Guest LHunt Posted October 8, 2022 Report Share Posted October 8, 2022 Hi CrossroadsMk2, Great Job Man! …….what a great chapter….those games were awesome, my favorite two were the rope and the cones. The last ball game was good, but I think it would have been more challenging for Lara if she didn’t know exactly how many she needed in order to win….also as a special incentive there could have been a few larger one’s to seal them in and make each girl wonder even if they needed to use the larger ones to win. Why not combine the two options – I, for one, love it when Lara is publicly punished because she knows what will happen if she resist otherwise. Why not have Sam do the sex documentary, but she has to do an examination before Lara is forced to be the tribal whore! She can still feel hurt and disgusted and takes it out on Lara during the exam. The King wants to ensure Lara won’t be transmitting any STD’s to the people of his village (that has to sting Lara a bit). Sam checks all her holes and ensures the King that Lara is clean and safe for all the village to use as their tribal whore. For the actual sex documentary other than the camera loaded dildo, Sam has special equipment that can also be mounted on men’s cocks that can catch them as they cum. In addition, the equipment can be attached to the arms of the village women. Sarah has it all preplanned with the King. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 8, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 8, 2022 (edited) He LHunt, glad you enjoyed the gameshow chapter. Regarding the next chapter, I already have a plot I want to follow. My question to you guys related more to how Lara will be viewed by and interact with the tribesmen. Option 1 - Punishment Lara is compensating the King and his tribe for stealing from them. Lara will be a reluctant participant and the tribesmen and women will respond to her with cruelty and hatred. Option 2 - Curse In the original Idol of Hathor story, the artefact was cursed and forced Lara to have enthusiastic sex with any man who was attracted to her. In this version, the artefact has no special powers and the King knows this, but he maintains his power over the tribe through superstition and religious custom. Lara is forced to play along, pretending to be cursed and desperate for sex, until she's been sufficiently punished and the King (who's in on it) lifts the curse. Unlike option 1, the tribesmen will be more mocking than cruel, since the Gods are already punishing Lara for her theft. If I were to use an analogy, option 1 is Lara getting gangbanged my men who forced their way into her hotel room and option 2 is Lara pulling a train, going door to door to other people's rooms. Edited October 8, 2022 by CrossroadsMk2 Typos Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest GhostOfCovid Posted October 8, 2022 Report Share Posted October 8, 2022 Can’t wait to read the new chapter for the next chapter I like option 1 but you can include Sam sam can be filming the tribe in secret but is so into the mysterious women being raped (lara) that she makes a mistake and is caught and the tribe is angry but to protect her lara becomes more willing and does more depraved acts so Sam is set free Sam then has the mysterious women in her head and is in love but doesn’t know it’s lara Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 8, 2022 Report Share Posted October 8, 2022 I like option 1 also….GhostOfCovid has a great suggestion – I think Lara needs to be forced to accept her punishment from the whole village – If Sam is present and secretly films...then caught, and Lara does more demeaning acts to get her free…and later finds out it was all a set up between Sarah and Sam….(what a kick in the gut). This tells Lara how Sam really feels about her as a friend. (or) maybe Sarah can invite Sam to play during one of the dinners and do a live sex documentary for the guest – either way, Lara should be punished by the entire tribe and Sam gets her documentary! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 9, 2022 Report Share Posted October 9, 2022 Hey CrossroadsMk2, Lara is now feeling that Sarah has taken her place as the Countess. She’s having sexual dreams even where Lara is still submissive. Why not let Lara believe Sarah was taken by the King. In return for Sarah’s safety, Lara has to please the entire village for her release and do whatever the tribe says. Lara actually ask Sam to film all of it, even the sex documentary thinking it would be safer to have it all on film. Sarah sets it all up with the King and tells Sam of course….maybe even tells Lara afterward. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 9, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 9, 2022 Hi GhostOfCovid and LHunt, 2 votes for option 1 so far. Not decided yet on GhostOfCovid's idea for Sam filming in secret and being discovered. If I do go that way, then I probably won't do the sex documentary with Sam as well (since I can't see Sam blackmailing Lara after being saved by her). I will just make the chapter a straight-up week-long tribal gangbang, before moving onto Siberia. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 9, 2022 Report Share Posted October 9, 2022 Hey CrossroadsMk2, I like both options, but it’s Lara’s voluntary enslavement…..I just think she needs to do more volunteering, with that said I can see where she can do it in either option – or a combo of them…. Lead the Way! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 10, 2022 Report Share Posted October 10, 2022 Hey CrossroadsMk2, I didn’t see where I made the option change on the forum….I’ll go with option 2, It’ll be interesting to see how Lara pretends to be cursed and desperate for sex and how Sam gets the camera dildo to show live internal sex with Lara. Also, if Lara is forced to play along, pretending to be cursed and desperate for sex, to some extent wouldn’t she need to beg for it - from both the men and women...just to make it seem she’s really cursed and wants to rid herself from it’s effect it has on her. If sex is what releases the curse...the women can feel like they’re helping her by fisting her more often and even sometimes with the men when she being fucked. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 10, 2022 Report Share Posted October 10, 2022 Also, if Sarah is picking up the tab in secret, then I’m curious will she show special charity guest and staff late or maybe bundle all the off manor adventures into one big world does Lara flick….like Debbie Does Dallas porn flick! