is being witnessed. And, not to confuse you further, but in regard to the wet panties bit… if the girls are wet, and highly aroused, regardless of the fact they’re unconscious, then they may well be experiencing orgasm (in which case some of the above will definitely apply). If I was writing a scene like this, I’d be considering a good description of female ejaculation. Yes, it does exist. And… lastly, how does viewing the girls affect the medical personnel? I mean, a well-constructed paragraph or two about a doctor trying to maintain some semblance of professional conduct in the face of something like this would be good. From what you’ve said, these girls are trying to attract ‘mates’ aren’t they? If so, then asleep they may be, but they should have real presence in this scene, enough to garner a response in the witnesses, even if it’s not acted upon. dafdes

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