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 11, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 11, 2022 Hi LHunt, not every event will relate back to the Charity. Like I said earlier, I want to have several different sub-plots, all designed to elicit a different emotional response and behavioural change from Lara. However, like I've said elsewhere, I hate talking about chapters too far into the future because I find it distracts me from the stuff I'm writing at the time. That's why I drip-feed the requests for feedback and suggestions - I prefer to get them when I'm actually up to writing that part of the story. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 11, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 11, 2022 Hi everyone, slight change of plans regarding the order of the next chapters. I think I'm going to do Sam as her own chapter first, with the sex documentary. Sarah won't tell Sam about the contract (and Lara won't want her friend learning her dirty secret), so Lara will be forced to think up an excuse for why she's volunteering for it, even with her face blurred. Then I'll do the Siberian gulag beat-down and prison sex chapters, where Lara's spirit will be broken. Agreeing to be tattooed is the price of her release. After that, the African village chapter, where she'll enthusiastically do anything she's told, just to avoid the possibility of being sent back to the Siberian gulag. I think it makes more sense to do it in this order. I should have some free time to start writing the next chapter early next week. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 11, 2022 Report Share Posted October 11, 2022 Now that’s cooler than three day old grits! …...was just wondering what Sarah will eventually do with the documentary or just keep for old times sake – lol. Lead the Way CrossroadsMk2, Lead the Way! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 11, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 11, 2022 Hi LHunt, I was planning that the documentary will be released worldwide with blurred faces, but then later in the story, Sarah will invite Sam to a Charity dinner as a special guest (as happened with the artist) and have a special unredacted screening for the Charity members. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 12, 2022 Report Share Posted October 12, 2022 CrossroadsMk2, Oh Wow! It would be cool that Sam receives an Academy Award for best documentary film for this….but gives Lara no credit or the slightest recognition for her part….what a kick in the gut! I can’t wait to see how Lara responds to all this attention and possible non-recognition for her role and film. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 12, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 12, 2022 I think Lara would probably prefer to keep her involvement on the down-low for reputational reasons, but I think I'll use your idea of her receiving an award to make Lara more jealous later on, when Sam is guest of honour at a Charity dinner, while Lara's just a lowly server. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 12, 2022 Report Share Posted October 12, 2022 CrossroadsMk2, Exactly, I can see Sarah making a big fuss over Sam’s accomplishment with the award all while Lara is still just a server – maybe Sam even gets to do a demo minus the camera with Lara (or) Lara explains to the crowd what she is feeling during the special screening….anything really to add more jealousy and more humiliation! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Extreme Posted October 20, 2022 Report Share Posted October 20, 2022 I read chapter 9 very good written like always though sex machines are not my thing especially if there is no other guy or girl involved but really enjoyed ending at club Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 20, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 20, 2022 Hi Extreme, I realised that about the Gameshow, which is why the chapter ran long, so that I could include some sex scenes at the end. On the bright side, you're going to have some very sex heavy chapters coming up to look forward to. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Donkingkong Posted October 22, 2022 Report Share Posted October 22, 2022 Hi Cross! Took me a while to get free and give it a read. Great chapter as always. The part where she's trying to press her thighs and control her orgasms is my favourite. Great writing. Ps can't wait for Syberian chapter.hopes flying high. Take care brother Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 22, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 22, 2022 Hi Donkingkong, next chapter will be the sex documentary, filmed in Switzerland with some old friends and enemies making an appearance. After that, it'll be off to Siberia, where Lara will find herself physically and psychologically broken, during a drawn-out and humiliating beatdown. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Donkingkong Posted October 22, 2022 Report Share Posted October 22, 2022 Awesome! Both ideas sound enticing... I'll be waiting Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 27, 2022 Report Share Posted October 27, 2022 Hey CrossroadsMk2, Just a quick question – will they be going back to the Manor in between Switzerland and Siberia? Looking forward for her Lady G. appearance and any other kinky stuff Sarah has planned for Halloween…. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted October 27, 2022 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2022 Hi LHunt, she'll be away the whole time, travelling straight from Japan to Switzerland to Siberia and finally to Africa, so that the renovations to Croft Manor can be finished. Aside from the new sex dungeon, I want to add an artistic water fountain at the main entrance, featuring a naked Lara statue on her knees, receiving streams of water on her face bukkake-style from some muscular male statues. The sex documentary chapter is about 40% done. I experimented with a few different characters (including Dr Boaz and some OCs) but I ended up going with your suggestion of Dr Taft and her therapist that she saw for her survivor's guilt. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted October 28, 2022 Report Share Posted October 28, 2022 Hey CrossroadsMk2, Awesome man! I’m looking forward to all her future endeavors! That’s a great idea on the fountain too. You should have some neon signs made for the sex dungeon….not comical like in Porky’s, but something that makes it obvious what sex act(s) she’ll be doing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Donkingkong Posted November 3, 2022 Report Share Posted November 3, 2022 Hello Cross. Hope you're doing awesome as always. Any updates for us? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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